Write a story about collectors 收藏家. (400 words)

WORDS YOU MAY USE:

• Nobel prize 諾貝爾獎
• Nobelist 諾貝爾得獎人
• history 歷史
• museum 博物館
• Los Angeles 洛杉磯
• London 倫敦
• Paris 巴黎
• Sweden 瑞典

Scary Day- amended

I picked up a mobile phone in the library this morning. I picked it up and wanted to give it to the librarian. Suddenly, the phone rang and I answered it. I heard a strange voice saying, “Please give the phone back to me. Meet me in the park in 20 minutes.” I had some time before the next class so I took the phone to the park.

I arrived there 20 minutes later, and there were six young men who looked like gangsters. I felt scared and wanted to go back. There was an older man who was the gang leader. He had a scar on his face and a dragon tattoo on his arm. It was very scary and I used my pocket knife to protect myself. My pocket knife was my daily necessity. It was because I was a private detective and many relatives of the criminals I caught came back for revenge.

One of the young men asked, “Where is my mobile phone? If you don’t give it back, I will hit you!” I gave the mobile phone to him and he looked carefully. Suddenly, he shouted, “Where is the password of my phone? Did you get it?” I thought he was a crook and wanted to steal my money. I said, “I don’t know what you are talking about!” He roared, “Don’t cheat me, you should pay me back!” I ran out of the park and turned back, and there were eight gangsters running after me.

I went into the alley and there were four men smoking. They were holding wooden clubs. I wanted to escape, but there were six gangsters at the back. I could not escape and needed to give them money. I was very worried and used the pocket knife to stab them. They were very careless and fell down one by one. I went to the library and pretended to read a book so that they wouldn’t find me.

When they went to the library, I called the police to go to the library door. I went out of the library and saw the gangsters being caught by the police. I got the good citizen reward. Then I needed to be careful everyday, because they were gangsters and they would revenge. I would not be safe anymore.

When I went back home, I saw two gangsters running after me and I went to my car to get my gun. When I closed my car door, two gangsters were behind me. They caught me to their headquarters. There were a lot of gangsters and they had many wooden clubs. I used my gun and shot the gang leader and called the police. The police found many debtors. They were very exhausted and starving. I was safe and did not need to be scared everyday.

I picked up a mobile phone in the library this morning. I picked it up and wanted to give it to the librarian. Suddenly, the phone rang and I answered it. I heard a strange voice saying, “Please give the phone back to me. Meet me in the park in 20 minutes.” I had some time before the next class so I took the phone to the park.

After 20 minutes I arrived there, there were six people. They looked like the gangsters. I felt scare and wanted to go back. The man called Jacky had a scar on his face and he had a tattoo of dragon. It was very terror and I used my pocket knife to prepare. Pocket knife was my articles for daily use. It was because if I done the case, the convict’s one’s parent retaliate of me. So I needed to have a pocket knife to preserve against me.

Jacky asked, “Where is my mobile phone? If you don’t give me I will hit you!” I gave the mobile phone to him and he look be careful. Suddenly, he shouted, “Why I lose my phone password! Did you get it?” I thought he was a cheater and wanted to steal my money. I said, “I didn’t know what you said!” He shouted, “You no need to cheat me, you should give me money!” I went out the park and I saw back, there were eight people ran after me.

I went to the alley and there were four people smoke and they took the wooden club. I wanted to go back, but the six gangsters at the back. I did not have any export and needed to give the money to them. I was very worried and used the pocket knife to hit them. They were very careless one on one and fell down in there and I went to the library. I used a Chinese story book to read. So that they couldn’t know I was the target.

When they went to the library, I called the police to go to the library door. I thought they were cheater. I went out the library and saw they all caught of the police. I got a good resident of a city reward. Then I needed to be careful everyday. It was because they were gangsters and could not relieve too. I will not safe anymore.

When I went back home, I saw two people ran after me and I went to my car to took my gun. When I closed my car door, two people were on my back. They could me to there headquarter. There were a lot of gangsters and they got wood club. I used my gun and shot the eldest of headquarter and I called the police to arrive there. The police found many calumniator of the loan there. They were very tired and hungry.

I picked up a mobile phone in the library this morning. I picked it up and wanted to give it to the librarian. Suddenly, the phone rang and I answered it. I heard a strange voice saying, “Please give the phone back to me. Meet me in the park in 20 minutes.” I had some time before the next class so I took the phone to the park.

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(continue the story. write 300 words)

WORDS YOU MAY USE:

gangsters 古惑仔

headquarters 基地

wooden club 木棍

alley 後街

The New Helen Keller ---amended

“There was a traffic accident in the Tai Koo. The victim was a child called Joelle. She lost her left hand. She was very scared and did not know why she needed to live. DDTV, Peter Chan reports!”

Joelle needed to live in the hospital for about two months. She only wanted to eat some bread and drink some milk. There was a famous doctor called Dr. Wong who could change are person’s memories. He was a magician too, and he had two apprentices. They were Jacky and Ben. When the doctor wanted to ask Joelle, she pushed the doctor away and shouted, “Who are you? Why are you here?” The doctor said, “I am Dr. Wong I will help you fulfill your wishes. I am a magician and I went to King’s Road Magic College. This school is in the magic world. If you want to become normal again, you will need to remember the thing you don’t want to remember!”

Then the doctor said the curse and Joelle disappeared. It was because the doctor said the wrong curse. Joelle went into the magic world. If she wanted to go back the real world, she needed to learn magic. If she could pass the magic test, she could become a magician and go back to the real world.

She learned how to turn into animals, and turn other people and magician into animals. She could use the broomstick to fly in the sky and make people lose their memories. She had passed all magic tests, and went back the real world. When she opened her eyes, she was sleeping in her bed in the hospital. She saw the doctor again.

The doctor asked, “What memories do you wanted to delete?” She said, “I don’t want to delete memories anymore, thank you for your idea and taking me to the magic world!” Then, she worked hard and was very active. Her parents felt she was likes Helen Keller. When she grew up, she became a famous writer and wrote forty- five story books.

“Hi My name is Peter. There had traffic unexpected in the Tai Koo. There was a child called Joelle. She lost her hand and she had a big shadow of child. She was very scared and did not know why she needed to be a person and why she needed to live in the world! DDTV Peter reported!”

Joelle needed to live in the hospital about two mouths. She only wanted to eat some bread and drink some milk. One day, a doctor called Mr. Wong. He was a famous doctor and he could change person’s memory. He was a conjurer, he had two apprentice and they were Jacky and Ben. When the doctor asked to Joelle, she pushed the doctor and shouted, “What is your name and why do you come in?” The doctor said, “My name is Mr. Wong, I was a conjurer and My College was King Road Magic College! This school was in the magic world. If you want to become right! You need to remember you thing that you don’t want to heart!”

Then the doctor said the charm and Joelle disappear into the world. It was because the doctor said the wrong charm. Joelle stay into the magic world if she wanted to go back the world, she needed to done all the magic, She needed to learn the magic things if she can pass all the magic test, she could become a conjurer and went back to the world of people.

She learned how to become an animals and how to make other people and conjurer be the animals. She could use the piassava to fly in the sky and she could use some charm to make people lost there memory. When she was past all the test of magic, she could go back to the world of people. When she opened her eyes, she was sleep in the bed of hospital. She saw the doctor again too.

The doctor asked, “What memories do you wanted to delete?” She said, “I don’t want to delete anymore, thank you your idea and you took me to the magic of the world!” Then, she word hard and she was very active to see the world. Her father and mother felt she was not Joelle and she was the new Helen Adams Keller.

After she grow up, she became a famous writer and she wrote forty- five story books too.

ORAL PRESENTATION

if I could delete and change one memory...

-- WHAT and WHY to delete? HOW to change?

• brain 腦
• memory 記憶
• regret 後悔

Who Stalked Me? - amended

When I went to school today, I saw a shadow at the corner of my eye. I was very scared but I didn’t do anything. I looked very calm so that he would not notice. Then, I walked quickly. Suddenly, I saw my best friend, Johnny. So, we went to school together. I was not scared anymore and we arrived at school. I went to my classroom, and the shadow disappeared. When it was recess time, I went to the tuck shop. It was on the ground floor. There were many people, and I played basketball with them. The basketball court was near the front door of the school.

When it was time for newspaper delivery, Johnny shot the basketball carelessly. I ran out and wanted to get back the basketball. Suddenly, a woman walked in front of me and she was our class teacher. She asked, “Why do you go out?” I answered, “Johnny shot the basketball outside, and I want to get it back!” She said, “It is good, but you are not careful!”

When I went back to school, a basketball hit me. There was a man behind a car at the school door. I thought, “Who is he?” When I went back to my class, there were two classmates outside my classroom. They said, “That old man always helps us!” I asked, “Why?” They said, “He does not have any children, so he always talks with us!”

I thought the old man was the shadow. So I went back home happily after school. When I saw the shadow again, I went near the shadow. He was the old man! He bought some food and said, “What’s your name?” I answered, “My name is Alex!” Then I talked with him for an evening. The old man was called Jeff, and he was eighty- five years old.

He was never married, and he did not have any children. He wanted to have a child before he passed away. He wanted to play with children. Then I went back home quickly. When I went back home, I saw a TV news report about an old man being killed by a car. He was called Jeff!

I cried, “Jeff, have you fulfilled your dream?”

When I was small, I liked to play the ant to make me happy. I was born in Hong Kong and my best comic or funny picture was Conan and BLEACH. I always bought it at seven eleven. I went to school by MTR or bus. I was very sporty and play basketball every recess at school. When it was Saturday I will go to swimming pool and when it was Sunday, I will play basketball.

I wanted to be a detective because I like watched detect books. I needed to done well at anything. After I done my job—student, I got ten A and I used my money of school, I opened a detective room.

Before forty years, I was a famous detective. I always search many witness, and done many legal case. I was very happy, because I was very famous. But new, I did not have anything! I was not sad, because I had my clever son and my beautiful life. I was very lucky too. When I wrote my life, I want to talk you. I married my life when I was thirty- four years old, she was called Jenny and she was twenty –nine years old when we married. Now she was forty-three years old and I was forty-eight and my son was twelve years old now.

My son was a sporty and clever child. He said when he grew up, he wanted to be a sportier, and his name was Winson. His name was very lucky of match. It was because he was a son and I wanted he won any match, so win and son put together and became Winson! He was good at swam and four of swim he know. He won the Hong Kong 2046 swimming match. He made twelve notes taken down in his secondary school. When it was Sunday, we would go to the public swimming pool swim of three hours and he enjoyed the swimming.

Today was my retire day, I was very happy. Many cases flew in my brain. When I was eighteen years old, I done my first case and I became famous. When one month before, I done my last case and I careful to look after my son.

I wanted my son to be a good swimmer and wanted he make Hong Kong to win the first Olympic Game gold medal of swimming.

Autobiography自傳

• think of how old you are now
• why do you decide to write an autobiography 決定?
• important重要 events事件 in your life, like your birth 出生, school days, wedding 婚禮, divorce 離婚, work, etc. how do you feel about them?

400 words

Unlucky day--Halloween: amended

Today was Halloween. I went to Ocean Park with my best friends, Johnny, Ben and Jason. It was the last day of the Ocean Park Halloween. When we went there, it was six o’clock. We went to the Chinese haunted house first. It was not scary at first. Suddenly, an old Chinese official ran towards our direction. We were very scared and wanted to leave the haunted house, but we could not find the exit. We went out of the house, but we only saw a forest. We were very tired, so we sat on the ground. When Ben sat down, he fell down into a hole. He got hurt.

We wanted to pull him out of the hole, but it was very small and narrow. Then, Ben fell deeper into the hole. I said to Johnny, “Could you use the mobile phone to call him?” He answered, “Okay! But my mobile phone does not have enough battery and we only have one chance to call!” Jason said, “We can call the police or Ocean Park! Alex stays here. Johnny and I go back and find the staff of Ocean Park!” I shouted, “No, maybe you stay here!”

Johnny said, “You should stay here, because it is your idea!” So Jason stayed there. Johnny and I went to the door again. When we went to the room, we did not see anything because it was very dark. Johnny turned on the light of his mobile phone, and we went to the correct exit. We went to the Call Center and said, “Can you give me a bottle of alcohol and a rope? My friend fell into the hole!”

The staff went with us and said, “Where did you find the hole?” Johnny said, “It was near the Chinese haunted house!” We went there and found Jason there. He was scared and yelled, “I… saw a ghost there!” We turned back and saw a Chinese ghost. There was some blood on his face and he had a man on his back. The man was covered with blood too! The staff went near the ghost.

The staff said, “It was our colleague and he was about to carry the dummy to the haunted house! Then the staff called the police and used the rope to save Ben. It was an unlucky day for us!

Who Stalk Me?

When I went to school today I saw a shadow in my corner of the eye. I was very scared but I never did anything. I looked like did not scared, so he will not fear. Then, I walked quickly and quickly. Suddenly, I saw my best friend—Johnny. So, we went to school together. I was not scared anymore and we arrived our school. I went to my class, and the shadow disappeared. When it was recess, I went to snack department. It was I in the ground floor. There were many people, so I played the basketball. The playground of basketball was near the school front door.

When it was the time of newspaper convey, Johnny shot the basketball carelessly. I ran out and wanted to take the basketball. Suddenly, a man walked in front of me he was our class teacher. She said, “Why do you go out?” I answered, “It was because Johnny shot the basketball outside, and I want to take it!” She said, “Although it is good, but you do not be careful!”

When I went back the school, a basketball hurt me. There was a man back to the car. I thought, “Who is he? I do not know!” When I went back my class, there were two classmate were outside my classroom. They said, “There is an old man, he always help us!” I questioned, “Why?” They said, “It is because he does not have any son, so he always talked with us!”

I thought the old man was the shadow. So I went back home happily after school. When I saw the shadow again, I went to the near to the shadow. He was an old man! He bought some food and said, “What is your name?” I answered, “My name is Alex! My school is…” Then I talked with him an evening. The old man called Jeff, he was eighty- five years old.

He did not married, so he did not have any son too! He wanted to have a son before him past away. He wanted to play with the children. Then I went back home quickly. When I went back home, I saw the TV news report. It was reporting an old man died by a car. The old man was called Jeff!

I cried and said, “Jeff, do you do your dream?” I did not cry anymore after four hours.

Unlucky day--Halloween

Today was Halloween. I went to Ocean Park with my friend. They were my best friends, Johnny, Ben and Jason. It was the last day of Ocean Park Halloween. When we went there, it was six o’clock. It was the time of Halloween room we play it. We went to the Chinese ghost house first. It was not scary at first, suddenly, an old Chinese office holder ran to our direction. We was very scared and wanted to go out the ghost house, but we lose the export. We went out the house, but we only saw the forest. We were very tired, so we sat on the land. When Ben sat down, he fell down in a hole. He got hurt himself. Ben used his hand to catch the clay.

We wanted to pull him outside, but the hole was very small and deep. Then, Ben fell down there. I said to Johnny, “Could you use the mobile phone to call him?” He answered, “Okay! But my mobile phone does not have enough battery and we only have one chance to call out!” Jason said, “We can call the police or Ocean Park! May be Alex stay here, Johnny and I go back and find the workers of Ocean Park!” I shouted, “No, may be you stay here!”

Johnny said, “It shall be you stay here, because you think this idea!” So, Jason stayed there. Johnny and I went to the room door again. When we went to the room, we did not see anything, it was because it was very dark. Johnny opened his mobile phone light, and we went to the correct exit. We went to the Call Center and said, “Can you give me a bottle of Lysol, and a rope? My friend fell down into the hole!”

Two workers went with us and said, “Where do you find the hole?” Johnny said, “It is near the Chinese ghost house!” We went to there and found Jason there. He shouted scared, “I… see a ghost there!” We turned it back and saw a Chinese ghost. His face had some blood and he took a man. The man had many blood too! The two workers went near the ghost and saw the ghost.

The worker said, “It was our colleague and he took the leave man he prepared to go to the ghost house! Then the worker called the police and used the rope to tide up him. It was the unlucky day of us!

Homework for these 2 weeks

1. Write a story about a stalker (400 words)

Stalk (verb) 追蹤
Stalker (noun; the person) 追蹤者

2. Write a horror恐怖 story (400 words)

scary令人恐懼
blood血
mysterious神祕man
haunted house鬼屋



SEE YOU ON 1 NOVERMBER (sunday)!

The Unfair Class

When I was eight years old, I was not very happy in my class. I was in class 3D, and I always answered my teacher’s questions. I had three best friends there. They were called Anson, Ma and Tony. We always played the Superman game. Ma was our leader. I was the second leader. Whenever I went to school on foot with my mother, my friends would chat with me.

One day, my teacher asked me how to solve a math question. The question was 7-2x9. I was always very happy to answer these questions. I was very certain and answered, “The answer is 45!” My teacher said angrily, “Why?” I said loudly, “It is because 7-2=5, then 5x9 is 45!” Other students laughed at me and someone shouted, “Alex is a fool, the question is very easy!” My teacher said I did not concentrate, so he ordered me to stand up during the whole class.

My teacher asked my classmates another question, “What is 8+2x9? Jenny, can you answer it?” Jenny stood up and answered, “It is 90!” When Jenny said the answer, I thought, “It is wrong, Jenny will need to stand up during class!” But my teacher said, “Sorry, you are wrong! It is because we need to multiply before adding! Sit down!”

I shouted at my teacher, “Why didn’t Jenny need to stand up during class?” My friends shouted too. My teacher said angrily, “It is because Jenny was careless! But you were not concentrating!” I was very angry and shouted, “How did you know I was not concentrating and Jenny was?” My teacher did not say anything and he took me to the Discipline Office.

My teacher said to the teacher at the Discipline Office that I was naughty in math class. He shouted to me angrily. The Discipline Office teacher asked, “Why were rude to your teacher?” I told her everything.

I went to my class again. The bell rang and it was recess. I played the Superman game with my best friends. Suddenly, my Math teacher found me and took me to the Discipline Office again. He said to me, “Sorry, I can’t say you were not concentrating, I have hurt your feelings!” From then on, my Math teacher always took care of me and Math became my favorite subject!

*PROOFREADING LIST*

1. tense
2. spelling
3. noun / verb / adj / adv
4. there is (NOT there have)
5. don’t mix up A and I
6. plural / singular
7. prepositions (e.g. on, at , in)
8. punctuation (e.g. . / , / … / ?)
9. pronouns (e.g. he, she, they)
10. capitalize the first letter in names (e.g. Facebook)
11. son't mix up THEN and THAN

My favorite lesson-Math

When I was eight years old, I was very not happy in my class. I was 3D class, but I always answered my teacher question. I had three best friends there. They were called Anson, Ma and Tony. We always played the game of superman. Ma was our playing leader. I was the se When I went to school on foot with my mother, my friends talked with me.

One day, my teacher asked me how to do this math. They math was 7-2x9 I was very happy when I answered the questions. I was very affirmative and answered, “The answer is 45!” My teacher said angrily, “Why?” I said loudly, “It is because 7-2=5 than, x9. So it is 45!” Other students smiled me and someone shouted, “Alex is a blockhead, it is very easy!” My teacher said I did concentrate, so he ordered me to stand up conduct a class.

After I stood up, my teacher asked the question for other classmates, “What is 8+2x9? Jenny, can you answer it? Than, Jenny stood up and answered, “It is 90!” When Jenny said the answer, I thought, “It is wrong, Jenny will need to stand up conduct a class!” But my teacher said, “Sorry, you are wrong! It is because we need to x the math, than + the math! Stand down!”

I shouted to my teacher, “Why did Jenny no need to stand up conduct a class?” My friend shouted too! My teacher said, “It is because Jenny is not careful! You are not concentrating!” I was very angry and shouted, “Why do you know I am not concentrating? But Jenny is concentrating?” My teacher did not say anything and he took me to Discipline Office!

My teacher said to the Discipline Office’s teacher this child did not well in math lesson! He shouted to my angrily! The Discipline Office’s teacher asked, “Why do you said to teacher angry and shout?” I answered, “My teacher say me do not concentrate and need me to …” Then, Discipline Office’s teacher knew the things.

I went to my class again and the bell sound and it was recess. I played the superman with my best friends. Suddenly, my Math’s teacher found me and took me to the Discipline Office again. The Math’s teacher said to me, “Sorry, I can not say you are concentrate, I hurt you heart!” Form than on, my Math’s teacher took care of me always and Math became my favorite lesson!

Write a story about FAIRNESS.

The New Nobel Prize - amended

A man called Samson made a new category for the 35th Nobel Prize. It was called the A man called Samson made a new category for the 35th Nobel Prize. It was called the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. A man called William Kennedy Laurie Dickson was Thomas Alva Edison’s student. After Edison had invented the phonograph, Dickson and Eugene Lauste became the students of Edison.

After Edison died, Dickson invented the movies. Then, he won the first Nobel Prize in Entertainment. Then, Dickson and Lauste left and they invented the Latham loop. They set up the Kinetoscope Exhibition Company. He died in 1935.

Jerry Yang invented Yahoo and many people got entertained by it since 1995. Yahoo helps you find games, knowledge, pictures and movies. There are many things you can find there. Yahoo can help you make a blog. It is fun! So, Jerry Yang got the 1997 Nobel Prize in Entertainment. After three years, Larry Page and Sergey Brin invented Google. They invented Gmail. Gmail is the first e-mail service with a very big storage.They got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment.

In 2004, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg invented Facebook. He was born in Amerca on 14th May, 1984.

There were three people who got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. I think they deserve this prize. I think they all worked very hard. They invented things that make many people happy.
. A man called William Kennedy Laurie Dickson was Thomas Alva Edison’s student. After Edison had invented the phonograph, Dickson and Eugene Lauste became the students of Edison.

After Edison died, Dickson invented the movies. Then, he won the first Nobel Prize in Entertainment. Then, Dickson and Lauste left and they invented the Latham loop. They set up the Kinetoscope Exhibition Company. He died in 1935.

Jerry Yang invented Yahoo and many people got entertained by it since 1995. Yahoo helps you find games, knowledge, pictures and movies. There are many things you can find there. Yahoo can help you make a blog. It is fun! So, Jerry Yang got the 1997 Nobel Prize in Entertainment. After three years, Larry Page and Sergey Brin invented Google. They invented Gmail. Gmail is the first e-mail service with a very big storage.They got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment.

In 2004, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg invented Facebook. He was born in Amerca on 14th May, 1984.

There were three people who got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. I think they deserve this prize. I think they all worked very hard. They invented things that make many people happy.

Charles Kao
Got a Nobel Prize

Do you think he deserves it? (1/3)

Think of a new category for the Nobel Prize? Who would you award it to? Why? (2/3)

Nobel Prize in Entertainment
Inventor of movies
William Kennedy Laurie Dickson
entertainment

Embarrassed Alex

Today, I want to talk about my embarrassing experience when I was small. When I was seven years old, I went to the mall with my family during Chinese New Year to buy some new clothes. There were many things to buy, but I only wanted to play with my toy cars at home. I was very naughty and liked playing with toys very much. When my family was looking for clothes for me, I saw a toy shop next to the boutique. I saw many toys there. I hoped my mother would buy some for me.

When I went back to the boutique, I asked my mother, “Can you buy some toy cars for me? If I need to buy new clothes, I think you need to buy a toy car for me!” My mother shouted, “I don’t know why I need to buy a toy car for you. If you don’t want to have new clothes, I will not buy for you!” I was very angry and shouted, “No, no, no, I need to have a toy car! I don’t want any clothes; I only want a toy car!” I shouted very loudly, so all the shoppers in the mall looked at me. I was very scared and went behind my mother’s back. I was very embarrassed. So, when I went to the mall again, I didn’t shout anymore.

ORAL PRESENTATION

Embarrassment尷尬

Embarrassed (adj)
Embarrass (v)

200 words

ORAL PRESENTATION

Embarrassment尷尬

Embarrassed (adj)
Embarrass (v)

200 words

Important treasure - amended

One day, a man called Jason found a private detective, Alex. Jason’s father was a rich man and opened a big museum in his attic. But his father died of heart disease. All his relatives received a letter: “If I die, I will put all my money at my office. There is a lot of money so you don’t need to work anymore. But I have put it into a safe! You find it, please! Be careful, there are many engines in my office!”

After Alex read this letter, he and Jason went to his father office. They saw many relatives of Jason. When Alex and Jason went into the room, his mother said, “Be careful, there are many engines, Alex!” They went to the office and found a letter on the table. It wrote: “The code is the month of birthday. If you get it wrong, you will fall into the engines and hurt!”

Alex wanted to say the answer, but Jason’s relatives fell into the engines. Alex knew the number and opened it. The letter wrote: “You need to go to the museum.”

Then, they found the museum’s switch under the sofa. When they turned it on, there were a lot of arrows shooting out. Many people hurt themselves. But no one helped the injured. Only Alex took them outside and called the police.

When they went to the entrance of the museum, they saw a letter which wrote, “No entry!” But many people ran inside, and they were hurt by the engines. Alex used his first aid kit to help the people. There were only two people who were not hurt. Alex used the torch and went inside. When they went to the terminal point, they saw the money, and a girl ran to take the money. Alex shouted, “Stop! It is not the money, there are engines!”

Alex took the girl away and they went out of the museum. Alex said, “I know where the money is!” Alex went to the office again and pushed a book. “Here is the money!” Many people snatched the money. Then they saw a letter under the money. It wrote: “Sorry, I think you will hurt yourself, not one will die. The blood of the injured is only ketchup! You cannot hurt Jason anymore, he is my son!”

After they read it, they always took care of Jason. Jason was very happy, and Alex went back to his own office to work.

Treasure Hunt

Legacy, dinosaur fossil,
Why-
Will(遺囑),
Where-museum dungeon(地下室), heirloom(家傳之寶), hint(提示), engines(機關)
One day, a man called Jason found Alex

Children Versus Robbers -amended

“Alex was going to school this morning, and he saw a man in black standing in front of the bank. Then Alex recognized him – he’s the wanted man in the news last night! The man was talking on the phone, “Hey, I’m going to start our plan. 7 o’clock tonight, right? I will bring 2 guns. See you at HSBC.” Alex knew he’s going to do something bad, but didn’t know what it would be. He wanted to tell the police, but he was afraid that the policemen would not believe him. He thought to himself, “Maybe I can stop him! Let me go home and plan about this!” He didn’t go to school and went home quickly.”

When Alex went back home, he saw his best friends and said, “Can you help me, there were two men wanting to rob the bank!” Jacky asked, “Are you cheating us?” Alex answered, “It is real, I do not cheat!” Sam asked, “Why don’t you tell to police?” Alex answered, “Do you think the police would believe us?” Ben suggested, “We can go there, but it should be after school!” Alex said, “Okay! Let’s talk about our plan in ‘Happy Park’ after school!”

After school, they brought many weapons and went to the “Happy Park”. Jacky said, “I have brought some ropes to tie up the two men!” Johnny was excited, “That’s a good idea! But I made some sgrens, so we can disturb them!” Sam brought a mobile phone, so if they have some accidents, they could call the police. Ben brought five toy guns for each of them. Alex brought five interphones.

Then, they made a plan. Alex would go to HSBC and observe what happened. Jacky and Sam would guard the gate. Johnny and Ben would stand in East Road and South Road. Ben asked, “What does the man look like?” Alex answered, “He wore a big blue T-shirt, a red pair of shorts, a green hat, a pair of yellow shoes.

They arrived at HSBC at half past six. Alex said to a teller, “At seven o’clock, there will be two men robbing the bank!” The teller said, “You can’t play this joke! You can sit there and wait for the robbers!” Alex was angry, but he needed to help the bank.

When it was seven o’clock, a man went into the bank and used a gun to point at a teller. Alex was very scared and used the interphone to call his other partners. Alex threw the sgran and used the rope to catch the man. After the smog disappeared, the man was caught. Alex used the interphones to call his friends, “Are there anyone running out of the bank?” Ben answered, “There is a man running out!” Alex shouted, “It was the robber!” Ben ran after the robber, used the toy gun to shoot the man and shouted, “Here is the robber!” Suddenly, a policeman appeared and caught him.

Finally, they got awarded and were famous in the school.

“Alex was going to school this morning, and he saw a man in black standing in front of the bank. Then Alex recognized him – he’s the wanted man in the news last night! The man was talking on the phone, “Hey, I’m going to start our plan. 7 o’clock tonight, right? I will bring 2 guns. See you at HSBC.” Alex knew he’s going to do something bad, but didn’t know what it would be. He wanted to tell the police, but he was afraid that the policemen would not believe him. He thought to himself, “Maybe I can stop him! Let me go home and plan about this!” He didn’t go to school and went home quickly.”

When Alex went back home, he saw his best friends and said, “Could you help me, there were two men, want to pillage!” Jacky asked, “Are you artifice us?” Alex answered to Jacky, Ben, Johnny and Sam, “It was really, I do not artifice!” Sam asked, “Why do you do not tell to police?” Alex answered again, “It is because, if I told the police, you think the police will believe us?” Ben, Johnny, Jacky and Sam answered together, “We can go there, but it should be after school!” Alex said, “Okay!” Alex said again, “It should be talk our plan in “Happy Park”.

After school, they brought many weapons and they went to the “Happy Park” Jacky said, “I bring some ropes, to truss up the two men!” Johnny shouted, “That’s a good idea! But I made some sgrens, so we can disturb them!” Sam bring a model photo, so if they have some unexpected, they could call the police. Ben brought five toy guns for each other. Finally, Alex brought five interphones.

Then, they made a plan. They need to bring the entire weapon, and they needed to run after the man! Ben asked, “What is they man?” Alex answered, “He wore a big blue T-shirt, a red short, a green hot, a pair of yellow shone. They saw the HSBC at half past six. Alex went to the HSBC and said to the attendant of HSBC, “At seven o’clock, it will have two men to pillage the money of this bank!” The attendant of the HSBC said to Alex, “You can’t play this thing; it is not speak in game! You can sit there and see the man!” Alex was angry, but he needed to help the bank.

When it was seven o’clock, a man went to the bank and he used a gun to directional the attendant of HSBC. Alex was very scared and used the interphone to call other coagents. Alex threw the sgran and used the rope to catch the man. After the smog disappeared, the man had caught there. Alex thought and used the interphones to call the friend, “Are there anyone ran out the bank?” Ben answered, “There have a man ran out!” Alex shouted, “It was the bandit!” Ben ran after the man and used the toy gun to shoot the man and shouted, “There a bandit!” Suddenly, a policeman appeared and caught him.

Finally, they got rules and famous in the school.

“Alex was going to school this morning, and he saw a man in black standing in front of the bank. Then Alex recognized him – he’s the wanted man in the news last night! The man was talking on the phone, “Hey, I’m going to start our plan. 7 o’clock tonight, right? I will bring 2 guns. See you at HSBC.” Alex knew he’s going to do something bad, but didn’t know what it would be. He wanted to tell the police, but he was afraid that the policemen would not believe him. He thought to himself, “Maybe I can stop him! Let me go home and plan about this!” He didn’t go to school and went home quickly.”

Write a story starting with this paragraph.

Words to use:
- accomplice
- toy gun
- weapon
- headquarters

THINK ABOUT:
- Would Alex ask for help? From adults or friends?
- What kind of things could he find from his schoolbag and his home to fight the bad guys?
- How could he protect himself (the bad guy had 2 guns and some other friends)?

Sam's Turning Point

Sam was a young child living in “Happy Village”. Sam was poor, Sam’s mother worked hard in the village. His mother used all her money to help Sam to go to school. So, Sam was very hard-working at school. When he took a bath, he needed to go to the river. Sam learned to swim at school, so he always swam in the river when he had a bath.

Sam did not have any friends, because he was very poor. The other children only played with a rich child, Ken. When Sam went to school, he was very good at swimming, so he used all his money to buy swimming trunks. Sam was very happy to have them, so he went to the river everyday. Sam went to the river and swam very fast. A swimming coach saw him and took him to a swimming pool. Sam was very amazed, because it was his first time to go to a swimming pool.

The coach said, “I am a swimmer in the Hong Kong team. I am Tom. If you can swim 50 meters in less than 0.9 seconds, I will make you a swimmer of the Hong Kong team!” Tom thought, “Sam can’t do it this time!” When Sam finished swimming, he checked the time and said, “Sorry, I was very slow, I will be faster!” Tom was very amazed, because Sam finished in 0.874 seconds. Tom apologized to Sam, “Can you join our team?”

Tom used a lot of money to help Sam to be a good swimmer. When Sam was 16 years old, he could swim very fast. He won nine competitions in the swimming gala of his school. Tom was very famous in the school.

Sam went to Beijing to join the Olympics one month later. He joined eight competitions and he won them all. He was the first Hong Kong athlete to win swimming gold medals. When he went back to Hong Kong, many reporters asked him, “How do you feel after winning eight medals?” Sam answered, “I thank my coach, my family and all my fans!”

Sam and his family became rich and his family did not need to work anymore. Tom told Sam, “You can’t be proud, you need to join other competitions! You can have one week to rest!” After Tom left Sam’s big house, Sam went to the river to swim again. Although he moved to another place, he always swam in the river.

When he went to school, many students played with him and he had many friends. The principal said, “Sam is our example. Although he is poor, he is very hard-working!”

A life-changing day

Broke --- (he was broke)
Won eight Olympic gold medals

Before: poor, no one knows me, laugh at me
After: rich, famous, strong, my country, respect me
Sport: swimming (breast stroke 400m, freestyle200m, back stroke 100m, 4x100 relay)
Alex: serious, poor, tough, 17
Coach(dad): strong, stern, National team:

The day: competition

My first memory

It was my first time to go outside the kindergarten when I was 4 years old. We had a barbecue because I needed to join extra-curricular activities. Our teachers helped us to cook the food. There were fishballs, chicken wings and sausages.

Before we ate the food, I talked to my best friends what games we would play afterwards. We decided to play UNO. I ate the sausages and fishballs first. Finally, I ate the chicken wings happily and they were very yummy. Then, our teachers taught me how to cook the food. It was my first barbecue!

Oral Presentation

My first memory-


Who? – My classmates and I
When?- K2
What? - BBQ
Where? – outside the kindergarten
Why? – extra-curricular activities
How? –

Feeling

Jacky’s Secret Guardian

Once upon a time, there was a secret in a village. A man who was called Jacky was a painter. He went to the village when he was twenty-two years old. When he went to the village, there were many shops and villagers. He went to the mountain and wanted to find a historic place.

When he went to the mountain, he saw a beautiful cat there. He didn’t know the cat was the mountain’s guardian. He saw that the cat looked very hungry, so he took it back home. The cat looked like a baby very much, so he called it Baby. When he was too tired to draw a picture, he saw the cat. He was not tired and drew many pictures. After he drew the pictures, there were many villagers going there and buying his pictures. Jacky felt very lucky.

One day, when Jacky was reading the newspaper, he read that the mountain’s guardian had disappeared. Jacky was very interested in this, and he used the computer to find the guardian. He found that the guardian was the cat living at his home. He was very scared and wanted to put the cat back. When Jacky held the cat up, he felt that it was very hot. Jacky knew if he didn’t put it back, the mountain might disappear. He was tired holding the cat and his hands were very hot and red.

Jacky arrived at the village and saw no villagers. It looked like a forest, and did not have anything. When Jacky put the cat back to the mountain, he saw that there were many shops and villagers in the village. Jacky was very sad, because he could not see the cat everyday.

Jacky married a girl after two years. He was very happy, because the girl was very beautiful. Her name was called Yoyo, and she was a painter too. They always drew together and they were very happy. When Jacky went to the village to buy some food, he forgot to bring the money. He found some money in the bag and thought, “Who put the money into my bag?”

Whenever Jacky forgot something, Yoyo would remind him. Jacky felt very lucky and they had a baby. Jacky called the baby Annie. One night, a man burned their house. Yoyo went out of the house and she caught the man. Then, they found a new house. Jacky knew Yoyo was the mountain’s guardian. He did not want to lose her and they lived happily in the new house.

Jacky's secrets!

Once upon a time, there was a secret in a village. A man who was called Jacky is a painter. He went to the village when he was twenty-two years old. When he went to the village, there were many shop and villagers. He went to the mountain and wanted to find a place of historic. When he went to the mountain, he saw a beautiful cat there. He didn’t know the cat is the mountain’s guardian. He saw the cat looked like very hungry, so he put it went to his home. He saw the cat very looked liked the baby, so he called it Baby. When he was very tired to draw a picture, he saw the cat, and he did not tired and drew many pictures. After he drew the pictures, there were many people went to there and bought his pictures. Jacky felt very lucky.

One day, when Jacky read the newspaper, he saw, the mountain’s guardian disappeared. Jacky was very interested in this, and he used the computer and found the mountain’s guardian. He saw the mountain’s guardian was the cat lived in his home. He was very scared and wanted to put the cat back. When Jacky took the cat up, he felt very hot of the cat. Jacky knew if he didn’t out it back, the mountain might disappeared. Jacky took the cat tired and his hand was very hot and red.

Jacky arrived the village and saw no any villager in the village. It looked like a forest, and did not have any things. When Jacky put the cat back to the mountain, he saw the village had a shop and people. Jacky was very sad, because he could not saw the cat everyday.

Jacky married a girl after two years. Jacky was very happy, because the girl was very beautiful. Her name was called Yoyo, she was a painter too. They always drew the picture together and they were very happy. When Jacky went to the village to buy some food, he forgot to bring the money to buy the food. He found some money in the bag and thought, “Who put the money into my bag?”

When Jacky forgot anything, Yoyo would help her to solve the question. Jacky felt very lucky and they had a baby. Jacky called the baby- Annie. One day night, a man burned there home. Yoyo went out the house and she caught the man and they found a house again. Jacky knew Yoyo was the mountain’s guardian. He did not want to lose “it” and they lived happy in the new house.

Write a story about secrets

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ORAL PRESENTATION

Today, I want to talk about my experience of being cheated. I was always cheated by my parents when I was young. The experience I remember the most is when I was seven years old, my parents and I went to the cinema and watched a movie called “101 Dogs”. When I watched the movie, I asked my parents, “What would happen if we sit close to the screen?” My parents answered, “Then the actors in the movie would catch you into the screen.” So I didn’t want to sit close to the screen when I was young.

When I was 10 years old, we went to the cinema and watched another movie. But we sat very close to the screen. When we watched the movie, I asked again, “Why aren’t we caught into the screen?” My parents answered, “It is not true. But if we sit close to the screen, we will be short-sighted.” Afterwards, I thought I was very stupid. I would not trust everything my parents said.

story about pranks - amended

Ken and Tommy were students in the guidance class of a secondary school. Tommy did not have friends in the class. It was because Tommy was a smart student in the class, but other classmates didn’t think so. Ken was the class leader. When Tommy went to school, Ken hit Tommy at the staircase. Tommy fainted. Ken took him to the classroom and stole Tommy’s wallet.

Tommy knew he had become a target. He wanted to tell the teacher. But Tommy thought, “If I told my teacher, I might become a target in the class!” Tommy was very frightened and wanted to go back home.

Ken was very bored and he told his classmates he wanted to play pranks on the teacher. When Tommy went to the classroom, he heard this idea. Tommy wanted to be Ken’s friend because Tommy was very bored everyday and was bullied by other children. Tommy had an idea to play pranks on his teacher. He thought, “I can put a mouse in his bag!” When the teacher went into the classroom, he saw a mouse and shouted, “Who put it into my bag?” Ken answered, “It was Tommy!”

Tommy stood outside the classroom when the teacher knew he did it. Tommy was very sad. When it was recess, Ken said cunningly, “You are very bad! You can’t be part of us!” Tommy went to the classroom and saw there was a picture on his chair. Ken’s friend played a prank on Tommy. During math class, the teacher saw the picture on Tommy’s chair and shouted angrily, “Why did you draw a picture on your chair, Tommy?”

Then, Tommy went out of the classroom again. He went to play basketball after school. He was very happy. When he wanted to go back home, Ken came to catch Tommy’s ball and shouted, “From now on, your ball is mine!”

When Tommy went back home, he had an idea and went to school the next day happily. Tommy went to school very early, then he put many frogs on all children’s chairs and wrote a letter. It wrote, “I don’t want to be hurt anymore!” After he played this prank, Tommy’s classmates and Ken became his friends. Ken felt very guilty, and they played basketball together. Tommy thought, “Playing pranks might not be a bad thing!”

CONTENT: 4/5 GRAMMER: 3/5

Write a story about pranks 惡作劇.

- play a prank on someone / play a joke on someone

The Revenge - amended

When Sam was young, he always hit other children. They were very angry and scared. Alex was Sam’s classmate, and Sam always hit Alex too. Alex was very angry and wanted to revenge. Alex had a best friend, Ken. Sam pushed Ken into the sea from the cliff. Ken was an Egyptian, and his corpse was sent back to Egypt.

When Alex was twelve years old, he solved a criminal case. He was determined to be a detective when he grew up. Alex went to the USA when he was nineteen years old. He was very hard-working and became a famous detective.

Before he went back to Hong Kong, he had already solved many cases. It was a kidnapping case in England. Another case was at Hong Kong’s Jockey Club. When Alex went back to Hong Kong, Sam went to his office and cried, “I have got a letter here. It wrote: ‘I am Ken, I will kill you!’ I am very worried!” Alex said, “I will help you! But we need to go to Egypt!” Then, Alex and Sam went to Egypt.

They found Ken’s parents in Egypt. They found Ken’s house very big. They found out that Ken was the Egyptian king’s son. Sam was very frightened. It was because he had laughed at Ken when they were thirteen years old. Sam felt sorry that he had killed Ken

Alex, Sam and Ken’s parents woke up at nine o’clock. Alex said, “We need to go to the pyramid to find Ken’s corpse!” They were very frightened when they went to the pyramid. There was a letter on top of Ken’s corpse. Sam read, “I will kill Sam when he goes back to Hong Kong!” Sam thought, “If I could go back to the past, I would take care of him.”

When Sam went back to Hong Kong, Sam died at the Hong Kong airport. Alex said, “Egypt’s king was a murderer!” Egypt’s king was shocked, “How did you know I used a knife to kill Sam?” Alex said, “You was not scared in the pyramid and you were the last person to have contact with Sam! You have paid your revenge!” The king said, “I have sadly lost my son and I need to help my son to revenge!” Alex asked, “Do you think your son want you to kill Sam?”

Finally, Ken’s father was sent to the jail!

Revenge of a Kings

When Sam was small, he always hit other children. Other children were very angry and worried. Alex was Sam’s classmate, and Sam always hit Alex. Alex was very angry and wanted to revenge. But, Alex’s best friend- Ken. Sam hit Ken to the sea from the ashore. Ken was a Egyptian, and his corpse was in the Egypt. When Alex was twelve years old, he solved a criminal case. Then, he determined to be a detective when he was grown up. But, Alex went to USA, when he was nineteen years old. Alex was very exerting oneself and he became a famous detective.

When he went it back, he had solved many criminal cases. They were in England’s kidnap case. Hong Kong’s adventure in a confined space case. When Alex went back Hong Kong, Sam went to Alex’s office and said, “I got two letter here. It writes: I am Ken, I will kill you! I was very worried!” Alex said, “I will help you! But, we need to go to Egypt!” Then, Alex and Sam went to the Egypt.

They found Ken’s parent in to the Egypt. When they went there, they saw Ken’s house was very big. They saw Ken was Egypt’s king son. Sam was very frightened. It was because he said to Ken was very poor when they were thirteen years old. Sam was very sorry to Ken’s father and Ken’s mother.

When it was night old o’clock, Alex woke up with Sam and Ken’s father and Ken’s mother. Alex said, “We need to go to the pyramidal to find Ken’s corpse. They were very frightened when they went to the pyramidal. There was a letter in top of Ken’s corpse. Sam read it, “I will kill you when you went back Hong Kong!” Sam thought, “If I could go back small, I will take care of him.

When Sam went to Hong Kong, Sam died in to Hong Kong international airport. Alex said, “Egypt’s king was a cutthroat!” Egypt’s king said amazed, “Why do you know I use the knife to kill Sam?” Alex said you did not worried and you were the last man to go with Ken. Alex said, “When you done your revenge!” The king said, “I lose my son was very sad and I need to help my son to revenge!” Alex answered, “Do you think your son know want you to kill Sam?”

Then, Ken’s father had went to the jails!

Write a story about REVENGE.

(verb: he revenges)
(noun: he pays a revenge)

Why revenge?
What is done to revenge?
Was it successful?
Afterwards, did the revenger feel happier? Or did he regret?

Alex and a Space

Once upon a time, there were are horse called Ben. He was a smile pet in the earth. When he was small, his mother had died. He was very sad. When he went to the park, a boy said, “Today, I kill a horse!” Ben was very angry, his angry made a space. The boy was very scared and he had hard-pressed in to the space. The boy was hungry and wanted to eat a lot of food. Finally, he died in the space. But Ben was very old and he only killed twenty-two years old. Then he died at 2nd February, 1984.

Form then on, an owner of horse had disappeared at 2nd February. Police was very worried. So they invited a detective. The detective was a smile boy. He was called Alex. He observed the owner of the horse. When he went to the horse room, he saw an old horse, the horse was very old. Alex was very frightened, because he saw the horse’s eye was very red. Alex was very inquisitive about the horse. Suddenly, he knew the horse was Ben. He ran after the horse. Finally, Alex went to the space. Alex was very smile and brought all the food and drink. Alex was in the space.

When he was full, he saw a door in to the line. He went to 1984 went he went of the door. He went out the door and he saw the horse room. Alex was very amazed, because he saw a boy wanted to kill the horse, so Alex prevent from the boy. Ben saw Alex helped his mother was very happy, and all the things were disappear. All the people who were disappearing and went back the world, but the space were disappear. If the space disappeared, Alex would disappear too.

Alex said to the horse, “I will disappear!” Ben’s mother was very sad and she used her power to helped Alex went back 2009’s Hong Kong. Alex was very happy. Then, he went to the police and he was famous and always needed to work everyday.

Adventure in a confined space 不能外出的空間

It can be as small as a box, or as big as a country.

Focus 重點 on feelings 感覺 and reactions反應.

My 1st birthday party! - amended

I think I have arrived at this world for one year. But why can’t I walk and can’t speak? I have been to the park for three times. I also need to go there today. Mama looked very happy, but I could not ask her why she looked so happy. I played with the children there for about two hours. Then Mama took me to the supermarket and bought a lot of food like sausages, pineapples, chips, etc. Afterwards, we went back home and she jotted something down. Mama took me to take the bus and went to Ocean Park to buy two tickets.

We entered the park, and I played the merry-go-round with Mama first. My grandparents arrived and we went to the restaurant to take lunch. I could eat a bit of porridge. It was my first time eating it, and it was very delicious. After we finished lunch, we played other thrill rides.

Afterwards, we went to the Ocean Theater to see dolphins and sea lions. Those dolphins were very lovely and we took a lot of photos. We were all tired and we took a bus home.

They were all busy to make dinner when we were home. I played with my sister in the living room for about an hour. Papa was holding a very big box when he came back. But he didn’t let me know what was inside the box. I was very curious, and always touched that box. I guessed that thing inside might be eatable.

Mama was afraid that I would break the box, so she put the box into the refrigerator carefully. I was unhappy and my sister cheered me up with a toy. After a moment, Mama took some sausages and pineapples to me and I ate them all. There was a lot of food during dinner. I ate a lot and they also gave me some juice. This was my first sip of juice.

We chatted after dinner. Suddenly, father took the box out, and sang a birthday song to me. It was a birthday cake inside that box. They divided the cake into many pieces. Papa blew the candle together with me. Then, we finished the cake happily. I had an unforgettable birthday.

SCORE:

2.5/5 (content) 3/5 (grammar)

My 1st borthday party!

Oh. I think I went to this world for one year. But why I can’t walk and why I can’t say the words? I went to the park three day. Today I need to go to the park too. Mama look like very happy but I can’t ask her why she looks like so happy. I played with those children about two hours. And then Mama took me to the supermarket and buys many foods like sausages, pineapple, chips, and many things. And then we went back home and settled down everything. Mama took me to take the bus and went to Ocean Park buy two tickets.

We enter the park, I played Marry-go-around with Mama first. My grandma and grandpa were arrived Ocean Park and we went to the restaurant to take the lunch. I can eat the food of a little liquid substance. Although I took a meal food, felt very delicious for the first time. After we finished the lunch then we played other dynamoelectric games.

After play the dynamoelectric games, we went to Ocean Theater to see dolphin and sea lion. Those dolphins were very lovely and we also take a lot of photo. We all played tired then we take a bus to go home.

They all busy to make dinner after went back home . I played with my sister in the living room about one hour. Father held a very big box when he comes back. But he didn’t make me know what inside the box. I was very curious, and always made that box. I felt that thing might can eat. Mother saw I would break the box, put back the box to refrigerator carefully. I was unhappy immediately then elder sister took a toy to coax me. After a moment, mother took some sausages and pineapples to me and I eat them all. They finished cookingat 7:00p.m. Today's dinner looked like many foods. I ate many foods and they also grant me to drink juice. This is my first sip juice.

Everyone chatted together after finished the dinner. Suddenly, father held that box to come out, and sang birthday song to me, that box was birthday cake. They divided the cake into many pieces. Father blew the candle together with me. Then, we finished the cake happily. Then I have a unforgettable one year old birthday.