Write a story about the first time you do something. It can be something you've really done before, or something you will do or dream of doing. Be crazy!
For example:
… go to school
… go to work
… have my own restaurant
… get married
… have my own children/grandchildren
... become the President of the USA
... go to the moon
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The Repayment of the Chicken - amended
Once upon a time there was a chicken living near a farm. There were five children living in the farm too. The children were called Sam, Tom, Alex, Jenny and Ben. Alex was poor and needed to work everyday. He couldn’t go to school. The other children were having a lot of money and always hit Alex.
One day, when Alex went back home, he saw the other children wanting to kill the chicken. Alex shouted, “You can’t kill it, it is a life!” Then, the other children hit Alex and he got hurt. He was very happy, because the chicken did not need to die.
When he went back home, he saw that there were eight more hours on his watch. He didn’t know what happened, and slept. He usually slept for eight hours every night. When he got up, his watch said
Alex was very angry. His father hit him, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. It looked very hungry, and he gave it some bread. Although the bread was not very delicious, the chicken enjoyed it. The bread tasted like expensive cake to Alex too. When he went to work, the chicken shouted, “You have eight more hours because of my magic. You can read your book!”
Alex was very amazed. The chicken was actually a fairy! He could go to school now because he had more time. When he went to school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor! He can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any knowledge!” The teacher gave Alex an admission test. When Alex had finished, the other children were very shocked, because he had gotten full marks.
Alex could go to school everyday. His classmates asked him everything. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken to school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken with him everyday. They lived happily everyday and Alex became an architect.
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Amazing Chicken
Once upon a time there was a chicken, lived near the farm. There were five children lived the farm too. The children were called Sam, Tom, Alex, Jenny and Ben. Alex was a poor and needed to worked everyday. He couldn’t go to school and couldn’t learn anything. Other children were having much money and always hut Alex.
One day, when Alex went back home, he saw other children wanted to killed the chicken, Alex said, “You can’t kill it, it was a life!” Then, other children hit Alex and he hurt himself. He was very happy, because the chicken no needed to die.
When he went back home, he saw the watch had more then eight hour. He didn’t know what happen, and slept. He slept eight hour everyday. When he got up, he the watch was 4:00 a.m. He was very amazed. And he got up and read the English book. He was very interested in building. He went to work after two hour, he saw other children had hurt themselves. When there father and mother went back, the children said, “Alex hit me very much, I am very unhappy!”
I was very angry, but his father hit Alex, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. The chicken looked like very hungry, he gave the chicken some bread. Although was very not yummy, but the chicken was eat it looked like very yummy. When Alex ate the bread, it was look like the expensive cake. When he wanted to went to work, the chicken shout, “You had more than eight hour, you could read your book!”
Alex was very amazed, because the chicken was a good chicken. He could go to school everyday. When he went to the school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor, he can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any science!” So the teacher made a quiet to Alex. When Alex done his quiet, other children and Ben was very amazed, because he got the full marks.
Alex could go to the school everyday. All the children always found him and quieted it all the things. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken into the school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken everyday. Then, they live happily every day and Alex done his building.
One day, when Alex went back home, he saw other children wanted to killed the chicken, Alex said, “You can’t kill it, it was a life!” Then, other children hit Alex and he hurt himself. He was very happy, because the chicken no needed to die.
When he went back home, he saw the watch had more then eight hour. He didn’t know what happen, and slept. He slept eight hour everyday. When he got up, he the watch was 4:00 a.m. He was very amazed. And he got up and read the English book. He was very interested in building. He went to work after two hour, he saw other children had hurt themselves. When there father and mother went back, the children said, “Alex hit me very much, I am very unhappy!”
I was very angry, but his father hit Alex, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. The chicken looked like very hungry, he gave the chicken some bread. Although was very not yummy, but the chicken was eat it looked like very yummy. When Alex ate the bread, it was look like the expensive cake. When he wanted to went to work, the chicken shout, “You had more than eight hour, you could read your book!”
Alex was very amazed, because the chicken was a good chicken. He could go to school everyday. When he went to the school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor, he can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any science!” So the teacher made a quiet to Alex. When Alex done his quiet, other children and Ben was very amazed, because he got the full marks.
Alex could go to the school everyday. All the children always found him and quieted it all the things. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken into the school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken everyday. Then, they live happily every day and Alex done his building.
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