It can be as small as a box, or as big as a country.
Focus 重點 on feelings 感覺 and reactions反應.
20090828
My 1st birthday party! - amended
I think I have arrived at this world for one year. But why can’t I walk and can’t speak? I have been to the park for three times. I also need to go there today. Mama looked very happy, but I could not ask her why she looked so happy. I played with the children there for about two hours. Then Mama took me to the supermarket and bought a lot of food like sausages, pineapples, chips, etc. Afterwards, we went back home and she jotted something down. Mama took me to take the bus and went to
We entered the park, and I played the merry-go-round with Mama first. My grandparents arrived and we went to the restaurant to take lunch. I could eat a bit of porridge. It was my first time eating it, and it was very delicious. After we finished lunch, we played other thrill rides.
Afterwards, we went to the Ocean Theater to see dolphins and sea lions. Those dolphins were very lovely and we took a lot of photos. We were all tired and we took a bus home.
They were all busy to make dinner when we were home. I played with my sister in the living room for about an hour. Papa was holding a very big box when he came back. But he didn’t let me know what was inside the box. I was very curious, and always touched that box. I guessed that thing inside might be eatable.
Mama was afraid that I would break the box, so she put the box into the refrigerator carefully. I was unhappy and my sister cheered me up with a toy. After a moment, Mama took some sausages and pineapples to me and I ate them all. There was a lot of food during dinner. I ate a lot and they also gave me some juice. This was my first sip of juice.
We chatted after dinner. Suddenly, father took the box out, and sang a birthday song to me. It was a birthday cake inside that box. They divided the cake into many pieces. Papa blew the candle together with me. Then, we finished the cake happily. I had an unforgettable birthday.
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My 1st borthday party!
Oh. I think I went to this world for one year. But why I can’t walk and why I can’t say the words? I went to the park three day. Today I need to go to the park too. Mama look like very happy but I can’t ask her why she looks like so happy. I played with those children about two hours. And then Mama took me to the supermarket and buys many foods like sausages, pineapple, chips, and many things. And then we went back home and settled down everything. Mama took me to take the bus and went to Ocean Park buy two tickets.
We enter the park, I played Marry-go-around with Mama first. My grandma and grandpa were arrived Ocean Park and we went to the restaurant to take the lunch. I can eat the food of a little liquid substance. Although I took a meal food, felt very delicious for the first time. After we finished the lunch then we played other dynamoelectric games.
After play the dynamoelectric games, we went to Ocean Theater to see dolphin and sea lion. Those dolphins were very lovely and we also take a lot of photo. We all played tired then we take a bus to go home.
They all busy to make dinner after went back home . I played with my sister in the living room about one hour. Father held a very big box when he comes back. But he didn’t make me know what inside the box. I was very curious, and always made that box. I felt that thing might can eat. Mother saw I would break the box, put back the box to refrigerator carefully. I was unhappy immediately then elder sister took a toy to coax me. After a moment, mother took some sausages and pineapples to me and I eat them all. They finished cookingat 7:00p.m. Today's dinner looked like many foods. I ate many foods and they also grant me to drink juice. This is my first sip juice.
Everyone chatted together after finished the dinner. Suddenly, father held that box to come out, and sang birthday song to me, that box was birthday cake. They divided the cake into many pieces. Father blew the candle together with me. Then, we finished the cake happily. Then I have a unforgettable one year old birthday.
We enter the park, I played Marry-go-around with Mama first. My grandma and grandpa were arrived Ocean Park and we went to the restaurant to take the lunch. I can eat the food of a little liquid substance. Although I took a meal food, felt very delicious for the first time. After we finished the lunch then we played other dynamoelectric games.
After play the dynamoelectric games, we went to Ocean Theater to see dolphin and sea lion. Those dolphins were very lovely and we also take a lot of photo. We all played tired then we take a bus to go home.
They all busy to make dinner after went back home . I played with my sister in the living room about one hour. Father held a very big box when he comes back. But he didn’t make me know what inside the box. I was very curious, and always made that box. I felt that thing might can eat. Mother saw I would break the box, put back the box to refrigerator carefully. I was unhappy immediately then elder sister took a toy to coax me. After a moment, mother took some sausages and pineapples to me and I eat them all. They finished cookingat 7:00p.m. Today's dinner looked like many foods. I ate many foods and they also grant me to drink juice. This is my first sip juice.
Everyone chatted together after finished the dinner. Suddenly, father held that box to come out, and sang birthday song to me, that box was birthday cake. They divided the cake into many pieces. Father blew the candle together with me. Then, we finished the cake happily. Then I have a unforgettable one year old birthday.
20090825
The Kidnap of Two Rabbits - amended
Once upon a time, there was a king called Jacky. He married a girl when he was twenty-two years old. His wife was called Jenny.
When they went to a park one day, they saw a beautiful rabbit. Jenny liked it very much because it was white and red. So they brought it back to the palace. They called it Baby. From then on, a lot of people living in the city owned a rabbit. Everyone called it a lucky animal. Jacky bought a rabbit from a pet shop too. So there were two rabbits living in the palace. Baby was a girl rabbit and Hin was a boy rabbit. They played in the park of the palace. It was called Baby In Park. The king and the queen were very happy everyday.
A thief called Ken liked to steal animals in the city. His target was the king’s rabbit. He sent a letter to warn the king. It wrote, “Hi, I am Ken! I am the best thief in this city. I will steal two rabbits tomorrow!” When Jacky and Jenny went back to the palace, they saw the letter and were very worried, so they asked the police to protect the rabbits.
Baby and Hin disappeared at 5pm. Everyone was very astonished. Luckily, the king had called a private detective. The private detective was called Alex. He said, “The thief was a retired policeman. Alex was a clever private detective in the city. The retired policeman was called Ken. He lived in the Extra Hotel. The king was very worried and shouted, “I can give you $200,000, but you need to find my two rabbits!” Alex answered, “Okay!”
Alex went to the Extra Hotel, found Ken’s room and put a letter there. The letter wrote, “I will get back the rabbits!” Ken was very worried and did not know what to do. The king was very unhappy and worried everyday.
Next day, Ken put the rabbits into the river and said, “You have to die, bye!” Alex appeared suddenly and said, “You will go to prison!” Then, Alex took Ken to prison.
Finally, Alex brought the two rabbits back to the palace and went back home. Everyone knew him from then on.
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When they went to a park one day, they saw a beautiful rabbit. Jenny liked it very much because it was white and red. So they brought it back to the palace. They called it Baby. From then on, a lot of people living in the city owned a rabbit. Everyone called it a lucky animal. Jacky bought a rabbit from a pet shop too. So there were two rabbits living in the palace. Baby was a girl rabbit and Hin was a boy rabbit. They played in the park of the palace. It was called Baby In Park. The king and the queen were very happy everyday.
A thief called Ken liked to steal animals in the city. His target was the king’s rabbit. He sent a letter to warn the king. It wrote, “Hi, I am Ken! I am the best thief in this city. I will steal two rabbits tomorrow!” When Jacky and Jenny went back to the palace, they saw the letter and were very worried, so they asked the police to protect the rabbits.
Baby and Hin disappeared at 5pm. Everyone was very astonished. Luckily, the king had called a private detective. The private detective was called Alex. He said, “The thief was a retired policeman. Alex was a clever private detective in the city. The retired policeman was called Ken. He lived in the Extra Hotel. The king was very worried and shouted, “I can give you $200,000, but you need to find my two rabbits!” Alex answered, “Okay!”
Alex went to the Extra Hotel, found Ken’s room and put a letter there. The letter wrote, “I will get back the rabbits!” Ken was very worried and did not know what to do. The king was very unhappy and worried everyday.
Next day, Ken put the rabbits into the river and said, “You have to die, bye!” Alex appeared suddenly and said, “You will go to prison!” Then, Alex took Ken to prison.
Finally, Alex brought the two rabbits back to the palace and went back home. Everyone knew him from then on.
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3.5/5 (content) 3.5/5 (grammar)
20090823
Retriever's Alex
Once upon a time, there was a king was call Jacky. He married a girl, when he was twenty- two years old. His wife was calling Jenny.
When they went to the park, they saw a beautiful rabbit there. Jenny was very like it, because it was white and red. So they brought it back to the palace. They call its name is Baby. From then on, all of the people lived in the city were a lot of people had a rabbit. All the people call it lucky animals. Jacky bought a rabbit in a pet shop too. So in the palace, there were two rabbit lived in there. Baby was a girl rabbit and Hin was a boy rabbit. They played in the palace. There was a park in the palace, its name was calling Baby In Park. King and Queen was very happy everyday.
Sunday night, a pilferer was called Ken. He liked to steal the animals in the city. It target was the king’s rabbit. He used a litter to call the king. The little wrote “Hi, I am Ken! I was the best pilferer in this city. Tomorrow, I will target two rabbit. When Jacky and Jenny went back palace, they saw the little and very worried, so they invited policemen to protect the rabbit.
Baby and Hin were disappeared when it was five O’clock. All the people were very astonished. Lucky, the king called the retriever. The retriever was called Alex. He said, “The pilferer was a retire policeman. Alex was a clever retriever in the city. The retire policeman was calling Ken. He was lived in the ABC hotel. King was very worried and shouted, “I can give you $200,000, but you need to find my two rabbit!” Alex answered, “Okay!”
Alex went to the ABC hotel and fought Ken room and put a little there. The little was written “I will get back the rabbit!” Ken was very worried and did not know how to do. The king was very unhappy and he very worried everyday.
Next day, the Ken put the rabbit into the river and said, “You need to die, bye!” Alex flew in the sky and said, “You will go to the prison!” Then, Alex caught Ken into the prison.
Finally, Alex brought the two rabbit back to the palace and he went back to his home. All the people learned he from than on.
When they went to the park, they saw a beautiful rabbit there. Jenny was very like it, because it was white and red. So they brought it back to the palace. They call its name is Baby. From then on, all of the people lived in the city were a lot of people had a rabbit. All the people call it lucky animals. Jacky bought a rabbit in a pet shop too. So in the palace, there were two rabbit lived in there. Baby was a girl rabbit and Hin was a boy rabbit. They played in the palace. There was a park in the palace, its name was calling Baby In Park. King and Queen was very happy everyday.
Sunday night, a pilferer was called Ken. He liked to steal the animals in the city. It target was the king’s rabbit. He used a litter to call the king. The little wrote “Hi, I am Ken! I was the best pilferer in this city. Tomorrow, I will target two rabbit. When Jacky and Jenny went back palace, they saw the little and very worried, so they invited policemen to protect the rabbit.
Baby and Hin were disappeared when it was five O’clock. All the people were very astonished. Lucky, the king called the retriever. The retriever was called Alex. He said, “The pilferer was a retire policeman. Alex was a clever retriever in the city. The retire policeman was calling Ken. He was lived in the ABC hotel. King was very worried and shouted, “I can give you $200,000, but you need to find my two rabbit!” Alex answered, “Okay!”
Alex went to the ABC hotel and fought Ken room and put a little there. The little was written “I will get back the rabbit!” Ken was very worried and did not know how to do. The king was very unhappy and he very worried everyday.
Next day, the Ken put the rabbit into the river and said, “You need to die, bye!” Alex flew in the sky and said, “You will go to the prison!” Then, Alex caught Ken into the prison.
Finally, Alex brought the two rabbit back to the palace and he went back to his home. All the people learned he from than on.
20090820
Alex and His Shadow - amended
Once upon a time, there was a man called Ken. When he was young, he liked to study his shadow very much. He observed it under the sun.
When he has finished his study, his father had a severe headache. So he used his research to help his father. Ken studied many kinds of medicine to help his father. Then, he became a famous scientist. Everyone knew him. Ken and his father were not poor anymore. He was very happy.
He disappeared when he was twenty-three years old. His father was very sad and did not know what to do. Ken was found dead near a beach four years later. His father was very sad and wanted to commit suicide. His father buried him under the sea.
Fifty years later, five friends went diving in the sea. They were Sam, Alan, Ben, Jenny and Alex. They were about twenty years old. When they arrived at the wreckage of an old ship, they found a lot of medicine and took all of them. They found Ken’s corpse and a pill in his hand.
When Alex went back home, he took the pill, but nothing happened. In the evening, his shadow went out and said, “I don’t want to be a shadow. I want to be a person!” Alex was very worried and did not know what to do. The shadow said, “A, B, C! I am now a person!” Then, Alex became a shadow and the shadow became a person. The shadow was very happy and used Alex’s money to buy food. It was very hungry and spent all the money.
Alex was very tired, but he could not stop walking, because as a shadow he needed to run after the owner. When they went back home, Alex was very hungry, but he could not do anything. When Alex was very hungry, the shadow said, “You can’t be a person anymore. Now, you are the shadow and need to run after me!”
Alex was very sad and asked, “Why did Ken disappear?” The shadow answered, “He was killed by his shadow! Ken and his shadow switched roles. The shadow stood near the beach and used a lit match to kill Ken!”
Suddenly, Alex knew what happened and asked the shadow, “You can’t see me. How can you kill me?” The shadow was very unhappy and stood in front of the sun. Alex said, “A, B, C! I am now a person!” Then, Alex became a person and killed the shadow. He had a new shadow. He used this story to write a book and became a famous writer.
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4/5 (content) 3/5 (grammar)
When he has finished his study, his father had a severe headache. So he used his research to help his father. Ken studied many kinds of medicine to help his father. Then, he became a famous scientist. Everyone knew him. Ken and his father were not poor anymore. He was very happy.
He disappeared when he was twenty-three years old. His father was very sad and did not know what to do. Ken was found dead near a beach four years later. His father was very sad and wanted to commit suicide. His father buried him under the sea.
Fifty years later, five friends went diving in the sea. They were Sam, Alan, Ben, Jenny and Alex. They were about twenty years old. When they arrived at the wreckage of an old ship, they found a lot of medicine and took all of them. They found Ken’s corpse and a pill in his hand.
When Alex went back home, he took the pill, but nothing happened. In the evening, his shadow went out and said, “I don’t want to be a shadow. I want to be a person!” Alex was very worried and did not know what to do. The shadow said, “A, B, C! I am now a person!” Then, Alex became a shadow and the shadow became a person. The shadow was very happy and used Alex’s money to buy food. It was very hungry and spent all the money.
Alex was very tired, but he could not stop walking, because as a shadow he needed to run after the owner. When they went back home, Alex was very hungry, but he could not do anything. When Alex was very hungry, the shadow said, “You can’t be a person anymore. Now, you are the shadow and need to run after me!”
Alex was very sad and asked, “Why did Ken disappear?” The shadow answered, “He was killed by his shadow! Ken and his shadow switched roles. The shadow stood near the beach and used a lit match to kill Ken!”
Suddenly, Alex knew what happened and asked the shadow, “You can’t see me. How can you kill me?” The shadow was very unhappy and stood in front of the sun. Alex said, “A, B, C! I am now a person!” Then, Alex became a person and killed the shadow. He had a new shadow. He used this story to write a book and became a famous writer.
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4/5 (content) 3/5 (grammar)
20090819
Alex's Sadow and Alex
Once upon a time, a man called Ken. When he was young, he very liked to investigate shadow. When he has done his investigate, his father had a big headache. So he used his investigate to help his father. Ken investigates many medicines to help his father. Then, he became a famous people. All the people learned him very much. They did not poor any more. He was very happy and very bliss. He gave lose when he was twenty-three years old. His father was very sad and did not who to do. Four years ago, Ken got slept near a beach. His father was very sad and wanted to die by himself. His father put him in to the sea and wanted to put it in to the sea.
Fifty years ago, five people skin diving near the sea. They were Sam, Alan, Ben, Jenny and Alex. They were about twenty years. When they arrived the old ship, they found so many medicines and they took all the medicines, and they found the investigator and they found his hand got medicines too.
When they went back home, they ate it, but didn’t have any amazing things. When it was in the evening, his shadow went out and said, “I don’t want to be a shadow. I want to be a person!” Alex was very worried and did not know how to do. Finally, the shadow said, “A, B, C! I become a person!” Then, Alex became a shadow and shadow became a person. Shadow was very happy and used Alex all the money to buy food. He was very hungry and he didn’t have any money.
Alex was very tired, but he could not stop to walk, because the shadow needed to run after the owner. When they went back home, Alex was very hungry, but he could not do any things. We Alex were very hungry, the shadow said, “You can’t be a person any more. Now, you is the shadow and need to run after me!”
Alex was very say and asked to his, “Why did Ken disappear?” Shadow said, “He gave his shadow killed! He stood near the sea and Ken became a shadow and gave used the fire to kill!”
Suddenly, Alex knew was happen and asked shadow, “You can’t see me, how to kill me?” The shadows were very not happy and stand on the sun. Alex said, “A, B, C! I become a person!” Then, Alex became a person and killed the shadow. Then he had a new shadow and he used this thing to wrote a book and he became a famous writer.
Fifty years ago, five people skin diving near the sea. They were Sam, Alan, Ben, Jenny and Alex. They were about twenty years. When they arrived the old ship, they found so many medicines and they took all the medicines, and they found the investigator and they found his hand got medicines too.
When they went back home, they ate it, but didn’t have any amazing things. When it was in the evening, his shadow went out and said, “I don’t want to be a shadow. I want to be a person!” Alex was very worried and did not know how to do. Finally, the shadow said, “A, B, C! I become a person!” Then, Alex became a shadow and shadow became a person. Shadow was very happy and used Alex all the money to buy food. He was very hungry and he didn’t have any money.
Alex was very tired, but he could not stop to walk, because the shadow needed to run after the owner. When they went back home, Alex was very hungry, but he could not do any things. We Alex were very hungry, the shadow said, “You can’t be a person any more. Now, you is the shadow and need to run after me!”
Alex was very say and asked to his, “Why did Ken disappear?” Shadow said, “He gave his shadow killed! He stood near the sea and Ken became a shadow and gave used the fire to kill!”
Suddenly, Alex knew was happen and asked shadow, “You can’t see me, how to kill me?” The shadows were very not happy and stand on the sun. Alex said, “A, B, C! I become a person!” Then, Alex became a person and killed the shadow. Then he had a new shadow and he used this thing to wrote a book and he became a famous writer.
20090817
My shadow's rebellion 造反
my shadow rebelled 造反 against me
What if he doesn't want to be your shadow anymore? What if he doesn't want to be in the dark, doesn't want to be following you, and doesn't want to be stepped on by you? What if he wants to be YOU?
What if he doesn't want to be your shadow anymore? What if he doesn't want to be in the dark, doesn't want to be following you, and doesn't want to be stepped on by you? What if he wants to be YOU?
My Amazing Graduation Ceremony - amended
My school was near a sea. I saw a submarine in the sea today when I went to school. I was very happy, because I could see one before I graduated from primary school. It was my graduation ceremony today, so I needed to go to school. My friends and I went into the classroom, and saw that it was written on the blackboard that the graduation ceremony would be held in the submarine. I was very happy and told this happy news to my classmates. Some of my classmates were happy, but some were frightened. I asked Sam, “Why are you unhappy?” He answered, “I don’t know how to swim!” I was very happy and asked again, “You don’t need to swim in a submarine and don’t need to worry!”
We went to the submarine by a small boat. Many people who saw us going to the ceremony were very jealous. We went onto the submarine and prepared for the ceremony. It was my first time in a submarine. The submarine was bought by our principal four years ago. I liked looking out of the windows. There were many sea animals outside.
We needed to go to the bottom of the sea and started the ceremony there. One year ago, many parents and classmates cried unhappily. We said to our teachers, “We will remember your teachings!” After the ceremony, the submarine went to a small island. The teacher said, “You can swim there!”
My friends and I swam there happily. When I went back to the submarine, I saw many classmates looking at the photos. The photos were taken before our graduation. We wanted to go back to that time.
When we left the island, the boat was lost. We were very worried and did not know what to do. Our class and our teachers used a mobile phone to call the submarine owner and said, “We lost the boat, what can we do?” The submarine owner said, “I am coming to save you!” All the classmates had gone back, but our teacher was lost. Our teacher was on the island. It was because the waves were very big.
Finally, we saved her and we went back to school. It was a amazing trip.
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We went to the submarine by a small boat. Many people who saw us going to the ceremony were very jealous. We went onto the submarine and prepared for the ceremony. It was my first time in a submarine. The submarine was bought by our principal four years ago. I liked looking out of the windows. There were many sea animals outside.
We needed to go to the bottom of the sea and started the ceremony there. One year ago, many parents and classmates cried unhappily. We said to our teachers, “We will remember your teachings!” After the ceremony, the submarine went to a small island. The teacher said, “You can swim there!”
My friends and I swam there happily. When I went back to the submarine, I saw many classmates looking at the photos. The photos were taken before our graduation. We wanted to go back to that time.
When we left the island, the boat was lost. We were very worried and did not know what to do. Our class and our teachers used a mobile phone to call the submarine owner and said, “We lost the boat, what can we do?” The submarine owner said, “I am coming to save you!” All the classmates had gone back, but our teacher was lost. Our teacher was on the island. It was because the waves were very big.
Finally, we saved her and we went back to school. It was a amazing trip.
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4/5 (content) 3.5/5 (grammar)
20090816
My Amazing Graduation Ceremony
My school was near a sea. I saw a submarine near my school today when I went to school. I was very amazed, because I will graduate in my primary school. My graduation ceremony was today, so I needed to go to school. My friends and I went to the classroom and saw the blackboard wrote the graduation ceremony was hold in the submarine. I was very happy and told this happy thing to my classmate. My classmate some was happy, but some was frightened. I asked Sam, “Why do you not happy?” He answered, “I don’t know how to swim!” I was very happy and asked again, “You no need to swim in the submarine and no need to worry!”
We went to the submarine and prepared the graduation ceremony. Many people saw us to go to the graduation ceremony were very jealous. We went to the graduation by a big ship. We went to the graduation and visited it. It was my first time to go to the graduation. The graduation was our school principal bought it before four years. I was very interested in the window. There were many sea animals outside the sea.
We needed to go to the sea bed and started the graduation ceremony there. We started the graduation ceremony. Before one year, many parents and classmate cried and unhappy. When we said, “Teacher you are my good teacher, I will learn you teaching!” After we done the graduation ceremony, the submarine had went to the small island. The teacher said, “Your can swim in there!” We used the boat to left out the submarine.
My friend and I swam there happy. I was very happy. When I went to the submarine, I saw many classmates watch the photo. The photo was taken by when we was graduation. We wanted to go back before.
When we left out the island, the boat had lost there. We were very worried and did not know how to do. Our class and our teacher used a model phone to call the submarine owner and said, “We lost the boat, how can we do?” The submarine owner said, “You need to use a big board to catch a rope by the submarine. All the classmate was went back, but I we lost our teacher. Our teacher was in the island. It was because the billow was very big.
Finally, we use the boat to help and it was a amazing trip.
We went to the submarine and prepared the graduation ceremony. Many people saw us to go to the graduation ceremony were very jealous. We went to the graduation by a big ship. We went to the graduation and visited it. It was my first time to go to the graduation. The graduation was our school principal bought it before four years. I was very interested in the window. There were many sea animals outside the sea.
We needed to go to the sea bed and started the graduation ceremony there. We started the graduation ceremony. Before one year, many parents and classmate cried and unhappy. When we said, “Teacher you are my good teacher, I will learn you teaching!” After we done the graduation ceremony, the submarine had went to the small island. The teacher said, “Your can swim in there!” We used the boat to left out the submarine.
My friend and I swam there happy. I was very happy. When I went to the submarine, I saw many classmates watch the photo. The photo was taken by when we was graduation. We wanted to go back before.
When we left out the island, the boat had lost there. We were very worried and did not know how to do. Our class and our teacher used a model phone to call the submarine owner and said, “We lost the boat, how can we do?” The submarine owner said, “You need to use a big board to catch a rope by the submarine. All the classmate was went back, but I we lost our teacher. Our teacher was in the island. It was because the billow was very big.
Finally, we use the boat to help and it was a amazing trip.
20090813
The first time I…
Write a story about the first time you do something. It can be something you've really done before, or something you will do or dream of doing. Be crazy!
For example:
… go to school
… go to work
… have my own restaurant
… get married
… have my own children/grandchildren
... become the President of the USA
... go to the moon
For example:
… go to school
… go to work
… have my own restaurant
… get married
… have my own children/grandchildren
... become the President of the USA
... go to the moon
The Repayment of the Chicken - amended
Once upon a time there was a chicken living near a farm. There were five children living in the farm too. The children were called Sam, Tom, Alex, Jenny and Ben. Alex was poor and needed to work everyday. He couldn’t go to school. The other children were having a lot of money and always hit Alex.
One day, when Alex went back home, he saw the other children wanting to kill the chicken. Alex shouted, “You can’t kill it, it is a life!” Then, the other children hit Alex and he got hurt. He was very happy, because the chicken did not need to die.
When he went back home, he saw that there were eight more hours on his watch. He didn’t know what happened, and slept. He usually slept for eight hours every night. When he got up, his watch said
Alex was very angry. His father hit him, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. It looked very hungry, and he gave it some bread. Although the bread was not very delicious, the chicken enjoyed it. The bread tasted like expensive cake to Alex too. When he went to work, the chicken shouted, “You have eight more hours because of my magic. You can read your book!”
Alex was very amazed. The chicken was actually a fairy! He could go to school now because he had more time. When he went to school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor! He can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any knowledge!” The teacher gave Alex an admission test. When Alex had finished, the other children were very shocked, because he had gotten full marks.
Alex could go to school everyday. His classmates asked him everything. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken to school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken with him everyday. They lived happily everyday and Alex became an architect.
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Content: 3.5/5 Grammar: 3.5/5
Amazing Chicken
Once upon a time there was a chicken, lived near the farm. There were five children lived the farm too. The children were called Sam, Tom, Alex, Jenny and Ben. Alex was a poor and needed to worked everyday. He couldn’t go to school and couldn’t learn anything. Other children were having much money and always hut Alex.
One day, when Alex went back home, he saw other children wanted to killed the chicken, Alex said, “You can’t kill it, it was a life!” Then, other children hit Alex and he hurt himself. He was very happy, because the chicken no needed to die.
When he went back home, he saw the watch had more then eight hour. He didn’t know what happen, and slept. He slept eight hour everyday. When he got up, he the watch was 4:00 a.m. He was very amazed. And he got up and read the English book. He was very interested in building. He went to work after two hour, he saw other children had hurt themselves. When there father and mother went back, the children said, “Alex hit me very much, I am very unhappy!”
I was very angry, but his father hit Alex, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. The chicken looked like very hungry, he gave the chicken some bread. Although was very not yummy, but the chicken was eat it looked like very yummy. When Alex ate the bread, it was look like the expensive cake. When he wanted to went to work, the chicken shout, “You had more than eight hour, you could read your book!”
Alex was very amazed, because the chicken was a good chicken. He could go to school everyday. When he went to the school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor, he can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any science!” So the teacher made a quiet to Alex. When Alex done his quiet, other children and Ben was very amazed, because he got the full marks.
Alex could go to the school everyday. All the children always found him and quieted it all the things. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken into the school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken everyday. Then, they live happily every day and Alex done his building.
One day, when Alex went back home, he saw other children wanted to killed the chicken, Alex said, “You can’t kill it, it was a life!” Then, other children hit Alex and he hurt himself. He was very happy, because the chicken no needed to die.
When he went back home, he saw the watch had more then eight hour. He didn’t know what happen, and slept. He slept eight hour everyday. When he got up, he the watch was 4:00 a.m. He was very amazed. And he got up and read the English book. He was very interested in building. He went to work after two hour, he saw other children had hurt themselves. When there father and mother went back, the children said, “Alex hit me very much, I am very unhappy!”
I was very angry, but his father hit Alex, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. The chicken looked like very hungry, he gave the chicken some bread. Although was very not yummy, but the chicken was eat it looked like very yummy. When Alex ate the bread, it was look like the expensive cake. When he wanted to went to work, the chicken shout, “You had more than eight hour, you could read your book!”
Alex was very amazed, because the chicken was a good chicken. He could go to school everyday. When he went to the school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor, he can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any science!” So the teacher made a quiet to Alex. When Alex done his quiet, other children and Ben was very amazed, because he got the full marks.
Alex could go to the school everyday. All the children always found him and quieted it all the things. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken into the school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken everyday. Then, they live happily every day and Alex done his building.
20090809
My Sporty Summer Holidays - amended
Tuesday 21st June, 2009I am back to Hong Kong today. I was very happy! When I was back to Hong Kong, it felt unfamiliar to me. I went to Shanghai with Mum, Dad, my sister, aunt and grandmother five day ago .I watched the videos shot in Shanghai when I went back home. I watched those shot on the first day of the trip. I remember we arrived at Yanghou Port about four hours after we left the airport.
We went to my uncle’s office and dormitory. The dinner was very delicious. When we arrived, it was evening. We played badminton after we had a big meal. After playing badminton, we visited his office and saw some antiques.We went to play golf next day. We had lunch before we played golf. I had tempura set lunch. I liked it very much. After we had lunch, a young boy told me how to play golf. I was very interested in it and played it again and again. This day was my uncle’s birthday. We played table tennis after dinner.
We caught clams in Huanghai. If you join, you could get a cap. We were very amazed when we caught them. There were many clams. We needed to go there by a tractor. When we started to go there, there was a lot of water there. But after an hour, the tide went down. The tractor owner told us how to find the clams. He found the clams quickly and said it was not hard to find. We took some photos and videos there happily. We caught eight kilograms of clams. There was enough to eat for four meals. We went to the Sun Island and saw some engineering.
We played tennis the next morning. We played tennis happily. It was not easy. I learned it on two days. Then, we had breakfast. We went to play golf again after breakfast. First, I could only hit it to 50m. Finally, I hit it to over 100m. I was very happy, because my uncle said, “If you can’t hit it to over 50m, you can’t have lunch!”
At night, we went to my uncle’s home.We played tennis on the last day. My father took many photos for me and grandmother. Grandmother was very good at sports. She learned it quickly! Then we went back to Hong Kong.
I want to play golf again now. Oh, it is very late, I need to go to bed!
Score:
4/5 (content) 3.5/5 (content)
We went to my uncle’s office and dormitory. The dinner was very delicious. When we arrived, it was evening. We played badminton after we had a big meal. After playing badminton, we visited his office and saw some antiques.We went to play golf next day. We had lunch before we played golf. I had tempura set lunch. I liked it very much. After we had lunch, a young boy told me how to play golf. I was very interested in it and played it again and again. This day was my uncle’s birthday. We played table tennis after dinner.
We caught clams in Huanghai. If you join, you could get a cap. We were very amazed when we caught them. There were many clams. We needed to go there by a tractor. When we started to go there, there was a lot of water there. But after an hour, the tide went down. The tractor owner told us how to find the clams. He found the clams quickly and said it was not hard to find. We took some photos and videos there happily. We caught eight kilograms of clams. There was enough to eat for four meals. We went to the Sun Island and saw some engineering.
We played tennis the next morning. We played tennis happily. It was not easy. I learned it on two days. Then, we had breakfast. We went to play golf again after breakfast. First, I could only hit it to 50m. Finally, I hit it to over 100m. I was very happy, because my uncle said, “If you can’t hit it to over 50m, you can’t have lunch!”
At night, we went to my uncle’s home.We played tennis on the last day. My father took many photos for me and grandmother. Grandmother was very good at sports. She learned it quickly! Then we went back to Hong Kong.
I want to play golf again now. Oh, it is very late, I need to go to bed!
Score:
4/5 (content) 3.5/5 (content)
Ｍｙ Ｔｒｉｐ！
Tuesday 21st June, 2009
I had went back Hong Kong today. I was very happy! When we I went back Hong Kong, it was very strange of Hong Kong., I went to Shanghai with mother, father, sister, aunt and grandmother before five day.
I watched the movie which was shooting in Shanghai when I went back house. I watched the first day of the trip. I remembered we went to Yanghou Port about fore hour after we left out the airport.
We went to my uncle office and dormitory. The dinner was very yummy and food. When we arrived there, it was evening. We played the badminton after we ate the abundant dinner. After played badminton, we went to his office and saw some antiques.
We went to play the golf next day. We ate the lunch before we played the golf. I ate the tempura set lunch. It was very yummy. After we had the lunch. A young boy told me how to play the golf. I was very happy and played it again. This day was my uncle birthday. We played the table tennis after dinner.
We caught the clam to the Huanghai Sea. If you played it, you could got a hat. We were very happy when we caught it. There were many clams. We needed to go there by the tractor. When we started to go there, there was much water there. But after an hour, all the water had went to the sea. The tractor tax told us how to found the clams. He found the clams quickly and said it was not high. We took some photo and movie there happily. We caught the clams about eight kilogram. We could eat it about fore time. We went to the Sun Island and saw some engineering.
We played the tennis ball next day morning. We played the tennis ball happily. Tennis ball was not easy. I played it about two day. Then, we ate the breakfast. We went to play the golf again after breakfast. First, I only could hut it to 50m. Finally, I hut it over 100m. I was very happy, because my uncle said, “If you can’t hut it over 50m, you can’t ate the dinner!” At night, we went to my uncle home.
Last day, we played the tennis first. My father took many photos for me and grandmother. Grandmother was very good at sport. She learned it quickly! Then we went back Hong Kong.
Now, I want to play the golf again. Oh, it is very night, I need to sleep!
I had went back Hong Kong today. I was very happy! When we I went back Hong Kong, it was very strange of Hong Kong., I went to Shanghai with mother, father, sister, aunt and grandmother before five day.
I watched the movie which was shooting in Shanghai when I went back house. I watched the first day of the trip. I remembered we went to Yanghou Port about fore hour after we left out the airport.
We went to my uncle office and dormitory. The dinner was very yummy and food. When we arrived there, it was evening. We played the badminton after we ate the abundant dinner. After played badminton, we went to his office and saw some antiques.
We went to play the golf next day. We ate the lunch before we played the golf. I ate the tempura set lunch. It was very yummy. After we had the lunch. A young boy told me how to play the golf. I was very happy and played it again. This day was my uncle birthday. We played the table tennis after dinner.
We caught the clam to the Huanghai Sea. If you played it, you could got a hat. We were very happy when we caught it. There were many clams. We needed to go there by the tractor. When we started to go there, there was much water there. But after an hour, all the water had went to the sea. The tractor tax told us how to found the clams. He found the clams quickly and said it was not high. We took some photo and movie there happily. We caught the clams about eight kilogram. We could eat it about fore time. We went to the Sun Island and saw some engineering.
We played the tennis ball next day morning. We played the tennis ball happily. Tennis ball was not easy. I played it about two day. Then, we ate the breakfast. We went to play the golf again after breakfast. First, I only could hut it to 50m. Finally, I hut it over 100m. I was very happy, because my uncle said, “If you can’t hut it over 50m, you can’t ate the dinner!” At night, we went to my uncle home.
Last day, we played the tennis first. My father took many photos for me and grandmother. Grandmother was very good at sport. She learned it quickly! Then we went back Hong Kong.
Now, I want to play the golf again. Oh, it is very night, I need to sleep!
20090805
2 assignments
1. Travelogue --- trip to Yanghou Port (400 words)
2. If you have 8 more hours a day (400 words)
- a scientist invited you to be in a secret experiment
- a non-sleeping pill
- now you didn't need to sleep and have more time
- but you couldn't tell anyone
- what would you do?
2. If you have 8 more hours a day (400 words)
- a scientist invited you to be in a secret experiment
- a non-sleeping pill
- now you didn't need to sleep and have more time
- but you couldn't tell anyone
- what would you do?
A World Without Adults - amended
Once upon a time, a child called John read a book called “Amazing Magic” It was about an island for children about 12 years old.
Children about 12 years old could go to the island. There were no adults and the children were happy. They didn’t need to go to school and they could go anywhere anytime. They didn’t need to ask the adults. On this island, there’s a child called Jacky. Jacky hated his parents very much. And he decided to escape from home and go to this island.
When he arrived on this island, he was very happy because his parents were not there. He played computer games everyday and didn’t go to school. He talked to other children, and they told him this island was their paradise. Jacky asked, “Are there any special skills I can learn on this island?” The children were angry and shouted to Jacky, “There isn’t anything we need to learn!”
Their hobby was playing games, and the children didn’t need to go to school anymore. These children disliked the adults and didn’t want to see them anymore.
One day, Jacky’s house was set on fire. He wanted to call his parents to help him. But he knew his parents will not appear. He called other children to help him. But these children were not tall enough to climb up the house. At that time, they all cried and missed their parents.
After this fire, they didn’t go back to the normal world. They also played computer games everyday and ate too much food. Gradually, they became very fat and unhealthy. There were no clinics on the island.
Jacky’s health was worse day by day. He had a fever one day, his parents were not there and no one could help him. At that time, he missed his parents very much. He wanted to go back to the normal world. Suddenly, Jacky had a headache. After five minutes, he saw his parents. His parent’s looked very worried. He kissed his parents, and he knew their importance. He asked his parents to go back to the island to talk to the other children. His parents told him he could go back home. He went back to the island and told the other children, “Parents are very important to us!”
When John finished the book, he understood that he needed to cherish his parents.
CONTENT: 4/5 GRAMMAR: 2/5 ==== 6/10
Children about 12 years old could go to the island. There were no adults and the children were happy. They didn’t need to go to school and they could go anywhere anytime. They didn’t need to ask the adults. On this island, there’s a child called Jacky. Jacky hated his parents very much. And he decided to escape from home and go to this island.
When he arrived on this island, he was very happy because his parents were not there. He played computer games everyday and didn’t go to school. He talked to other children, and they told him this island was their paradise. Jacky asked, “Are there any special skills I can learn on this island?” The children were angry and shouted to Jacky, “There isn’t anything we need to learn!”
Their hobby was playing games, and the children didn’t need to go to school anymore. These children disliked the adults and didn’t want to see them anymore.
One day, Jacky’s house was set on fire. He wanted to call his parents to help him. But he knew his parents will not appear. He called other children to help him. But these children were not tall enough to climb up the house. At that time, they all cried and missed their parents.
After this fire, they didn’t go back to the normal world. They also played computer games everyday and ate too much food. Gradually, they became very fat and unhealthy. There were no clinics on the island.
Jacky’s health was worse day by day. He had a fever one day, his parents were not there and no one could help him. At that time, he missed his parents very much. He wanted to go back to the normal world. Suddenly, Jacky had a headache. After five minutes, he saw his parents. His parent’s looked very worried. He kissed his parents, and he knew their importance. He asked his parents to go back to the island to talk to the other children. His parents told him he could go back home. He went back to the island and told the other children, “Parents are very important to us!”
When John finished the book, he understood that he needed to cherish his parents.
CONTENT: 4/5 GRAMMAR: 2/5 ==== 6/10
Majon Inland
Once upon a tome, there was a book, it name was called “Magic Amazing” A child called john, learn all the things from this book. There was an island for the children who were about 12 years old.
All the children about 12 years old, there had no any adult and the children will very happy here. They didn’t need to go to school and they could walk everywhere anytime. They don’t need to ask the adult. In this Island, there’s one child call Jacky. Jacky hates his parents very much. And he decided escape from his home and go to this Island.
Till he arrive this Island, he was very happy because his parents were not here. He played the computer games everyday and didn’t go to school. He talked to other children, the children said this Island is their paradise. Jacky said, “Is this Island has any special skills he could learn?” The children were angry after Jacky said this thing. They said to Jacky, “There will not have any thing they need to learn!” Their response is play games, couldn’t go to school anymore. And these children think adult are the disagreeable people and they didn’t want to see them anymore.
One day, Jacky’s house was fired. He wanted to call his parents to help him. But he knew his parents will not appear here. He called other children to help him. But these children are too short, not enough to climb up the house. At that time, they all cry, they miss their parents. After this fire, they didn’t go back to normal world. They also played computer game everyday and eat many things. Gradually, they became very fat and not healthy. In “Magic Amazing”, there have no clinic.
Jacky’s health was bad day by day. And one day he had a fever, no parents here and no one can help him. At that time, he missed his parents very much. He wanted to go back normal world.
Suddenly, Jacky had a headache. After five minutes, he saw his parents. His parent’s looked like very worry. He kissed his parents, he knew the importance of parents. And he requested his parents to go back Magic Amazing to talk to other children. His parents answer him he could go back for a moment. He went back Magic Amazing and said, “Parents are very important for us!”
When John finishes the book, he understands he needs to cherish his parents.
All the children about 12 years old, there had no any adult and the children will very happy here. They didn’t need to go to school and they could walk everywhere anytime. They don’t need to ask the adult. In this Island, there’s one child call Jacky. Jacky hates his parents very much. And he decided escape from his home and go to this Island.
Till he arrive this Island, he was very happy because his parents were not here. He played the computer games everyday and didn’t go to school. He talked to other children, the children said this Island is their paradise. Jacky said, “Is this Island has any special skills he could learn?” The children were angry after Jacky said this thing. They said to Jacky, “There will not have any thing they need to learn!” Their response is play games, couldn’t go to school anymore. And these children think adult are the disagreeable people and they didn’t want to see them anymore.
One day, Jacky’s house was fired. He wanted to call his parents to help him. But he knew his parents will not appear here. He called other children to help him. But these children are too short, not enough to climb up the house. At that time, they all cry, they miss their parents. After this fire, they didn’t go back to normal world. They also played computer game everyday and eat many things. Gradually, they became very fat and not healthy. In “Magic Amazing”, there have no clinic.
Jacky’s health was bad day by day. And one day he had a fever, no parents here and no one can help him. At that time, he missed his parents very much. He wanted to go back normal world.
Suddenly, Jacky had a headache. After five minutes, he saw his parents. His parent’s looked like very worry. He kissed his parents, he knew the importance of parents. And he requested his parents to go back Magic Amazing to talk to other children. His parents answer him he could go back for a moment. He went back Magic Amazing and said, “Parents are very important for us!”
When John finishes the book, he understands he needs to cherish his parents.
20090803
A world without adults
If there were no more adults on Earth, what would happen? (450 words)
Think about:
Think about:
- schools
- hospitals
- shops
- government
- cinema
- food -- food shortage
- traffic -- traffic jam
- work
- money
- computers
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pay attention to your common mistakes:
- don't mix up 'a' and 'I'!
- pay attention to the tenses!
- don't forget the 'a' or 'the' before the nouns!
- use pronouns (he, she, it, etc), don't use the names too often!
- don't write the time at the beginning of the sentence (e.g. today, I went to school.)!
The Frog Prince - amended
There was a frog living in a pond near the palace. In the palace, there were a baby boy and a baby girl. The baby prince was called Jacky and the baby princess was called Jenny. When Jacky was young, a witch took him away. Then, one person disappeared from the palace every year.
Jenny got a small golden ball on her 18th birthday. The king held a party for her. She was happy and played the ball near the pond. Suddenly, the ball fell into the pond. She was very unhappy. When she was very worried, a frog jumped near her. Jenny asked the frog, “My birthday gift has fallen into the pond, can you help me?” The frog answered, “If you take me to the palace and kiss me, I would help you!” Jenny didn’t think and replied, “Okay!”
The frog gave the ball back to Jenny, and she ran to the palace quickly. The frog knocked on the door when she was having dinner. She was very amazed. It had dinner with her. After dinner, the frog took a bath and said, “Can you kiss me?” She was very angry, but she has promised the frog. When she kissed it, the frog became a prince. Jenny was very amazed and shouted, “Oh no!” The king heard Jenny and ran into her room. He was amazed and said, “Jacky has come back!”
Jacky and Jenny married the next day. The king asked Jacky, “Why did you become a frog?” Jacky answered, “When I was six years old, I played with Jenny near the pond. Suddenly, a witch called Candy took me to a house. It was very old. She said, “Your father killed my brother, so I need you to take this poison!” Luckily, she took a wrong bottle to me so I didn’t die. But I’ve become a frog. She thought I was dead. When she left the house, I found all the information about the poison. If I wanted to become a prince again I needed to kiss a girl. When I left the house, I saw the witch catch a soldier every year and kill them quickly.”
The king ordered some soldiers to kill the witch. When the soldier, the king and Jacky went to the house, there was a dragon there. It was because the witch took an amazing medicine. Jacky used an arrow to shoot and kill the dragon.
Finally, Jacky and Jenny lived happily together. And there was no need to worry about anything.
Jenny got a small golden ball on her 18th birthday. The king held a party for her. She was happy and played the ball near the pond. Suddenly, the ball fell into the pond. She was very unhappy. When she was very worried, a frog jumped near her. Jenny asked the frog, “My birthday gift has fallen into the pond, can you help me?” The frog answered, “If you take me to the palace and kiss me, I would help you!” Jenny didn’t think and replied, “Okay!”
The frog gave the ball back to Jenny, and she ran to the palace quickly. The frog knocked on the door when she was having dinner. She was very amazed. It had dinner with her. After dinner, the frog took a bath and said, “Can you kiss me?” She was very angry, but she has promised the frog. When she kissed it, the frog became a prince. Jenny was very amazed and shouted, “Oh no!” The king heard Jenny and ran into her room. He was amazed and said, “Jacky has come back!”
Jacky and Jenny married the next day. The king asked Jacky, “Why did you become a frog?” Jacky answered, “When I was six years old, I played with Jenny near the pond. Suddenly, a witch called Candy took me to a house. It was very old. She said, “Your father killed my brother, so I need you to take this poison!” Luckily, she took a wrong bottle to me so I didn’t die. But I’ve become a frog. She thought I was dead. When she left the house, I found all the information about the poison. If I wanted to become a prince again I needed to kiss a girl. When I left the house, I saw the witch catch a soldier every year and kill them quickly.”
The king ordered some soldiers to kill the witch. When the soldier, the king and Jacky went to the house, there was a dragon there. It was because the witch took an amazing medicine. Jacky used an arrow to shoot and kill the dragon.
Finally, Jacky and Jenny lived happily together. And there was no need to worry about anything.
20090802
Frog and Princess
There was a frog lived in a stream near the palace. In the palace, there were baby boy and baby girl. The baby prince called Jacky and the baby princess called Jenny. When prince was young, a Witch caught the prince away. Then, every year, there was a one person disappears.
Jenny had a small gold ball, when she was 18 years birthday. King held a party for princess. Princess was happy and she played the small gold ball near the stream. Suddenly, the small gold ball fall down in to the steam. She was very unhappy. When she was very worry, a frog jumped near Jenny. Jenny asked to frog, “My birthday gift fall down in to the stream?” Frog answered, “If you brought me to the palace and kiss me, I would help you!” Jenny didn’t things and said, “Ok!”
After frog gave the gold ball to Jenny, she ran to the palace quickly. The frog knocked the door when the princess had the dinner. Princess was very amazed. The frog ate the dinner with princess. After dinner, the frog took a bath, the frog said, “You kiss me ok?” Princess was very angry, but she promise frog. When she kissed the frog, the frog became a prince. Princess was very amazed and shouted, “Oh-No!” King listened Jenny was shouting and she ran into Jenny’s room. King was amazed and said, “Jacky is come back!”
Then, Jacky and Jenny married next day. Kind asked Jacky, “Why did you become a frog?” Jacky answered, “When I was six years old, I play with Jenny near the stream. Suddenly, a witch called Candy. She caught me to a house. It was very old. She said, “Your father kill my brother, so a needed you to ate this poison” Luckily, she talk a wrong medicines to me so I became a frog. So she thought me died. When she left the house, I found all the data about the medicines. If I want to became a prince again a needed to kiss a girl! When I left out the house, I saw the witch caught a soldier every years and she kill them quickly.”
King learned all the things and called the soldier to kill the witch. When the soldier, Kind and prince saw the house, there was a dragon there. It was because the witch ate the amazing medicines. Prince used the shoot an arrow to kill the dragon.
Finally the lived happy. And no need to worry anythings.
Jenny had a small gold ball, when she was 18 years birthday. King held a party for princess. Princess was happy and she played the small gold ball near the stream. Suddenly, the small gold ball fall down in to the steam. She was very unhappy. When she was very worry, a frog jumped near Jenny. Jenny asked to frog, “My birthday gift fall down in to the stream?” Frog answered, “If you brought me to the palace and kiss me, I would help you!” Jenny didn’t things and said, “Ok!”
After frog gave the gold ball to Jenny, she ran to the palace quickly. The frog knocked the door when the princess had the dinner. Princess was very amazed. The frog ate the dinner with princess. After dinner, the frog took a bath, the frog said, “You kiss me ok?” Princess was very angry, but she promise frog. When she kissed the frog, the frog became a prince. Princess was very amazed and shouted, “Oh-No!” King listened Jenny was shouting and she ran into Jenny’s room. King was amazed and said, “Jacky is come back!”
Then, Jacky and Jenny married next day. Kind asked Jacky, “Why did you become a frog?” Jacky answered, “When I was six years old, I play with Jenny near the stream. Suddenly, a witch called Candy. She caught me to a house. It was very old. She said, “Your father kill my brother, so a needed you to ate this poison” Luckily, she talk a wrong medicines to me so I became a frog. So she thought me died. When she left the house, I found all the data about the medicines. If I want to became a prince again a needed to kiss a girl! When I left out the house, I saw the witch caught a soldier every years and she kill them quickly.”
King learned all the things and called the soldier to kill the witch. When the soldier, Kind and prince saw the house, there was a dragon there. It was because the witch ate the amazing medicines. Prince used the shoot an arrow to kill the dragon.
Finally the lived happy. And no need to worry anythings.
20090726
What happens after "happily every after"?
Find a fairy tale that ends with "and they lived happily ever after". Write a story telling us what happens afterwards.
- king
- assassinate
- fail
Marco's Dream - amended
When I watched a TV news report about a boy disappearing from a ship called Curious Boy, I saw a ray of light in my room. It came from the window and looked like an arrow. I was curious. So, I ran after the ray of light. It was very bright, I couldn’t see anything. Then, I fell asleep.When I got up, I saw a map on the ground. When I picked it up, my room became a bus. I saw that there were many aliens on the bus, and they looked like animals. When I get off the bus, the aliens were looking at me. They said angrily, “Everyone kill him!” I was very scared and keep running. When I was running, I met my friend, Tony. He shouted, “Run after me!” I saw a boy in the middle of the sun.Suddenly, I heard my alarm clock ringing. I find that it was a dream. Then I got up and prepared for school. When I looked out of the window, I saw the boy in the middle of the sun. It looked like my dream. When I wanted to tell my mum, the boy disappeared. I was very curious about it.So I told everything to my friends after school. Tony said, “I saw the boy too!” Jenny said, “When I was reading my comic books, the comics suddenly changed into a newspaper. There was report about a boy disappearing from the ship. They ship was called Curious Boy!” Tommy shouted, “I had this dream too!” I said, “Me too!”Jacky said, “We went to the Central Library. If we went to the top floor, we will find some data!” But the reference resources library did not welcome anyone under 12. So, only Tommy and I could go inside.
We went into the newspaper library. Tommy asked, “How can we find it?” I said, “The TV news report was on 21st May,1997, because I saw the day on the dream.”We asked the librarian, “Where is the newspaper on 21st may, 1997?” The librarian answered, “It was there!” I found the newspaper and read it. When I looked at the picture about the ship, I knew all the secrets. The ship was called Curious Boy! They boy was called Marco. There were many sharks on the ship. The captain and a sailor used the guns to kill Marco.We told everything to the police, and the captain and the sailor went to jail. When I went back home, I heard Marco said, “Thank you!”
We went into the newspaper library. Tommy asked, “How can we find it?” I said, “The TV news report was on 21st May,1997, because I saw the day on the dream.”We asked the librarian, “Where is the newspaper on 21st may, 1997?” The librarian answered, “It was there!” I found the newspaper and read it. When I looked at the picture about the ship, I knew all the secrets. The ship was called Curious Boy! They boy was called Marco. There were many sharks on the ship. The captain and a sailor used the guns to kill Marco.We told everything to the police, and the captain and the sailor went to jail. When I went back home, I heard Marco said, “Thank you!”
Marco's dream
Today, when I watched the TV news report about a boy disappeared on the ship. The ship called curious boy, I saw a ray of light in my room, it came form the window and looked like an arrow. I was curious. So, I ran after the ray of light. It was very bright, I couldn’t see anything. Then, I got a sleep.
When I got up, I saw a map on the land. When I took it up, my room became a bus. I saw a bus have many look like a pet, but it was not a pet. When I left out the bus, another pet only saw me. They said angry, “ Everyone we killer him!” I was very scared and ran and ran. When I ran to the bright, I saw a boy there. It was …
Suddenly, I listened my clock was ring out. Then I got up and preparation to go to school. When I watched the window, I saw the sun amidst had a boy. It looked like my dream. When I wanted to tel1 my mum, the boy disappeared. It was very curious it.
So, after school, I told all the things to my friends, Tommy, Jacky, Jenny and Alan. Tony said, “I saw the boy too!” Jenny said, “When I watched the comic, I saw a report. It was about a boy disappeared in the ship. They ship was called curious boy!” Tommy shouted, “I have this dream!” I said, “Me too!”
Jacky said, “We went to the Hong Kong Public Libraries. If we went to the top flow, we will find some data!” Then, we went to the Hong Kong Public Libraries. The reference resources libraries needed the persons enough 12years. So, only I and Tommy could came in the libraries. When we went to the newspaper libraries. Tommy said,“How can we find it?” I said, “The TV news report was at 21st May,1997, because I saw the TV news had this day.
We asked the libraries’s worker, “Where did the news about 21st may, 1997?” The libraries’s worker answer, “It was put it there!” I find the news and read it. The newspapers. Suddenly we went to they ship. The ship was called CURIOUS BOY! They boy was called Marco. They ship had many shark. The skipper and another sailor used the guns to kill Marco.
Suddenly, we went back the libraries. We said all the things to the policeman and the shipper and sailor went to the jail. When I went back home, I listened Marco said, “Thank you!”
When I got up, I saw a map on the land. When I took it up, my room became a bus. I saw a bus have many look like a pet, but it was not a pet. When I left out the bus, another pet only saw me. They said angry, “ Everyone we killer him!” I was very scared and ran and ran. When I ran to the bright, I saw a boy there. It was …
Suddenly, I listened my clock was ring out. Then I got up and preparation to go to school. When I watched the window, I saw the sun amidst had a boy. It looked like my dream. When I wanted to tel1 my mum, the boy disappeared. It was very curious it.
So, after school, I told all the things to my friends, Tommy, Jacky, Jenny and Alan. Tony said, “I saw the boy too!” Jenny said, “When I watched the comic, I saw a report. It was about a boy disappeared in the ship. They ship was called curious boy!” Tommy shouted, “I have this dream!” I said, “Me too!”
Jacky said, “We went to the Hong Kong Public Libraries. If we went to the top flow, we will find some data!” Then, we went to the Hong Kong Public Libraries. The reference resources libraries needed the persons enough 12years. So, only I and Tommy could came in the libraries. When we went to the newspaper libraries. Tommy said,“How can we find it?” I said, “The TV news report was at 21st May,1997, because I saw the TV news had this day.
We asked the libraries’s worker, “Where did the news about 21st may, 1997?” The libraries’s worker answer, “It was put it there!” I find the news and read it. The newspapers. Suddenly we went to they ship. The ship was called CURIOUS BOY! They boy was called Marco. They ship had many shark. The skipper and another sailor used the guns to kill Marco.
Suddenly, we went back the libraries. We said all the things to the policeman and the shipper and sailor went to the jail. When I went back home, I listened Marco said, “Thank you!”
20090712
Life of a Football - amended
Hi, my name is Kiki. I am a football. I always run in the football field during the sunny days. I live in a storeroom for about one month. My best friend Horry, a cup, said yesterday morning, “I am very cold!” I asked, “Why?” He said, “I was put in the refrigerator, so that my owner could drink fruit juice coldly from my body! I feel very cold now!” Kenny was a red handkerchief. He said proudly to Horry,“I am the best on Earth! I can help you dry up, but you need to give me some money!” Horry was angry, and they disliked each other. Baby was a beautiful green handkerchief. She was very generous, she helped Horry to dry up.
In the afternoon, everyone needed to work except me and other sports equipments. It was sunny and hot today, and I needed to exercise. I went to the football field with my owner happily. I thought I could make many friends. I made a good friend today. He was a red and write football. He was called John. His owner was my owner’s friend. After the football match, some football players were angry, some were crying, some were happy. My owner had won the match, so he was happier than before.
When I came back home with my owner, everyone wanted to know who won the match,. After my owner gave me a bath, I dried myself. I went to the storeroom and told everything to my best friends. I had become a football commentator. They felt excited and entertained. Finally, I said, “Our owner used his feet to kick me to the gantry. Although I was very tried, I was happy. Our owner has won the match and at the end, it was a 1:0!”
Everyone had slept, but Horry did not sleep. He said, “My owner said I was very old and want to throw me away.” I said, “You don’t need to worry, our owner does not have too much money, if things could be used, he will not throw them away.”
Ten years later, I was very old and could not run with my owner, so he put me into the storeroom and I could not play with him anymore. But I could remember the happy times. I needed to sleep for a long time.
In the afternoon, everyone needed to work except me and other sports equipments. It was sunny and hot today, and I needed to exercise. I went to the football field with my owner happily. I thought I could make many friends. I made a good friend today. He was a red and write football. He was called John. His owner was my owner’s friend. After the football match, some football players were angry, some were crying, some were happy. My owner had won the match, so he was happier than before.
When I came back home with my owner, everyone wanted to know who won the match,. After my owner gave me a bath, I dried myself. I went to the storeroom and told everything to my best friends. I had become a football commentator. They felt excited and entertained. Finally, I said, “Our owner used his feet to kick me to the gantry. Although I was very tried, I was happy. Our owner has won the match and at the end, it was a 1:0!”
Everyone had slept, but Horry did not sleep. He said, “My owner said I was very old and want to throw me away.” I said, “You don’t need to worry, our owner does not have too much money, if things could be used, he will not throw them away.”
Ten years later, I was very old and could not run with my owner, so he put me into the storeroom and I could not play with him anymore. But I could remember the happy times. I needed to sleep for a long time.
Football live
Hi, my name is Kiki. I am a football. I always run in the football field in the sunny day. Yesterday day morning, my best friend Horry, he was a cup. He said, “I am very cold!” I asked, “Why?” He said, “I gave put in the refrigerator, so owner could drink the fruit juice coldly into my body! Now, I feel very cold!” Kenny was a red handkerchief. He said proudly,“I am the best things on the world! I can help you to clear the water, but you need to give me some money!” Horry was angry, so they disliked each other. Baby was a beautiful green handkerchief. She was very generous, she helped cup to clear up his water.
Afternoon was come, everyone needed to work among me and some things which was about sport. Today was sunny and hot, I needed to have a sport. I went to the football field with my owner happily. I could have many friends. Today, I made a good friends, he was a red and write football. He called John. His owner was my owner friends. I could listen someone was angry, someone cry, someone was happy. Today, my owner wins the football match, so he was happy more than before.
When I came back home with my owner, very one wanted to know the match, who win. After my owner gave me a bath, I gave clear my water on my body. I went to the bedroom and told all the things to my best friends. Now I became a football speak aside. I said sincerity, they felt excited and did not felt bored. Finally I said, “Owner used his lag to play me to the gantry. Although I was very tried, but I was happy. So owner won the football match and the end, it became 1:0!”
Everyone was sleep, but Horry (cup) did not sleep. He said, “My owner said a was old and want to throw me away.” I said, “You no need to worry, our owner was not have to much money, if the things could use, he will not throw it.”
Ten years, I was very old and I could not run with owner, so owner put me to the storeroom and I could not play with owner, but I could remember. I needed to sleep to a long time.
20090705
Alex Was Famous - amended by Phyllis
BBQ newspaper 7th June, 2009 Sunday
A child called Law Chun Yin (Alex) solved a criminal case in Brazil. Alex was only twelve years old, but he had learnt a lot after this. This story is about a case of Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance. Alex was so famous around the world. This story became a story book and a movie. He could be a leading role in the movie with a famous movie star called Jacky. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~!
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This was very amazing, I was very happy, too. It was because I could be a famous child in the film industry. And when I went to school by bus, many people said I was very clever and wanted to have my autograph. I was very happy. When I went to school, too many reporters took many photos of me. My principal Mr. Lee called me to his offices and said I would get a“Clever Child”award on Monday. When I went into my classroom, my best friend Johnny asked, “How much money did you get to be the leading role of the movie?’ I answered, “I got $193,000” Other children said I should buy them books, food, game points, cars, NDS, PSP, and many other things. I thought, “Fame is not a good thing!”
After school, some children in another class who did not like me sat by me on the bus and said, “Alex , you are my best friend, can you buy a game card for me?” I was very angry and thought, “He has a lot of money in his wallet. When I was not famous, he always said I was stupid and told me not to play online games.”
I never said anything and they only sat in another bench. When I went back home, some reporters took some photos of me. I was very annoyed. Then I ran back home.
I ate a lot for dinner. My mummy and my daddy did not need to work. But we could eat a lot of good food. When I was eating, my mother shouted, “Quick, get up! No time for you to waste!” I woke up and thought that everything was a dream. And I later read the newspaper about the Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance, I thought, “Oh, it was true…”
A child called Law Chun Yin (Alex) solved a criminal case in Brazil. Alex was only twelve years old, but he had learnt a lot after this. This story is about a case of Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance. Alex was so famous around the world. This story became a story book and a movie. He could be a leading role in the movie with a famous movie star called Jacky. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~!
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This was very amazing, I was very happy, too. It was because I could be a famous child in the film industry. And when I went to school by bus, many people said I was very clever and wanted to have my autograph. I was very happy. When I went to school, too many reporters took many photos of me. My principal Mr. Lee called me to his offices and said I would get a“Clever Child”award on Monday. When I went into my classroom, my best friend Johnny asked, “How much money did you get to be the leading role of the movie?’ I answered, “I got $193,000” Other children said I should buy them books, food, game points, cars, NDS, PSP, and many other things. I thought, “Fame is not a good thing!”
After school, some children in another class who did not like me sat by me on the bus and said, “Alex , you are my best friend, can you buy a game card for me?” I was very angry and thought, “He has a lot of money in his wallet. When I was not famous, he always said I was stupid and told me not to play online games.”
I never said anything and they only sat in another bench. When I went back home, some reporters took some photos of me. I was very annoyed. Then I ran back home.
I ate a lot for dinner. My mummy and my daddy did not need to work. But we could eat a lot of good food. When I was eating, my mother shouted, “Quick, get up! No time for you to waste!” I woke up and thought that everything was a dream. And I later read the newspaper about the Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance, I thought, “Oh, it was true…”
Alex Was Famous
BBQ newspaper
A child called Law Chun Yin (Alex) clear up a criminal case in
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This was very amazing, I was very happy too. It was because I could be a famous child in the filmdom. And when I went to school by bus, many people said I was very clever and wanted to have my signature. I was very happy. When I went to school, to many reporter take many photo of me. My principle Mr. Lee called me to principle room and said you with got a “The clever child”aware in Monday (Day C). When I went to my classroom, my friends- Johnny question, “How many money did you have when you be the leading role in the movie?’ I said, “I could got $
I never said anything and the only sat in another chair. When I went back home, I needed to walk on the less than honorable or just path. Some reporter take some photo of me too. A was very impatient. After I walk on the less than honorable or just path, I went back home.
At home, I ate the dinner of many food. My mummy and my daddy no need to work. But we could ate many good food. When I ate it …
My mother said, “Quick get up! Not time could you butter one's bread on both sides.” I know it was a drum. And I watch the newspaper about Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance, Law Chun Yin I think, “Oh- it was…”
20090628
The Mystery of Amazon - amended by Phyllis
Today, I went to my father’s friend’s house with my father. It was in Brazil and we planned to watch a football match. Football was my favorite sport. I thought it was the most exiting match, because Brazil was good at playing football. We went there by aeroplane. We could see the Amazon Rainforest.
When we went to the plane, a boy yelled, “This airplane has make too many people die, do you want to drive it?” I was very scared. The plane got off, and I saw the boy looked like very frightened too.
After a few hours, we went to the Amazon Rainforest, the boy cried, “We will die on this airplane!” The flight attendant said, “He always goes to Brazil and Hong Kong by this airplane, but everyone on the plane has disappeared, except he and the people who worked on this airplane!” Suddenly, the airplane flew down quickly, the boy said, “The demon is killing us!” Everyone was afraid and did not know what they could do. The pilot shouted, “We will land on the Amazon Rainforest! All passengers should get off the plane!”
The other passengers did not take anything, but I took all my belongings. After a few minutes, the airplane disappeared. Only a flight attendant got off the airplane. She said, “When I went to get some water, I saw that the airplane caught a fire. It was a very old plane, and it was not the one we was on.
I looked around and found that the passengers had already left. I could only find one exit. I said to myself, ‘Oh no, I should use the boat or ship to get out!” When I sat under a tree, I heard someone singing. When I went near that person, I saw a house and twelve people, some were Hong Kong people and some were Brazilians. I asked them, “I am a victim. Why are you here?” A child said, “I am a victim too! My family’s things got lost on the airplane, so we went out of the plane. Then the airplane caught a fire.”
I knew what happened. I made a boat and went to Brazil. I told them everything about the airplane: first, the pilots deliberately landed the plane quickly. Then, when we got off the plane, the airhostess deliberately took us to the older plane. After that, the pilots went back to Brazil and said that the airplane disappeared, when the airplane was in fact in the Amazon Rainforest. We could not see it because there was an airport. The evidence was that the river was not on the map.
At the end, the criminals were arrested and I watched the football match with father happily.
When we went to the plane, a boy yelled, “This airplane has make too many people die, do you want to drive it?” I was very scared. The plane got off, and I saw the boy looked like very frightened too.
After a few hours, we went to the Amazon Rainforest, the boy cried, “We will die on this airplane!” The flight attendant said, “He always goes to Brazil and Hong Kong by this airplane, but everyone on the plane has disappeared, except he and the people who worked on this airplane!” Suddenly, the airplane flew down quickly, the boy said, “The demon is killing us!” Everyone was afraid and did not know what they could do. The pilot shouted, “We will land on the Amazon Rainforest! All passengers should get off the plane!”
The other passengers did not take anything, but I took all my belongings. After a few minutes, the airplane disappeared. Only a flight attendant got off the airplane. She said, “When I went to get some water, I saw that the airplane caught a fire. It was a very old plane, and it was not the one we was on.
I looked around and found that the passengers had already left. I could only find one exit. I said to myself, ‘Oh no, I should use the boat or ship to get out!” When I sat under a tree, I heard someone singing. When I went near that person, I saw a house and twelve people, some were Hong Kong people and some were Brazilians. I asked them, “I am a victim. Why are you here?” A child said, “I am a victim too! My family’s things got lost on the airplane, so we went out of the plane. Then the airplane caught a fire.”
I knew what happened. I made a boat and went to Brazil. I told them everything about the airplane: first, the pilots deliberately landed the plane quickly. Then, when we got off the plane, the airhostess deliberately took us to the older plane. After that, the pilots went back to Brazil and said that the airplane disappeared, when the airplane was in fact in the Amazon Rainforest. We could not see it because there was an airport. The evidence was that the river was not on the map.
At the end, the criminals were arrested and I watched the football match with father happily.
Happy Father's Day - amended by Phyllis
22ndJune, 2009 Monday rainy and cold
Yesterday is Father’s Day. For Mother’s Day we ate European cuisine. Yesterday we had Japanese food.
I went to the swimming pool to swim yesterday morning with my father. We swam there happily. After we swam, we played underwater.
Afterwards, we went to a Chinese restaurant and ate some dim sum. We ate it happily because it was Father’s Day.
Then, we went back home. When it was two o’clock, I went to Jusco with my sister and Phyllis to buy some materials for cooking. We bought some seaweeds, soy sauce, rice, noodles, wasabi, corn, vegetables, ice-cream, strawberries and sweets.
After we bought the food, we went to grandmother’s house. I worked with my sister and Phyllis although I did not do too much.
We had to make sushi. First, we needed to cook rice. We used seaweed to wrap the rice. After that, we put the corn in the middle. Finally, we ate it with some wasabi.
We also made Japanese noodles. We needed to use water to cook the noodles. Then, we put it in the bowl. We put a bowl of noodles into the refrigerator. Finally, we took it out and put some seaweeds on top before we ate it.
We made parfait for dessert. We put some cornflakes in the bottom of a glass. We put some marshmallows and red bean ice-cream on top of the cornflakes. Finally, we put four pieces of strawberries on top.
Dinner time had come, we had the Japanese noodles first. Phyllis took some photos for us. Sister ate the noodles happily in the first photo. My aunt gave two kimonos to my sister and Phyllis. They looked like Japanese girls. If I did not know the photo was taken in Hong Kong, I would think it was taken in Japan.
My father and I were very happy at the dinner. After the dinner, we listened to the music and drank Japanese tea. We read a book together, too. We then ate parfait happily. It was cold and sweet.
Finally, we had some fruits and went back come. Before I slept, I thought this Father’s Day was a happy one. When I grow up, I will be a father! Then, I fell asleep… Good night!
Yesterday is Father’s Day. For Mother’s Day we ate European cuisine. Yesterday we had Japanese food.
I went to the swimming pool to swim yesterday morning with my father. We swam there happily. After we swam, we played underwater.
Afterwards, we went to a Chinese restaurant and ate some dim sum. We ate it happily because it was Father’s Day.
Then, we went back home. When it was two o’clock, I went to Jusco with my sister and Phyllis to buy some materials for cooking. We bought some seaweeds, soy sauce, rice, noodles, wasabi, corn, vegetables, ice-cream, strawberries and sweets.
After we bought the food, we went to grandmother’s house. I worked with my sister and Phyllis although I did not do too much.
We had to make sushi. First, we needed to cook rice. We used seaweed to wrap the rice. After that, we put the corn in the middle. Finally, we ate it with some wasabi.
We also made Japanese noodles. We needed to use water to cook the noodles. Then, we put it in the bowl. We put a bowl of noodles into the refrigerator. Finally, we took it out and put some seaweeds on top before we ate it.
We made parfait for dessert. We put some cornflakes in the bottom of a glass. We put some marshmallows and red bean ice-cream on top of the cornflakes. Finally, we put four pieces of strawberries on top.
Dinner time had come, we had the Japanese noodles first. Phyllis took some photos for us. Sister ate the noodles happily in the first photo. My aunt gave two kimonos to my sister and Phyllis. They looked like Japanese girls. If I did not know the photo was taken in Hong Kong, I would think it was taken in Japan.
My father and I were very happy at the dinner. After the dinner, we listened to the music and drank Japanese tea. We read a book together, too. We then ate parfait happily. It was cold and sweet.
Finally, we had some fruits and went back come. Before I slept, I thought this Father’s Day was a happy one. When I grow up, I will be a father! Then, I fell asleep… Good night!
Happy Father's Day
22ndJune, 2009 Monday ring and cold
Yesterday is father’s day. Mother’s day we ate a European cuisine. Yesterday, we ate the Japanese food.
Yesterday, morning I went to swimming pool and swim with my father. We swam there happily. After we swam, we play under the water.
After we swam in the swimming pool, we went to Chinese restaurant and ate some pastry and we ate it happily because it was father’s day.
Then, we went back home. When it was two o’clock was come, I went to Jusco with sister and Phyllis bought some materials which we needed to eat. We bought some seaweed, some soy source, some rice, noodles, wasabi, corn, vegetable, a box of ice-cream and some sweet.
After we bought the food’s seaweed, we went to grandmother’s house. And I worked with them although I did not do to many things.
Make sushi
First, we needed to cook rice. Then, we needed to use the seaweed to make with the rice. After that, we should use the corn to put it in the amidst. Finally, we could ate it with some mustard.
Make Japanese noodles
First, we needed to use the water to cook the noodles. Then, we put it in the blow. After that, we needed to put a blow of noodles in to the refrigerator. Finally, we put it out and put some seaweed, then, we could eat it.
Make Japanese ice-cream
First, we needed to put some cornflakes in the lowly of a cup. Then, we needed to put some sweet top of the cornflakes. After that, we needed to put some ice-cream. Finally, we needed to put four banana on the top.
Dinner time was come, we ate the Japanese noodles first. Phyllis took some photo for us. Sister was eating the noodles happily. On the first photo. My grandmother gave a coat of
In the dinner, my father was very happy and me too.
After the dinner, we drank the Japanese diners—tea. We listen to the music and drank the tea. We read the book together too. Eat Japanese’s ice-cream time was come, we ate the ice-cream happily, it was cold and sweet.
Finally, we ate the fruit and we went back come. When I sleep, I thought the father’s day was a happy day. When I grow up, I will be a father! Then, I sleep.......... Good night!
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