The Repayment of the Chicken - amended

Once upon a time there was a chicken living near a farm. There were five children living in the farm too. The children were called Sam, Tom, Alex, Jenny and Ben. Alex was poor and needed to work everyday. He couldn’t go to school. The other children were having a lot of money and always hit Alex.

One day, when Alex went back home, he saw the other children wanting to kill the chicken. Alex shouted, “You can’t kill it, it is a life!” Then, the other children hit Alex and he got hurt. He was very happy, because the chicken did not need to die.

When he went back home, he saw that there were eight more hours on his watch. He didn’t know what happened, and slept. He usually slept for eight hours every night. When he got up, his watch said 4:00 a.m. He was very amazed. And he got up and read an English book. He was very interested in architecture. He went to work after two hours, and saw through the window that the other children had hurt themselves. When their parents arrived, the children cried, “Alex hit us!”

Alex was very angry. His father hit him, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. It looked very hungry, and he gave it some bread. Although the bread was not very delicious, the chicken enjoyed it. The bread tasted like expensive cake to Alex too. When he went to work, the chicken shouted, “You have eight more hours because of my magic. You can read your book!”

Alex was very amazed. The chicken was actually a fairy! He could go to school now because he had more time. When he went to school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor! He can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any knowledge!” The teacher gave Alex an admission test. When Alex had finished, the other children were very shocked, because he had gotten full marks.

Alex could go to school everyday. His classmates asked him everything. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken to school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken with him everyday. They lived happily everyday and Alex became an architect.

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Content: 3.5/5 Grammar: 3.5/5

Amazing Chicken

Once upon a time there was a chicken, lived near the farm. There were five children lived the farm too. The children were called Sam, Tom, Alex, Jenny and Ben. Alex was a poor and needed to worked everyday. He couldn’t go to school and couldn’t learn anything. Other children were having much money and always hut Alex.

One day, when Alex went back home, he saw other children wanted to killed the chicken, Alex said, “You can’t kill it, it was a life!” Then, other children hit Alex and he hurt himself. He was very happy, because the chicken no needed to die.

When he went back home, he saw the watch had more then eight hour. He didn’t know what happen, and slept. He slept eight hour everyday. When he got up, he the watch was 4:00 a.m. He was very amazed. And he got up and read the English book. He was very interested in building. He went to work after two hour, he saw other children had hurt themselves. When there father and mother went back, the children said, “Alex hit me very much, I am very unhappy!”

I was very angry, but his father hit Alex, he cried and ran away. When Alex ran near the river, he saw the chicken there. The chicken looked like very hungry, he gave the chicken some bread. Although was very not yummy, but the chicken was eat it looked like very yummy. When Alex ate the bread, it was look like the expensive cake. When he wanted to went to work, the chicken shout, “You had more than eight hour, you could read your book!”

Alex was very amazed, because the chicken was a good chicken. He could go to school everyday. When he went to the school, he saw Ben. Ben shouted cunningly, “Alex is poor, he can’t go to our school, and he doesn’t have any science!” So the teacher made a quiet to Alex. When Alex done his quiet, other children and Ben was very amazed, because he got the full marks.

Alex could go to the school everyday. All the children always found him and quieted it all the things. Alex was very happy and brought the chicken into the school. When he grew up, he became a famous man and he brought the chicken everyday. Then, they live happily every day and Alex done his building.

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My Sporty Summer Holidays - amended

Tuesday 21st June, 2009I am back to Hong Kong today. I was very happy! When I was back to Hong Kong, it felt unfamiliar to me. I went to Shanghai with Mum, Dad, my sister, aunt and grandmother five day ago .I watched the videos shot in Shanghai when I went back home. I watched those shot on the first day of the trip. I remember we arrived at Yanghou Port about four hours after we left the airport.

We went to my uncle’s office and dormitory. The dinner was very delicious. When we arrived, it was evening. We played badminton after we had a big meal. After playing badminton, we visited his office and saw some antiques.We went to play golf next day. We had lunch before we played golf. I had tempura set lunch. I liked it very much. After we had lunch, a young boy told me how to play golf. I was very interested in it and played it again and again. This day was my uncle’s birthday. We played table tennis after dinner.

We caught clams in Huanghai. If you join, you could get a cap. We were very amazed when we caught them. There were many clams. We needed to go there by a tractor. When we started to go there, there was a lot of water there. But after an hour, the tide went down. The tractor owner told us how to find the clams. He found the clams quickly and said it was not hard to find. We took some photos and videos there happily. We caught eight kilograms of clams. There was enough to eat for four meals. We went to the Sun Island and saw some engineering.

We played tennis the next morning. We played tennis happily. It was not easy. I learned it on two days. Then, we had breakfast. We went to play golf again after breakfast. First, I could only hit it to 50m. Finally, I hit it to over 100m. I was very happy, because my uncle said, “If you can’t hit it to over 50m, you can’t have lunch!”

At night, we went to my uncle’s home.We played tennis on the last day. My father took many photos for me and grandmother. Grandmother was very good at sports. She learned it quickly! Then we went back to Hong Kong.

I want to play golf again now. Oh, it is very late, I need to go to bed!



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Ｍｙ Ｔｒｉｐ！

Tuesday 21st June, 2009

I had went back Hong Kong today. I was very happy! When we I went back Hong Kong, it was very strange of Hong Kong., I went to Shanghai with mother, father, sister, aunt and grandmother before five day.

I watched the movie which was shooting in Shanghai when I went back house. I watched the first day of the trip. I remembered we went to Yanghou Port about fore hour after we left out the airport.
We went to my uncle office and dormitory. The dinner was very yummy and food. When we arrived there, it was evening. We played the badminton after we ate the abundant dinner. After played badminton, we went to his office and saw some antiques.

We went to play the golf next day. We ate the lunch before we played the golf. I ate the tempura set lunch. It was very yummy. After we had the lunch. A young boy told me how to play the golf. I was very happy and played it again. This day was my uncle birthday. We played the table tennis after dinner.

We caught the clam to the Huanghai Sea. If you played it, you could got a hat. We were very happy when we caught it. There were many clams. We needed to go there by the tractor. When we started to go there, there was much water there. But after an hour, all the water had went to the sea. The tractor tax told us how to found the clams. He found the clams quickly and said it was not high. We took some photo and movie there happily. We caught the clams about eight kilogram. We could eat it about fore time. We went to the Sun Island and saw some engineering.

We played the tennis ball next day morning. We played the tennis ball happily. Tennis ball was not easy. I played it about two day. Then, we ate the breakfast. We went to play the golf again after breakfast. First, I only could hut it to 50m. Finally, I hut it over 100m. I was very happy, because my uncle said, “If you can’t hut it over 50m, you can’t ate the dinner!” At night, we went to my uncle home.

Last day, we played the tennis first. My father took many photos for me and grandmother. Grandmother was very good at sport. She learned it quickly! Then we went back Hong Kong.

Now, I want to play the golf again. Oh, it is very night, I need to sleep!

2 assignments

1. Travelogue --- trip to Yanghou Port (400 words)

2. If you have 8 more hours a day (400 words)
- a scientist invited you to be in a secret experiment
- a non-sleeping pill
- now you didn't need to sleep and have more time
- but you couldn't tell anyone
- what would you do?

A World Without Adults - amended

Once upon a time, a child called John read a book called “Amazing Magic” It was about an island for children about 12 years old.

Children about 12 years old could go to the island. There were no adults and the children were happy. They didn’t need to go to school and they could go anywhere anytime. They didn’t need to ask the adults. On this island, there’s a child called Jacky. Jacky hated his parents very much. And he decided to escape from home and go to this island.

When he arrived on this island, he was very happy because his parents were not there. He played computer games everyday and didn’t go to school. He talked to other children, and they told him this island was their paradise. Jacky asked, “Are there any special skills I can learn on this island?” The children were angry and shouted to Jacky, “There isn’t anything we need to learn!”
Their hobby was playing games, and the children didn’t need to go to school anymore. These children disliked the adults and didn’t want to see them anymore.

One day, Jacky’s house was set on fire. He wanted to call his parents to help him. But he knew his parents will not appear. He called other children to help him. But these children were not tall enough to climb up the house. At that time, they all cried and missed their parents.

After this fire, they didn’t go back to the normal world. They also played computer games everyday and ate too much food. Gradually, they became very fat and unhealthy. There were no clinics on the island.

Jacky’s health was worse day by day. He had a fever one day, his parents were not there and no one could help him. At that time, he missed his parents very much. He wanted to go back to the normal world. Suddenly, Jacky had a headache. After five minutes, he saw his parents. His parent’s looked very worried. He kissed his parents, and he knew their importance. He asked his parents to go back to the island to talk to the other children. His parents told him he could go back home. He went back to the island and told the other children, “Parents are very important to us!”

When John finished the book, he understood that he needed to cherish his parents.


CONTENT: 4/5 GRAMMAR: 2/5 ==== 6/10

Majon Inland

Once upon a tome, there was a book, it name was called “Magic Amazing” A child called john, learn all the things from this book. There was an island for the children who were about 12 years old.
All the children about 12 years old, there had no any adult and the children will very happy here. They didn’t need to go to school and they could walk everywhere anytime. They don’t need to ask the adult. In this Island, there’s one child call Jacky. Jacky hates his parents very much. And he decided escape from his home and go to this Island.
Till he arrive this Island, he was very happy because his parents were not here. He played the computer games everyday and didn’t go to school. He talked to other children, the children said this Island is their paradise. Jacky said, “Is this Island has any special skills he could learn?” The children were angry after Jacky said this thing. They said to Jacky, “There will not have any thing they need to learn!” Their response is play games, couldn’t go to school anymore. And these children think adult are the disagreeable people and they didn’t want to see them anymore.
One day, Jacky’s house was fired. He wanted to call his parents to help him. But he knew his parents will not appear here. He called other children to help him. But these children are too short, not enough to climb up the house. At that time, they all cry, they miss their parents. After this fire, they didn’t go back to normal world. They also played computer game everyday and eat many things. Gradually, they became very fat and not healthy. In “Magic Amazing”, there have no clinic.
Jacky’s health was bad day by day. And one day he had a fever, no parents here and no one can help him. At that time, he missed his parents very much. He wanted to go back normal world.
Suddenly, Jacky had a headache. After five minutes, he saw his parents. His parent’s looked like very worry. He kissed his parents, he knew the importance of parents. And he requested his parents to go back Magic Amazing to talk to other children. His parents answer him he could go back for a moment. He went back Magic Amazing and said, “Parents are very important for us!”
When John finishes the book, he understands he needs to cherish his parents.

A world without adults

If there were no more adults on Earth, what would happen? (450 words)

Think about:

• schools
• hospitals
• shops
• government
• cinema
• food -- food shortage
• traffic -- traffic jam
• work
• money
• computers

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pay attention to your common mistakes:

1. don't mix up 'a' and 'I'!
2. pay attention to the tenses!
3. don't forget the 'a' or 'the' before the nouns!
4. use pronouns (he, she, it, etc), don't use the names too often!
5. don't write the time at the beginning of the sentence (e.g. today, I went to school.)!

The Frog Prince - amended

There was a frog living in a pond near the palace. In the palace, there were a baby boy and a baby girl. The baby prince was called Jacky and the baby princess was called Jenny. When Jacky was young, a witch took him away. Then, one person disappeared from the palace every year.

Jenny got a small golden ball on her 18th birthday. The king held a party for her. She was happy and played the ball near the pond. Suddenly, the ball fell into the pond. She was very unhappy. When she was very worried, a frog jumped near her. Jenny asked the frog, “My birthday gift has fallen into the pond, can you help me?” The frog answered, “If you take me to the palace and kiss me, I would help you!” Jenny didn’t think and replied, “Okay!”

The frog gave the ball back to Jenny, and she ran to the palace quickly. The frog knocked on the door when she was having dinner. She was very amazed. It had dinner with her. After dinner, the frog took a bath and said, “Can you kiss me?” She was very angry, but she has promised the frog. When she kissed it, the frog became a prince. Jenny was very amazed and shouted, “Oh no!” The king heard Jenny and ran into her room. He was amazed and said, “Jacky has come back!”

Jacky and Jenny married the next day. The king asked Jacky, “Why did you become a frog?” Jacky answered, “When I was six years old, I played with Jenny near the pond. Suddenly, a witch called Candy took me to a house. It was very old. She said, “Your father killed my brother, so I need you to take this poison!” Luckily, she took a wrong bottle to me so I didn’t die. But I’ve become a frog. She thought I was dead. When she left the house, I found all the information about the poison. If I wanted to become a prince again I needed to kiss a girl. When I left the house, I saw the witch catch a soldier every year and kill them quickly.”

The king ordered some soldiers to kill the witch. When the soldier, the king and Jacky went to the house, there was a dragon there. It was because the witch took an amazing medicine. Jacky used an arrow to shoot and kill the dragon.

Finally, Jacky and Jenny lived happily together. And there was no need to worry about anything.

Frog and Princess

There was a frog lived in a stream near the palace. In the palace, there were baby boy and baby girl. The baby prince called Jacky and the baby princess called Jenny. When prince was young, a Witch caught the prince away. Then, every year, there was a one person disappears.

Jenny had a small gold ball, when she was 18 years birthday. King held a party for princess. Princess was happy and she played the small gold ball near the stream. Suddenly, the small gold ball fall down in to the steam. She was very unhappy. When she was very worry, a frog jumped near Jenny. Jenny asked to frog, “My birthday gift fall down in to the stream?” Frog answered, “If you brought me to the palace and kiss me, I would help you!” Jenny didn’t things and said, “Ok!”

After frog gave the gold ball to Jenny, she ran to the palace quickly. The frog knocked the door when the princess had the dinner. Princess was very amazed. The frog ate the dinner with princess. After dinner, the frog took a bath, the frog said, “You kiss me ok?” Princess was very angry, but she promise frog. When she kissed the frog, the frog became a prince. Princess was very amazed and shouted, “Oh-No!” King listened Jenny was shouting and she ran into Jenny’s room. King was amazed and said, “Jacky is come back!”

Then, Jacky and Jenny married next day. Kind asked Jacky, “Why did you become a frog?” Jacky answered, “When I was six years old, I play with Jenny near the stream. Suddenly, a witch called Candy. She caught me to a house. It was very old. She said, “Your father kill my brother, so a needed you to ate this poison” Luckily, she talk a wrong medicines to me so I became a frog. So she thought me died. When she left the house, I found all the data about the medicines. If I want to became a prince again a needed to kiss a girl! When I left out the house, I saw the witch caught a soldier every years and she kill them quickly.”

King learned all the things and called the soldier to kill the witch. When the soldier, Kind and prince saw the house, there was a dragon there. It was because the witch ate the amazing medicines. Prince used the shoot an arrow to kill the dragon.

Finally the lived happy. And no need to worry anythings.

What happens after "happily every after"?

Find a fairy tale that ends with "and they lived happily ever after". Write a story telling us what happens afterwards.

• king
• assassinate
• fail

Marco's Dream - amended

When I watched a TV news report about a boy disappearing from a ship called Curious Boy, I saw a ray of light in my room. It came from the window and looked like an arrow. I was curious. So, I ran after the ray of light. It was very bright, I couldn’t see anything. Then, I fell asleep.When I got up, I saw a map on the ground. When I picked it up, my room became a bus. I saw that there were many aliens on the bus, and they looked like animals. When I get off the bus, the aliens were looking at me. They said angrily, “Everyone kill him!” I was very scared and keep running. When I was running, I met my friend, Tony. He shouted, “Run after me!” I saw a boy in the middle of the sun.Suddenly, I heard my alarm clock ringing. I find that it was a dream. Then I got up and prepared for school. When I looked out of the window, I saw the boy in the middle of the sun. It looked like my dream. When I wanted to tell my mum, the boy disappeared. I was very curious about it.So I told everything to my friends after school. Tony said, “I saw the boy too!” Jenny said, “When I was reading my comic books, the comics suddenly changed into a newspaper. There was report about a boy disappearing from the ship. They ship was called Curious Boy!” Tommy shouted, “I had this dream too!” I said, “Me too!”Jacky said, “We went to the Central Library. If we went to the top floor, we will find some data!” But the reference resources library did not welcome anyone under 12. So, only Tommy and I could go inside.

We went into the newspaper library. Tommy asked, “How can we find it?” I said, “The TV news report was on 21st May,1997, because I saw the day on the dream.”We asked the librarian, “Where is the newspaper on 21st may, 1997?” The librarian answered, “It was there!” I found the newspaper and read it. When I looked at the picture about the ship, I knew all the secrets. The ship was called Curious Boy! They boy was called Marco. There were many sharks on the ship. The captain and a sailor used the guns to kill Marco.We told everything to the police, and the captain and the sailor went to jail. When I went back home, I heard Marco said, “Thank you!”

Marco's dream

Today, when I watched the TV news report about a boy disappeared on the ship. The ship called curious boy, I saw a ray of light in my room, it came form the window and looked like an arrow. I was curious. So, I ran after the ray of light. It was very bright, I couldn’t see anything. Then, I got a sleep.

When I got up, I saw a map on the land. When I took it up, my room became a bus. I saw a bus have many look like a pet, but it was not a pet. When I left out the bus, another pet only saw me. They said angry, “ Everyone we killer him!” I was very scared and ran and ran. When I ran to the bright, I saw a boy there. It was …

Suddenly, I listened my clock was ring out. Then I got up and preparation to go to school. When I watched the window, I saw the sun amidst had a boy. It looked like my dream. When I wanted to tel1 my mum, the boy disappeared. It was very curious it.

So, after school, I told all the things to my friends, Tommy, Jacky, Jenny and Alan. Tony said, “I saw the boy too!” Jenny said, “When I watched the comic, I saw a report. It was about a boy disappeared in the ship. They ship was called curious boy!” Tommy shouted, “I have this dream!” I said, “Me too!”

Jacky said, “We went to the Hong Kong Public Libraries. If we went to the top flow, we will find some data!” Then, we went to the Hong Kong Public Libraries. The reference resources libraries needed the persons enough 12years. So, only I and Tommy could came in the libraries. When we went to the newspaper libraries. Tommy said,“How can we find it?” I said, “The TV news report was at 21st May,1997, because I saw the TV news had this day.

We asked the libraries’s worker, “Where did the news about 21st may, 1997?” The libraries’s worker answer, “It was put it there!” I find the news and read it. The newspapers. Suddenly we went to they ship. The ship was called CURIOUS BOY! They boy was called Marco. They ship had many shark. The skipper and another sailor used the guns to kill Marco.

Suddenly, we went back the libraries. We said all the things to the policeman and the shipper and sailor went to the jail. When I went back home, I listened Marco said, “Thank you!”

Write a story beginning with:

"I saw a ray 光線 of light in my room. It came from the window and looked like an arrow. I was curious 好奇…"

Life of a Football - amended

Hi, my name is Kiki. I am a football. I always run in the football field during the sunny days. I live in a storeroom for about one month. My best friend Horry, a cup, said yesterday morning, “I am very cold!” I asked, “Why?” He said, “I was put in the refrigerator, so that my owner could drink fruit juice coldly from my body! I feel very cold now!” Kenny was a red handkerchief. He said proudly to Horry,“I am the best on Earth! I can help you dry up, but you need to give me some money!” Horry was angry, and they disliked each other. Baby was a beautiful green handkerchief. She was very generous, she helped Horry to dry up.

In the afternoon, everyone needed to work except me and other sports equipments. It was sunny and hot today, and I needed to exercise. I went to the football field with my owner happily. I thought I could make many friends. I made a good friend today. He was a red and write football. He was called John. His owner was my owner’s friend. After the football match, some football players were angry, some were crying, some were happy. My owner had won the match, so he was happier than before.

When I came back home with my owner, everyone wanted to know who won the match,. After my owner gave me a bath, I dried myself. I went to the storeroom and told everything to my best friends. I had become a football commentator. They felt excited and entertained. Finally, I said, “Our owner used his feet to kick me to the gantry. Although I was very tried, I was happy. Our owner has won the match and at the end, it was a 1:0!”

Everyone had slept, but Horry did not sleep. He said, “My owner said I was very old and want to throw me away.” I said, “You don’t need to worry, our owner does not have too much money, if things could be used, he will not throw them away.”

Ten years later, I was very old and could not run with my owner, so he put me into the storeroom and I could not play with him anymore. But I could remember the happy times. I needed to sleep for a long time.

Football live

Hi, my name is Kiki. I am a football. I always run in the football field in the sunny day. Yesterday day morning, my best friend Horry, he was a cup. He said, “I am very cold!” I asked, “Why?” He said, “I gave put in the refrigerator, so owner could drink the fruit juice coldly into my body! Now, I feel very cold!” Kenny was a red handkerchief. He said proudly,“I am the best things on the world! I can help you to clear the water, but you need to give me some money!” Horry was angry, so they disliked each other. Baby was a beautiful green handkerchief. She was very generous, she helped cup to clear up his water.

Afternoon was come, everyone needed to work among me and some things which was about sport. Today was sunny and hot, I needed to have a sport. I went to the football field with my owner happily. I could have many friends. Today, I made a good friends, he was a red and write football. He called John. His owner was my owner friends. I could listen someone was angry, someone cry, someone was happy. Today, my owner wins the football match, so he was happy more than before.

When I came back home with my owner, very one wanted to know the match, who win. After my owner gave me a bath, I gave clear my water on my body. I went to the bedroom and told all the things to my best friends. Now I became a football speak aside. I said sincerity, they felt excited and did not felt bored. Finally I said, “Owner used his lag to play me to the gantry. Although I was very tried, but I was happy. So owner won the football match and the end, it became 1:0!”

Everyone was sleep, but Horry (cup) did not sleep. He said, “My owner said a was old and want to throw me away.” I said, “You no need to worry, our owner was not have to much money, if the things could use, he will not throw it.”

Ten years, I was very old and I could not run with owner, so owner put me to the storeroom and I could not play with owner, but I could remember. I needed to sleep to a long time.

Write a story using personification 擬人化. Think of yourself as an object 物體 or animal.

(450 words)

Alex Was Famous - amended by Phyllis

BBQ newspaper 7th June, 2009 Sunday
A child called Law Chun Yin (Alex) solved a criminal case in Brazil. Alex was only twelve years old, but he had learnt a lot after this. This story is about a case of Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance. Alex was so famous around the world. This story became a story book and a movie. He could be a leading role in the movie with a famous movie star called Jacky. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~!
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This was very amazing, I was very happy, too. It was because I could be a famous child in the film industry. And when I went to school by bus, many people said I was very clever and wanted to have my autograph. I was very happy. When I went to school, too many reporters took many photos of me. My principal Mr. Lee called me to his offices and said I would get a“Clever Child”award on Monday. When I went into my classroom, my best friend Johnny asked, “How much money did you get to be the leading role of the movie?’ I answered, “I got $193,000” Other children said I should buy them books, food, game points, cars, NDS, PSP, and many other things. I thought, “Fame is not a good thing!”

After school, some children in another class who did not like me sat by me on the bus and said, “Alex , you are my best friend, can you buy a game card for me?” I was very angry and thought, “He has a lot of money in his wallet. When I was not famous, he always said I was stupid and told me not to play online games.”

I never said anything and they only sat in another bench. When I went back home, some reporters took some photos of me. I was very annoyed. Then I ran back home.

I ate a lot for dinner. My mummy and my daddy did not need to work. But we could eat a lot of good food. When I was eating, my mother shouted, “Quick, get up! No time for you to waste!” I woke up and thought that everything was a dream. And I later read the newspaper about the Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance, I thought, “Oh, it was true…”

Alex Was Famous

BBQ newspaper 7-4-2009 Sunday

A child called Law Chun Yin (Alex) clear up a criminal case in Brazil. Alex was only twelve years old, but he could learn much common sense. This story is about a case of Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance. Alex this child was so famous on the world. This story be came a story book and a movie. He could be a leading role in the movie with famous man called Lai Ur. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~!

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This was very amazing, I was very happy too. It was because I could be a famous child in the filmdom. And when I went to school by bus, many people said I was very clever and wanted to have my signature. I was very happy. When I went to school, to many reporter take many photo of me. My principle Mr. Lee called me to principle room and said you with got a “The clever child”aware in Monday (Day C). When I went to my classroom, my friends- Johnny question, “How many money did you have when you be the leading role in the movie?’ I said, “I could got $193,000” Another children said he or she wanted me to buy book, food, dim, car, Nds, Psp, and too many things. I think “Famous was not a good thinks” After school, the children who was not like my in another classroom sat with me by bus and said, “Alex , you are my best friend, can you buy a game card for me” I was very angry and think, “He had many money when I was not famous and he always said I was no clever don’t play CS onlion game( A game of firearm) and don’t play Tales Runner onlion (a game of running)

I never said anything and the only sat in another chair. When I went back home, I needed to walk on the less than honorable or just path. Some reporter take some photo of me too. A was very impatient. After I walk on the less than honorable or just path, I went back home.

At home, I ate the dinner of many food. My mummy and my daddy no need to work. But we could ate many good food. When I ate it …

My mother said, “Quick get up! Not time could you butter one's bread on both sides.” I know it was a drum. And I watch the newspaper about Amazon Rainforest airplane disappearance, Law Chun Yin I think, “Oh- it was…”

The Mystery of Amazon - amended by Phyllis

Today, I went to my father’s friend’s house with my father. It was in Brazil and we planned to watch a football match. Football was my favorite sport. I thought it was the most exiting match, because Brazil was good at playing football. We went there by aeroplane. We could see the Amazon Rainforest.

When we went to the plane, a boy yelled, “This airplane has make too many people die, do you want to drive it?” I was very scared. The plane got off, and I saw the boy looked like very frightened too.

After a few hours, we went to the Amazon Rainforest, the boy cried, “We will die on this airplane!” The flight attendant said, “He always goes to Brazil and Hong Kong by this airplane, but everyone on the plane has disappeared, except he and the people who worked on this airplane!” Suddenly, the airplane flew down quickly, the boy said, “The demon is killing us!” Everyone was afraid and did not know what they could do. The pilot shouted, “We will land on the Amazon Rainforest! All passengers should get off the plane!”

The other passengers did not take anything, but I took all my belongings. After a few minutes, the airplane disappeared. Only a flight attendant got off the airplane. She said, “When I went to get some water, I saw that the airplane caught a fire. It was a very old plane, and it was not the one we was on.

I looked around and found that the passengers had already left. I could only find one exit. I said to myself, ‘Oh no, I should use the boat or ship to get out!” When I sat under a tree, I heard someone singing. When I went near that person, I saw a house and twelve people, some were Hong Kong people and some were Brazilians. I asked them, “I am a victim. Why are you here?” A child said, “I am a victim too! My family’s things got lost on the airplane, so we went out of the plane. Then the airplane caught a fire.”

I knew what happened. I made a boat and went to Brazil. I told them everything about the airplane: first, the pilots deliberately landed the plane quickly. Then, when we got off the plane, the airhostess deliberately took us to the older plane. After that, the pilots went back to Brazil and said that the airplane disappeared, when the airplane was in fact in the Amazon Rainforest. We could not see it because there was an airport. The evidence was that the river was not on the map.

At the end, the criminals were arrested and I watched the football match with father happily.

Happy Father's Day - amended by Phyllis

22ndJune, 2009 Monday rainy and cold

Yesterday is Father’s Day. For Mother’s Day we ate European cuisine. Yesterday we had Japanese food.

I went to the swimming pool to swim yesterday morning with my father. We swam there happily. After we swam, we played underwater.

Afterwards, we went to a Chinese restaurant and ate some dim sum. We ate it happily because it was Father’s Day.

Then, we went back home. When it was two o’clock, I went to Jusco with my sister and Phyllis to buy some materials for cooking. We bought some seaweeds, soy sauce, rice, noodles, wasabi, corn, vegetables, ice-cream, strawberries and sweets.

After we bought the food, we went to grandmother’s house. I worked with my sister and Phyllis although I did not do too much.

We had to make sushi. First, we needed to cook rice. We used seaweed to wrap the rice. After that, we put the corn in the middle. Finally, we ate it with some wasabi.

We also made Japanese noodles. We needed to use water to cook the noodles. Then, we put it in the bowl. We put a bowl of noodles into the refrigerator. Finally, we took it out and put some seaweeds on top before we ate it.

We made parfait for dessert. We put some cornflakes in the bottom of a glass. We put some marshmallows and red bean ice-cream on top of the cornflakes. Finally, we put four pieces of strawberries on top.

Dinner time had come, we had the Japanese noodles first. Phyllis took some photos for us. Sister ate the noodles happily in the first photo. My aunt gave two kimonos to my sister and Phyllis. They looked like Japanese girls. If I did not know the photo was taken in Hong Kong, I would think it was taken in Japan.

My father and I were very happy at the dinner. After the dinner, we listened to the music and drank Japanese tea. We read a book together, too. We then ate parfait happily. It was cold and sweet.

Finally, we had some fruits and went back come. Before I slept, I thought this Father’s Day was a happy one. When I grow up, I will be a father! Then, I fell asleep… Good night!

Happy Father's Day

22ndJune, 2009 Monday ring and cold

Yesterday is father’s day. Mother’s day we ate a European cuisine. Yesterday, we ate the Japanese food.

Yesterday, morning I went to swimming pool and swim with my father. We swam there happily. After we swam, we play under the water.

After we swam in the swimming pool, we went to Chinese restaurant and ate some pastry and we ate it happily because it was father’s day.

Then, we went back home. When it was two o’clock was come, I went to Jusco with sister and Phyllis bought some materials which we needed to eat. We bought some seaweed, some soy source, some rice, noodles, wasabi, corn, vegetable, a box of ice-cream and some sweet.

After we bought the food’s seaweed, we went to grandmother’s house. And I worked with them although I did not do to many things.

Make sushi

First, we needed to cook rice. Then, we needed to use the seaweed to make with the rice. After that, we should use the corn to put it in the amidst. Finally, we could ate it with some mustard.

Make Japanese noodles

First, we needed to use the water to cook the noodles. Then, we put it in the blow. After that, we needed to put a blow of noodles in to the refrigerator. Finally, we put it out and put some seaweed, then, we could eat it.

Make Japanese ice-cream

First, we needed to put some cornflakes in the lowly of a cup. Then, we needed to put some sweet top of the cornflakes. After that, we needed to put some ice-cream. Finally, we needed to put four banana on the top.

Dinner time was come, we ate the Japanese noodles first. Phyllis took some photo for us. Sister was eating the noodles happily. On the first photo. My grandmother gave a coat of Japan for sister and Phyllis. They looked like a Japanese people. If I did not know it took in Hong Kong, I would thing it took the photo in the Japan.

In the dinner, my father was very happy and me too.

After the dinner, we drank the Japanese diners—tea. We listen to the music and drank the tea. We read the book together too. Eat Japanese’s ice-cream time was come, we ate the ice-cream happily, it was cold and sweet.

Finally, we ate the fruit and we went back come. When I sleep, I thought the father’s day was a happy day. When I grow up, I will be a father! Then, I sleep.......... Good night!

We will setup a waterland. So the visitor will play in the water and swim there. There is a scubadiving pool and you will see many fish, starfish, sea horses and too many sea creatures. There will be no sharks and whales. They are more dangerous sea animals.

I want to build an old ship, and we will put some pirate in it and some treasures to make a pirate ship. It will be the most special ship and attract more people to go to Ocean Park. We should build the pirate ship in the sea. We can make up a name for this theme it could be-“Special Room”.

We can build a big pond and put some boats there. It will be more romantic.

As for children, we can have racing cars for children over six years and they could drive happily. They will be very exciting. They are famous in China. I think Ocean Park could had more visitor than Disneyland. It was because Disneyland was very boring and did not have exciting games.

Make Ocean Park

Class has been suspended for 2 weeks in Hong Kong’s kindergartens and primary schools. Ocean Park did not have enough visitor, so I wanted to made some special things in it.

So I wanted to have some discount. Then, we could attract many people to Ocean Park. We could not look like Disneyland made the discount for the school which was not open for the student.

We should open a hotel for about ocean. We could build it in the sea, it will be a ocean hotel. It will be most interesting. We could made a marry party in it, so the bridegroom and the bride could have a happy trip and could have a beautiful recollection.

We could open a park in a big swimming pool. So the visitor could play water and swim there. There had a diving pool and you could see many fish, sea star, sea horse and too many sea things. There did not have shark and whale. It was more not safe sea animals.

I wanted to built a old ship, and we put some pirate in it and some special and beautiful things to make a pirate ship. It will be most special and will be have more people went to Ocean Park. We should built the pirate ship in the sea. We could make a name of this all things, it could be...... Yes, it could call Special Room.

We could hold a big pond and hold some boat there. It will be more dissolute.

About children, we could open a baby car and they could drive a car happily. Baby car need enough six years. Baby car was very excited, you could play it to collide with another car. You need to made another car gave could not be ok. The game was call Collide Collide Car. It was be popular among in China. I thing Ocean Park could had more visitor than Disneyland. It was because Disneyland was very bored and did not have exciting games.

Quick, quick, come to Ocean Park!

Your own theme park

Class has been suspended for 2 weeks in Hong Kong’s kindergartens and primary schools. You are the boss of Ocean Park. Think of a special programme to attract these children (and their parents) at this time.

Think about:
1. the theme
2. the games

Write: at least 430 words

OCEAN PARK WEBSITE

Indirect questions

1. Jenny asked Henry, “How old are you?”
Jenny asked Henry how old he was.
2. “Can you help me?” Fred asked Peter.
Fred asked Peter if he could help him.
3. “What is this?” asked Ben.
Ben asked what this was.

Detective Alex Law1

Today, I went to my father’s friend house with my father. It was in Brazil and we will watch football match. Football was my favorite sport. I thing it was the most exited match, because Brazil was a country where was good at playing football. We went there by the airplane. We could watch the Amazon Rainforest.

Amazon Rainforest had the region is home to about 2.5 million insect species, tens of thousands of plants, and some 2,000 birds and mammals. To date, at least 40,000 plant species, 3,000 fish, 1,294 birds, 427 mammals, 428 amphibians, and 378 reptiles have been scientifically classified in the region.

When we went to the airplane, a man said, “This airplane make too many people die, did you want to drive this airplane?” Then, I went to the airplane. Airplane was start flying, and I saw the man was in the airplane, looked like so scare.

After a few hour, we went to the Amazon Rainforest, a man said, “We will die in this airplane!” The airhostess said, “He always went to Brazil and Hong Kong by this airplane, but everyone was die, except he and the people who was work at this airplane!” Suddenly, the airplane flew drawn quickly, the man said, “The demon is killing us everyone was scared and did not know what can they do. The airplane driver said, “We should crash-land in the Amazon Rainforest”

The people did not take any things, but I took all the things. After few minute, the airplane got lose. Only a airhostess went out the airplane. She said, “When I went to got some water back, I saw the airplane got fire broke scorch. I went to the airplane and saw it was very old airplane, it this not the airplane which was us went to Brazil’s airplane.

When I went back the place where people stayed there, I lost them. I only could found a place to leave out. When I walked to the road, I said,‘Oh-on, I should use the boat or ship to got out!”So I only could not went out. When I sat in under the tree, I listened someone was singing, when I went near the person, I saw a house and twelve people, some a Hong Kong people and some a Brazil people. I asked them, “I am a victim. Why did you here?” A child said, “I am a victim too! My family’s things got lose in the airplane, so we went out the plane. Finally, the airplane broke a fire.”

I knew what happen it was and I made a boat and went to Brazil. I took all the things of the airplane.

First, the airplane drivers deliberately gave the plane flew drawn quickly. Then, when we went out the plane, the airhostess deliberately took us to the older plane. After that, the driver went back Brazil and said the airplane gave lose, but the airplane was in the Amazon Rainforest. We could not saw it because there was a airdrome. The .evidence was the big river was not have in the map.

Deserted Island

Tropical rainforest

1. why did you end up on the island? – shipwreck? Plane crash?
2. what did you find there? Any people/ animals?
3. how do you survive? – fishing? Find fruits?
4. how do you kill time?
5. how did you feel? Lonely? Scared?
6. did you escape? How?


I am a child who loves the sea, so I went to the sea with my

Too Much Money Is Not Happiness

I think if they have taken NZ$10 million (US$6.1million), they will go to Hong Kong for shopping. It is because Hong Kong is a paradise for shoppers. There are many beautiful things to buy as souvenirs. I think they will buy some T-shirts printed with their names. They will go to Hong Kong Disneyland to take photos. And one important place that they will go is Ocean Park. Because it is Hong Kong’s symbol, and there are so many beautiful and special animals, including white dolphins, pandas and sea lions.

I think they will live in Grand Hyatt Hotel, because they have so much money, they must live in the best and the most beautiful hotel to enjoy their lives, I mean a short and perfect life. And they will go to Stanley to enjoy the sunlight and the beach. There are many souvenirs of different cultures in Stanley.

After going to Stanley, I think they will go to Causeway Bay to shop. They will have ice-cream and buy some clothes, because that is Causeway Bay’s culture. When they have bought enough things, they will go to Macau to take photo stickers. After taking photos, I think they will go to the New Territories. It is because they will not just shop in Hong Kong. They might go to Yuen Long to enjoy the nature and take many photos.

But I don’t think they will be extremely happy in this trip because they know that money doesn’t belong to them. They have not reported it to the police and have hidden the truth -- this behaviour is dishonesty. Although they have done some dishonest behaviour, I think they will enjoy their trip in Hong Kong very much because Hong Kong is a good place to travel. It has many beautiful things that Hong Kong people don’t pay attention to. But I hope they can use the money they earn themselves. They will be happier that way. Hope they can enjoy this time, and don’t do it again. Whoever telling a lie should tell the bank the truth. Don’t tell lies anymore!

I think after the trip, they might got caught by the New Zealand police.

NT$1000000

I think if they take NZ$ 10millions (US$6.1million), and they will go to Hong Kong to buy many thing. Because Hong Kong is a paradise of shopper and there have many beautiful things to buy for memory. I think they will buy some T-shirt that print their name and they will go to Hong Kong Disneyland to take photo. And one important place that they will go is Ocean Park. Because Ocean Park is Hong Kong’s symbol, and there are so many beautiful and special animals. Include white dolphin, panda, sea lion…And I think they will live in Grand Hyatt Hotel, because they have so many money, they must live in the best and the most beautiful hotel to enjoy their life, I mean a short and perfect life. And they will go to Stanley to enjoy sunlight and beach. Stanley has many different culture’s commodities, can buy something commodities t have memorial.

After go to Stanley, I think they will go to Causeway Bay to have shopping. They will go to eat ice-cream and buy some clothes, because that is Causeway Bay’s culture. When they buy enough things and they will go to MongKok to take photo-ticket machine to take photo to have memorial.

After they take photo, I think they will go to New Territories. Because I think they must not just shop in Hong Kong, they might go to Yuen Long to enjoy natural’s life. They might go to there and take many photos. But I don’t think they will extreme happy in this trip because they know those money isn’t belong them. And they don’t tell the police, hide the truth, this behave is not honesty. Although they do some not honest behave, I think they will very enjoy their trip in Hong Kong because Hong Kong is a good place to travel. And Hong Kong has many beautiful things that Hong Kong people won’t look out. And I think they can find it and enjoy it. But I hope they can use their money which was they gained, they must be happier to use bank’s money to travel here. Hope them can enjoy this time, and don’t do it again. Because to tell lie, whatever anyone, hope they will tell the bank the truth. Don’t tell lies anymore!

I think after they enjoy their trip, they might got catch by the police who was in the New Zealand.

Global manhunt for accidental millionaires focuses on Hong Kong

read the news report here

Tell the story of the couple

Trip to Japan - amended

Today was the first day of the summer holidays. My mother gave me some money to go to Japan. She wanted me to learn how live in another countries which was not like Hong Kong. My mother took me to a Japanese school. I learned some Japanese.

The day of going to Japan had come, I went to the airport and said, “See you mum, bye bye!”Then, I went to Japan by aeroplane.

After a few hours, I arrived at Japan. I went there with an interpreter, his Japanese was very good! So he could help me with many things in Japan and mother was very relieved.

My mother wanted me to do a few things. Firstly, take some photos in the entire place we went to. Secondly, not to have a hot spring for a long time because it was not good for health. Thirdly, eat Japanese sushi. Fourthly, don’t get lost. Finally, buy some souvenirs for her.

On the first day, I went to the jinja and learned some Japanese traditions. The jinja was a place for praying. It was not like Hong Kong, but it was the scariest. I had watched a Japanese TV drama which looked like this. Then, I took some photos of the jinja.

We then went to take a hot spring happily. Suddenly, I could not see where the interpreter was. I was very scared. I went to the dressing room and wore my coat. I ran out of the shop quickly. I saw him sitting in the chair because he was hurt. He went back to Hong Kong first.

Afterwards, I went to the Sushi Shop and ate the sushi happily, too. It was more delicious than the sushi made in Hong Kong. After the yummy dinner, I went back to the hotel. I was very full, so I could not run or walk quickly. Suddenly, a man stole my money. Although he was not running fastly, I could not chase him. Then I went to the hotel unhappily.

The next day was the last day in Japan, I used other money to buy some interesting models and food from Japan.

I had bought a lot, but I got lost. Luckily, there were so many taxis. I went to the airport and went back to Hong Kong happily.

Japanese tour guide

Today was the first day of Sunny Holiday. My mother gave me some money to Japan and wanted me learn how could I do in another countries is not like Hong Kong. My mother took me to the Japanese school. I leaned some Japanese.

The day of went to Japan was come, I went to the airdrome and said, “See you mum, bye, bye!”Then, I went to Japan by aeroplane.

After a few hours, I arrived Japan. I went there with an interpreter to Japan, his Japanese was very good! So he could help me many things in Japan and mother was very set one's mind at ease.

First, me mother wanted me to take some photo in the entire place we went to. Next, she told me do not had a hot spring a long time; it was no good for body. Then, you needed to eat the Japanese sushi (a kind of Japanese food). After that, don’t lose your road. Finally, bought some your favourite things and some give for us!

First, I went to the jinja and learned some Japanese things; jinja was a pray place to talked will the people who was die. It not liked Hong Kong, but it was most scared. I watch the whodunit looked like this. And I took some photo too.

Next, we went to the Hot Spring Shop and took a hot spring happily. Suddenly, a could not see where the interpreter in. I was very scared and went to the dressing room and wore my coat and ran out the shop quickly. Suddenly, I saw he was sitting in the chair because he hurt. Then, he went back Hong Kong first.

After I went to the Hot Spring Shop, I went to Sushi Shop and ate the sushi happily too, because it was most yummy than the sushi which was made by Hong Kong. After I ate the yummy dinner, then I went back the hotel. I was very full, so I could not run or walk quickly. Suddenly, a man stole my money. Although it was not run fast, I could not run after him too. Then I went to the hotel unhappy.

Next day was the last day in Hong Kong, I used another money to bought my favourite and bought some interesting things and some food about Japan.

I bought so many things, but I lose. Lucky, a Taxi was so many and I went to the airdrome and went back Hong Kong happily.

A story that happens in a foreign country/city:

1. Find a place that is not like Hong Kong.
2. You can do some research on the culture and language.
3. Tell us about your adventures in that place, for example:

- are you lost?
- can you understand their language?
- do you understand what the people are doing?
- how did you communicate with the people?

WORDS YOU MIGHT USE:
- interpreter
- tour guide
- special agent
-

Happy Mither's Day

10thMay, 2009 Sunday Sunny and warm

It is Mother’s Day today. I had a good one. My father, sister, Phyllis, Aunt Carmen and I designed a party at my grandmother’s home. Grandmother’s home is near my home. So we can go there more quickly. Last Sunday, we designed a Western-style food party. We followed a recipe to cook the food.

When I went to my grandmother’s house, I made the fruit salad. It had apples, eggs, bananas and salad dressing. I put it into the fridge. It was very yummy. I made it for about one hour. Then, I went to Jusco and bought some colour papers and a carnation.

Aunt Carmen provided the beverages. There were different kinds of English tea.

Afterwards, I used the colour papers to make a Mother’s Day card. After I went back home, I saw my sister working very hard on the mashed potato. I thought, “My sister wanted to make the best food for Mother! I was very happy!” And I saw my father made the spaghetti happily too.

Dinner time has come! Everyone went to the dining room and ate the fruit salad I made as the appetizer. Then, I ate the Spaghetti Bolognese made by my father and mashed potato made by my sister. For the main course, we had pork and beef. After then, we had banana pancakes with ice-cream happily. Finally, we drank different kinds of English tea provided by Aunt Carmen.

After we had dinner, we went back home quickly and gave the Mother’s Day card and carnation to my mother. She was very happy. We had a very happy Mother’s Day!

I didn’t want to sleep, although it was very late. But soon I fell asleep. Although I was asleep, this day is always in my dreams.