28th December, 2008 cold and cloudy
Yesterday was a good and bad day for me. My cousin married his girlfriend, but the bride could not marry happily.
We were late to the wedding. But we could see them kiss, exchange rings and drink tea. Then, I played NDs for about one hour because my cousin wanted me to help her with the ‘Super Mario’ game. She was not good at it.
At 7pm, there was a lot of delicious food. There were crispy chicken, prawn and scallop, shark’s fin, fish, etc. My uncle drank a lot of wine and beer too. After we had dinner, we took photos with the bride and groom. When many relatives went back home, my cousin needed to get the bill. My uncle shouted at the manager, “This dinner wasn’t good, the fish was small and there were only two prawns for each table! No need to pay you $317,900!” And he swore at the manager. Suddenly, the groom’s mother shouted to the bride, “Why did you choose this place? You are not good!” So the bride cried.
Why did they need to quarrel? Why couldn’t the bride marry happily?
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20081221
The Adventures of Catherine - amended by Phyllis
Once upon a time, there was a girl called Catherine. She was a bad girl and everyone disliked her, so she did not have any friends.
One day, when she went to school, she saw a blind woman crossing a road. Catherine kicked the woman and the woman was hurt. The blind woman was angry and shouted, “Do you know who I am?” “I think you are a blind idiot!” Catherine yelled. “I am a magician! I think you should have a taste of what it’s like to be blind!” the woman shouted again. Suddenly, Catherine could not see anything. “Help! Help! What is happening? I am very scared!” Catherine cried. She did not know where she was because she could not see anything. The magician said, "If there are other people liking you, you can see again!"
One day, when she went to school, she saw a blind woman crossing a road. Catherine kicked the woman and the woman was hurt. The blind woman was angry and shouted, “Do you know who I am?” “I think you are a blind idiot!” Catherine yelled. “I am a magician! I think you should have a taste of what it’s like to be blind!” the woman shouted again. Suddenly, Catherine could not see anything. “Help! Help! What is happening? I am very scared!” Catherine cried. She did not know where she was because she could not see anything. The magician said, "If there are other people liking you, you can see again!"
From then on, she always gave poor people money. Her friends knew she has become good, so she had many friends. One day, when Catherine played with her friends happily, she saw the magician again. The magician said, "You can see now, don’t be a bad girl! Bye!" So everyone on earth knew this girl -- Catherine.
Then, she worked hard and became a wealthy person. She always went to poor countries and helped poor children to go to school.
20081214
First Draft - STORY about blindness
Once upon a time, there was a girl called Catherine. She was a bad girl and everyone disliked her, so she did not have any friends. One day, when she went to school, she saw a blind woman was cross a road. Catherine kicked the woman and the woman hurt herself. The blind woman was angry and shouted, “Do you know who I am?” “I thing you are blind stupid!” Catherine exclaim. “I am a magician! I think you need to blind.” The woman shouted angina. Suddenly, Catherine can’t saw anything. “Help! Help! What is happening? I am very scared!”, Catherine cried.She did not know where she was. because she could not see anything. The magician said, "If the other people like you, then you can see angian!"
From then on, she always gave the other pool people much money, and her friends know she became good, so she had many friend.One day, when Catherine played with her happily, suddenly she saw a magician angina. The magician said, "You can see now, don’t be bad girls! Bye! Bye!"So all the people in the earth knew this girl-Catherine.
Then, she worked hard and became a wealthy people. She always went to pool country and helped the pool children to go to school.
From then on, she always gave the other pool people much money, and her friends know she became good, so she had many friend.One day, when Catherine played with her happily, suddenly she saw a magician angina. The magician said, "You can see now, don’t be bad girls! Bye! Bye!"So all the people in the earth knew this girl-Catherine.
Then, she worked hard and became a wealthy people. She always went to pool country and helped the pool children to go to school.
Brainstorming
If you a blind
Bad things
Ø Every day will be scary
Ø Can’t another people(can’t see the face)
Ø Can’t tell who is who
Ø Can’t cross the road
Ø Every thing is dark
Ø Can’t play the computer games
Ø Can’t read the book
Ø May always hurt yourself(throw in the sea, neat to bring a cane)
Ø Can’t watch TV
Ø You may not remember the faces
Ø Can’t live happily
Good things
You don’t need to go to school
Many people care about you
Always sit on the wheelchair
Have many people to help you
Bad things
Ø Every day will be scary
Ø Can’t another people(can’t see the face)
Ø Can’t tell who is who
Ø Can’t cross the road
Ø Every thing is dark
Ø Can’t play the computer games
Ø Can’t read the book
Ø May always hurt yourself(throw in the sea, neat to bring a cane)
Ø Can’t watch TV
Ø You may not remember the faces
Ø Can’t live happily
Good things
You don’t need to go to school
Many people care about you
Always sit on the wheelchair
Have many people to help you
20081210
Oral presentation
BIG FISH
ORAL PRESENTATION for 8-10 minutes.
Think about:
ORAL PRESENTATION for 8-10 minutes.
Think about:
- is the father a liar (someone who tells lies)?
- why does the father always make up stories about himself?
- what does the son learn at the end?
Preparation
- watch the film and jot notes if needed.
- write a script in point form.
- practice at least once with the script in hand. make sure you time yourself.
- edit the script if it's too long / short / hard to understand.
Presentation
- Eye contact is important. you are talking to me, not reading to me.
- you don't have to tell me the story - i have already watched the film 3 times. just answer the questions.
- make sure that you have an introduction and a conclusion.
- be prepared to answer my questions.
ABCman's adventures
There was a typhoon coming to Hong Kong at midnight. Everyone was preparing for it. Harry Potter’s family was hard- working so they had no time to prepare for the typhoon.
Suddenly, a man called ABCman flew in the sky. He shouted, “I ought to help the people, the typhoon is so big!” He used a weapon called “A” to make the typhoon stop, then he used another weapon called “B” to push the typhoon out of the world. Finally, he used weapon “C” to make it disappear in the sky. He had power like Superman’s but Superman was sleeping at that time.
A reporter ran after ABCman and asked, “Hi! What’s your name?” When ABCman wanted to answer, Superman appeared and said, “Don’t answer!” Then, ABCman went back home. When he was back home, Harry Potter saw him and said, “Hi! I am Harry Potter!” ABCman said, “What happened?” “Five witches are in the school near Ocean Park.” “Okay! I will kill them next Saturday.”
-----------Next Saturday----------
The five witches had nothing to do and went to Ocean Park. ABCman went there too. He ran after them. The witches knew he was after them and they turned him into a frog. Superman knew this, and he helped ABCman to become a man again. The witches were so sad, because they were ordered by Harry Potter to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and Superman used a “super-weapon” called “D” to kill Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman did not go out because there was no more crime in Hong Kong.
Suddenly, a man called ABCman flew in the sky. He shouted, “I ought to help the people, the typhoon is so big!” He used a weapon called “A” to make the typhoon stop, then he used another weapon called “B” to push the typhoon out of the world. Finally, he used weapon “C” to make it disappear in the sky. He had power like Superman’s but Superman was sleeping at that time.
A reporter ran after ABCman and asked, “Hi! What’s your name?” When ABCman wanted to answer, Superman appeared and said, “Don’t answer!” Then, ABCman went back home. When he was back home, Harry Potter saw him and said, “Hi! I am Harry Potter!” ABCman said, “What happened?” “Five witches are in the school near Ocean Park.” “Okay! I will kill them next Saturday.”
-----------Next Saturday----------
The five witches had nothing to do and went to Ocean Park. ABCman went there too. He ran after them. The witches knew he was after them and they turned him into a frog. Superman knew this, and he helped ABCman to become a man again. The witches were so sad, because they were ordered by Harry Potter to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and Superman used a “super-weapon” called “D” to kill Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman did not go out because there was no more crime in Hong Kong.
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characters (2-3)
crying baby / Superman / Alex / Harry Potter / mother / Phyllis / ABCman/
time (2)
noon / midnight / after the typhoon / 2nd December / 2005 / 7:30pm / when the baby cries
venue (2)
swimming pool / under the bed / between two teeth / on the computer screen / garden / underground / airport / aquarium
emotions (1-2)
jealous / excited / bored / amazed / interested / scared / angry / sad / nervous / amused
In the midnight there was a typhoon coming to Hong Kong, and everyone was preparing for it. Harry Potter’s family was hard working and no time to prepare for the typhoon.
crying baby / Superman / Alex / Harry Potter / mother / Phyllis / ABCman/
time (2)
noon / midnight / after the typhoon / 2nd December / 2005 / 7:30pm / when the baby cries
venue (2)
swimming pool / under the bed / between two teeth / on the computer screen / garden / underground / airport / aquarium
emotions (1-2)
jealous / excited / bored / amazed / interested / scared / angry / sad / nervous / amused
In the midnight there was a typhoon coming to Hong Kong, and everyone was preparing for it. Harry Potter’s family was hard working and no time to prepare for the typhoon.
Suddenly, a man called ABCman and flew in the sky and shouted, “I ought to help the people, the typhoon is so big!” He used “A” to made the typhoon shop, then, he used “B” to push the typhoon out of the world, finally used “C” to made it disappeared in the sky. He has power like superman but superman was sleeping at that time. “Hi what, is you name?” a reporter asked. When ABCman when to tell, superman said, “Go out now!” Then, ABCman was gone out. When ABCman went back home, Harry Potter saw him and said, “Hi! I am Harry Potter!” ABCman said, “What happen?” “Five witches are in the school near the Ocean Park.” “Ok! I will kill them next Saturday.”
-----------Saturday----------
Saturday, five witches were no things to do and they went to Ocean Park. Then ABCman went to Ocean Park too. So he ran after them. The witches knew ABCman was run after them and made ABCman became a frog. Superman knew this thing, so he help the ABCman became a man again. The witches were so sad, because they gave Harry Potter order to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and superman used super “D” to kill the Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman do not go out now because not bad things in Hong Kong.
-----------Saturday----------
Saturday, five witches were no things to do and they went to Ocean Park. Then ABCman went to Ocean Park too. So he ran after them. The witches knew ABCman was run after them and made ABCman became a frog. Superman knew this thing, so he help the ABCman became a man again. The witches were so sad, because they gave Harry Potter order to kill ABCman.
Finally, ABCman and superman used super “D” to kill the Harry Potter. From then on, ABCman do not go out now because not bad things in Hong Kong.
Non-linear writing - amended by Phyllis
When I am reading the frontpage of the newspaper this morning…
Hong Kong News Sunday 20-5-2008
Alex Law Chun Yin, private detective, solved a murder case…
“It’s me!” I shout. I know this case. It went like this…
When I had lunch in a restaurant last Saturday, there was a man shouting in the bathroom, “Help! Help!” But I did not know what happen. Afterwards, a child went into the bathroom and screamed, “A man died in the bathroom!” When I heard him, I was very shocked and ran into the bathroom. I saw a man stabbed by a knife. I asked all the people not to go out of the restaurant because I thought the killer had not escaped. We all waited for the policemen.
After two minutes, four policemen saw the dead body and ordered, “Everybody please give your bags to me one by one and open them,” When a man saw the police, he said, “I wanna go to the public toilet!” And he ran away. When the policemen opened his bag, I saw that there were a lot of drugs. When the police saw the drugs, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after him and shouted, “You are the killer, because the victim knew you have lots of drugs and you killed him.”
Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I became a super-detective.
Hong Kong News Sunday 20-5-2008
Alex Law Chun Yin, private detective, solved a murder case…
“It’s me!” I shout. I know this case. It went like this…
When I had lunch in a restaurant last Saturday, there was a man shouting in the bathroom, “Help! Help!” But I did not know what happen. Afterwards, a child went into the bathroom and screamed, “A man died in the bathroom!” When I heard him, I was very shocked and ran into the bathroom. I saw a man stabbed by a knife. I asked all the people not to go out of the restaurant because I thought the killer had not escaped. We all waited for the policemen.
After two minutes, four policemen saw the dead body and ordered, “Everybody please give your bags to me one by one and open them,” When a man saw the police, he said, “I wanna go to the public toilet!” And he ran away. When the policemen opened his bag, I saw that there were a lot of drugs. When the police saw the drugs, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after him and shouted, “You are the killer, because the victim knew you have lots of drugs and you killed him.”
Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I became a super-detective.
20081119
Non-linear writing
When I am reading the frontpage of the newspaper this morning…Hong Kong News Sunday 20-5-2008Alex Law Chun Yin, private detective, solved the murder case…“It’s me!” I shout. I know this case. It is about this…
When I had a lunch in restaurant, the W.C had a man shouted “Help! Help!” But I do not know what happen. After a child went to the W.C and said “A man died in the W.C!” When I heard, I was very amazed and ran into the W.C, I saw a man died by a knife. I order all the people don’t go out the restaurant because I thought the killer did not run out. I order all the people stayed in the restaurant and waited the policemen. After two minutes, four policemen saw a man died and shouted “Give your entire bag to me and open it,” After one and one. When a man saw the police, he said “I want to go to W.C!” and run away. When the policemen open his bag, I saw there are many poisons. When they police saw it, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after the man and shouted “You are the killer, because the man knew you have many poisons so you kill the man.” Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I can became a supper detective.
When I had a lunch in restaurant, the W.C had a man shouted “Help! Help!” But I do not know what happen. After a child went to the W.C and said “A man died in the W.C!” When I heard, I was very amazed and ran into the W.C, I saw a man died by a knife. I order all the people don’t go out the restaurant because I thought the killer did not run out. I order all the people stayed in the restaurant and waited the policemen. After two minutes, four policemen saw a man died and shouted “Give your entire bag to me and open it,” After one and one. When a man saw the police, he said “I want to go to W.C!” and run away. When the policemen open his bag, I saw there are many poisons. When they police saw it, they thought the man was a doctor. But I ran after the man and shouted “You are the killer, because the man knew you have many poisons so you kill the man.” Finally, my assistant caught him and called 999. After this case, I can became a supper detective.
NON-LINEAR writing
Write a story based on one or more of the following themes:
- jealousy
- revenge
- mystery
- regret
____
WORDS YOU MAY USE
- past -- present -- future
- detective
- investigate the case
- murderer / killer
- suspect
- evidence
- clue
- murder weapon (gun, knife, poison, rope, stone)
- other ways of killing (drowning, suffocating, burning, strangling)
- jail
- handcuffs
- assistant
- crime
Alex disappeared! - amended by Phyllis
I woke up this morning and went out to get the newspaper at the door. The front page had my picture on it and the headline wrote:
I read on:
In 2028, I went to the school to find the witches and yelled, "If you don't make me an ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me go back to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
ALEX DISAPPEARED!
I read on:
"Alex should be back from school yesterday at 5pm, but he wasn’t. His family was now searching for him.” I was shocked. I was home and I had not disappeared!
When I went into the bathroom, I saw that the child in the mirror had a blue face. “It’s me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and asked, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I had died in Ocean Park’s shark aquarium, because the witches had used sharks to kill us.
I was very angry, because I thought it was them again. They must have used the magic sweets to make me become a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went back home. But my family shouted, "You are NOT Alex!" I was so sad and cried, "Witches I ought to kill you, if I can't kill you then I am not ALEX! Make me an ordinary person!" When I thought and thought, “I am small now, after 10 years, I will kill you!”
When I went into the bathroom, I saw that the child in the mirror had a blue face. “It’s me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and asked, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I had died in Ocean Park’s shark aquarium, because the witches had used sharks to kill us.
I was very angry, because I thought it was them again. They must have used the magic sweets to make me become a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went back home. But my family shouted, "You are NOT Alex!" I was so sad and cried, "Witches I ought to kill you, if I can't kill you then I am not ALEX! Make me an ordinary person!" When I thought and thought, “I am small now, after 10 years, I will kill you!”
In 2028, I went to the school to find the witches and yelled, "If you don't make me an ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me go back to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
20081116
Alex Disappeared
I woke up this morning and went out to get the newspaper at the door. The front page wrote had my picture on it and the headline wrote:
ALEX DISAPPEARED!
Alex should be coming back from school yesterday at 5pm, but he hadn’t. His family are now searching for him.
I was shocked. I am home and I haven’t disappeared!
When I went to the bathroom, I saw the child in the mirror had a blue face, “It is me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and said, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I died in the Ocean Park in the shark aquarium, because the witches used the shark to kill us. I was very angry, because I thought the use the magic sweet to make me became a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went to me home. But my family shout "You are no ALEX!" I was so sad and said "Witches I ought to kill you, If I can't kill you then I am no ALEX,make me became I ordinary person!"
2038, I went to the school to find the witches and said "If you don't make me become a ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me went to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
ALEX DISAPPEARED!
Alex should be coming back from school yesterday at 5pm, but he hadn’t. His family are now searching for him.
I was shocked. I am home and I haven’t disappeared!
When I went to the bathroom, I saw the child in the mirror had a blue face, “It is me!” I shouted loudly. Then I went to school and said, “Where is Alex?” The other children thought I died in the Ocean Park in the shark aquarium, because the witches used the shark to kill us. I was very angry, because I thought the use the magic sweet to make me became a blue child. I ought to revenge. Then, I went to me home. But my family shout "You are no ALEX!" I was so sad and said "Witches I ought to kill you, If I can't kill you then I am no ALEX,make me became I ordinary person!"
2038, I went to the school to find the witches and said "If you don't make me become a ordinary person, I will kill you!"
The witches made me went to 2008 and I became an ordinary child again.
American Election - amended by Phyllis
When I heard that Obama was elected the American president, I was very happy. I think Iraqis and Americans will be happy too because they do not want to fight with each other. I have this dream of world peace too. When George W. Bush became the president of USA in 2000, he ordered the USA army to fight Iraq and McCain thought the same. But Obama said, “Change！” He meant people should not fight with each other, so I think Obama is a good president.
20081113
When I hear the USA premier is Obama, I was very happy. Iraq people and USA people was happy to because did not want to fight with each other, so I has this to dream. 2000years, when Bush, George W. became premier, he order USA rank fight Iraq and McCain dream sane. But Obama always said “turn！”that mean don’s fight with each other, so I think Obama is a good premier.
20081107
2nd November, 2008 sunny and hot
Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school.
The five witches looked so polite and always gave us some sweets. Since they never torture us, they used sweets to make you become a blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, you have to learn how to see them. If the women’s eyes are purple and they are bald, that means they are witches. All witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers hanging around the school gate and giving us some sweets. I wanted to take the sweets, but I saw the teachers had purple eyes. Their hair looked like threads and they had long nails, so I didn’t take the sweets. After lunch, the five teachers took my class to the music room. Suddenly, I heard them speaking softly, “I can use them to release my anger.” I heard these words and politely asked, “Can I go to the W.C., please?” She said, “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was scared to go to school!I think I ought to call 999！
Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school.
The five witches looked so polite and always gave us some sweets. Since they never torture us, they used sweets to make you become a blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, you have to learn how to see them. If the women’s eyes are purple and they are bald, that means they are witches. All witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers hanging around the school gate and giving us some sweets. I wanted to take the sweets, but I saw the teachers had purple eyes. Their hair looked like threads and they had long nails, so I didn’t take the sweets. After lunch, the five teachers took my class to the music room. Suddenly, I heard them speaking softly, “I can use them to release my anger.” I heard these words and politely asked, “Can I go to the W.C., please?” She said, “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was scared to go to school!I think I ought to call 999！
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1. What were you doing?
2. How did the witch come to you?
3. What did she look like?
4. Did you know she was a witch?
5. Where had she taken you?
6. Were you in any danger?
7. How did you escape?
2nd November, 2008 sunny and hot Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school. They looked so polite and always gave yousome sweets. Since they never torture you, they used sweets to make you becomea blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, if the eyes ispurple and bald, that means she is a witches. you have to learn how to see them. The witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers stayed in the school door and gave us some sweets. After lunch, five teacher take my class to music room. Shuddery, I heard she speak softly “I can use them to vent,” I heard this words and said “Can I go to W.C, please?” She said “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was worry to go to school！
I think I ought to call 999！
2. How did the witch come to you?
3. What did she look like?
4. Did you know she was a witch?
5. Where had she taken you?
6. Were you in any danger?
7. How did you escape?
2nd November, 2008 sunny and hot Today is a bad day for me. I saw five witches at my school. They looked so polite and always gave yousome sweets. Since they never torture you, they used sweets to make you becomea blue kid. If you didn’t want to become a blue kid, if the eyes ispurple and bald, that means she is a witches. you have to learn how to see them. The witches have long nails, so they wear gloves.
Today when I went to school, I saw five teachers stayed in the school door and gave us some sweets. After lunch, five teacher take my class to music room. Shuddery, I heard she speak softly “I can use them to vent,” I heard this words and said “Can I go to W.C, please?” She said “Ok！” Then I ran away. I was worry to go to school！
I think I ought to call 999！
20081021
A world without...
Write a story about you waking up one day to find that any one of the following has not been invented:
1. glasses
2. air-conditioner
3. television
4. telephone
5. computer
6. car
7. aeroplane
8. book
9. camera
10. light bulb
1. glasses
2. air-conditioner
3. television
4. telephone
5. computer
6. car
7. aeroplane
8. book
9. camera
10. light bulb
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THINK ABOUT:
1. what the world will become?
2. how can you change the situation?
ALICE IN THE WONDERLAND SEQUEL - amended by Phyllis
When Alice got up, she saw a rabbit running fast. “It was a rabbit in my dream!” Alice shouted and ran after the rabbit. Her sister ran with Alice too. “Oh no, help me!” Alice shouted again and fell with her sister into the hole.
They walked and walked. Suddenly, a man wearing a hat called Hatter ran to their left. “Where is this place?” Hatter murmured. “I know, it is the other world. Let’s go there！” said Alice happily. A mouse fell into the hole and said quickly, “Hi I am…” “You are Mouse！” Alice said.
"We ought to go into our house, or else we will die. There’s no food and water here. Help us please!” Alice and her sister cried.
A caterpillar lay down on the ground and said, “Babies, go away from this place faster! If you don’t run away, you will be killed by the Queen and King of Hearts. Let’s go to the stairs beside the hole, quickly!”
The playing cards, the King and the Queen surrounded the two girls. “They are stupid!” all the playing cards shouted. “Music, quick!” the King ordered and danced.
Song:
King was angry, Girls walk slowly,
King was coming, Girls was running,Help…Help…Help Help…Help…HelpCatch you…Catch you.. Help you…Help you…
The playing cards caught the two girls. “Drink the magic potion to make you bigger!” Cheshire cat laid on the tree and shouted！ Alice became bigger and bigger and exclaimed, “Go back to you heart house, and don’t use Dodo and Hedgehog to play golf again！”
Finally, Alice and her sister went back to their house. Sometimes they would go back to the hole to check if the king had treated the animals well.
They walked and walked. Suddenly, a man wearing a hat called Hatter ran to their left. “Where is this place?” Hatter murmured. “I know, it is the other world. Let’s go there！” said Alice happily. A mouse fell into the hole and said quickly, “Hi I am…” “You are Mouse！” Alice said.
"We ought to go into our house, or else we will die. There’s no food and water here. Help us please!” Alice and her sister cried.
A caterpillar lay down on the ground and said, “Babies, go away from this place faster! If you don’t run away, you will be killed by the Queen and King of Hearts. Let’s go to the stairs beside the hole, quickly!”
The playing cards, the King and the Queen surrounded the two girls. “They are stupid!” all the playing cards shouted. “Music, quick!” the King ordered and danced.
Song:
King was angry, Girls walk slowly,
King was coming, Girls was running,Help…Help…Help Help…Help…HelpCatch you…Catch you.. Help you…Help you…
The playing cards caught the two girls. “Drink the magic potion to make you bigger!” Cheshire cat laid on the tree and shouted！ Alice became bigger and bigger and exclaimed, “Go back to you heart house, and don’t use Dodo and Hedgehog to play golf again！”
Finally, Alice and her sister went back to their house. Sometimes they would go back to the hole to check if the king had treated the animals well.
"said"
- murmur / whisper (say quietly)
- shout / yell / cry (say loudly)
- scream 尖叫
- ask / question 問
- explain 解釋
- exclaim 興奮地大叫
- order 命令
20081020
ALICE IN THE WONDERLAND SEQUEL.
When Alice was got up, she saw a rabbit ran faster. “It was a rabbit on my dream！”Alice shouted and ran after the rabbit. Her sister ran with Alice too. “Oh no help me！”Alice shouted again and threw with her sister on the hole. They walked and walked. “Where is this?” Duchess said smelly. “I know, it is the other world.” let’s go to there！”said Alice. “Hi I am…” Mouse said. “You are Mouse！”Alice said. “We ought to went to our house, help us please,” the two girl said.
When Alice was got up, she saw a rabbit ran faster. “It was a rabbit on my dream！”Alice shouted and ran after the rabbit. Her sister ran with Alice too. “Oh no help me！”Alice shouted again and threw with her sister on the hole. They walked and walked. “Where is this?” Duchess said smelly. “I know, it is the other world.” let’s go to there！”said Alice. “Hi I am…” Mouse said. “You are Mouse！”Alice said. “We ought to went to our house, help us please,” the two girl said.
Caterpillar said “Baby went to this place faster, if you didn’t ran away, you will died by King of Hearts, let’s went to the share beside the hide, quickly,”
“There are stupid” all the playing cards man shouted. “Music, quickly” the King said.
Song:
“There are stupid” all the playing cards man shouted. “Music, quickly” the King said.
Song:
King was angry, Girls walk slowly,
King was coming, Girls was running,
Help…Help…Help Help…Help…Help
Catch you…Catch you Help you…Help you…
The playing card man caught the two girls. “Eat the magic potion to made you bigger,” Cheshire cat shouted！ Alice became bigger and bigger and shouted “went to you house, don’t use Dodo to play golf！”
Finally, Alice and Eaglet went to there house, sometime, they went to the hole to visited king it is took to the other animals good?
Help…Help…Help Help…Help…Help
Catch you…Catch you Help you…Help you…
The playing card man caught the two girls. “Eat the magic potion to made you bigger,” Cheshire cat shouted！ Alice became bigger and bigger and shouted “went to you house, don’t use Dodo to play golf！”
Finally, Alice and Eaglet went to there house, sometime, they went to the hole to visited king it is took to the other animals good?
20081019
Fairy tales
Write a sequel 續集 to ALICE IN THE WONDERLAND.
words you may use:
words you may use:
- evil (very bad)
- lovely 可愛
- kind (good-hearted)
- playing cards 紙牌
- magic potion 藥
Characters in Alice's Adventures in Wonderland:
Alice
The White Rabbit
The Mouse
The Dodo
The Lory
The Eaglet
The Duck
Bill the Lizard
The Caterpillar
The Duchess
The Cheshire Cat
The Hatter
The March Hare
The Dormouse
The Queen of Hearts
The Knave of Hearts
The King of Hearts
The Gryphon
The Mock Turtle
Alex newspaper - amended by Phyllis
Today, there was a small argument, and a father was hit in the eye!
It goes like this…The father wanted to take his two sons to the park. When they went out of their flat, there were other two men in the lobby. One was called Ben, the other Tony and Tony’s girlfriend Ying.
When the two men and one of the children went into the lift, Ben suddenly said angrily, “Get out, stupid!” “Wait for the other lift, this one is ours, baby!” Tony shouted. The child’s father was angry and took his children into the lift first. The other two men hit the father’s eye. Ying used a bag to hit the father’s back. A child used his father’s phone to call 999.
The father had to stay in the hospital for two months and the police arrested the other two men.
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It goes like this…The father wanted to take his two sons to the park. When they went out of their flat, there were other two men in the lobby. One was called Ben, the other Tony and Tony’s girlfriend Ying.
When the two men and one of the children went into the lift, Ben suddenly said angrily, “Get out, stupid!” “Wait for the other lift, this one is ours, baby!” Tony shouted. The child’s father was angry and took his children into the lift first. The other two men hit the father’s eye. Ying used a bag to hit the father’s back. A child used his father’s phone to call 999.
The father had to stay in the hospital for two months and the police arrested the other two men.
(145 words)
Alex newspaper
Alex newspaper
Today, there were small argument, but a father is hit in the eye
！
It was about this...
The father wanted to take his two sons. When they went out their house, the other two men. One was call Ben, the other was Tony and Tony’s girl friend call Ying. When two men and one child went to the lift, suddenly “went back stupid,” Ben angry said. “Wait the other lift, this lift is us bye！ bye！” Tony shout. The child’s father was angry and took their children in the lift first. Two men fight the father’s eye. Ying use a bag to fight the father back. The one child used his father phone to call 999.
Today, there were small argument, but a father is hit in the eye
！It was about this...
The father wanted to take his two sons. When they went out their house, the other two men. One was call Ben, the other was Tony and Tony’s girl friend call Ying. When two men and one child went to the lift, suddenly “went back stupid,” Ben angry said. “Wait the other lift, this lift is us bye！ bye！” Tony shout. The child’s father was angry and took their children in the lift first. Two men fight the father’s eye. Ying use a bag to fight the father back. The one child used his father phone to call 999.
The father ought to stay hospital two moths and the police arrest the other two men.
By Jenny Chan
20081012
"SOS” superman helps me? -- Amended by Phyllis
Halloween is on 31st October. Five people went to a mountain on that day. They were Ben, Jenny, Ken, Tony and Sam.
When it was 11 p.m., they stayed in the mountain. They had dinner there. They went to the forest at midnight. “Help me！” Ben suddenly screamed. Many monsters caught Ben away.
When the monsters brought Ben to another forest, they stopped when they were next to some yellow trees. There were many witches.〝You have to become Peter Pan！”the witches shouted. Then, the witch used a curse to make him into Peter Pan. “At one o’clock Ben will became an evil man called Peter Pan,” shouted a witch.
The other four children were trying to save Ben, and they saw the trees turning from green to red to blue to, finally, black. “I think we went to a ghost forest,” said Sam. “Let’s go out of the forest.” When they turned back, a ghost caught them and put them into a jail.
In the jail, they saw Ben again. ”Ben, why didn’t the monsters catch us, but only you?” asked Ken. “I don’t know！” Shouted Ben. A man opened the jail door. “I think he is Batman！” murmured Ken. “No, he is Spiderman！” “Hi, my name is Superman,” the man said. Suddenly, a witch, a ghost, a vampire, a werewolf, a wizard, Tinkerbell, an invisible monster, Frankenstein and God of Death came. Superman used super hand to make them run away.
When the children and superman went out of the forest at 1 a.m., Ben flew in the sky and became Peter Pan！”Superman, you have to die now！Bye-bye！” Peter Pan said angrily. Superman suddenly became huge and used super light to turn Peter Pan back to Ben. Finally, the five children went back to their house and fell asleep quickly.
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(319 words)
『SOS』 superman helps me?
31stoctober is Halloween, that day have five people gone to a mountain.
They were Ben, Jenny, Ken, Tony and Sam.
When it was eleven O’clock, they stay in the mountain. They ate dinner in the mountain too. Eleven O’clock they went to the forest. 「help me！」 Ben said. Many Jesus caught Ben away.
When they ran after Jesus, they saw the trees were green turn red turn blue turn............................. Finally turn black. 「I think we went to a ghost forest.」said Sam. Let’s went out forest. When they turn back, a ghost caught them in the jail.
In the jail, they saw Ben again.「Ben why did Jesus not caught us, only caught you?」said Ken. 「I do not！」said Ben. I man open the jail door. 「I think he is batman！」said Ken. 「No, he is Spiderman！」 said Tony. 「Hi my name is superman.」the man said. Suddenly, Jesus, Witch, Ghost, Vampire, Werewolf, Wizard, Tinkerbell, Invisible monster, Frankenstein and God of Death came superman used super hand to made them ran away.
When Ben, Jenny, Ken, Tony, Sam and superman went out the forest, Ben fly in sky and became Peter Pan！「superman you had go to died now！bye！bye！」Peter Pan said. A superman became big and used super light to made Peter Pan became Ben. Finally, the five children went to their house and slept fast.
31stoctober is Halloween, that day have five people gone to a mountain.
They were Ben, Jenny, Ken, Tony and Sam.
When it was eleven O’clock, they stay in the mountain. They ate dinner in the mountain too. Eleven O’clock they went to the forest. 「help me！」 Ben said. Many Jesus caught Ben away.
When they ran after Jesus, they saw the trees were green turn red turn blue turn............................. Finally turn black. 「I think we went to a ghost forest.」said Sam. Let’s went out forest. When they turn back, a ghost caught them in the jail.
In the jail, they saw Ben again.「Ben why did Jesus not caught us, only caught you?」said Ken. 「I do not！」said Ben. I man open the jail door. 「I think he is batman！」said Ken. 「No, he is Spiderman！」 said Tony. 「Hi my name is superman.」the man said. Suddenly, Jesus, Witch, Ghost, Vampire, Werewolf, Wizard, Tinkerbell, Invisible monster, Frankenstein and God of Death came superman used super hand to made them ran away.
When Ben, Jenny, Ken, Tony, Sam and superman went out the forest, Ben fly in sky and became Peter Pan！「superman you had go to died now！bye！bye！」Peter Pan said. A superman became big and used super light to made Peter Pan became Ben. Finally, the five children went to their house and slept fast.
20081007
Supernatural world
Here are some ideas:
1. Characters:
Jesus
Witch
Ghost
Vampire
Werewolf
Wizard
Peter Pan
Tinkerbell (fairy)
Invisible monster
Superman
Frankenstein
God of Death
2. Powers
Fly
Float in the air
Fireproof
Bulletproof
Invisible
Waterproof
Elastic
3. Places
Graveyard
Bat cave
Church
Alley
Haunted house
1. Characters:
Jesus
Witch
Ghost
Vampire
Werewolf
Wizard
Peter Pan
Tinkerbell (fairy)
Invisible monster
Superman
Frankenstein
God of Death
2. Powers
Fly
Float in the air
Fireproof
Bulletproof
Invisible
Waterproof
Elastic
3. Places
Graveyard
Bat cave
Church
Alley
Haunted house
Counting
10 ten (“-ty”)
100 one hundred
1,000 one thousand
10,000 ten thousand
100,000 one hundred thousand
1,000,000 one million
100 one hundred
1,000 one thousand
10,000 ten thousand
100,000 one hundred thousand
1,000,000 one million
All abouy eating - Phyllis' amendments
It is a sad news report. A shop selling fishballs, “siu mai”, fake shark’s fin, fried noodles, fried chicken wings, fried sweet potato, red and green bean soup, congee, sesame soup, sweet potato soup, French fries, apple pie, wanton, shrimp dumpling and soya milk in Causeway Bay. You can eat five bowls in two minutes because they are too yummy.
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Although pop star Jenny Leung opened this shop, two people were food poisoned there. Many policemen went there to close the shop. Jenny was fined for HK$300,000 and the staff had to go to jail for two months. Many visitors said Hong Kong food is not good now. Jenny’s fans said she did not work hard and her songs were not good.
Alex Law Report
20081006
All abouy eating - Alex's original writing
Hong Kong Newspaper
It is a sad news report, a one shop selling fish balls, siu mai, fake shark, fin fried noodles, fried chicken wings, friend sweet potato, red/green bean soup, congee, sesame soup, sweet potato soup, French fries, apple pie, wanton, shrimp dumpling and soya milk shop in Causeway Bay. You can eat five bowls in two minutes because it is to mummy. Although pop stars Jenny Leung open this shop, two people food poisoning in that stall. Many policemen go there to close the shop. Jenny has to fine for 30000 money and the worker have to go to jail two moths. Many visitors said Hong Kong food is no good. Jenny fans said she no work hard and her song is no good.
Alex Law Report
20081005
Brainstorming
These are some ideas:
Hawker’s stall
Sell: Fishballs, “siu mai”, fake shark’s fin, fried noodles, fried chicken wings, fried sweet potato, red/green bean soup, sesame soup, sweet potato soup, congee, roasted beef, French fries, apple pie, wanton, shrimp dumpling, soya milk,
Food poisoning
Closing down (“the stall is closing down”)
Broke (“the hawker is broke.”)
Pop stars – Jenny Leung
In the form of a newspaper article (tense: past tense)
Married – divorce
Fans – upset
Customers scared of HK food
Interviews
Hawker
Go to jail
Fined for $....
Pop star invested in the shop
Haunted shop
Bats
They can eat 5 bowls at a time
Hawker’s stall
Sell: Fishballs, “siu mai”, fake shark’s fin, fried noodles, fried chicken wings, fried sweet potato, red/green bean soup, sesame soup, sweet potato soup, congee, roasted beef, French fries, apple pie, wanton, shrimp dumpling, soya milk,
Food poisoning
Closing down (“the stall is closing down”)
Broke (“the hawker is broke.”)
Pop stars – Jenny Leung
In the form of a newspaper article (tense: past tense)
Married – divorce
Fans – upset
Customers scared of HK food
Interviews
Hawker
Go to jail
Fined for $....
Pop star invested in the shop
Haunted shop
Bats
They can eat 5 bowls at a time
20081001
Eating Place
We've discussed today about eating. Pick an eating place we've talked about (restaurant, cafe, dai pai dong, tea house, etc) and write a story about it. Think, for example, about what would happen in that place? What kind of people will be there? What kind of food will they order? What will they talk about?Try to write more this time :-)
Somewhere in time - amended by Phyllis
Do you want to go back to a happy year? I want to go back in time, when I was 6 years old. When I was P.1, I never did much homework and on weekdays we can go to some interesting places. In the picture, my sister and I were in Stanley and we were using clay to make a cartoon model. I always liked playing and never did much homework, and that's why I would want to go back to that period.
20080930
Somewhere in time 5 years - original writing
Somewhere in Time 5 years
Do you want to go to a happy year? I want to go in time, when I was 6 years. When I was P.1, I never did much homework and the weekday we can go to some interesting place. In the picture, my sister and I use the clay to make a cartoon. I like away playing and never do much homework, so that I want to during that period.
Do you want to go to a happy year? I want to go in time, when I was 6 years. When I was P.1, I never did much homework and the weekday we can go to some interesting place. In the picture, my sister and I use the clay to make a cartoon. I like away playing and never do much homework, so that I want to during that period.
20080929
Old family albums
1. Find an old picture of yourself which was taken in the happiest moment of your life.
2. Tell me why you would choose to be that child in the picture again.
Questions to think about:
a. What year was it?
b. What were you doing in that period? (e.g. you were in kindergarten)
c. What were you doing in the picture?
d. How did you look like?
e. What was your life like during that period?
f. Why would you like to revisit that period?
2. Tell me why you would choose to be that child in the picture again.
Questions to think about:
a. What year was it?
b. What were you doing in that period? (e.g. you were in kindergarten)
c. What were you doing in the picture?
d. How did you look like?
e. What was your life like during that period?
f. Why would you like to revisit that period?
My Very Own Shop (amended by Phyllis)
Japanese ShopThe shop will be a Japanese shop called “COME Japan”. It will be in Causeway Bay. It will be like SOGO, but this shop will have ten themes. The themes will be forest, ocean, boats, car, music, sky, toy, ball, food and airplane. There will be a butterfly house and a castle house. The staff will dress up as cartoon characters. It will be open 24/7. We can use flyers, posters and emails to promote the shop. The main colour for the decoration will be green. The entrance fee will only be $5.
20080928
My Very Own Shop - original writing
Japanese Shop
The shop is a Japan shop. This is on Causeway Bay. It like SOGO, but this shop will have ten themes. Will be forest, ocean, boats, car, music, sky, toy, ball, food and airplane theme. The are butterfly house and castle house. The service people make up about character It open about 24-hours. We can use flyer, poster and email. The decoration is green. The name is (COME Japan ). The entrance only 5＄.
The shop is a Japan shop. This is on Causeway Bay. It like SOGO, but this shop will have ten themes. Will be forest, ocean, boats, car, music, sky, toy, ball, food and airplane theme. The are butterfly house and castle house. The service people make up about character It open about 24-hours. We can use flyer, poster and email. The decoration is green. The name is (COME Japan ). The entrance only 5＄.
20080923
My Very Own Shop
Imagine that you were given a big sum of money to build your own shop. You have to convince your investor to invest in your shop by writing him a proposal.
Questions for thoughts:
1. What kind of shop? (Japanese products)
2. Where (location)? (Causeway Bay? Taikoo? Hang up the boat to the sky?)
3. Theme? (marine theme? Boats?)
4. Opening hours? (24-hour? 10am to 9pm?)
5. Staff? (uniform? Costumes? What kind of people will you employ?)
6. Promotion? (flyers? Posters? Emails? banners? Advertisements? Fireworks? )
7. Decoration?
8. Name?
9. Entrance fee?
10. Different floors? (castle? Butterfly house?)
11. Special services? (telescope renting service?)
Remember to think BIG!
Tense: future tense (“will”, “is going to”, “won’t”)
Questions for thoughts:
1. What kind of shop? (Japanese products)
2. Where (location)? (Causeway Bay? Taikoo? Hang up the boat to the sky?)
3. Theme? (marine theme? Boats?)
4. Opening hours? (24-hour? 10am to 9pm?)
5. Staff? (uniform? Costumes? What kind of people will you employ?)
6. Promotion? (flyers? Posters? Emails? banners? Advertisements? Fireworks? )
7. Decoration?
8. Name?
9. Entrance fee?
10. Different floors? (castle? Butterfly house?)
11. Special services? (telescope renting service?)
Remember to think BIG!
Tense: future tense (“will”, “is going to”, “won’t”)
Picture Story (amended by Phyllis)
Once upon a time, there were some “super-magicians” living in the sky and in a tree house. We could not see them because they wore invisible coats, and we could only see their shoes. They could make people fly in the sky. The magic was a mystery. The magic was special and could amaze you. Some magicians played pranks on thieves. Some people said they were like policemen. Now the super-magicians lived on earth but we could not see them.
When the super-magicians lived in the magic world, they did not have money to buy anything. Alvin was one of them. When he was young, is family was poor and did not have much food to eat. So Alvin went to the magic school to learn some magic. When he was 12 years old, he used magic to make more gold so his family was not poor. They could have more food and were not hungry everyday. Now, he has built magic schools on earth and is living here. He is a famous magician. Everyone goes to his school to learn about magic. The magic world has disappeared.
When the super-magicians lived in the magic world, they did not have money to buy anything. Alvin was one of them. When he was young, is family was poor and did not have much food to eat. So Alvin went to the magic school to learn some magic. When he was 12 years old, he used magic to make more gold so his family was not poor. They could have more food and were not hungry everyday. Now, he has built magic schools on earth and is living here. He is a famous magician. Everyone goes to his school to learn about magic. The magic world has disappeared.
Reminder:
BECAUSE and SO cannot appear in the same sentence.
Picture Story (original writing)
pictures used: 10, 7, 5, 1, 6
type of story: magic story
Once upon a time, there were some “super-magicians” lived in the sky and tree house. We can’t see them because they wear invisible coats, so only saw their shoes. They could make the people fly in the sky. The magic is a mystery. The magic is special and can make you amazed. Some magicians were playing pranks on thieves. Some people were say they same of policeman. Now the super-magicians live in an earth but we can’t see them.
When the super-magicians lived in the magic world, they did not have money to buy something. When Alvin was young, his family were poor and not much food to eat. So Alvin went to the magic school and learn some magics. When he was 12 years old, he used the magic to make more gold so his family was not poor. They can eat more food and not hungry everyday. Now, he build magic schools in earth and live here. He is a famous magician. Everyone go to his school to learn the magics. The magic world disappeared.
When the super-magicians lived in the magic world, they did not have money to buy something. When Alvin was young, his family were poor and not much food to eat. So Alvin went to the magic school and learn some magics. When he was 12 years old, he used the magic to make more gold so his family was not poor. They can eat more food and not hungry everyday. Now, he build magic schools in earth and live here. He is a famous magician. Everyone go to his school to learn the magics. The magic world disappeared.
20080921
Picture Story (homework for 21st Sep)
Create a story based on at least 5 pictures from below. Feel free to reorder them. (you can use the words next to the pictures)
1. floating house
2. umbrellas, raining night
3. clown, circus
4. superman, fly
5. magician
6. invisible people
7. furniture, bed, hanging on a tree
8. colourful pigeons, chair
9. balloonman
10. invisible man
1. floating house
2. umbrellas, raining night
3. clown, circus
4. superman, fly
5. magician
6. invisible people
7. furniture, bed, hanging on a tree
8. colourful pigeons, chair
9. balloonman
10. invisible manRewriting the Ending of "Charlie and the Chocolate Factory"
The Chocolate Factory was closed from 1950 to 2003. Willy Wonka put five golden tickets in 5 chocolate bars. If you had a golden ticket, you could go to thechocolate factory which had been closed for 53 years. Five children got the golden ticket. They were a computer boy, a fat boy, a competitive girl, Charlie, and me (a rich girl).
In the factory, the fat boy drank the chocolate milk in the chocolate river. Buthe was too fat, so he fell into the river. I wanted Charlie to lose the competition, so I told a monkey to catch Charlie. He wasthrown to the sweet mountain, but the competitive girl pushed me to the mountainas well. The computer boy and the competitive girl went onto the boat, and thecompetitive girl was thrown into the ice-cream pool. Finally, the computer boy won the competition and he got the factory. I was very angry and I never talked to my Dad.
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