Pick one of the three endings:
1. At the end, I found that it was stupid to fight with each other. I called him and apologized, but he never answered. I have lost this friend forever.
2. He could not believe what he saw, but there’s no way he could change the ending anymore.
3. The next morning, he opened the box and found that it was empty. He could not believe he was being fooled.
20090426
Story of bullying - amended by Phyllis
Andrew Johnston is my best friend. But a student in my class did not like him. He always bullied him -- hit him, scolded him, made fun of him, so he was very unhappy. He always cried in class, so the bully disliked him more.
The bully had many bad friends. One day, when Andrew and I went to school together, the bully and his bad friends saw us and said, “Who is the best singer in our class? Andrew Johnston, but he is a girl!” I shouted angrily, “Someone is not good at singing. He is a bully and a bad student in our class!” The bully hit me and Andrew. I wanted to hit him, but Andrew said softly, “No, we cannot win him in fighting!”
After a few days, Andrew entered a competition. It was called “Britain’s Got Talent”. I wanted him to win the competition. But the bully said cunningly, “You cannot win. You are the worst singer in our school!”
Andrew was sad but he did not give up. He went to the competition and sang “Pie Jesu”. Everyone cried for him and I cried too. I wanted him to win the competition. Although he lost at the end, he was happier than before.
Although the bully did not like him, he said, “You are the best singer in our school, sorry, can you forgive me?”Andrew was happy and said, “ Yes, of course!”
This is the road which can change his life. I think he can be the best singer when he grows up.
Although I am not his best friend, I want him to have more than one friends to play with him, sing with him...
Andrew, you will be the best singer. When you grow up, I will buy your records.
The bully had many bad friends. One day, when Andrew and I went to school together, the bully and his bad friends saw us and said, “Who is the best singer in our class? Andrew Johnston, but he is a girl!” I shouted angrily, “Someone is not good at singing. He is a bully and a bad student in our class!” The bully hit me and Andrew. I wanted to hit him, but Andrew said softly, “No, we cannot win him in fighting!”
After a few days, Andrew entered a competition. It was called “Britain’s Got Talent”. I wanted him to win the competition. But the bully said cunningly, “You cannot win. You are the worst singer in our school!”
Andrew was sad but he did not give up. He went to the competition and sang “Pie Jesu”. Everyone cried for him and I cried too. I wanted him to win the competition. Although he lost at the end, he was happier than before.
Although the bully did not like him, he said, “You are the best singer in our school, sorry, can you forgive me?”Andrew was happy and said, “ Yes, of course!”
This is the road which can change his life. I think he can be the best singer when he grows up.
Although I am not his best friend, I want him to have more than one friends to play with him, sing with him...
Andrew, you will be the best singer. When you grow up, I will buy your records.
Andrew Johnston
Andrew Johnston is my best friend. But the student in my class who did not like him. He always bully to Andrew Johnston. Such as fright him, dress down him, to embarrass him, so he was very unhappy. He always cried in the lesson, so the bullies more unlike him.
The bullies have many bad friends. One day, when we went to school together, the bullies and his bad friends saw us and said, “Who are the best singer in our class-Andrew
After few days, he entered a competition. It called Britain Got Talent Show. I wanted him win the competition. But the bullies said cunningly, “You can not win the competition. You are the bad person in our school of singing!”
Andrew Johnston was sad but he did not abandon. He went to the competition place. He sings the AMDEW UOHMSTOH. Everyone cried for him and me too. I want him to win the competition. Although he lose the competition but he was happier hen before.
Although the bullies did not like him, he said, “You are the best singer in our school, sorry, can you forgive me?”Andrew Johnston was happy and said, “ Yes of course!”
This is the road which can change his life. I thing he can be a best singer when Andrew Johnston grow up.
Although I am not the best friend with him, but I want him look like this story the end. I want Andrew Johnston have more than one friends to play with you, sing with you...
Andrew Johnston, you are the best singer, when you grow up, I will buy a phonograph record about you song.
20090419
A Story About Bullying
audition: http://v.youku.com/v_show/id_XODAzNDcxNTY=.html
final:
Write a story based on this true event -- either BEFORE the audition of Britain's Got Talent, AFTER, or BEFORE + AFTER.
Write from the point-of-view of either:
1. Andrew Johnston
2. one of the bullies
3. an outsider (a classmate, a teacher, a parent, a friend in the choir, etc)
think about:
1. are you and Andrew close friends?
2. how did you and Andrew feel and react to the bullying before the show?
3. why did he enter the competition?
4. did you encourage him?
5. did he feel a lot of pressure at the competition?
6. how did he overcome his fears?
7. did his life change after the show? how?
8. did the bullies change after the show?
9. have you changed after the show? have you learnt anything?
WRITE at least 350 words.
final:
Write a story based on this true event -- either BEFORE the audition of Britain's Got Talent, AFTER, or BEFORE + AFTER.
Write from the point-of-view of either:
1. Andrew Johnston
2. one of the bullies
3. an outsider (a classmate, a teacher, a parent, a friend in the choir, etc)
think about:
1. are you and Andrew close friends?
2. how did you and Andrew feel and react to the bullying before the show?
3. why did he enter the competition?
4. did you encourage him?
5. did he feel a lot of pressure at the competition?
6. how did he overcome his fears?
7. did his life change after the show? how?
8. did the bullies change after the show?
9. have you changed after the show? have you learnt anything?
WRITE at least 350 words.
Son and Father - amended by Phyllis
Once upon a time, there was a boy called Ben. His father always hit him. He was very angry and thought, “If I could be the father, I could hit my father!”
One day, when he went into the forest, he saw an elf flying in the sky happily. He said, “It I could be the father, I could…” Suddenly, the elf said, “I can help you, child!”
It became dark and Ben could not see anything. He suddenly wanted to sleep and he fainted. When he got up, he became his father and his father became his son. Ben was very happy and said, “I can hit my father!”
When he went back home, he saw a child sitting in a chair. Suddenly, a man called Tom came to his home. He was a friend of Ben’s father. His father was a life guard at a swimming pool, and he knew Tom there. He said to me, “Why don’t you come to the pool? Come quickly!”
When Ben went to the swimming pool, he explained, “I don’t know how to swim!” In the evening, he was very hungry. Since his mother was not at home, he did not know how to cook.
He cried, “Sorry! Father, can you help me?” Suddenly, it became dark again and they could not see anything. Ben turned back as a child and his father back as a father.
Ben said, “Sorry, father! I love you!” And they lived happily ever after!
Once upon a time, there was a person called Ben. He was very angry and thought, “If I can be the father, I can hit my father!” because his father always hit him.
One day, when he go to the forest, he saw a small person flew in the sky happily. He said, “ It I can be the father, I could…” Suddenly, the small person said, “I can help you child!”
The sky became dark and could not saw anything. When Ben got up, he became a father and his father became his son. Ben was very happy and said, “I can hit my father!”
When He went back he saw a child sat in the chair. Suddenly, a man called Tom, he was Ben’s father friend. When his father worked in the swimming pool, they became friends. He said too me, “Why do you don’t come to the swimming pool? Quick come!”
When Ben went to the swimming pool, he said, “I don’t know how the swim!” In the evening, he was very hungry. Since his mother not at home, he could not know how to cook.
He cried and said, “Sorry! Father can you help me?” Suddenly, the sky became dark and could not see anything again. Ben became a child and his father became a father too.
Ben said, “Sorry father! I love you!”
20090412
Reversal 顛倒of Roles角色
Ø Father / son
Ø Teacher / student
Ø Owner / pet
Ø Policeman / thief
Ø Boy / girl
Ø Chef / food
Ø King, leader / servant
Ø Elephant / mouse
Ø Healthy person / Handicapped
Ø Rich man / beggar 乞丐
Boys
Ø Like fighting
Ø Don’t like shopping
Ø Sporty
Ø Less polite
Ø Brave
Ø Builder
Ø engineer
Girls
Ø Like shopping
Ø Take care of children
Ø Polite
Ø Gossipy (like to 傳播流言蜚語)
Ø Moody(喜怒無常的)
Ø Housewife
Ø Timid
Ø Kindergarten teacher
Ø Nurse
Special agent
20-3-2009
A criminal called Wong Fai
Ø Father / son
Ø Teacher / student
Ø Owner / pet
Ø Policeman / thief
Ø Boy / girl
Ø Chef / food
Ø King, leader / servant
Ø Elephant / mouse
Ø Healthy person / Handicapped
Ø Rich man / beggar 乞丐
Boys
Ø Like fighting
Ø Don’t like shopping
Ø Sporty
Ø Less polite
Ø Brave
Ø Builder
Ø engineer
Girls
Ø Like shopping
Ø Take care of children
Ø Polite
Ø Gossipy (like to 傳播流言蜚語)
Ø Moody(喜怒無常的)
Ø Housewife
Ø Timid
Ø Kindergarten teacher
Ø Nurse
Special agent
20-3-2009
A criminal called Wong Fai
Alex's Tour 1 - amended by Phyllis
“Good night, mum!” I said.
Suddenly, I see a creature which looks like a mobile phone. It runs quickly in the sky. I open the window and shout, “Why can you run in the sky?” But it does not say anything. “Oh no! I can run in the sky.” I say. There are many fruits that can speak and walk. I think, “What’s wrong?” When I am about to go back home and sleep for a while, a strong wind blows me away. I shout, “Help! Help!”
When I get up, I see a lot of fishes, rabbits, lions, dogs, cats and ants flying in the sky and talking happily. Suddenly, a cup shouts, “What are you doing?” I explain, “I am watching you!” She is angry and shouts, “You are not in our team! We need to catch you! Everyone, catch him!” And she runs with her family and friends after me. I run, run and run, and I see a giant, and he sees me too! He says, “Where do you come from? Why are you so short?’’ I am very frightened and run away quietly.
Suddenly, I see my mother flying in the sky and saying angrily, “Get up quickly! Do you want be late for school?”
I got up and went to school quickly. When I went to school, I saw a creature running in the sky. I thought, “What happened?"
~It is the end of Alex's tour1~
read the Alex's tour 2
Suddenly, I see a creature which looks like a mobile phone. It runs quickly in the sky. I open the window and shout, “Why can you run in the sky?” But it does not say anything. “Oh no! I can run in the sky.” I say. There are many fruits that can speak and walk. I think, “What’s wrong?” When I am about to go back home and sleep for a while, a strong wind blows me away. I shout, “Help! Help!”
When I get up, I see a lot of fishes, rabbits, lions, dogs, cats and ants flying in the sky and talking happily. Suddenly, a cup shouts, “What are you doing?” I explain, “I am watching you!” She is angry and shouts, “You are not in our team! We need to catch you! Everyone, catch him!” And she runs with her family and friends after me. I run, run and run, and I see a giant, and he sees me too! He says, “Where do you come from? Why are you so short?’’ I am very frightened and run away quietly.
Suddenly, I see my mother flying in the sky and saying angrily, “Get up quickly! Do you want be late for school?”
I got up and went to school quickly. When I went to school, I saw a creature running in the sky. I thought, “What happened?"
~It is the end of Alex's tour1~
read the Alex's tour 2
Alex tour 1
“Good night, mum!” I said. Suddenly, I see a creature which looks like a mobile phone. It runs quickly in the sky. I open the window and shout, “Why can you run in the sky?” But it does not say anything. “Oh no! I can run in the sky.” I say. Many fruits that can speak and walk. I think, “What’s wrong?” When I want to go back home and sleep a time, a strong wind blows me away. I shout, “Help! Help!” When I get up, I see I lot of special things, there are a lot of fish, rabbit, lion, dog, cat, ant… fly in the sky and they are talking happily. Suddenly, a cup shout, “What are you doing?” I explain, “I only see what do you doing!” She is angry and shouts, “You are not our team! We need to catch you! Everyone, we catch him!” and she run after with her family and friends. I run, run and run, and I see I big people, he see me too! He says, “Where are you come form? Why do you so shout?’’ I am very frighten and run away quietly.
Suddenly, I see my mother fly in the sky and said angry, “Quick get up, do you want to go to school late?”
I got up and went to school quickly. When I go to school, I saw creature run in the sky. I thought, “What' s happen?"
~It is the end of Alex's tour1~
read the Alex's tour 2
20090329
Dream / Nightmare
Dream / Nightmare
Funny
Scary
Sad
Tells the future
Exciting
Memory
Crazy
“Good night, mum!” I said. Suddenly, I see a creature which looks like a mobile phone. It runs quickly in the sky. I open the window and shout, “Why can you run in the sky?” But it does not say anything. “Oh no! I can run in the sky.” I say. Many fruits that can speak and walk. I think, “What’s wrong?” When I want to go back home and sleep a time, a strong wind blows me away. I shout, “Help! Help!” when the
Funny
Scary
Sad
Tells the future
Exciting
Memory
Crazy
“Good night, mum!” I said. Suddenly, I see a creature which looks like a mobile phone. It runs quickly in the sky. I open the window and shout, “Why can you run in the sky?” But it does not say anything. “Oh no! I can run in the sky.” I say. Many fruits that can speak and walk. I think, “What’s wrong?” When I want to go back home and sleep a time, a strong wind blows me away. I shout, “Help! Help!” when the
Johnny was my friend. One day, when we went to school, a car hit him and he fainted. I called the ambulance and went to the hospital with him. After he got up, the doctor said he had lost his memory. When our class heard about this, we were very angry and wanted to hit the car owner.
The policeman asked, “Did you remember the license plate number?” I thought for some time and said, “I can only remember something like JS2_1_.” The policeman said, “Then we can’t find this car.” I was very sad and thought, “If the car did not hit and run, Johnny wouldn’t lose his memory.” After a few days, when Johnny was feeling better, he went to school again, but he did not know who I was.In the afternoon, he did not go to KFC to have his favourite combo. He only sat on the chair and did his homework. He did not feel hungry.Suddenly, a policeman came to my classroom and asked me, “What colour is the car?” I said, “It is red!” The policeman said happily, “That’s good! He is the car owner!”The policeman soon left the school. I was very happy because I could take a revenge for Johnny. I wanted to hit the car owner. When we had our P.E lesson, we played football happily. Suddenly, Johnny was dizzy and the teacher called 999 and the ambulance quickly.After he had an operation, his health has improved. I was happy too.
The policeman asked, “Did you remember the license plate number?” I thought for some time and said, “I can only remember something like JS2_1_.” The policeman said, “Then we can’t find this car.” I was very sad and thought, “If the car did not hit and run, Johnny wouldn’t lose his memory.” After a few days, when Johnny was feeling better, he went to school again, but he did not know who I was.In the afternoon, he did not go to KFC to have his favourite combo. He only sat on the chair and did his homework. He did not feel hungry.Suddenly, a policeman came to my classroom and asked me, “What colour is the car?” I said, “It is red!” The policeman said happily, “That’s good! He is the car owner!”The policeman soon left the school. I was very happy because I could take a revenge for Johnny. I wanted to hit the car owner. When we had our P.E lesson, we played football happily. Suddenly, Johnny was dizzy and the teacher called 999 and the ambulance quickly.After he had an operation, his health has improved. I was happy too.
20090320
Ø Good morning, my name is Alex Law.
Ø I am 12 years old. I am studying in Precious Blood Primary School and I am in Primary 6.
Ø My father is an engineer and my mother is a housewife. I have a sister, too. She is a Form 2 student.
Ø My favourite subjects are Math, Drama and Art. My hobbies are playing table-tennis, drawing, playing the piano and making models.
Ø When I grow up, I want to be an actor because I want to show something special on stage.
Ø I admire Lee Lai Shan because she had Hong Kong’s first gold medal in the Olympic Games.
Ø This is the end of my presentation, think you for your time.
Ø I am 12 years old. I am studying in Precious Blood Primary School and I am in Primary 6.
Ø My father is an engineer and my mother is a housewife. I have a sister, too. She is a Form 2 student.
Ø My favourite subjects are Math, Drama and Art. My hobbies are playing table-tennis, drawing, playing the piano and making models.
Ø When I grow up, I want to be an actor because I want to show something special on stage.
Ø I admire Lee Lai Shan because she had Hong Kong’s first gold medal in the Olympic Games.
Ø This is the end of my presentation, think you for your time.
20090318
INTRODUCE YOURSELF:
Alex Law
Ø 12
Ø I am studying in Precious Blood Primary School and I am in Primary 6.
Why do you want to go to Lingnan?
http://www.lingnan.edu.hk/
What are your favourite subjects?
Ø General Studies
Ø Math
Ø PE
Ø Drama 戲劇
Ø Art
What are your least favourite subjects?
What are your hobbies?
Ø Playing table-tennis, basketball and football
Ø Swimming
Ø Drawing
Ø Making models (of robots)
What extra-curricula activities do you participate in?
Ø Chinese dancing
Ø Table-tennis
Ø Playing the piano
Ø Information technology (IT)
Have you been in any competitions? And have you won any prizes?
Ø Chinese dancing competition - Merits
Ø Acting competition – 2nd place
Ø Piano competition – Merits
Ø Music Festival
Ø Fireworks Making competition
How would you describe yourself? (Your personality性格)
GOOD
Ø Will not give up放棄easily
Ø Hardworking
Ø Happy / Cheerful
Ø Friendly / easy to make friends
Ø Disciplined (follow school rules)
BAD
Ø
What do you want to be in the future?
Ø An actor
Ø Want to perform表演something special on stage舞臺
Why do you want to go to our school?
It is because there are some special subjects, like design.
NOTES:
1. Never say “I don’t know”. You can say “I need some time to think about this”
2. Don’t play with your fingers
3. Hello à Thank you
4. Smile
5. Don’t lie
Alex Law
Ø 12
Ø I am studying in Precious Blood Primary School and I am in Primary 6.
Why do you want to go to Lingnan?
http://www.lingnan.edu.hk/
What are your favourite subjects?
Ø General Studies
Ø Math
Ø PE
Ø Drama 戲劇
Ø Art
What are your least favourite subjects?
What are your hobbies?
Ø Playing table-tennis, basketball and football
Ø Swimming
Ø Drawing
Ø Making models (of robots)
What extra-curricula activities do you participate in?
Ø Chinese dancing
Ø Table-tennis
Ø Playing the piano
Ø Information technology (IT)
Have you been in any competitions? And have you won any prizes?
Ø Chinese dancing competition - Merits
Ø Acting competition – 2nd place
Ø Piano competition – Merits
Ø Music Festival
Ø Fireworks Making competition
How would you describe yourself? (Your personality性格)
GOOD
Ø Will not give up放棄easily
Ø Hardworking
Ø Happy / Cheerful
Ø Friendly / easy to make friends
Ø Disciplined (follow school rules)
BAD
Ø
What do you want to be in the future?
Ø An actor
Ø Want to perform表演something special on stage舞臺
Why do you want to go to our school?
It is because there are some special subjects, like design.
NOTES:
1. Never say “I don’t know”. You can say “I need some time to think about this”
2. Don’t play with your fingers
3. Hello à Thank you
4. Smile
5. Don’t lie
20090315
Memory Loss
Johnny was my friend. One day, when we went to school, a car hit him and he fainted. I called the ambulance and went to the hospital with him. After he got up, the doctor said he had lost his memory. When our class heard about this, we were very angry and wanted to hit the car owner. The policeman asked, “Did you remember the license plate number?” I thought for some time and said, “I can only remember something like JS2_1_.” The policeman said, “Then we can’t find this car.” I was very sad and thought, “If the car did not hit and ran, Johnny wouldn’t lose his memory.” After a few days, when Johnny was feeling better, he went to school again, but he did not know who I was.
In the afternoon, he did not go to KFC to eat his famous table d hote, he only sat on the chair and do homework. He did no feel hungry.
Suddenly, a policeman came to my classroom and asked me, “What colour is the car?” I said, “It is red!” The policeman shouted, “That’s good! He is the car owner!”
After a few time, he went out the school. I was very happy and wanted to hit the car owner. When we had P.E lesson, we played the football happy. Suddenly, Johnny dizzy and the teacher called 999 and ambulance quickly.
After he had a surgical operation, and he was improvement. I was happy too.
In the afternoon, he did not go to KFC to eat his famous table d hote, he only sat on the chair and do homework. He did no feel hungry.
Suddenly, a policeman came to my classroom and asked me, “What colour is the car?” I said, “It is red!” The policeman shouted, “That’s good! He is the car owner!”
After a few time, he went out the school. I was very happy and wanted to hit the car owner. When we had P.E lesson, we played the football happy. Suddenly, Johnny dizzy and the teacher called 999 and ambulance quickly.
After he had a surgical operation, and he was improvement. I was happy too.
20090308
Two perspectives - amended by Phyllis
Ben and Tom were friends. Today, Ben fought with Tom and they disliked each other.
Ben’s part
When Ben went into the classroom, he saw Tom sitting on his chair. Tom was playing with his pen! Ben was angry and hit Tom. Although they were friends, Ben hit him hard. Ben thought, “Why did you steal my pen and played with it? It is mine not yours!” Suddenly, Tom fought back. Ben thought, “You have stolen my pen and played with it, it is your fault! Why did you hit me?”
Tom’s part
When Tom saw Ben going into the classroom, he took his new pen and sat on his new chair. It was because his teacher said, “Tom, you need to change your seat. You will be in Ben seat.” Suddenly, Ben hit Tom. Tom thought, “Why does he hit me?” Tom fell down. He stood up again quickly and fought back.
Ending
The teacher told Ben the fact, and Ben cried, “Sorry Tom!” And they played football happily together in the afternoon!
Ben’s part
When Ben went into the classroom, he saw Tom sitting on his chair. Tom was playing with his pen! Ben was angry and hit Tom. Although they were friends, Ben hit him hard. Ben thought, “Why did you steal my pen and played with it? It is mine not yours!” Suddenly, Tom fought back. Ben thought, “You have stolen my pen and played with it, it is your fault! Why did you hit me?”
Tom’s part
When Tom saw Ben going into the classroom, he took his new pen and sat on his new chair. It was because his teacher said, “Tom, you need to change your seat. You will be in Ben seat.” Suddenly, Ben hit Tom. Tom thought, “Why does he hit me?” Tom fell down. He stood up again quickly and fought back.
Ending
The teacher told Ben the fact, and Ben cried, “Sorry Tom!” And they played football happily together in the afternoon!
Ben and Tom
Ben and Tom was friend. Today, Ben fought with Tom and they disliked each other.
Ben past
When Ben went to his classroom, he saw Tom sit on his chair. Tom was played his pen! Ben was angry and fought to Tom. Although they were friend, Ben fought with Tom to exert great efforts. Ben thought, “Why did you steal my pen and played it? It was my thing not your! Suddenly, Tom fought to Ben quickly. Ben thought,“You steal my pen and play it, it is your faults why you fought me?”
Tom past
When Tom saw Ben went to the classroom, he took his new pen and sat on his new chair because teacher said,“Tom you need to change of positions, you sit on Ben chair!” Suddenly, Ben fought with Tom. Tom thought, “Why do you fight with me?” and Tom fall down. Tom stood up quickly and he fought with Ben impatiently. Tom thought, “Why do you fight with me?”
The End
Teacher told to Ben the fact, and Ben cried, “Sorry Tom!” And the play football happily with each other in the afternoon!
Ben past
When Ben went to his classroom, he saw Tom sit on his chair. Tom was played his pen! Ben was angry and fought to Tom. Although they were friend, Ben fought with Tom to exert great efforts. Ben thought, “Why did you steal my pen and played it? It was my thing not your! Suddenly, Tom fought to Ben quickly. Ben thought,“You steal my pen and play it, it is your faults why you fought me?”
Tom past
When Tom saw Ben went to the classroom, he took his new pen and sat on his new chair because teacher said,“Tom you need to change of positions, you sit on Ben chair!” Suddenly, Ben fought with Tom. Tom thought, “Why do you fight with me?” and Tom fall down. Tom stood up quickly and he fought with Ben impatiently. Tom thought, “Why do you fight with me?”
The End
Teacher told to Ben the fact, and Ben cried, “Sorry Tom!” And the play football happily with each other in the afternoon!
20090301
story from 2 persons' perspectives
You should have 2 parts to your story. They should be talking about the same event but turning out to be completely different stories because people have different feelings and know about different things.
20090215
Part II THE FUTURE - amended by Phyllis
The car moved quickly and quickly. The picture was beautiful and had some beautiful flowers, trees and rivers in it. I was very tired and slept for about one day.
“What is happening, car?” I asked. The car said, “We are in the future!” Suddenly, a man called Tommy asked, “Have you seen a picture? It is beautiful with some beautiful flowers and rivers!” A robot said, “It is the picture in his hand!” I ran and ran quickly because I thought they were thieves wanting to get my picture. I saw many robots and people on the street, and they were shopping there.
When I tried to find my home, it was no longer there. I saw a school called All-knowing School. Afterwards, I sat on the chair and drank some water.
I saw that everyone had a robot and they together were shopping, playing, reading and sitting in high-tech cars.
Suddenly, I saw a newspaper on the ground which wrote that a boy would bring a picture from 2009. I saw Tommy again and gave the picture to him. I said, “Sorry! I didn’t know you are Emperor Qin’s descendant!” Tommy got the picture and gave a stamp to me as a gift and said, “It is from my mother!”
The car shouted, “We need to go back home, it is midnight in the present!”
I said, “Bye-bye, Tommy!” and went to the car quickly.
“What is happening, car?” I asked. The car said, “We are in the future!” Suddenly, a man called Tommy asked, “Have you seen a picture? It is beautiful with some beautiful flowers and rivers!” A robot said, “It is the picture in his hand!” I ran and ran quickly because I thought they were thieves wanting to get my picture. I saw many robots and people on the street, and they were shopping there.
When I tried to find my home, it was no longer there. I saw a school called All-knowing School. Afterwards, I sat on the chair and drank some water.
I saw that everyone had a robot and they together were shopping, playing, reading and sitting in high-tech cars.
Suddenly, I saw a newspaper on the ground which wrote that a boy would bring a picture from 2009. I saw Tommy again and gave the picture to him. I said, “Sorry! I didn’t know you are Emperor Qin’s descendant!” Tommy got the picture and gave a stamp to me as a gift and said, “It is from my mother!”
The car shouted, “We need to go back home, it is midnight in the present!”
I said, “Bye-bye, Tommy!” and went to the car quickly.
WHY I HAVE TO KILL ALEX
1. he always mixes ARE up with A.
2. he always forgets the tense.
3. he always writes THERE HAVE.
4. he always forgets the comma (,) before the speech starts.
5. he always uses QUESTION incorrectly (he should use ASK).
6. he always spell SHOUT as SHOULD.
7. he always forgets how to read CHILD.
8. he always reads GIRL as “girlo”.
9. he always mixes VERB, ADJECTIVE, NOUN and ADVERB up.
10. he always mixes COME and GO up.
2. he always forgets the tense.
3. he always writes THERE HAVE.
4. he always forgets the comma (,) before the speech starts.
5. he always uses QUESTION incorrectly (he should use ASK).
6. he always spell SHOUT as SHOULD.
7. he always forgets how to read CHILD.
8. he always reads GIRL as “girlo”.
9. he always mixes VERB, ADJECTIVE, NOUN and ADVERB up.
10. he always mixes COME and GO up.
TIME MACHINE - amended by Phyllis
Part I THE PAST
Today, when I went back home, I saw a car outside. Its name was “Dream Car”. I went into the car, but I did not know how to drive. So I only sat inside. Suddenly, the car started to move quickly, quickly, quickly and quickly. When the car stopped, I saw a man who wore an ancient costume. I asked, “Where am I?” He explained, “You are in China! I am a builder of the Great Wall. Where do you come from?” “I come from Hong Kong!” A soldier ordered, “Come back to build the Great Wall.” I went to there with the man.
Today, when I went back home, I saw a car outside. Its name was “Dream Car”. I went into the car, but I did not know how to drive. So I only sat inside. Suddenly, the car started to move quickly, quickly, quickly and quickly. When the car stopped, I saw a man who wore an ancient costume. I asked, “Where am I?” He explained, “You are in China! I am a builder of the Great Wall. Where do you come from?” “I come from Hong Kong!” A soldier ordered, “Come back to build the Great Wall.” I went to there with the man.
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The soldier shouted, “Child, come and work!” When I was tired, I sat there, but he ordered me to continue to work. So I took a gun from the car to kill him. The other soldiers caught me and took me to see Qin Shi Huang. Qin Shi Huang asked, “Who are you?” I said, “I am a special child, I can use a gun to kill you!” He was very worried and gave me a picture.
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The car came and I went inside quickly. The car said, “You have taken this picture, and now you need to go to the future.”
Today, when I came back home, I saw a car near me home. It name was [Dream Car]. I came into the car, but I did not know how to drive. So I only sat inside. Suddenly, the car start to movement quick, quick, quick and quick. When the car stop, I saw a man, he wore a ancient costume. Iquestion,“Where am I ?”He explain, “You I in china! Where do you come from?” “I come from Hong Kong!”A soldier order “Come back to build the Great Wall. I come to the Great Wall with the man.
The soldier should, “Child come and work!” When I was tried, I sat there, but the soldier order me to continue to work. So I used the firearm to killed the soldier. The other soldier caught me and took me too saw the Qin Shi Huang. Qin Shi Huang ask, “Who a you?” I said “I am a special child, I can use a firearm to kill you!” He was very worried and give me I picture
The car came and I went inside quickly. The car said, “You take this picture, you need to go to unborn.
The soldier should, “Child come and work!” When I was tried, I sat there, but the soldier order me to continue to work. So I used the firearm to killed the soldier. The other soldier caught me and took me too saw the Qin Shi Huang. Qin Shi Huang ask, “Who a you?” I said “I am a special child, I can use a firearm to kill you!” He was very worried and give me I picture
The car came and I went inside quickly. The car said, “You take this picture, you need to go to unborn.
20090208
Time machine
The Great Wall
Enemy: Xiongnu
King: Qin Shi Huang
6,700 km
Time: Qin dynasty
Burn books
Bury alive scholars
Who u are
What did u see
Who will u meet
What did u do
How do u feel
Enemy: Xiongnu
King: Qin Shi Huang
6,700 km
Time: Qin dynasty
Burn books
Bury alive scholars
Who u are
What did u see
Who will u meet
What did u do
How do u feel
A day in the life of Hans Christian Andersen - Amended by Phyllis
When Andersen was eleven, his father died. He went out on that day. Andersen played with other children and best friend happily. Suddenly, an angel said, “Your father is dying, quickly go back home!” He did not know what was going on, and he continued to play with other children. He told them a special story.
He said happily, “Once upon a time, there was a girl who didn’t have a name. Her mother loved her very much, but her father disliked her. Her mother died, and her father ordered her to work. If she could not earn money, she could not have food. On Christmas night, her father ordered her to work too. She needed to sell matches… I will stop here, I can’t think of the ending.”
Suddenly, his mother told him, “Your father is dying, you need to come back!” He was very worried and ran back home quickly.When he came back home, he saw his father sleeping in the bed. His mother cried, “Find a doctor quickly!” Andersen ran and ran and ran. When he passed by the park again, he saw his friends. But he had no time to play, and he ran away. So his friends started to dislike him and thought they would not play with him again.When he went to the clinic, he shouted, “My father is not feeling well, can you come, Doctor?” So, the doctor went after Andersen quickly. They needed to pass by the park again. His friends threw rubbish at him and shouted, “I don’t want you to join us!” Andersen was angry but he did not fight with them, and he and the doctor left quickly.
When they went back home, his mother cried, “Andersen, your father has died!” Andersen cried, went to his bedroom and slept quickly.
He said happily, “Once upon a time, there was a girl who didn’t have a name. Her mother loved her very much, but her father disliked her. Her mother died, and her father ordered her to work. If she could not earn money, she could not have food. On Christmas night, her father ordered her to work too. She needed to sell matches… I will stop here, I can’t think of the ending.”
Suddenly, his mother told him, “Your father is dying, you need to come back!” He was very worried and ran back home quickly.When he came back home, he saw his father sleeping in the bed. His mother cried, “Find a doctor quickly!” Andersen ran and ran and ran. When he passed by the park again, he saw his friends. But he had no time to play, and he ran away. So his friends started to dislike him and thought they would not play with him again.When he went to the clinic, he shouted, “My father is not feeling well, can you come, Doctor?” So, the doctor went after Andersen quickly. They needed to pass by the park again. His friends threw rubbish at him and shouted, “I don’t want you to join us!” Andersen was angry but he did not fight with them, and he and the doctor left quickly.
When they went back home, his mother cried, “Andersen, your father has died!” Andersen cried, went to his bedroom and slept quickly.
20090125
A day in the life of Hans Christian Andersen
When Andersen was eleven, his father died. He went out on that day. Andersen played with other children and best friend happily. Suddenly, an angel, “Your father will die, quick go back home quickly yourself!”He did not know was going on, and he continue to play with other children. He told other children and his best friends a special story. He said happily, “Once upon a time, there was a girl, she didn’t have a name. Her mother very loved her, but her father disliked her too. Her mother died, and her father ordered her to work. If she could not earn money, she could not have food. On Christmas night, her father ordered her to work too. She needed to sell matches… I will stop here, I can’t think the end of the story.”
Suddenly, his mother told him, “Your father is doing, you need to come back.” He was very worried and he ran back home quickly.
When he came back home, he saw his father sleep in the bed. His mother cry, “Quick find a doctor, quick!” Andersen run and run and run. When he came to the pack again, he saw his friend to! But he had no time to play, so he ran away. So his friends start to dislike him and do not play with him.
When he came to the clinic, he shout, “My father did not feeling well, can you come? Doctor!” So, the doctor went after Andersen quickly. When he went home, he needed to go to the park. His friend threw a rubbish and shout, “I don’t want you become to our!” Andersen was angry but he did not fight to them, and he and the doctor went quickly.
When they went back home, his mother cry, “Andersen, you father died!” Andersen cry and went to his bedroom slept quickly.
Suddenly, his mother told him, “Your father is doing, you need to come back.” He was very worried and he ran back home quickly.
When he came back home, he saw his father sleep in the bed. His mother cry, “Quick find a doctor, quick!” Andersen run and run and run. When he came to the pack again, he saw his friend to! But he had no time to play, so he ran away. So his friends start to dislike him and do not play with him.
When he came to the clinic, he shout, “My father did not feeling well, can you come? Doctor!” So, the doctor went after Andersen quickly. When he went home, he needed to go to the park. His friend threw a rubbish and shout, “I don’t want you become to our!” Andersen was angry but he did not fight to them, and he and the doctor went quickly.
When they went back home, his mother cry, “Andersen, you father died!” Andersen cry and went to his bedroom slept quickly.
Cinderella's Birthday Adventures - revised by Phyllis
Once upon a time, there was a girl called Cinderella. Her mother died, so her father married again. The stepmother had two daughters. They did not like Cinderella, so they ordered her to do all the housework.
It was Cinderella's birthday. She did not need to do any housework because it was her birthday. Although she did not do have to do the housework, she could not go to the prince's party. The prince’s birthday was on that day too!
After the stepmother and her daughters went to the party, Cinderella cried, "If I could go to the party, I’d..." Suddenly, a fairy called Alex flew near Cinderella and said, "I can take you to the prince’s party! Come to try these beautiful dresses."
When Cinderella came to the prince's party, the prince saw Cinderella and ran after her. The prince brought a birthday cake for her, and they talked all night long. He said, "Could I marry you?" Cinderella was happy, and she brought all the clothes and the fairy to the palace.
When the stepmother went back home, she could not see Cinderella, so she and her daughters needed to do all the housework, housework, housework...
Once upon a time, there was a girl called Cinderella. Her mother died, so her father married again. The stepmother had two daughters. They did not like Cinderella, so they called her to do all the housework.
Cinderella' s birthday was today. She did need to do all the housework because today was her birthday. Although she did not do all the housework, she could not go to the prince's party. Prince 's birthday was today too!
After they went to the party, Cinderella was cry and said, "If I can go to the party, I will..." Suddenly, a fairy called Alex flew near Cinderella and shouted, "I can take you to the prince' s party! Come to wear this beautiful dresses"
When Cinderella came to the prince' s party, prince saw Cinderella and ran after her. Prince brought a birthday cake for Cinderella to eat, and they talked about all night long. Prince said, "Could I marry you?" Cinderella was happy, and she brought all the colthes and the fairy to the palace.
When Cinderella' s stepmother went back home, she could not saw Cinderella, so they needed to do all the housework, housework, housework, ...
Cinderella' s birthday was today. She did need to do all the housework because today was her birthday. Although she did not do all the housework, she could not go to the prince's party. Prince 's birthday was today too!
After they went to the party, Cinderella was cry and said, "If I can go to the party, I will..." Suddenly, a fairy called Alex flew near Cinderella and shouted, "I can take you to the prince' s party! Come to wear this beautiful dresses"
When Cinderella came to the prince' s party, prince saw Cinderella and ran after her. Prince brought a birthday cake for Cinderella to eat, and they talked about all night long. Prince said, "Could I marry you?" Cinderella was happy, and she brought all the colthes and the fairy to the palace.
When Cinderella' s stepmother went back home, she could not saw Cinderella, so they needed to do all the housework, housework, housework, ...
20090118
The Double - revised by Phyllis
The earth, is anyone my double? This story is about my double. Today morning, when I read the newspaper, I saw an England prince looked like me. He was tall and he liked playing table tennis and his hobby was dancing. Now he is in Primary 6.
Then, I went to England with my family during the summer holidays. I bought are beautiful clothes there, but I didn’t near to spend any money. Do you know why? Suddenly, a policeman came and said, “Your mother is finding you!” I quest, “But, my mother is a mainland Chinese and my father is a Hong Kong person, and I am a Hong Kong person too!” The policeman said, “You are THE PRINCE OF ENGLAND!” Then I knew the policeman thought I am the prince.
The policeman called the other policemen to catch me to the palace. When I went into the palace, I saw a lot of money and a lot of beautiful pictures. Then, I saw the Queen of England.
I shouted, “My mother is not you, she is a Chinese and I live in Hong Kong!”
Finally, the policemen found the prince. So she said, “Sorry! Here is some money for you! Sorry!”
Then I took the￡10,000 and I went back to Hong Kong with my family quickly.
Then, I went to England with my family during the summer holidays. I bought are beautiful clothes there, but I didn’t near to spend any money. Do you know why? Suddenly, a policeman came and said, “Your mother is finding you!” I quest, “But, my mother is a mainland Chinese and my father is a Hong Kong person, and I am a Hong Kong person too!” The policeman said, “You are THE PRINCE OF ENGLAND!” Then I knew the policeman thought I am the prince.
The policeman called the other policemen to catch me to the palace. When I went into the palace, I saw a lot of money and a lot of beautiful pictures. Then, I saw the Queen of England.
I shouted, “My mother is not you, she is a Chinese and I live in Hong Kong!”
Finally, the policemen found the prince. So she said, “Sorry! Here is some money for you! Sorry!”
Then I took the￡10,000 and I went back to Hong Kong with my family quickly.
The earth, is anyone he is my double? It story about my double. Today morning, when I read the newspaper, I saw an England prince look like me. He is tall and he like play table tennis and his hobby are dancing. Now he is P.6. Then, I went to England with family when the summer holiday. In there, I buy are beautiful clothes, but I don’t near to waste any money. Do you no why? Suddenly, a policeman came and said “You mother is finding you!” I quest “But, my mother is China people and my father is Hong Kong people, I am Hong Kong people too!” The policeman said “You are ENGLAND PRINCE!” Then I knew the policeman think I am the prince.
The policeman called the other policemen to catch me to palace. When I went in to the palace, I saw a lot of money and I lot of beautiful picture. When I saw the England prince’s mother.
I shout “My mother is no you, she is china’ s woman and I live in Hong Kong!”
Finally, the policemen found prince too. So she said “Sorry! There are some money, I give you! Sorry!”
Then I had this￡10000 money and I went bark Hong Kong with family quickly.
The policeman called the other policemen to catch me to palace. When I went in to the palace, I saw a lot of money and I lot of beautiful picture. When I saw the England prince’s mother.
I shout “My mother is no you, she is china’ s woman and I live in Hong Kong!”
Finally, the policemen found prince too. So she said “Sorry! There are some money, I give you! Sorry!”
Then I had this￡10000 money and I went bark Hong Kong with family quickly.
20090111
Ø read the newspaper
Ø watch TV news
Ø At school
Ø Listen to the radio
The earth, is anyone he is my double? Is was a story about my double
Today morning, when I read the newspaper, I saw a England prince look like me. He is tall and he like play table tennis and his hobby is dancing. Now he is P6.
Then, I
Ø watch TV news
Ø At school
Ø Listen to the radio
The earth, is anyone he is my double? Is was a story about my double
Today morning, when I read the newspaper, I saw a England prince look like me. He is tall and he like play table tennis and his hobby is dancing. Now he is P6.
Then, I
20081228
A sad wedding
28th December, 2008 cold and cloudy
Yesterday was a good and bad day for me. My cousin married his girlfriend, but the bride could not marry happily.
We were late to the wedding. But we could see them kiss, exchange rings and drink tea. Then, I played NDs for about one hour because my cousin wanted me to help her with the ‘Super Mario’ game. She was not good at it.
At 7pm, there was a lot of delicious food. There were crispy chicken, prawn and scallop, shark’s fin, fish, etc. My uncle drank a lot of wine and beer too. After we had dinner, we took photos with the bride and groom. When many relatives went back home, my cousin needed to get the bill. My uncle shouted at the manager, “This dinner wasn’t good, the fish was small and there were only two prawns for each table! No need to pay you $317,900!” And he swore at the manager. Suddenly, the groom’s mother shouted to the bride, “Why did you choose this place? You are not good!” So the bride cried.
Why did they need to quarrel? Why couldn’t the bride marry happily?
Yesterday was a good and bad day for me. My cousin married his girlfriend, but the bride could not marry happily.
We were late to the wedding. But we could see them kiss, exchange rings and drink tea. Then, I played NDs for about one hour because my cousin wanted me to help her with the ‘Super Mario’ game. She was not good at it.
At 7pm, there was a lot of delicious food. There were crispy chicken, prawn and scallop, shark’s fin, fish, etc. My uncle drank a lot of wine and beer too. After we had dinner, we took photos with the bride and groom. When many relatives went back home, my cousin needed to get the bill. My uncle shouted at the manager, “This dinner wasn’t good, the fish was small and there were only two prawns for each table! No need to pay you $317,900!” And he swore at the manager. Suddenly, the groom’s mother shouted to the bride, “Why did you choose this place? You are not good!” So the bride cried.
Why did they need to quarrel? Why couldn’t the bride marry happily?
20081221
The Adventures of Catherine - amended by Phyllis
Once upon a time, there was a girl called Catherine. She was a bad girl and everyone disliked her, so she did not have any friends.
One day, when she went to school, she saw a blind woman crossing a road. Catherine kicked the woman and the woman was hurt. The blind woman was angry and shouted, “Do you know who I am?” “I think you are a blind idiot!” Catherine yelled. “I am a magician! I think you should have a taste of what it’s like to be blind!” the woman shouted again. Suddenly, Catherine could not see anything. “Help! Help! What is happening? I am very scared!” Catherine cried. She did not know where she was because she could not see anything. The magician said, "If there are other people liking you, you can see again!"
One day, when she went to school, she saw a blind woman crossing a road. Catherine kicked the woman and the woman was hurt. The blind woman was angry and shouted, “Do you know who I am?” “I think you are a blind idiot!” Catherine yelled. “I am a magician! I think you should have a taste of what it’s like to be blind!” the woman shouted again. Suddenly, Catherine could not see anything. “Help! Help! What is happening? I am very scared!” Catherine cried. She did not know where she was because she could not see anything. The magician said, "If there are other people liking you, you can see again!"
From then on, she always gave poor people money. Her friends knew she has become good, so she had many friends. One day, when Catherine played with her friends happily, she saw the magician again. The magician said, "You can see now, don’t be a bad girl! Bye!" So everyone on earth knew this girl -- Catherine.
Then, she worked hard and became a wealthy person. She always went to poor countries and helped poor children to go to school.
20081214
First Draft - STORY about blindness
Once upon a time, there was a girl called Catherine. She was a bad girl and everyone disliked her, so she did not have any friends. One day, when she went to school, she saw a blind woman was cross a road. Catherine kicked the woman and the woman hurt herself. The blind woman was angry and shouted, “Do you know who I am?” “I thing you are blind stupid!” Catherine exclaim. “I am a magician! I think you need to blind.” The woman shouted angina. Suddenly, Catherine can’t saw anything. “Help! Help! What is happening? I am very scared!”, Catherine cried.She did not know where she was. because she could not see anything. The magician said, "If the other people like you, then you can see angian!"
From then on, she always gave the other pool people much money, and her friends know she became good, so she had many friend.One day, when Catherine played with her happily, suddenly she saw a magician angina. The magician said, "You can see now, don’t be bad girls! Bye! Bye!"So all the people in the earth knew this girl-Catherine.
Then, she worked hard and became a wealthy people. She always went to pool country and helped the pool children to go to school.
From then on, she always gave the other pool people much money, and her friends know she became good, so she had many friend.One day, when Catherine played with her happily, suddenly she saw a magician angina. The magician said, "You can see now, don’t be bad girls! Bye! Bye!"So all the people in the earth knew this girl-Catherine.
Then, she worked hard and became a wealthy people. She always went to pool country and helped the pool children to go to school.
Brainstorming
If you a blind
Bad things
Ø Every day will be scary
Ø Can’t another people(can’t see the face)
Ø Can’t tell who is who
Ø Can’t cross the road
Ø Every thing is dark
Ø Can’t play the computer games
Ø Can’t read the book
Ø May always hurt yourself(throw in the sea, neat to bring a cane)
Ø Can’t watch TV
Ø You may not remember the faces
Ø Can’t live happily
Good things
You don’t need to go to school
Many people care about you
Always sit on the wheelchair
Have many people to help you
Bad things
Ø Every day will be scary
Ø Can’t another people(can’t see the face)
Ø Can’t tell who is who
Ø Can’t cross the road
Ø Every thing is dark
Ø Can’t play the computer games
Ø Can’t read the book
Ø May always hurt yourself(throw in the sea, neat to bring a cane)
Ø Can’t watch TV
Ø You may not remember the faces
Ø Can’t live happily
Good things
You don’t need to go to school
Many people care about you
Always sit on the wheelchair
Have many people to help you
20081210
Oral presentation
BIG FISH
ORAL PRESENTATION for 8-10 minutes.
Think about:
ORAL PRESENTATION for 8-10 minutes.
Think about:
- is the father a liar (someone who tells lies)?
- why does the father always make up stories about himself?
- what does the son learn at the end?
Preparation
- watch the film and jot notes if needed.
- write a script in point form.
- practice at least once with the script in hand. make sure you time yourself.
- edit the script if it's too long / short / hard to understand.
Presentation
- Eye contact is important. you are talking to me, not reading to me.
- you don't have to tell me the story - i have already watched the film 3 times. just answer the questions.
- make sure that you have an introduction and a conclusion.
- be prepared to answer my questions.
ABCman's adventures
There was a typhoon coming to Hong Kong at midnight. Everyone was preparing for it. Harry Potter’s family was hard- working so they had no time to prepare for the typhoon.
Suddenly, a man called ABCman flew in the sky. He shouted, “I ought to help the people, the typhoon is so big!” He used a weapon called “A” to make the typhoon stop, then he used another weapon called “B” to push the typhoon out of the world. Finally, he used weapon “C” to make it disappear in the sky. He had power like Superman’s but Superman was sleeping at that time.
A reporter ran after ABCman and asked, “Hi! What’s your name?” When ABCman wanted to answer, Superman appeared and said, “Don’t answer!” Then, ABCman went back home. When he was back home, Harry Potter saw him and said, “Hi! I am Harry Potter!” ABCman said, “What happened?” “Five witches are in the school near Ocean Park.” “Okay! I will kill them next Saturday.”
-----------Next Saturday----------
The five witches had nothing to do and went to Ocean Park. ABCman went there too. He ran after them. The witches knew he was after them and they turned him into a frog. Superman knew this, and he helped ABCman to become a man again. The witches were so sad, because they were ordered by Harry Potter to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and Superman used a “super-weapon” called “D” to kill Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman did not go out because there was no more crime in Hong Kong.
Suddenly, a man called ABCman flew in the sky. He shouted, “I ought to help the people, the typhoon is so big!” He used a weapon called “A” to make the typhoon stop, then he used another weapon called “B” to push the typhoon out of the world. Finally, he used weapon “C” to make it disappear in the sky. He had power like Superman’s but Superman was sleeping at that time.
A reporter ran after ABCman and asked, “Hi! What’s your name?” When ABCman wanted to answer, Superman appeared and said, “Don’t answer!” Then, ABCman went back home. When he was back home, Harry Potter saw him and said, “Hi! I am Harry Potter!” ABCman said, “What happened?” “Five witches are in the school near Ocean Park.” “Okay! I will kill them next Saturday.”
-----------Next Saturday----------
The five witches had nothing to do and went to Ocean Park. ABCman went there too. He ran after them. The witches knew he was after them and they turned him into a frog. Superman knew this, and he helped ABCman to become a man again. The witches were so sad, because they were ordered by Harry Potter to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and Superman used a “super-weapon” called “D” to kill Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman did not go out because there was no more crime in Hong Kong.
20081123
characters (2-3)
crying baby / Superman / Alex / Harry Potter / mother / Phyllis / ABCman/
time (2)
noon / midnight / after the typhoon / 2nd December / 2005 / 7:30pm / when the baby cries
venue (2)
swimming pool / under the bed / between two teeth / on the computer screen / garden / underground / airport / aquarium
emotions (1-2)
jealous / excited / bored / amazed / interested / scared / angry / sad / nervous / amused
In the midnight there was a typhoon coming to Hong Kong, and everyone was preparing for it. Harry Potter’s family was hard working and no time to prepare for the typhoon.
crying baby / Superman / Alex / Harry Potter / mother / Phyllis / ABCman/
time (2)
noon / midnight / after the typhoon / 2nd December / 2005 / 7:30pm / when the baby cries
venue (2)
swimming pool / under the bed / between two teeth / on the computer screen / garden / underground / airport / aquarium
emotions (1-2)
jealous / excited / bored / amazed / interested / scared / angry / sad / nervous / amused
In the midnight there was a typhoon coming to Hong Kong, and everyone was preparing for it. Harry Potter’s family was hard working and no time to prepare for the typhoon.
Suddenly, a man called ABCman and flew in the sky and shouted, “I ought to help the people, the typhoon is so big!” He used “A” to made the typhoon shop, then, he used “B” to push the typhoon out of the world, finally used “C” to made it disappeared in the sky. He has power like superman but superman was sleeping at that time. “Hi what, is you name?” a reporter asked. When ABCman when to tell, superman said, “Go out now!” Then, ABCman was gone out. When ABCman went back home, Harry Potter saw him and said, “Hi! I am Harry Potter!” ABCman said, “What happen?” “Five witches are in the school near the Ocean Park.” “Ok! I will kill them next Saturday.”
-----------Saturday----------
Saturday, five witches were no things to do and they went to Ocean Park. Then ABCman went to Ocean Park too. So he ran after them. The witches knew ABCman was run after them and made ABCman became a frog. Superman knew this thing, so he help the ABCman became a man again. The witches were so sad, because they gave Harry Potter order to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and superman used super “D” to kill the Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman do not go out now because not bad things in Hong Kong.
-----------Saturday----------
Saturday, five witches were no things to do and they went to Ocean Park. Then ABCman went to Ocean Park too. So he ran after them. The witches knew ABCman was run after them and made ABCman became a frog. Superman knew this thing, so he help the ABCman became a man again. The witches were so sad, because they gave Harry Potter order to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and superman used super “D” to kill the Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman do not go out now because not bad things in Hong Kong.
Non-linear writing - amended by Phyllis
When I am reading the frontpage of the newspaper this morning…
Hong Kong News Sunday 20-5-2008
Alex Law Chun Yin, private detective, solved a murder case…
“It’s me!” I shout. I know this case. It went like this…
When I had lunch in a restaurant last Saturday, there was a man shouting in the bathroom, “Help! Help!” But I did not know what happen. Afterwards, a child went into the bathroom and screamed, “A man died in the bathroom!” When I heard him, I was very shocked and ran into the bathroom. I saw a man stabbed by a knife. I asked all the people not to go out of the restaurant because I thought the killer had not escaped. We all waited for the policemen.
After two minutes, four policemen saw the dead body and ordered, “Everybody please give your bags to me one by one and open them,” When a man saw the police, he said, “I wanna go to the public toilet!” And he ran away. When the policemen opened his bag, I saw that there were a lot of drugs. When the police saw the drugs, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after him and shouted, “You are the killer, because the victim knew you have lots of drugs and you killed him.”
Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I became a super-detective.
Hong Kong News Sunday 20-5-2008
Alex Law Chun Yin, private detective, solved a murder case…
“It’s me!” I shout. I know this case. It went like this…
When I had lunch in a restaurant last Saturday, there was a man shouting in the bathroom, “Help! Help!” But I did not know what happen. Afterwards, a child went into the bathroom and screamed, “A man died in the bathroom!” When I heard him, I was very shocked and ran into the bathroom. I saw a man stabbed by a knife. I asked all the people not to go out of the restaurant because I thought the killer had not escaped. We all waited for the policemen.
After two minutes, four policemen saw the dead body and ordered, “Everybody please give your bags to me one by one and open them,” When a man saw the police, he said, “I wanna go to the public toilet!” And he ran away. When the policemen opened his bag, I saw that there were a lot of drugs. When the police saw the drugs, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after him and shouted, “You are the killer, because the victim knew you have lots of drugs and you killed him.”
Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I became a super-detective.
20081119
Non-linear writing
When I am reading the frontpage of the newspaper this morning…Hong Kong News Sunday 20-5-2008Alex Law Chun Yin, private detective, solved the murder case…“It’s me!” I shout. I know this case. It is about this…
When I had a lunch in restaurant, the W.C had a man shouted “Help! Help!” But I do not know what happen. After a child went to the W.C and said “A man died in the W.C!” When I heard, I was very amazed and ran into the W.C, I saw a man died by a knife. I order all the people don’t go out the restaurant because I thought the killer did not run out. I order all the people stayed in the restaurant and waited the policemen. After two minutes, four policemen saw a man died and shouted “Give your entire bag to me and open it,” After one and one. When a man saw the police, he said “I want to go to W.C!” and run away. When the policemen open his bag, I saw there are many poisons. When they police saw it, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after the man and shouted “You are the killer, because the man knew you have many poisons so you kill the man.” Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I can became a supper detective.
When I had a lunch in restaurant, the W.C had a man shouted “Help! Help!” But I do not know what happen. After a child went to the W.C and said “A man died in the W.C!” When I heard, I was very amazed and ran into the W.C, I saw a man died by a knife. I order all the people don’t go out the restaurant because I thought the killer did not run out. I order all the people stayed in the restaurant and waited the policemen. After two minutes, four policemen saw a man died and shouted “Give your entire bag to me and open it,” After one and one. When a man saw the police, he said “I want to go to W.C!” and run away. When the policemen open his bag, I saw there are many poisons. When they police saw it, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after the man and shouted “You are the killer, because the man knew you have many poisons so you kill the man.” Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I can became a supper detective.
NON-LINEAR writing
Write a story based on one or more of the following themes:
- jealousy
- revenge
- mystery
- regret
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WORDS YOU MAY USE
- past -- present -- future
- detective
- investigate the case
- murderer / killer
- suspect
- evidence
- clue
- murder weapon (gun, knife, poison, rope, stone)
- other ways of killing (drowning, suffocating, burning, strangling)
- jail
- handcuffs
- assistant
- crime
Alex disappeared! - amended by Phyllis
I woke up this morning and went out to get the newspaper at the door. The front page had my picture on it and the headline wrote:
I read on:
In 2028, I went to the school to find the witches and yelled, "If you don't make me an ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me go back to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
ALEX DISAPPEARED!
I read on:
"Alex should be back from school yesterday at 5pm, but he wasn’t. His family was now searching for him.” I was shocked. I was home and I had not disappeared!
When I went into the bathroom, I saw that the child in the mirror had a blue face. “It’s me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and asked, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I had died in Ocean Park’s shark aquarium, because the witches had used sharks to kill us.
I was very angry, because I thought it was them again. They must have used the magic sweets to make me become a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went back home. But my family shouted, "You are NOT Alex!" I was so sad and cried, "Witches I ought to kill you, if I can't kill you then I am not ALEX! Make me an ordinary person!" When I thought and thought, “I am small now, after 10 years, I will kill you!”
When I went into the bathroom, I saw that the child in the mirror had a blue face. “It’s me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and asked, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I had died in Ocean Park’s shark aquarium, because the witches had used sharks to kill us.
I was very angry, because I thought it was them again. They must have used the magic sweets to make me become a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went back home. But my family shouted, "You are NOT Alex!" I was so sad and cried, "Witches I ought to kill you, if I can't kill you then I am not ALEX! Make me an ordinary person!" When I thought and thought, “I am small now, after 10 years, I will kill you!”
In 2028, I went to the school to find the witches and yelled, "If you don't make me an ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me go back to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
20081116
Alex Disappeared
I woke up this morning and went out to get the newspaper at the door. The front page wrote had my picture on it and the headline wrote:
ALEX DISAPPEARED!
Alex should be coming back from school yesterday at 5pm, but he hadn’t. His family are now searching for him.
I was shocked. I am home and I haven’t disappeared!
When I went to the bathroom, I saw the child in the mirror had a blue face, “It is me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and said, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I died in the Ocean Park in the shark aquarium, because the witches used the shark to kill us. I was very angry, because I thought the use the magic sweet to make me became a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went to me home. But my family shout "You are no ALEX!" I was so sad and said "Witches I ought to kill you, If I can't kill you then I am no ALEX,make me became I ordinary person!"
2038, I went to the school to find the witches and said "If you don't make me become a ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me went to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
ALEX DISAPPEARED!
Alex should be coming back from school yesterday at 5pm, but he hadn’t. His family are now searching for him.
I was shocked. I am home and I haven’t disappeared!
When I went to the bathroom, I saw the child in the mirror had a blue face, “It is me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and said, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I died in the Ocean Park in the shark aquarium, because the witches used the shark to kill us. I was very angry, because I thought the use the magic sweet to make me became a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went to me home. But my family shout "You are no ALEX!" I was so sad and said "Witches I ought to kill you, If I can't kill you then I am no ALEX,make me became I ordinary person!"
2038, I went to the school to find the witches and said "If you don't make me become a ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me went to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
American Election - amended by Phyllis
When I heard that Obama was elected the American president, I was very happy. I think Iraqis and Americans will be happy too because they do not want to fight with each other. I have this dream of world peace too. When George W. Bush became the president of USA in 2000, he ordered the USA army to fight Iraq and McCain thought the same. But Obama said, “Change！” He meant people should not fight with each other, so I think Obama is a good president.
20081113
When I hear the USA premier is Obama, I was very happy. Iraq people and USA people was happy to because did not want to fight with each other, so I has this to dream. 2000years, when Bush, George W. became premier, he order USA rank fight Iraq and McCain dream sane. But Obama always said “turn！”that mean don’s fight with each other, so I think Obama is a good premier.
20081107
2nd November, 2008 sunny and hot
Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school.
The five witches looked so polite and always gave us some sweets. Since they never torture us, they used sweets to make you become a blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, you have to learn how to see them. If the women’s eyes are purple and they are bald, that means they are witches. All witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers hanging around the school gate and giving us some sweets. I wanted to take the sweets, but I saw the teachers had purple eyes. Their hair looked like threads and they had long nails, so I didn’t take the sweets. After lunch, the five teachers took my class to the music room. Suddenly, I heard them speaking softly, “I can use them to release my anger.” I heard these words and politely asked, “Can I go to the W.C., please?” She said, “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was scared to go to school!I think I ought to call 999！
Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school.
The five witches looked so polite and always gave us some sweets. Since they never torture us, they used sweets to make you become a blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, you have to learn how to see them. If the women’s eyes are purple and they are bald, that means they are witches. All witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers hanging around the school gate and giving us some sweets. I wanted to take the sweets, but I saw the teachers had purple eyes. Their hair looked like threads and they had long nails, so I didn’t take the sweets. After lunch, the five teachers took my class to the music room. Suddenly, I heard them speaking softly, “I can use them to release my anger.” I heard these words and politely asked, “Can I go to the W.C., please?” She said, “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was scared to go to school!I think I ought to call 999！
20081103
1. What were you doing?
2. How did the witch come to you?
3. What did she look like?
4. Did you know she was a witch?
5. Where had she taken you?
6. Were you in any danger?
7. How did you escape?
2nd November, 2008 sunny and hot Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school. They looked so polite and always gave yousome sweets. Since they never torture you, they used sweets to make you becomea blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, if the eyes ispurple and bald, that means she is a witches. you have to learn how to see them. The witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers stayed in the school door and gave us some sweets. After lunch, five teacher take my class to music room. Shuddery, I heard she speak softly “I can use them to vent,” I heard this words and said “Can I go to W.C, please?” She said “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was worry to go to school！
I think I ought to call 999！
2. How did the witch come to you?
3. What did she look like?
4. Did you know she was a witch?
5. Where had she taken you?
6. Were you in any danger?
7. How did you escape?
2nd November, 2008 sunny and hot Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school. They looked so polite and always gave yousome sweets. Since they never torture you, they used sweets to make you becomea blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, if the eyes ispurple and bald, that means she is a witches. you have to learn how to see them. The witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers stayed in the school door and gave us some sweets. After lunch, five teacher take my class to music room. Shuddery, I heard she speak softly “I can use them to vent,” I heard this words and said “Can I go to W.C, please?” She said “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was worry to go to school！
I think I ought to call 999！
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