Words you may use:
- Taikoo Shing
- spaghetti bolognese
- White House
- South Pole
- penguins
- Haiti
- earthquake
20100209
Famous Life-amended
Ben was born in a poor family, there were many people living in his house. His aunt did not like him, so she always hit him. Ben had a younger brother, Ken, and his father loved Ken more than Ben. Ben thought it was unfair and studied very hard. He thought, “If I work hard, my father will love me more!” Although his family was poor, it could send Ben and Ken to school. Ben worked very hard at school. So he had very good results and he was famous at school. But someone hated him and wanted to make fun of him.
One day, Ben was on his way to school and suddenly a boy poured a bottle of water on his head. Ben was very sad and cried. The boy slipped away. When Ben arrived at school, he told the teacher about it. The boy came from a rich family and he was called Jason. Jason’s father is the principal. Jason hated Ben very much and always made fun of him. Although Ben worked very hard, he could not study happily at school.
Ben always went to a book shop to read the fashion magazines. He wanted to be a famous designer. He wanted to make his dream come true, so he always went to boutiques and studied the clothes. Ben was very happy when he graduated from primary school, because Jason could not make fun of him.
When Ben was eighteen years old, he got 10 As in the HKCEE. He went to
Ben always helped Raymond a lot, so Raymond liked him very much. Other assistants thought he was just trying to please Raymond, and they always avoided him. Ben was very sad and quitted. Ben used his salary to set up a fashion company. There were many actresses inviting him to design clothes and he became famous in the
When Ben was twenty-four years old, he was very famous in the world, and many celebrities asked him to design clothes. Ben’s designs appeared in many fashion magazines. He received more than sixty design awards and had twenty-two fashion labels.
Hong Kong's 1st Mail Robbery-amended
There were three postmen going to work. Suddenly, two men appeared and blinded two of the postmen with chemical spray and grabbed two mailbags containing 1,100 letters. When the two men ran away, a policeman helped them and called 999. The three postmen went to the police station after leaving the hospital.
After two days, the three postmen got a letter. It wrote, “If you report to the police, we will kill you!” The postmen were very scared, because they told the police about the robbers’ clothes. Now the police was finding them. The postmen were scared that the robbers would come back for revenge, so they found the famous private detective, Alex, for help.
Alex said, “I will help you!” When the postmen left the Alex’s office, they saw many men who looked like gangsters. When the gangsters tried to hit the postmen, four police cars arrived. The gangsters escaped. The postmen were very scared and thought, “Who called the police?” Alex appeared and said, “Me!”
The postmen were very surprised and asked, “Why did you know?” Alex said, “Because I found that there aren’t many people shopping here in Mongkok today. I thought there must be something wrong. It was the gangsters, so I called the police to save you.” Then Alex asked about what the robbers looked like, and the postmen answered, “They were wearing green clothes and were not very tall.”
Alex went to the
Alex went to the police station and told the police everything. Then, the police arrested the Yuen Long gang. Alex became famous after this case. But the gang did not disappear, and Alex was very scared. He worked hard on his other cases.
1. don’t mix up: FORM and FROM
2. don’t mix up: THE and THEY
3. don’t forget the singulars and plurals
4. don’t forget the close quotation mark (”)
20100202
Today was Kenny’s birthday, so he no needed to do his job—fire chief. When Kenny was shopping with his wife, there was an airplane colliding to the World Trade Centre and Kenny ran to there. It was because he was a fire chief and he went near the fire engine and wore the protective gear to help the people.
When Kenny wanted to go inside, there was a second airplane colliding and the Centre of 89th flower fire. There were many firemen inside and could not go out. Kenny was very worried and went inside quickly. When Kenny went inside, many types of rubble flew down and the exit disappeared. Kenny avoided the rubbles, but he fell down. Kenny saw his other team members were went to the back door and he went after them to.
Suddenly, Kenny heard a little girl cried loudly. Kenny turned back and saw the girl. He wanted to help the girl, but it helped the girl, he may die. Kenny’s team members—Ken shouted, “Kenny I am coming, help the girl!” So Kenny ran to help the girl carefully. When the wanted to leave out the World Trade Centre, and he saw there were many rubbles flew down. Kenny was much scored and wanted to run outside quickly, but Ken did not have enough time to run out, because he was backing a girl.
Ken was Kenny best Shot block, so he went back and took him outside. When they went outside, the building flew down and there were many people inside. When Kenny and Ken went out, there were many firemen smile and said, “Good job, Kenny!”
They went to drink some water and suddenly, they saw a boss and went inside to help the boss. The boss is president’s family member, if they do not helped the boss, they lose there work and could not be famous on the world. So, they went inside and used a fire hose and caught the fire. When Kenny went inside, the back was disappeared, and the commercial building disappeared too. Many people fell down and they died.
Kenny and the boss—Ben went to a toilet, so that they could safe. Then, the building collapsed. Kenny’s team members and the other firemen ranks found them. Ken heard someone shouted, and he was Ben. Although Ken found Ben, Kenny died. President helped Kenny awarded a prize and said he was a brave man after two day.
When Kenny wanted to go inside, there was a second airplane colliding and the Centre of 89th flower fire. There were many firemen inside and could not go out. Kenny was very worried and went inside quickly. When Kenny went inside, many types of rubble flew down and the exit disappeared. Kenny avoided the rubbles, but he fell down. Kenny saw his other team members were went to the back door and he went after them to.
Suddenly, Kenny heard a little girl cried loudly. Kenny turned back and saw the girl. He wanted to help the girl, but it helped the girl, he may die. Kenny’s team members—Ken shouted, “Kenny I am coming, help the girl!” So Kenny ran to help the girl carefully. When the wanted to leave out the World Trade Centre, and he saw there were many rubbles flew down. Kenny was much scored and wanted to run outside quickly, but Ken did not have enough time to run out, because he was backing a girl.
Ken was Kenny best Shot block, so he went back and took him outside. When they went outside, the building flew down and there were many people inside. When Kenny and Ken went out, there were many firemen smile and said, “Good job, Kenny!”
They went to drink some water and suddenly, they saw a boss and went inside to help the boss. The boss is president’s family member, if they do not helped the boss, they lose there work and could not be famous on the world. So, they went inside and used a fire hose and caught the fire. When Kenny went inside, the back was disappeared, and the commercial building disappeared too. Many people fell down and they died.
Kenny and the boss—Ben went to a toilet, so that they could safe. Then, the building collapsed. Kenny’s team members and the other firemen ranks found them. Ken heard someone shouted, and he was Ben. Although Ken found Ben, Kenny died. President helped Kenny awarded a prize and said he was a brave man after two day.
20100131
Ben born in a poor family, there were many people lived in their house. His aunt did not like him, so she always hit him. Ben had a smaller brother-- Ken and his father love more than Ben. Ben felt very unfair and worked hard. He thought, “If I work hard, my father will love me fairly!” Although his family was poor, but they could gave Ben and Ken to school. When Ben studied at school, he worked very hard. So his subject was very good and he was famous at school. But someone were disliked him and wanted to injure him.
One day, Ben went to school and suddenly a child came, and used a bottle of water to topple on Ben’s head. Ben was very sad and cried. The child ran away quickly and quietly. When Ben went to school, he told the teacher. The child was come from a rich family and he called Jason. Jason’s father is the school of principal. Jason was very disliked Ben and always juggle him. Although Ben was work hard, he could not study happily at school.
Ben always went to a book shop, and read the fashionable magazine. He wanted to be a famous designer. He wanted to make his dream come true, so he always went to clothes shop and references the clothes. Ben was very happy went he left the primary school, because Jason could not juggle him.
When Ben was eighteen years old, he got 10A in Examination. He went to France and he studied art. He met a famous designer and his name is Raymond. Raymond always designed some interesting clothes. He worked for fifty models on the world. Raymond was Ben’s image. After Ben done his study, he became Raymond’s assistant and helped him some small works.
Ben always helped Raymond hard, so Raymond liked him very much. Another people thought he was not good for did anything, and they always did not work with him. Ben was very sad and left to Raymond’s office. Ben used his salary to open a fashionable company. There were many model invited him to design clothes and he became famous in the USA.
When Ben was twenty-four years old, he was very famous on the world, and many model wanted to find him to design clothes. Ben design’s clothes always appeared in many model magazines. He got more than sixty model design award and twenty- twenty Model Company.
One day, Ben went to school and suddenly a child came, and used a bottle of water to topple on Ben’s head. Ben was very sad and cried. The child ran away quickly and quietly. When Ben went to school, he told the teacher. The child was come from a rich family and he called Jason. Jason’s father is the school of principal. Jason was very disliked Ben and always juggle him. Although Ben was work hard, he could not study happily at school.
Ben always went to a book shop, and read the fashionable magazine. He wanted to be a famous designer. He wanted to make his dream come true, so he always went to clothes shop and references the clothes. Ben was very happy went he left the primary school, because Jason could not juggle him.
When Ben was eighteen years old, he got 10A in Examination. He went to France and he studied art. He met a famous designer and his name is Raymond. Raymond always designed some interesting clothes. He worked for fifty models on the world. Raymond was Ben’s image. After Ben done his study, he became Raymond’s assistant and helped him some small works.
Ben always helped Raymond hard, so Raymond liked him very much. Another people thought he was not good for did anything, and they always did not work with him. Ben was very sad and left to Raymond’s office. Ben used his salary to open a fashionable company. There were many model invited him to design clothes and he became famous in the USA.
When Ben was twenty-four years old, he was very famous on the world, and many model wanted to find him to design clothes. Ben design’s clothes always appeared in many model magazines. He got more than sixty model design award and twenty- twenty Model Company.
20100129
Letter disappear
There were three postmen went to work. Suddenly, two men appeared and used blinded two postmen with a chemical spray and robbing them of two mailbags containing 1,100 letters. When the two men ran away, a policeman helped them and called 999. The three postmen went to the police office after left the hospital.
After two day, the three postmen got three letter, it write, “If you tell the things of the two men who robbed the letter, we will kill you!” The three postmen were very scared, because the told the things that the robber’s wear. Now all the policemen were finding them. So they found the Private detective—Alex.
Alex heard this thing and said, Alex said he will help them. When the three postmen left the “Alex’s Private detective office”, the three postmen saw there were many men and the like the Triad. When the men wanted to hit the three postmen, there were four police car came. The Triad’s people left away. They three postmen were very scared and thought, “Who called the police?” Alex appeared and said, “Me!”
They three postmen were very amazed and asked, “Who did you know this thing?” Alex said, “Is was because there was Mongkok, but there were not many people shopping here, that made me know there were something made the people did not come here. It was Triad, so I called the police that made you safe. Than, Alex asked the man’s wear and the postmen answered, “The two robber were wear a green clothes and they were not very tall.”
Alex went to the New Territories and thought, “If the robber is Triad, it is not easy to find them. So he invented two people to found. There were seven Triads in the New Territories. When the two people came back, they said, “The robbers are come form Yuen Long. Alex went to the office and found the Triad. The Triad sell the medicine and there were four letters were had the medicine. If police heard this thing, the Triad may disappear and they need to found the letters!
Alex went to police office and said all the things. Than, the police caught the Yuen Long Triad. After Alex done this case, he was famous of it. But the Triad was not disappeared, and he was very scared of the Triad. He did his other care hard.
After two day, the three postmen got three letter, it write, “If you tell the things of the two men who robbed the letter, we will kill you!” The three postmen were very scared, because the told the things that the robber’s wear. Now all the policemen were finding them. So they found the Private detective—Alex.
Alex heard this thing and said, Alex said he will help them. When the three postmen left the “Alex’s Private detective office”, the three postmen saw there were many men and the like the Triad. When the men wanted to hit the three postmen, there were four police car came. The Triad’s people left away. They three postmen were very scared and thought, “Who called the police?” Alex appeared and said, “Me!”
They three postmen were very amazed and asked, “Who did you know this thing?” Alex said, “Is was because there was Mongkok, but there were not many people shopping here, that made me know there were something made the people did not come here. It was Triad, so I called the police that made you safe. Than, Alex asked the man’s wear and the postmen answered, “The two robber were wear a green clothes and they were not very tall.”
Alex went to the New Territories and thought, “If the robber is Triad, it is not easy to find them. So he invented two people to found. There were seven Triads in the New Territories. When the two people came back, they said, “The robbers are come form Yuen Long. Alex went to the office and found the Triad. The Triad sell the medicine and there were four letters were had the medicine. If police heard this thing, the Triad may disappear and they need to found the letters!
Alex went to police office and said all the things. Than, the police caught the Yuen Long Triad. After Alex done this case, he was famous of it. But the Triad was not disappeared, and he was very scared of the Triad. He did his other care hard.
20100119
Robbery of postmen
Words you may use:
Postman – postmen
Rob
Robbers
The New Territories
Secret
Motive
Evidence
Court
The triads
Gangsters
Date of death
The news:
http://www.thestandard.com.hk/news_detail.asp?pp_cat=30&art_id=92650&sid=26593140&con_type=3
Postman – postmen
Rob
Robbers
The New Territories
Secret
Motive
Evidence
Court
The triads
Gangsters
Date of death
The news:
http://www.thestandard.com.hk/news_detail.asp?pp_cat=30&art_id=92650&sid=26593140&con_type=3
20091222
An unexpected story about Christmas
- Santa Claus
- deer
- Silent Night
- Boxing Day
- turkey
- chimney
- Christmas stocking
- sleigh
- wolf
- Christmas carols
- bell
- snow
- Jesus
What Happened? - amended
Today is Jacky’s birthday, and we went on a boat trip with Sam and Ben. We were very happy, because we could go on a big ship. Jacky was the captain, he knew how to drive it. Other passengers and I did not know how to. We were excited and wanted to go to the
The ship was very old and could not sail for more than once. So we spent five hours to clean the ship quickly. We sailed after we had done our cleaning. The four sailors were waiting for us to put the luggage inside the ship. When we were in the middle of the sea, we saw a basketball court there. There were many famous athletes.
We saw Thunder and many NBA stars, and we were very amazed. When the ship turned back, we saw an old ship. We saw the word “Titanic” painted on it. It crashed into an ice mountain. We wondered why the ship was here and not in the bottom of the sea. Some passengers fell into the sea, others rushed to the lifeboats.
We saw the ship sinking. Jacky wanted to help a child and he jumped into the sea. Suddenly, there was another big boat crashing into Jacky and we lost him.
We lost the captain and the four sailors did not know how to drive the ship. We swam near the boat and saw Jacky trying very hard to swim back to the water surface. We were very scared because there was a shark swimming after him. We were swimming faster than before and went back to the ship. When we went to the bathroom, we were shocked to find a small swimming pool. We thought the space was not real.
When we went back to the bank, there was an old car. It belonged to Jacky’s father. We went to Jacky’s home and attended his birthday party. We saw a pop singer singing at his home. We were very amazed and sang with her happily.
We went to school the next day, and everyone forgot everything happening yesterday except myself. I was very scared and did not go sailing anymore. When Jacky and I played football, he brought a basketball. I thought something was unreal. Was it a dream?
20091220
What is the time?
Today is Jacky birthday, We went to a forest with Sam and Ben. We were very happy, because we could went to embarkation a cruise liner and could arrive the sea. Jacky was a ship master, he learned how to drive it. Other one and I did not know it. We were excited and wanted arrive to Pacific Ocean quickly. We wanted went there ourselves, but we could not do it. It was because we were very young and we needed to go with four sailors. They were very kind, when we met them. The ship was very dirty and could not go to the sea that day.
The ship was very old and could not take the sea enough two times. So we used five hour to clean the ship carelessly. We would take to the sea when we done our clean. The four sailors were waiting us to put the luggage inside the ship. When we arrived to the sea, we saw a basketball spell there. There were many famous sportier there and we arrived near the spell. There were many star of sportier.
There were Thunder and much NBA star, we were very amazed. When we turned back, the old ship—Titanic collide with an ice mountain. We thought why the ship was here, why it was here and not in the sea bed. There were many men and women fallen to the sea and many people rob the boat.
We saw the ship fell down and we could not see the ship. Jacky wanted to helped a child and he jumped to the sea and swam there, but he could not swim there looked like there were a space did not have any one went in. We were very amazed and told Jacky went back. Suddenly, there were a big boat collided to Jacky and we lost him.
We lost the ship master and the four sailors did not know who to drive the ship too. We swam near the boat and saw Jacky was very hard to swim outside the water. We were very scared because there was a shank and wanted to eat us. We were swimming faster than before and went back to the ship. When we went to the bathroom, there was a small swimming pool. We thought the time was not real.
When we went back the bank, there was an old car. It was Jacky’s father; we went to Jacky’s home and enjoyed the happy birthday party. When we went to his home, we saw there were a star of music was singing into his home. We were very amazed and sang with her happily. We went to the school next day.
We lost anything which was happened yesterday, and only I knew it. I was very scared and did not go to the sea any more. When Jacky and I played the football, he brought a basketball come. I thought it was some thing happened unreal. It is a dream?
The ship was very old and could not take the sea enough two times. So we used five hour to clean the ship carelessly. We would take to the sea when we done our clean. The four sailors were waiting us to put the luggage inside the ship. When we arrived to the sea, we saw a basketball spell there. There were many famous sportier there and we arrived near the spell. There were many star of sportier.
There were Thunder and much NBA star, we were very amazed. When we turned back, the old ship—Titanic collide with an ice mountain. We thought why the ship was here, why it was here and not in the sea bed. There were many men and women fallen to the sea and many people rob the boat.
We saw the ship fell down and we could not see the ship. Jacky wanted to helped a child and he jumped to the sea and swam there, but he could not swim there looked like there were a space did not have any one went in. We were very amazed and told Jacky went back. Suddenly, there were a big boat collided to Jacky and we lost him.
We lost the ship master and the four sailors did not know who to drive the ship too. We swam near the boat and saw Jacky was very hard to swim outside the water. We were very scared because there was a shank and wanted to eat us. We were swimming faster than before and went back to the ship. When we went to the bathroom, there was a small swimming pool. We thought the time was not real.
When we went back the bank, there was an old car. It was Jacky’s father; we went to Jacky’s home and enjoyed the happy birthday party. When we went to his home, we saw there were a star of music was singing into his home. We were very amazed and sang with her happily. We went to the school next day.
We lost anything which was happened yesterday, and only I knew it. I was very scared and did not go to the sea any more. When Jacky and I played the football, he brought a basketball come. I thought it was some thing happened unreal. It is a dream?
20091213
The Children Who Fell Into The Trap -amended
Jacky went to school by bus himself everyday when he was nine years old. It was because his parents were very busy and did not have time to take Jacky to school or back home. The students of his primary school could go out for lunch when they turned nine years old. Jacky was the best student in his school, and he was a prefect.
When Jacky left school during lunch, he saw two men who looked like kidnappers in the newspaper. When Jacky went to school again after lunch, he saw the two men used two dolls to lure two girls who were eight years old. Jacky used twenty dollars to buy those two dolls for the two girls. The men did not say anything and went away. Jacky said to the two girls, “These dolls are yours now, but the men are not nice guys. They used toys or sweets to lure little children and kill them!”
The two little girls knew they were wrong and did not talk to any person they did not know.
Jacky walked to school the next day, because he had enough time. He saw a boy in his class leaving with the two men. They gave a Gameboy to the boy and took him to a car. When the car left, Jacky ran to school quickly and told the teacher. But the teacher thought Jacky was telling a lie and did not think it was real.
Jacky had no choice but to go back to his classroom and wait for the boy to come back. After an hour, the boy was not back and the teacher found Jacky. “Where is the boy? His parents said their child had already left home!” Jacky answered, “He was taking into a car and disappeared!” So Jacky waited for the teacher to call the police. The policemen arrived at the school. Jacky saw the man again at during lunch time and told his friend to call the policemen to come.
The man went somewhere else, so Jacky ran after him and found their headquarters. There were many trees and he could not go inside easily. Jacky called the police and went inside to check who was inside. There were many children who looked very hungry. Jacky saw his classmate. However, they were locked behind a door.After a few minutes, the policemen arrived and caught all the kidnappers.
It was the turning point of his life. Jacky became a policeman when he grew up.
20091207
Jacky went to school by bus everyday. He was nine years old and went to school himself everyday too. It was because his parent was very busy and not time to take Jacky to school and went back home. Jacky could go out for lunch when he was nine years old at his primary school. Jacky was the best student in his school, and he was a moral leader.
At lunch, Jacky left to school and saw two men looked like the kidnappers in newspaper. When Jacky went to school again after lunch, he saw the men used two dollies lure two girl who were eight years old. Jacky used twenty cash to buy those two dollies for the two girls. The men did not say anything and went away. Jacky took the two girls and said to them, “Those dollies are yours now, but the man is not a nice gun. They used something to lure little children and kill them!”
The two little girls knew they were wrong and did not meet any people they did not know. Jacky went to school on foot one day, because he had enough time. He saw a boy who was study with his class went with the two men. They were gave a Game boy and take him to a car. When the car opened and went away, Jacky ran to school quickly and told the things of it. But the teacher thought Jacky was trickster and did not think it was real.
Jacky only went back his classroom and waited the boy went back. After one hour, the boy did not go to school and the teacher found Jacky. “Where is the boy? His parents said their child had left his house!” the teacher asked. Jacky answered, “He went to a car and disappeared!” So Jacky waited the teacher to call the police. Policemen arrived to Jacky’s school in the afternoon. Jacky saw the man again and told his friend to call the policemen came.
But the man went to other place, so Jacky ran after him and arrived to their concealment. There were many trees and could not go inside easily. Jacky called the police and went inside to check who were inside. There were many child and they looked like very hungry. Jacky saw his classmate but there were a door locked them.
After few minutes, the policemen arrived and caught all the men. Jacky became a policeman when he grew up. It was his change his job.
At lunch, Jacky left to school and saw two men looked like the kidnappers in newspaper. When Jacky went to school again after lunch, he saw the men used two dollies lure two girl who were eight years old. Jacky used twenty cash to buy those two dollies for the two girls. The men did not say anything and went away. Jacky took the two girls and said to them, “Those dollies are yours now, but the man is not a nice gun. They used something to lure little children and kill them!”
The two little girls knew they were wrong and did not meet any people they did not know. Jacky went to school on foot one day, because he had enough time. He saw a boy who was study with his class went with the two men. They were gave a Game boy and take him to a car. When the car opened and went away, Jacky ran to school quickly and told the things of it. But the teacher thought Jacky was trickster and did not think it was real.
Jacky only went back his classroom and waited the boy went back. After one hour, the boy did not go to school and the teacher found Jacky. “Where is the boy? His parents said their child had left his house!” the teacher asked. Jacky answered, “He went to a car and disappeared!” So Jacky waited the teacher to call the police. Policemen arrived to Jacky’s school in the afternoon. Jacky saw the man again and told his friend to call the policemen came.
But the man went to other place, so Jacky ran after him and arrived to their concealment. There were many trees and could not go inside easily. Jacky called the police and went inside to check who were inside. There were many child and they looked like very hungry. Jacky saw his classmate but there were a door locked them.
After few minutes, the policemen arrived and caught all the men. Jacky became a policeman when he grew up. It was his change his job.
20091201
Rom Was Not Useless - amended
There was a nurse called Jenny who discovered Rom Houben was not vegetative. He could still think and was not unconscious. But the truth was he was a famous policeman 23 years ago, and he had got “The Best Policeman” award. When he investigated the mayor corruption case, the mayor pushed him to the highway from the 23rd floor. It was because Rom found a witness and evidence against the mayor.
There had been worldwide reports on Rom not being vegetative, and he was very frightened and worried. He thought the mayor and his partners would kill him. So he wanted to get a computer so that he could use his brain to tell other people the truth.
When Rom was in bed one night, he heard some step. He thought it was his nurse coming. Suddenly he could not breathe, because a man was pulling the tube and wanted to kill him. Luckily, Rom’s nurse heard it and stopped the man. The man was arrested by the police. The man said he wanted to perform mercy killing on Rom but the nurse stopped him. The police only told him to pay a fine.
When the man left the police station, he was shot and died after two minutes. He was from the gang which was the partner of the mayor. They thought the man would tell the truth.
Rom got the computer after two days, and told the police the truth. He could get an award from the police. The police of the USA found the mayor and all gang members went to prison. When Rom was taken to the garden of the hospital, a man who looked like the mayor used a lighter to burn Rom. He was very scared and other nurses used blankets to extinguish the fire. But the mayor ran away quickly.
When Rom went back to the hospital, the mayor appeared again. He poured a glass of wine into Rom’s room and turned on the lighter. The floor became a sea of fire. Rom was inside, and he could not say anything so no one could help him. Finally, he died and the mayor got the death penalty. There were many people at Rom’s memorial on that day.
There had been worldwide reports on Rom not being vegetative, and he was very frightened and worried. He thought the mayor and his partners would kill him. So he wanted to get a computer so that he could use his brain to tell other people the truth.
When Rom was in bed one night, he heard some step. He thought it was his nurse coming. Suddenly he could not breathe, because a man was pulling the tube and wanted to kill him. Luckily, Rom’s nurse heard it and stopped the man. The man was arrested by the police. The man said he wanted to perform mercy killing on Rom but the nurse stopped him. The police only told him to pay a fine.
When the man left the police station, he was shot and died after two minutes. He was from the gang which was the partner of the mayor. They thought the man would tell the truth.
Rom got the computer after two days, and told the police the truth. He could get an award from the police. The police of the USA found the mayor and all gang members went to prison. When Rom was taken to the garden of the hospital, a man who looked like the mayor used a lighter to burn Rom. He was very scared and other nurses used blankets to extinguish the fire. But the mayor ran away quickly.
When Rom went back to the hospital, the mayor appeared again. He poured a glass of wine into Rom’s room and turned on the lighter. The floor became a sea of fire. Rom was inside, and he could not say anything so no one could help him. Finally, he died and the mayor got the death penalty. There were many people at Rom’s memorial on that day.
There was a nurse called Jenny she discovered Rom Houben was not a vegetative. His heard could thick over and unconscious. But there was a real situation of he became a vegetative. Before 23 years, he was a famous policeman and he got a reward of “The Best Policeman”. When he went to follow a case of mayor corruption, the mayor pulled him to the highway from the 23F. It was because he knew the case witness and exhibit.
After he knew he is not a vegetative report in the entire world, he was very frightened and worried. He thought the mayor and his partners would kill him. So he wanted to get the computer that he could use him heard to tell other people that things.
When Rom Houben slept in the bed, he heard some step, he thought it was his nurse coming. Suddenly he felt very hard, because a man pulled the tube and wanted him to die. Lucky, Rom Houben heard it and prevent from the man. The man went to the police and said he wanted Rom Houben mercy killing but the nurse prevent form him. The police only tell could him to hand over impose a fine.
When the man went out the police, he shot and he die after two minutes. The man was from the gangland which was the partners of the mayor. They thought the man would tell the things that the mayor pulled Ran Hoube to the highway.
Ran Houben got the computer after two day, he told the truth to the police. He could get a award of the police. The police of USA found the mayor and the gangland of the mayor partners all members went to the prison. When Ran Houben went to the park, a man looked like the mayor used a lighter to burn Ran Houben. He was very scared and other people used a clothe to destroy the fire. But the mayor ran away quickly.
When Ran Houben went back the hospital, the mayor appeared again and used a glass of wine to invert the room who was Ran Houben he turned of the lighter and all the floor became a fire of sea. Ran Houben was in inside, he could not said anything so not one could help him. Finally he die and the mayor got the death. There were many people memorial him of that
After he knew he is not a vegetative report in the entire world, he was very frightened and worried. He thought the mayor and his partners would kill him. So he wanted to get the computer that he could use him heard to tell other people that things.
When Rom Houben slept in the bed, he heard some step, he thought it was his nurse coming. Suddenly he felt very hard, because a man pulled the tube and wanted him to die. Lucky, Rom Houben heard it and prevent from the man. The man went to the police and said he wanted Rom Houben mercy killing but the nurse prevent form him. The police only tell could him to hand over impose a fine.
When the man went out the police, he shot and he die after two minutes. The man was from the gangland which was the partners of the mayor. They thought the man would tell the things that the mayor pulled Ran Hoube to the highway.
Ran Houben got the computer after two day, he told the truth to the police. He could get a award of the police. The police of USA found the mayor and the gangland of the mayor partners all members went to the prison. When Ran Houben went to the park, a man looked like the mayor used a lighter to burn Ran Houben. He was very scared and other people used a clothe to destroy the fire. But the mayor ran away quickly.
When Ran Houben went back the hospital, the mayor appeared again and used a glass of wine to invert the room who was Ran Houben he turned of the lighter and all the floor became a fire of sea. Ran Houben was in inside, he could not said anything so not one could help him. Finally he die and the mayor got the death. There were many people memorial him of that
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read the story of Rom Houben:
ENGLISH: http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/worldnews/article-1230092/Rom-Houben-Patient-trapped-23-year-coma-conscious-along.html
CHINESE: http://www.catcatforum.com/viewthread.php?tid=3098168
Write a story about him. (400 words)
Characters:
ENGLISH: http://www.dailymail.co.uk/news/worldnews/article-1230092/Rom-Houben-Patient-trapped-23-year-coma-conscious-along.html
CHINESE: http://www.catcatforum.com/viewthread.php?tid=3098168
Write a story about him. (400 words)
Characters:
- Rom
- family/friends
- doctor
- nurse
- volunteer 義工
- cleaning lady
Think of:
- Why did he get into a car crash?
- How did someone find out that he's not in coma?
- Anyone trying to help him?
Words to use:
- mercy killing 安樂死
- pull the tube
- coma 昏迷
- drug 毒品
- vegetative 植物人狀態的
- sleeping pills 安眠藥
Surviving Doomday- amended
The doomsday happened in 2012. There were many people packing their things and ready to escape. There was a news report about a disaster in Japan at three o’clock in the morning. There was a volcano exploding in Osaka, Japan. Many people died in the disaster. There was a prophecy that Japan would be destroyed by a volcano eruption.
Jacky was a prophet in Hong Kong, and he had read a piece of paper about the doomsday. The first place disappearing would be Japan. Japan had many volcanoes which made Japan disappear first. After forty-two countries disappeared, Hong Kong was the next place. Jacky took his family to the airport and went to Nepal. He knew there would be a typhoons and tsunamis in Hong Kong.
Jacky arrived at the airport. Suddenly, a typhoon attacked an airplane and the control tower of the airport. All lights of the airport were turned off. No airplanes could take off. Jacky could not think of any way to escape from Hong Kong. His wife had a good idea, “We can use a helicopter to escape from Hong Kong!” Jacky asked, “Where can we find one?” His wife answered, “My friend has one, but it was on the Hong Kong Island!” Jacky murmured, “Oh no!”
Jacky drove to the Hong Kong Inland. They only had thirty minutes. It was not enough and Jacky’s wife called her friend to drive his helicopter to the Kam Shan Country Park to save time. When they arrived at the Kam Shan Country Park, there was a bunker at the entrance so the car could not go inside. They needed to walk inside. There were many monkeys following them. They only had one minute left when they found the helicopter. They arrived at the top of the mountain and the doomsday of Hong Kong was coming. There were 24 typhoons that caused a big tsunami.
The big tsunami destroyed many airplanes and there were many airplane crashes. Jacky and his family got on the helicopter. They looked back at Hong Kong, and it disappeared. Many people died in this disaster. Only 328 people escaped to Szechwan. Only 243 countries survived.
Jacky was a prophet in Hong Kong, and he had read a piece of paper about the doomsday. The first place disappearing would be Japan. Japan had many volcanoes which made Japan disappear first. After forty-two countries disappeared, Hong Kong was the next place. Jacky took his family to the airport and went to Nepal. He knew there would be a typhoons and tsunamis in Hong Kong.
Jacky arrived at the airport. Suddenly, a typhoon attacked an airplane and the control tower of the airport. All lights of the airport were turned off. No airplanes could take off. Jacky could not think of any way to escape from Hong Kong. His wife had a good idea, “We can use a helicopter to escape from Hong Kong!” Jacky asked, “Where can we find one?” His wife answered, “My friend has one, but it was on the Hong Kong Island!” Jacky murmured, “Oh no!”
Jacky drove to the Hong Kong Inland. They only had thirty minutes. It was not enough and Jacky’s wife called her friend to drive his helicopter to the Kam Shan Country Park to save time. When they arrived at the Kam Shan Country Park, there was a bunker at the entrance so the car could not go inside. They needed to walk inside. There were many monkeys following them. They only had one minute left when they found the helicopter. They arrived at the top of the mountain and the doomsday of Hong Kong was coming. There were 24 typhoons that caused a big tsunami.
The big tsunami destroyed many airplanes and there were many airplane crashes. Jacky and his family got on the helicopter. They looked back at Hong Kong, and it disappeared. Many people died in this disaster. Only 328 people escaped to Szechwan. Only 243 countries survived.
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There was a doomsday on 2012. Today was 1st January, 2012. There were many people got their baggage and ready to go into exile. We it was three o’clock in the morning, there were a news report about Japan case. There was a rock mountain exploded in the Japan’s Osaka. Many people die in the catastrophe. It was the prediction for Japan which would disappear.
Jacky was a prophet of Hong Kong, he saw the doomsday’s paper. The first place of disappeared is Japan. Japan was a rock mountain place, the rock mountain made their place disappeared first. After forty-two places disappeared, Hong Kong was the next place. Jacky belt their parent and sister to go to the airport and left out Hong Kong to arrive Nepal. Hong Kong would have many typhoons and there were many typhoons attacked Hong Kong some place near sea.
Then, Jacky arrived to the airport. Suddenly, a typhoon attacked an airplane and the airport of console. Every light of airport turned dark and could not have any airplane to fly in the sky. Jacky could not think any idea to live in the world. His wife said a good idea, “We can use the helicopter to leave out Hong Kong!” Jacky asked, “Where can we find the helicopter?” Jacky’s wife answered, “My friend has a helicopter, but it was in Hong Kong Island!” Jacky said murmur us, “Oh- no!”
Then, Jacky used his car to go back Hong Kong Inland. They only had thirty minutes to go back Hong Kong Island. It was not enough and Jacky’s wife called her friends to use his helicopter to fly to Kam Shan Country Park. So they could have enough time. Although the helicopter could not crash-land they need to keep their live.
When they arrived the Kam Shan Country Park, the entrance had a bunker and the car could not go to inside and they needed to walk inside. There were many Kam Shan’s monkey—Rhesus and they heel us and when we only had one minutes, we found the helicopter and we arrived the top of the minutes and the doomsday of Hong Kong was coming and there were 12- 24 typhoons gave rise a big tsunami.
The big tsunami plangent many airplane and there were many airplane car crash. Then Jacky and his wife and family leave out Hong Kong. They saw the Hong Kong and after one minutes, Hong Kong disappeared and many people died in this catastrophe. There were only 328 people leave out and they went to Szechwan to live there. There were only 243 countries did not disappear.
Jacky was a prophet of Hong Kong, he saw the doomsday’s paper. The first place of disappeared is Japan. Japan was a rock mountain place, the rock mountain made their place disappeared first. After forty-two places disappeared, Hong Kong was the next place. Jacky belt their parent and sister to go to the airport and left out Hong Kong to arrive Nepal. Hong Kong would have many typhoons and there were many typhoons attacked Hong Kong some place near sea.
Then, Jacky arrived to the airport. Suddenly, a typhoon attacked an airplane and the airport of console. Every light of airport turned dark and could not have any airplane to fly in the sky. Jacky could not think any idea to live in the world. His wife said a good idea, “We can use the helicopter to leave out Hong Kong!” Jacky asked, “Where can we find the helicopter?” Jacky’s wife answered, “My friend has a helicopter, but it was in Hong Kong Island!” Jacky said murmur us, “Oh- no!”
Then, Jacky used his car to go back Hong Kong Inland. They only had thirty minutes to go back Hong Kong Island. It was not enough and Jacky’s wife called her friends to use his helicopter to fly to Kam Shan Country Park. So they could have enough time. Although the helicopter could not crash-land they need to keep their live.
When they arrived the Kam Shan Country Park, the entrance had a bunker and the car could not go to inside and they needed to walk inside. There were many Kam Shan’s monkey—Rhesus and they heel us and when we only had one minutes, we found the helicopter and we arrived the top of the minutes and the doomsday of Hong Kong was coming and there were 12- 24 typhoons gave rise a big tsunami.
The big tsunami plangent many airplane and there were many airplane car crash. Then Jacky and his wife and family leave out Hong Kong. They saw the Hong Kong and after one minutes, Hong Kong disappeared and many people died in this catastrophe. There were only 328 people leave out and they went to Szechwan to live there. There were only 243 countries did not disappear.
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The Nobel Crisis -amended
One day, the police of the USA called Alex, “Hi detective, I am the Chief Constable. There were madmen stealing many Nobel Prizes and the next target is the American president Obama. They want to kill him and get the Nobel Prize. Could you go to the USA? We will pay for the flight and hotel. I think they are from Al-Qaeda. There are altogether 169 prizes missing.”
So Alex went to the USA to see what happened. They stole 169 Nobel Prizes in forty-eight museums around the world. When Alex went to the Hilton Hotel, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to stab him, but Alex’s bodyguard protected him and they took the man to the police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigated the Nobel Prize case. They needed to find some security tapes. They saw a black man who wore black clothes and a red hat in the tape,. When Alex went to the Nobel Museum, he found some blue powder and forty-five Nobel Prizes.
Then, they found the security guard of the Nobel Museum. He said he could not find anything in the museum. But Alex found forty-five Nobel Prizes in a small toilet. The security guard was arrested by a policeman.
When Alex thought he had solved the case and went back to the toilet, the Nobel Prizes disappeared. All the security guards at the museum door said, ”No one went out of the museum!” Alex kept thinking, ”What happened?” Alex pointed to the policeman who was taking the security guard and shouted, ”He is the thief, arrest him!”
The policeman asked, ”How did you know?” Alex explained, ”Your bag was heavier and bigger than before! If no one had come in or gone out of the museum, the thief must be the policeman!” Then, they found one 169 Nobel Prizes in the bag. The man was arrested too.
So Alex had solved the case and was awarded the USA Good Citizen Prize.
So Alex went to the USA to see what happened. They stole 169 Nobel Prizes in forty-eight museums around the world. When Alex went to the Hilton Hotel, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to stab him, but Alex’s bodyguard protected him and they took the man to the police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigated the Nobel Prize case. They needed to find some security tapes. They saw a black man who wore black clothes and a red hat in the tape,. When Alex went to the Nobel Museum, he found some blue powder and forty-five Nobel Prizes.
Then, they found the security guard of the Nobel Museum. He said he could not find anything in the museum. But Alex found forty-five Nobel Prizes in a small toilet. The security guard was arrested by a policeman.
When Alex thought he had solved the case and went back to the toilet, the Nobel Prizes disappeared. All the security guards at the museum door said, ”No one went out of the museum!” Alex kept thinking, ”What happened?” Alex pointed to the policeman who was taking the security guard and shouted, ”He is the thief, arrest him!”
The policeman asked, ”How did you know?” Alex explained, ”Your bag was heavier and bigger than before! If no one had come in or gone out of the museum, the thief must be the policeman!” Then, they found one 169 Nobel Prizes in the bag. The man was arrested too.
So Alex had solved the case and was awarded the USA Good Citizen Prize.
One day, the police of the USA called Alex, “Hi detective, I am the Chief Constable. There were madmen stealing many Nobel Prizes and the next target is the American president Obama. They want to kill him and get the Nobel Prize. Could you go to the USA? We will pay for the flight and hotel. I think they are from Al-Qaeda. There are altogether 169 prizes missing.”
So Alex went to the USA to see what happened. They stole 169 Nobel Prizes in forty-eight museums around the world. When Alex went to the Hilton Hotel, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to stab him, but Alex’s bodyguard protected him and they took the man to the police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigated the Nobel Prize case. They needed to find some security tapes. They saw a black man who wore black clothes and a red hat in the tape,. When Alex went to the Nobel Museum, he found some blue powder and forty-five Nobel Prizes.
Then, they found the security guard of the Nobel Museum. He said he could not find anything in the museum. But Alex found forty-five Nobel Prizes in a small toilet. The security guard was arrested by a policeman.
When Alex thought he had solved the case and went back to the toilet, the Nobel Prizes disappeared. All the security guards at the museum door said, ”No one went out of the museum!” Alex kept thinking, ”What happened?” Alex pointed to the policeman who was taking the security guard and shouted, ”He is the thief, arrest him!”
The policeman asked, ”How did you know?” Alex explained, ”Your bag was heavier and bigger than before! If no one had come in or gone out of the museum, the thief must be the policeman!” Then, they found one 169 Nobel Prizes in the bag. The man was arrested too.
So Alex had solved the case and was awarded the USA Good Citizen Prize.
So Alex went to the USA to see what happened. They stole 169 Nobel Prizes in forty-eight museums around the world. When Alex went to the Hilton Hotel, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to stab him, but Alex’s bodyguard protected him and they took the man to the police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigated the Nobel Prize case. They needed to find some security tapes. They saw a black man who wore black clothes and a red hat in the tape,. When Alex went to the Nobel Museum, he found some blue powder and forty-five Nobel Prizes.
Then, they found the security guard of the Nobel Museum. He said he could not find anything in the museum. But Alex found forty-five Nobel Prizes in a small toilet. The security guard was arrested by a policeman.
When Alex thought he had solved the case and went back to the toilet, the Nobel Prizes disappeared. All the security guards at the museum door said, ”No one went out of the museum!” Alex kept thinking, ”What happened?” Alex pointed to the policeman who was taking the security guard and shouted, ”He is the thief, arrest him!”
The policeman asked, ”How did you know?” Alex explained, ”Your bag was heavier and bigger than before! If no one had come in or gone out of the museum, the thief must be the policeman!” Then, they found one 169 Nobel Prizes in the bag. The man was arrested too.
So Alex had solved the case and was awarded the USA Good Citizen Prize.
One day, police called Alex, “Hi detective, I was Chief Constable. There were a Madman steal many Nobel Prize and the next target is United States of America president Barack Hussein Obama. He wanted to kill him and got the Nobel Prize. Could you go to USA? We will gave you all the money of plane, hotel. I think the man is Al-Qaeda’s people. There were forty- five Nobelpriset i fysik, thrity- two Nobel Prize in Chemistry, twenty- one List of Nobel laureates in Physiology or Medicine, forty- five Nobel Prize in Literature and twenty- six Nobel Peace Prize!”
So, Alex went to USA and heard what happened. There were forty eight museum of the world and one hundred sixty- nine Nobel Prize he got. When Alex went to Anaheim Hilton, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to hurt him, but his bodyguard protect him and they took the man to police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigated the Nobel Prize legal and needed to found some magnetic tape. When they walked the magnetic, the man looked like a black man wore a black clothes and a red hat. When I went to the Nobel Prize and Nobel museum, I found some blue things and there were forty- five Nobel Prize.
Then, we found the ensure safety of the public of the Nobel Prize and Notel museum. He said he did not found anything in the museum. But Alex found forty- fivev Nobel Prize in the small toilet. The ensure safety of the public of the Nobel Prize and Notel museum went to the police office.
When Alex thought he done the case and went back the toilet, the Nobel Prize disappeared. All the police of museum door said, ”Not one went out the museum!” Alex thought and thought, ”what happened of it?” Alex used his hand to indicate the police who was taking the ensure safety of the public of the Nobel Prize and Notel museum. Alex shouted, ”He was the petty thief, catch him!”
The people asked, ”Why you know it?” Alex said, ”It was because your bag was repeat than before and the bag will biger than before too! If did not had anyone come in and go out, the petty thief will be the police!” Then, they found one one hundred sixty- nine Nobel Prize in the bag. The man went to the police office too.
Then Alex done the case and he got the USA good man prize.
So, Alex went to USA and heard what happened. There were forty eight museum of the world and one hundred sixty- nine Nobel Prize he got. When Alex went to Anaheim Hilton, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to hurt him, but his bodyguard protect him and they took the man to police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigated the Nobel Prize legal and needed to found some magnetic tape. When they walked the magnetic, the man looked like a black man wore a black clothes and a red hat. When I went to the Nobel Prize and Nobel museum, I found some blue things and there were forty- five Nobel Prize.
Then, we found the ensure safety of the public of the Nobel Prize and Notel museum. He said he did not found anything in the museum. But Alex found forty- fivev Nobel Prize in the small toilet. The ensure safety of the public of the Nobel Prize and Notel museum went to the police office.
When Alex thought he done the case and went back the toilet, the Nobel Prize disappeared. All the police of museum door said, ”Not one went out the museum!” Alex thought and thought, ”what happened of it?” Alex used his hand to indicate the police who was taking the ensure safety of the public of the Nobel Prize and Notel museum. Alex shouted, ”He was the petty thief, catch him!”
The people asked, ”Why you know it?” Alex said, ”It was because your bag was repeat than before and the bag will biger than before too! If did not had anyone come in and go out, the petty thief will be the police!” Then, they found one one hundred sixty- nine Nobel Prize in the bag. The man went to the police office too.
Then Alex done the case and he got the USA good man prize.
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One day, police called Alex, “Hi detective, I was Chief Constable. There were a Madman steal many Nobel Prize and the next target is United States of America president Barack Hussein Obama. He wanted to kill him and got the Nobel Prize. Could you go to USA? We will gave you all the money of plane, hotel. I think the man is Al-Qaeda’s people. There were forty- five Nobelpriset i fysik, thrity- two Nobel Prize in Chemistry, twenty- one List of Nobel laureates in Physiology or Medicine, forty- five Nobel Prize in Literature and twenty- six Nobel Peace Prize!”
So, Alex went to USA and heard what happened. There were forty eight museum of the world and one hundred sixty- nine Nobel Prize he got. When Alex went to Anaheim Hilton, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to hurt him, but his bodyguard protect him and they took the man to police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigate the Nobel Prize legal and needed to found some magnetic tape and the man looked like a
So, Alex went to USA and heard what happened. There were forty eight museum of the world and one hundred sixty- nine Nobel Prize he got. When Alex went to Anaheim Hilton, a man wanted to use a pocket knife to hurt him, but his bodyguard protect him and they took the man to police.
After two days, he went to Sweden and investigate the Nobel Prize legal and needed to found some magnetic tape and the man looked like a
20091120
Scary Day- amended
I picked up a mobile phone in the library this morning. I picked it up and wanted to give it to the librarian. Suddenly, the phone rang and I answered it. I heard a strange voice saying, “Please give the phone back to me. Meet me in the park in 20 minutes.” I had some time before the next class so I took the phone to the park.
I arrived there 20 minutes later, and there were six young men who looked like gangsters. I felt scared and wanted to go back. There was an older man who was the gang leader. He had a scar on his face and a dragon tattoo on his arm. It was very scary and I used my pocket knife to protect myself. My pocket knife was my daily necessity. It was because I was a private detective and many relatives of the criminals I caught came back for revenge.
One of the young men asked, “Where is my mobile phone? If you don’t give it back, I will hit you!” I gave the mobile phone to him and he looked carefully. Suddenly, he shouted, “Where is the password of my phone? Did you get it?” I thought he was a crook and wanted to steal my money. I said, “I don’t know what you are talking about!” He roared, “Don’t cheat me, you should pay me back!” I ran out of the park and turned back, and there were eight gangsters running after me.
I went into the alley and there were four men smoking. They were holding wooden clubs. I wanted to escape, but there were six gangsters at the back. I could not escape and needed to give them money. I was very worried and used the pocket knife to stab them. They were very careless and fell down one by one. I went to the library and pretended to read a book so that they wouldn’t find me.
When they went to the library, I called the police to go to the library door. I went out of the library and saw the gangsters being caught by the police. I got the good citizen reward. Then I needed to be careful everyday, because they were gangsters and they would revenge. I would not be safe anymore.
When I went back home, I saw two gangsters running after me and I went to my car to get my gun. When I closed my car door, two gangsters were behind me. They caught me to their headquarters. There were a lot of gangsters and they had many wooden clubs. I used my gun and shot the gang leader and called the police. The police found many debtors. They were very exhausted and starving. I was safe and did not need to be scared everyday.
I arrived there 20 minutes later, and there were six young men who looked like gangsters. I felt scared and wanted to go back. There was an older man who was the gang leader. He had a scar on his face and a dragon tattoo on his arm. It was very scary and I used my pocket knife to protect myself. My pocket knife was my daily necessity. It was because I was a private detective and many relatives of the criminals I caught came back for revenge.
One of the young men asked, “Where is my mobile phone? If you don’t give it back, I will hit you!” I gave the mobile phone to him and he looked carefully. Suddenly, he shouted, “Where is the password of my phone? Did you get it?” I thought he was a crook and wanted to steal my money. I said, “I don’t know what you are talking about!” He roared, “Don’t cheat me, you should pay me back!” I ran out of the park and turned back, and there were eight gangsters running after me.
I went into the alley and there were four men smoking. They were holding wooden clubs. I wanted to escape, but there were six gangsters at the back. I could not escape and needed to give them money. I was very worried and used the pocket knife to stab them. They were very careless and fell down one by one. I went to the library and pretended to read a book so that they wouldn’t find me.
When they went to the library, I called the police to go to the library door. I went out of the library and saw the gangsters being caught by the police. I got the good citizen reward. Then I needed to be careful everyday, because they were gangsters and they would revenge. I would not be safe anymore.
When I went back home, I saw two gangsters running after me and I went to my car to get my gun. When I closed my car door, two gangsters were behind me. They caught me to their headquarters. There were a lot of gangsters and they had many wooden clubs. I used my gun and shot the gang leader and called the police. The police found many debtors. They were very exhausted and starving. I was safe and did not need to be scared everyday.
I picked up a mobile phone in the library this morning. I picked it up and wanted to give it to the librarian. Suddenly, the phone rang and I answered it. I heard a strange voice saying, “Please give the phone back to me. Meet me in the park in 20 minutes.” I had some time before the next class so I took the phone to the park.
After 20 minutes I arrived there, there were six people. They looked like the gangsters. I felt scare and wanted to go back. The man called Jacky had a scar on his face and he had a tattoo of dragon. It was very terror and I used my pocket knife to prepare. Pocket knife was my articles for daily use. It was because if I done the case, the convict’s one’s parent retaliate of me. So I needed to have a pocket knife to preserve against me.
Jacky asked, “Where is my mobile phone? If you don’t give me I will hit you!” I gave the mobile phone to him and he look be careful. Suddenly, he shouted, “Why I lose my phone password! Did you get it?” I thought he was a cheater and wanted to steal my money. I said, “I didn’t know what you said!” He shouted, “You no need to cheat me, you should give me money!” I went out the park and I saw back, there were eight people ran after me.
I went to the alley and there were four people smoke and they took the wooden club. I wanted to go back, but the six gangsters at the back. I did not have any export and needed to give the money to them. I was very worried and used the pocket knife to hit them. They were very careless one on one and fell down in there and I went to the library. I used a Chinese story book to read. So that they couldn’t know I was the target.
When they went to the library, I called the police to go to the library door. I thought they were cheater. I went out the library and saw they all caught of the police. I got a good resident of a city reward. Then I needed to be careful everyday. It was because they were gangsters and could not relieve too. I will not safe anymore.
When I went back home, I saw two people ran after me and I went to my car to took my gun. When I closed my car door, two people were on my back. They could me to there headquarter. There were a lot of gangsters and they got wood club. I used my gun and shot the eldest of headquarter and I called the police to arrive there. The police found many calumniator of the loan there. They were very tired and hungry.
After 20 minutes I arrived there, there were six people. They looked like the gangsters. I felt scare and wanted to go back. The man called Jacky had a scar on his face and he had a tattoo of dragon. It was very terror and I used my pocket knife to prepare. Pocket knife was my articles for daily use. It was because if I done the case, the convict’s one’s parent retaliate of me. So I needed to have a pocket knife to preserve against me.
Jacky asked, “Where is my mobile phone? If you don’t give me I will hit you!” I gave the mobile phone to him and he look be careful. Suddenly, he shouted, “Why I lose my phone password! Did you get it?” I thought he was a cheater and wanted to steal my money. I said, “I didn’t know what you said!” He shouted, “You no need to cheat me, you should give me money!” I went out the park and I saw back, there were eight people ran after me.
I went to the alley and there were four people smoke and they took the wooden club. I wanted to go back, but the six gangsters at the back. I did not have any export and needed to give the money to them. I was very worried and used the pocket knife to hit them. They were very careless one on one and fell down in there and I went to the library. I used a Chinese story book to read. So that they couldn’t know I was the target.
When they went to the library, I called the police to go to the library door. I thought they were cheater. I went out the library and saw they all caught of the police. I got a good resident of a city reward. Then I needed to be careful everyday. It was because they were gangsters and could not relieve too. I will not safe anymore.
When I went back home, I saw two people ran after me and I went to my car to took my gun. When I closed my car door, two people were on my back. They could me to there headquarter. There were a lot of gangsters and they got wood club. I used my gun and shot the eldest of headquarter and I called the police to arrive there. The police found many calumniator of the loan there. They were very tired and hungry.
20091115
I picked up a mobile phone in the library this morning. I picked it up and wanted to give it to the librarian. Suddenly, the phone rang and I answered it. I heard a strange voice saying, “Please give the phone back to me. Meet me in the park in 20 minutes.” I had some time before the next class so I took the phone to the park.
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(continue the story. write 300 words)
WORDS YOU MAY USE:
gangsters 古惑仔
headquarters 基地
wooden club 木棍
alley 後街
The New Helen Keller ---amended
“There was a traffic accident in the Tai Koo. The victim was a child called Joelle. She lost her left hand. She was very scared and did not know why she needed to live. DDTV, Peter Chan reports!”
Joelle needed to live in the hospital for about two months. She only wanted to eat some bread and drink some milk. There was a famous doctor called Dr. Wong who could change are person’s memories. He was a magician too, and he had two apprentices. They were Jacky and Ben. When the doctor wanted to ask Joelle, she pushed the doctor away and shouted, “Who are you? Why are you here?” The doctor said, “I am Dr. Wong I will help you fulfill your wishes. I am a magician and I went to King’s
Then the doctor said the curse and Joelle disappeared. It was because the doctor said the wrong curse. Joelle went into the magic world. If she wanted to go back the real world, she needed to learn magic. If she could pass the magic test, she could become a magician and go back to the real world.
She learned how to turn into animals, and turn other people and magician into animals. She could use the broomstick to fly in the sky and make people lose their memories. She had passed all magic tests, and went back the real world. When she opened her eyes, she was sleeping in her bed in the hospital. She saw the doctor again.
The doctor asked, “What memories do you wanted to delete?” She said, “I don’t want to delete memories anymore, thank you for your idea and taking me to the magic world!” Then, she worked hard and was very active. Her parents felt she was likes Helen Keller. When she grew up, she became a famous writer and wrote forty- five story books.
“Hi My name is Peter. There had traffic unexpected in the Tai Koo. There was a child called Joelle. She lost her hand and she had a big shadow of child. She was very scared and did not know why she needed to be a person and why she needed to live in the world! DDTV Peter reported!”
Joelle needed to live in the hospital about two mouths. She only wanted to eat some bread and drink some milk. One day, a doctor called Mr. Wong. He was a famous doctor and he could change person’s memory. He was a conjurer, he had two apprentice and they were Jacky and Ben. When the doctor asked to Joelle, she pushed the doctor and shouted, “What is your name and why do you come in?” The doctor said, “My name is Mr. Wong, I was a conjurer and My College was King Road Magic College! This school was in the magic world. If you want to become right! You need to remember you thing that you don’t want to heart!”
Then the doctor said the charm and Joelle disappear into the world. It was because the doctor said the wrong charm. Joelle stay into the magic world if she wanted to go back the world, she needed to done all the magic, She needed to learn the magic things if she can pass all the magic test, she could become a conjurer and went back to the world of people.
She learned how to become an animals and how to make other people and conjurer be the animals. She could use the piassava to fly in the sky and she could use some charm to make people lost there memory. When she was past all the test of magic, she could go back to the world of people. When she opened her eyes, she was sleep in the bed of hospital. She saw the doctor again too.
The doctor asked, “What memories do you wanted to delete?” She said, “I don’t want to delete anymore, thank you your idea and you took me to the magic of the world!” Then, she word hard and she was very active to see the world. Her father and mother felt she was not Joelle and she was the new Helen Adams Keller.
After she grow up, she became a famous writer and she wrote forty- five story books too.
Joelle needed to live in the hospital about two mouths. She only wanted to eat some bread and drink some milk. One day, a doctor called Mr. Wong. He was a famous doctor and he could change person’s memory. He was a conjurer, he had two apprentice and they were Jacky and Ben. When the doctor asked to Joelle, she pushed the doctor and shouted, “What is your name and why do you come in?” The doctor said, “My name is Mr. Wong, I was a conjurer and My College was King Road Magic College! This school was in the magic world. If you want to become right! You need to remember you thing that you don’t want to heart!”
Then the doctor said the charm and Joelle disappear into the world. It was because the doctor said the wrong charm. Joelle stay into the magic world if she wanted to go back the world, she needed to done all the magic, She needed to learn the magic things if she can pass all the magic test, she could become a conjurer and went back to the world of people.
She learned how to become an animals and how to make other people and conjurer be the animals. She could use the piassava to fly in the sky and she could use some charm to make people lost there memory. When she was past all the test of magic, she could go back to the world of people. When she opened her eyes, she was sleep in the bed of hospital. She saw the doctor again too.
The doctor asked, “What memories do you wanted to delete?” She said, “I don’t want to delete anymore, thank you your idea and you took me to the magic of the world!” Then, she word hard and she was very active to see the world. Her father and mother felt she was not Joelle and she was the new Helen Adams Keller.
After she grow up, she became a famous writer and she wrote forty- five story books too.
20091109
ORAL PRESENTATION
if I could delete and change one memory...
-- WHAT and WHY to delete? HOW to change?
-- WHAT and WHY to delete? HOW to change?
- brain 腦
- memory 記憶
- regret 後悔
Who Stalked Me? - amended
When I went to school today, I saw a shadow at the corner of my eye. I was very scared but I didn’t do anything. I looked very calm so that he would not notice. Then, I walked quickly. Suddenly, I saw my best friend, Johnny. So, we went to school together. I was not scared anymore and we arrived at school. I went to my classroom, and the shadow disappeared. When it was recess time, I went to the tuck shop. It was on the ground floor. There were many people, and I played basketball with them. The basketball court was near the front door of the school.
When it was time for newspaper delivery, Johnny shot the basketball carelessly. I ran out and wanted to get back the basketball. Suddenly, a woman walked in front of me and she was our class teacher. She asked, “Why do you go out?” I answered, “Johnny shot the basketball outside, and I want to get it back!” She said, “It is good, but you are not careful!”
When I went back to school, a basketball hit me. There was a man behind a car at the school door. I thought, “Who is he?” When I went back to my class, there were two classmates outside my classroom. They said, “That old man always helps us!” I asked, “Why?” They said, “He does not have any children, so he always talks with us!”
I thought the old man was the shadow. So I went back home happily after school. When I saw the shadow again, I went near the shadow. He was the old man! He bought some food and said, “What’s your name?” I answered, “My name is Alex!” Then I talked with him for an evening. The old man was called Jeff, and he was eighty- five years old.
He was never married, and he did not have any children. He wanted to have a child before he passed away. He wanted to play with children. Then I went back home quickly. When I went back home, I saw a TV news report about an old man being killed by a car. He was called Jeff!
I cried, “Jeff, have you fulfilled your dream?”
When it was time for newspaper delivery, Johnny shot the basketball carelessly. I ran out and wanted to get back the basketball. Suddenly, a woman walked in front of me and she was our class teacher. She asked, “Why do you go out?” I answered, “Johnny shot the basketball outside, and I want to get it back!” She said, “It is good, but you are not careful!”
When I went back to school, a basketball hit me. There was a man behind a car at the school door. I thought, “Who is he?” When I went back to my class, there were two classmates outside my classroom. They said, “That old man always helps us!” I asked, “Why?” They said, “He does not have any children, so he always talks with us!”
I thought the old man was the shadow. So I went back home happily after school. When I saw the shadow again, I went near the shadow. He was the old man! He bought some food and said, “What’s your name?” I answered, “My name is Alex!” Then I talked with him for an evening. The old man was called Jeff, and he was eighty- five years old.
He was never married, and he did not have any children. He wanted to have a child before he passed away. He wanted to play with children. Then I went back home quickly. When I went back home, I saw a TV news report about an old man being killed by a car. He was called Jeff!
I cried, “Jeff, have you fulfilled your dream?”
When I was small, I liked to play the ant to make me happy. I was born in Hong Kong and my best comic or funny picture was Conan and BLEACH. I always bought it at seven eleven. I went to school by MTR or bus. I was very sporty and play basketball every recess at school. When it was Saturday I will go to swimming pool and when it was Sunday, I will play basketball.
I wanted to be a detective because I like watched detect books. I needed to done well at anything. After I done my job—student, I got ten A and I used my money of school, I opened a detective room.
Before forty years, I was a famous detective. I always search many witness, and done many legal case. I was very happy, because I was very famous. But new, I did not have anything! I was not sad, because I had my clever son and my beautiful life. I was very lucky too. When I wrote my life, I want to talk you. I married my life when I was thirty- four years old, she was called Jenny and she was twenty –nine years old when we married. Now she was forty-three years old and I was forty-eight and my son was twelve years old now.
My son was a sporty and clever child. He said when he grew up, he wanted to be a sportier, and his name was Winson. His name was very lucky of match. It was because he was a son and I wanted he won any match, so win and son put together and became Winson! He was good at swam and four of swim he know. He won the Hong Kong 2046 swimming match. He made twelve notes taken down in his secondary school. When it was Sunday, we would go to the public swimming pool swim of three hours and he enjoyed the swimming.
Today was my retire day, I was very happy. Many cases flew in my brain. When I was eighteen years old, I done my first case and I became famous. When one month before, I done my last case and I careful to look after my son.
I wanted my son to be a good swimmer and wanted he make Hong Kong to win the first Olympic Game gold medal of swimming.
I wanted to be a detective because I like watched detect books. I needed to done well at anything. After I done my job—student, I got ten A and I used my money of school, I opened a detective room.
Before forty years, I was a famous detective. I always search many witness, and done many legal case. I was very happy, because I was very famous. But new, I did not have anything! I was not sad, because I had my clever son and my beautiful life. I was very lucky too. When I wrote my life, I want to talk you. I married my life when I was thirty- four years old, she was called Jenny and she was twenty –nine years old when we married. Now she was forty-three years old and I was forty-eight and my son was twelve years old now.
My son was a sporty and clever child. He said when he grew up, he wanted to be a sportier, and his name was Winson. His name was very lucky of match. It was because he was a son and I wanted he won any match, so win and son put together and became Winson! He was good at swam and four of swim he know. He won the Hong Kong 2046 swimming match. He made twelve notes taken down in his secondary school. When it was Sunday, we would go to the public swimming pool swim of three hours and he enjoyed the swimming.
Today was my retire day, I was very happy. Many cases flew in my brain. When I was eighteen years old, I done my first case and I became famous. When one month before, I done my last case and I careful to look after my son.
I wanted my son to be a good swimmer and wanted he make Hong Kong to win the first Olympic Game gold medal of swimming.
20091103
Autobiography自傳
- think of how old you are now
- why do you decide to write an autobiography 決定?
- important重要 events事件 in your life, like your birth 出生, school days, wedding 婚禮, divorce 離婚, work, etc. how do you feel about them?
400 words
Unlucky day--Halloween: amended
Today was Halloween. I went to Ocean Park with my best friends, Johnny, Ben and Jason. It was the last day of the Ocean Park Halloween. When we went there, it was six o’clock. We went to the Chinese haunted house first. It was not scary at first. Suddenly, an old Chinese official ran towards our direction. We were very scared and wanted to leave the haunted house, but we could not find the exit. We went out of the house, but we only saw a forest. We were very tired, so we sat on the ground. When Ben sat down, he fell down into a hole. He got hurt.
We wanted to pull him out of the hole, but it was very small and narrow. Then, Ben fell deeper into the hole. I said to Johnny, “Could you use the mobile phone to call him?” He answered, “Okay! But my mobile phone does not have enough battery and we only have one chance to call!” Jason said, “We can call the police or Ocean Park! Alex stays here. Johnny and I go back and find the staff of Ocean Park!” I shouted, “No, maybe you stay here!”
Johnny said, “You should stay here, because it is your idea!” So Jason stayed there. Johnny and I went to the door again. When we went to the room, we did not see anything because it was very dark. Johnny turned on the light of his mobile phone, and we went to the correct exit. We went to the Call Center and said, “Can you give me a bottle of alcohol and a rope? My friend fell into the hole!”
The staff went with us and said, “Where did you find the hole?” Johnny said, “It was near the Chinese haunted house!” We went there and found Jason there. He was scared and yelled, “I… saw a ghost there!” We turned back and saw a Chinese ghost. There was some blood on his face and he had a man on his back. The man was covered with blood too! The staff went near the ghost.
The staff said, “It was our colleague and he was about to carry the dummy to the haunted house! Then the staff called the police and used the rope to save Ben. It was an unlucky day for us!
We wanted to pull him out of the hole, but it was very small and narrow. Then, Ben fell deeper into the hole. I said to Johnny, “Could you use the mobile phone to call him?” He answered, “Okay! But my mobile phone does not have enough battery and we only have one chance to call!” Jason said, “We can call the police or Ocean Park! Alex stays here. Johnny and I go back and find the staff of Ocean Park!” I shouted, “No, maybe you stay here!”
Johnny said, “You should stay here, because it is your idea!” So Jason stayed there. Johnny and I went to the door again. When we went to the room, we did not see anything because it was very dark. Johnny turned on the light of his mobile phone, and we went to the correct exit. We went to the Call Center and said, “Can you give me a bottle of alcohol and a rope? My friend fell into the hole!”
The staff went with us and said, “Where did you find the hole?” Johnny said, “It was near the Chinese haunted house!” We went there and found Jason there. He was scared and yelled, “I… saw a ghost there!” We turned back and saw a Chinese ghost. There was some blood on his face and he had a man on his back. The man was covered with blood too! The staff went near the ghost.
The staff said, “It was our colleague and he was about to carry the dummy to the haunted house! Then the staff called the police and used the rope to save Ben. It was an unlucky day for us!
20091031
Who Stalk Me?
When I went to school today I saw a shadow in my corner of the eye. I was very scared but I never did anything. I looked like did not scared, so he will not fear. Then, I walked quickly and quickly. Suddenly, I saw my best friend—Johnny. So, we went to school together. I was not scared anymore and we arrived our school. I went to my class, and the shadow disappeared. When it was recess, I went to snack department. It was I in the ground floor. There were many people, so I played the basketball. The playground of basketball was near the school front door.
When it was the time of newspaper convey, Johnny shot the basketball carelessly. I ran out and wanted to take the basketball. Suddenly, a man walked in front of me he was our class teacher. She said, “Why do you go out?” I answered, “It was because Johnny shot the basketball outside, and I want to take it!” She said, “Although it is good, but you do not be careful!”
When I went back the school, a basketball hurt me. There was a man back to the car. I thought, “Who is he? I do not know!” When I went back my class, there were two classmate were outside my classroom. They said, “There is an old man, he always help us!” I questioned, “Why?” They said, “It is because he does not have any son, so he always talked with us!”
I thought the old man was the shadow. So I went back home happily after school. When I saw the shadow again, I went to the near to the shadow. He was an old man! He bought some food and said, “What is your name?” I answered, “My name is Alex! My school is…” Then I talked with him an evening. The old man called Jeff, he was eighty- five years old.
He did not married, so he did not have any son too! He wanted to have a son before him past away. He wanted to play with the children. Then I went back home quickly. When I went back home, I saw the TV news report. It was reporting an old man died by a car. The old man was called Jeff!
I cried and said, “Jeff, do you do your dream?” I did not cry anymore after four hours.
When it was the time of newspaper convey, Johnny shot the basketball carelessly. I ran out and wanted to take the basketball. Suddenly, a man walked in front of me he was our class teacher. She said, “Why do you go out?” I answered, “It was because Johnny shot the basketball outside, and I want to take it!” She said, “Although it is good, but you do not be careful!”
When I went back the school, a basketball hurt me. There was a man back to the car. I thought, “Who is he? I do not know!” When I went back my class, there were two classmate were outside my classroom. They said, “There is an old man, he always help us!” I questioned, “Why?” They said, “It is because he does not have any son, so he always talked with us!”
I thought the old man was the shadow. So I went back home happily after school. When I saw the shadow again, I went to the near to the shadow. He was an old man! He bought some food and said, “What is your name?” I answered, “My name is Alex! My school is…” Then I talked with him an evening. The old man called Jeff, he was eighty- five years old.
He did not married, so he did not have any son too! He wanted to have a son before him past away. He wanted to play with the children. Then I went back home quickly. When I went back home, I saw the TV news report. It was reporting an old man died by a car. The old man was called Jeff!
I cried and said, “Jeff, do you do your dream?” I did not cry anymore after four hours.
Unlucky day--Halloween
Today was Halloween. I went to Ocean Park with my friend. They were my best friends, Johnny, Ben and Jason. It was the last day of Ocean Park Halloween. When we went there, it was six o’clock. It was the time of Halloween room we play it. We went to the Chinese ghost house first. It was not scary at first, suddenly, an old Chinese office holder ran to our direction. We was very scared and wanted to go out the ghost house, but we lose the export. We went out the house, but we only saw the forest. We were very tired, so we sat on the land. When Ben sat down, he fell down in a hole. He got hurt himself. Ben used his hand to catch the clay.
We wanted to pull him outside, but the hole was very small and deep. Then, Ben fell down there. I said to Johnny, “Could you use the mobile phone to call him?” He answered, “Okay! But my mobile phone does not have enough battery and we only have one chance to call out!” Jason said, “We can call the police or Ocean Park! May be Alex stay here, Johnny and I go back and find the workers of Ocean Park!” I shouted, “No, may be you stay here!”
Johnny said, “It shall be you stay here, because you think this idea!” So, Jason stayed there. Johnny and I went to the room door again. When we went to the room, we did not see anything, it was because it was very dark. Johnny opened his mobile phone light, and we went to the correct exit. We went to the Call Center and said, “Can you give me a bottle of Lysol, and a rope? My friend fell down into the hole!”
Two workers went with us and said, “Where do you find the hole?” Johnny said, “It is near the Chinese ghost house!” We went to there and found Jason there. He shouted scared, “I… see a ghost there!” We turned it back and saw a Chinese ghost. His face had some blood and he took a man. The man had many blood too! The two workers went near the ghost and saw the ghost.
The worker said, “It was our colleague and he took the leave man he prepared to go to the ghost house! Then the worker called the police and used the rope to tide up him. It was the unlucky day of us!
We wanted to pull him outside, but the hole was very small and deep. Then, Ben fell down there. I said to Johnny, “Could you use the mobile phone to call him?” He answered, “Okay! But my mobile phone does not have enough battery and we only have one chance to call out!” Jason said, “We can call the police or Ocean Park! May be Alex stay here, Johnny and I go back and find the workers of Ocean Park!” I shouted, “No, may be you stay here!”
Johnny said, “It shall be you stay here, because you think this idea!” So, Jason stayed there. Johnny and I went to the room door again. When we went to the room, we did not see anything, it was because it was very dark. Johnny opened his mobile phone light, and we went to the correct exit. We went to the Call Center and said, “Can you give me a bottle of Lysol, and a rope? My friend fell down into the hole!”
Two workers went with us and said, “Where do you find the hole?” Johnny said, “It is near the Chinese ghost house!” We went to there and found Jason there. He shouted scared, “I… see a ghost there!” We turned it back and saw a Chinese ghost. His face had some blood and he took a man. The man had many blood too! The two workers went near the ghost and saw the ghost.
The worker said, “It was our colleague and he took the leave man he prepared to go to the ghost house! Then the worker called the police and used the rope to tide up him. It was the unlucky day of us!
20091020
Homework for these 2 weeks
1. Write a story about a stalker (400 words)
Stalk (verb) 追蹤
Stalker (noun; the person) 追蹤者
2. Write a horror恐怖 story (400 words)
scary令人恐懼
blood血
mysterious神祕man
haunted house鬼屋
SEE YOU ON 1 NOVERMBER (sunday)!
Stalk (verb) 追蹤
Stalker (noun; the person) 追蹤者
2. Write a horror恐怖 story (400 words)
scary令人恐懼
blood血
mysterious神祕man
haunted house鬼屋
SEE YOU ON 1 NOVERMBER (sunday)!
The Unfair Class
When I was eight years old, I was not very happy in my class. I was in class 3D, and I always answered my teacher’s questions. I had three best friends there. They were called Anson, Ma and Tony. We always played the Superman game. Ma was our leader. I was the second leader. Whenever I went to school on foot with my mother, my friends would chat with me.
One day, my teacher asked me how to solve a math question. The question was 7-2x9. I was always very happy to answer these questions. I was very certain and answered, “The answer is 45!” My teacher said angrily, “Why?” I said loudly, “It is because 7-2=5, then 5x9 is 45!” Other students laughed at me and someone shouted, “Alex is a fool, the question is very easy!” My teacher said I did not concentrate, so he ordered me to stand up during the whole class.
My teacher asked my classmates another question, “What is 8+2x9? Jenny, can you answer it?” Jenny stood up and answered, “It is 90!” When Jenny said the answer, I thought, “It is wrong, Jenny will need to stand up during class!” But my teacher said, “Sorry, you are wrong! It is because we need to multiply before adding! Sit down!”
I shouted at my teacher, “Why didn’t Jenny need to stand up during class?” My friends shouted too. My teacher said angrily, “It is because Jenny was careless! But you were not concentrating!” I was very angry and shouted, “How did you know I was not concentrating and Jenny was?” My teacher did not say anything and he took me to the Discipline Office.
My teacher said to the teacher at the Discipline Office that I was naughty in math class. He shouted to me angrily. The Discipline Office teacher asked, “Why were rude to your teacher?” I told her everything.
I went to my class again. The bell rang and it was recess. I played the Superman game with my best friends. Suddenly, my Math teacher found me and took me to the Discipline Office again. He said to me, “Sorry, I can’t say you were not concentrating, I have hurt your feelings!” From then on, my Math teacher always took care of me and Math became my favorite subject!
*PROOFREADING LIST*
1. tense
2. spelling
3. noun / verb / adj / adv
4. there is (NOT there have)
5. don’t mix up A and I
6. plural / singular
7. prepositions (e.g. on, at , in)
8. punctuation (e.g. . / , / … / ?)
9. pronouns (e.g. he, she, they)
10. capitalize the first letter in names (e.g. Facebook)
11. son't mix up THEN and THAN
2. spelling
3. noun / verb / adj / adv
4. there is (NOT there have)
5. don’t mix up A and I
6. plural / singular
7. prepositions (e.g. on, at , in)
8. punctuation (e.g. . / , / … / ?)
9. pronouns (e.g. he, she, they)
10. capitalize the first letter in names (e.g. Facebook)
11. son't mix up THEN and THAN
20091018
My favorite lesson-Math
When I was eight years old, I was very not happy in my class. I was 3D class, but I always answered my teacher question. I had three best friends there. They were called Anson, Ma and Tony. We always played the game of superman. Ma was our playing leader. I was the se When I went to school on foot with my mother, my friends talked with me.
One day, my teacher asked me how to do this math. They math was 7-2x9 I was very happy when I answered the questions. I was very affirmative and answered, “The answer is 45!” My teacher said angrily, “Why?” I said loudly, “It is because 7-2=5 than, x9. So it is 45!” Other students smiled me and someone shouted, “Alex is a blockhead, it is very easy!” My teacher said I did concentrate, so he ordered me to stand up conduct a class.
After I stood up, my teacher asked the question for other classmates, “What is 8+2x9? Jenny, can you answer it? Than, Jenny stood up and answered, “It is 90!” When Jenny said the answer, I thought, “It is wrong, Jenny will need to stand up conduct a class!” But my teacher said, “Sorry, you are wrong! It is because we need to x the math, than + the math! Stand down!”
I shouted to my teacher, “Why did Jenny no need to stand up conduct a class?” My friend shouted too! My teacher said, “It is because Jenny is not careful! You are not concentrating!” I was very angry and shouted, “Why do you know I am not concentrating? But Jenny is concentrating?” My teacher did not say anything and he took me to Discipline Office!
My teacher said to the Discipline Office’s teacher this child did not well in math lesson! He shouted to my angrily! The Discipline Office’s teacher asked, “Why do you said to teacher angry and shout?” I answered, “My teacher say me do not concentrate and need me to …” Then, Discipline Office’s teacher knew the things.
I went to my class again and the bell sound and it was recess. I played the superman with my best friends. Suddenly, my Math’s teacher found me and took me to the Discipline Office again. The Math’s teacher said to me, “Sorry, I can not say you are concentrate, I hurt you heart!” Form than on, my Math’s teacher took care of me always and Math became my favorite lesson!
One day, my teacher asked me how to do this math. They math was 7-2x9 I was very happy when I answered the questions. I was very affirmative and answered, “The answer is 45!” My teacher said angrily, “Why?” I said loudly, “It is because 7-2=5 than, x9. So it is 45!” Other students smiled me and someone shouted, “Alex is a blockhead, it is very easy!” My teacher said I did concentrate, so he ordered me to stand up conduct a class.
After I stood up, my teacher asked the question for other classmates, “What is 8+2x9? Jenny, can you answer it? Than, Jenny stood up and answered, “It is 90!” When Jenny said the answer, I thought, “It is wrong, Jenny will need to stand up conduct a class!” But my teacher said, “Sorry, you are wrong! It is because we need to x the math, than + the math! Stand down!”
I shouted to my teacher, “Why did Jenny no need to stand up conduct a class?” My friend shouted too! My teacher said, “It is because Jenny is not careful! You are not concentrating!” I was very angry and shouted, “Why do you know I am not concentrating? But Jenny is concentrating?” My teacher did not say anything and he took me to Discipline Office!
My teacher said to the Discipline Office’s teacher this child did not well in math lesson! He shouted to my angrily! The Discipline Office’s teacher asked, “Why do you said to teacher angry and shout?” I answered, “My teacher say me do not concentrate and need me to …” Then, Discipline Office’s teacher knew the things.
I went to my class again and the bell sound and it was recess. I played the superman with my best friends. Suddenly, my Math’s teacher found me and took me to the Discipline Office again. The Math’s teacher said to me, “Sorry, I can not say you are concentrate, I hurt you heart!” Form than on, my Math’s teacher took care of me always and Math became my favorite lesson!
20091017
The New Nobel Prize - amended
A man called Samson made a new category for the 35th Nobel Prize. It was called the A man called Samson made a new category for the 35th Nobel Prize. It was called the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. A man called William Kennedy Laurie Dickson was Thomas Alva Edison’s student. After Edison had invented the phonograph, Dickson and Eugene Lauste became the students of Edison.
After Edison died, Dickson invented the movies. Then, he won the first Nobel Prize in Entertainment. Then, Dickson and Lauste left and they invented the Latham loop. They set up the Kinetoscope Exhibition Company. He died in 1935.
Jerry Yang invented Yahoo and many people got entertained by it since 1995. Yahoo helps you find games, knowledge, pictures and movies. There are many things you can find there. Yahoo can help you make a blog. It is fun! So, Jerry Yang got the 1997 Nobel Prize in Entertainment. After three years, Larry Page and Sergey Brin invented Google. They invented Gmail. Gmail is the first e-mail service with a very big storage.They got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment.
In 2004, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg invented Facebook. He was born in Amerca on 14th May, 1984.
There were three people who got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. I think they deserve this prize. I think they all worked very hard. They invented things that make many people happy.
. A man called William Kennedy Laurie Dickson was Thomas Alva Edison’s student. After Edison had invented the phonograph, Dickson and Eugene Lauste became the students of Edison.
After Edison died, Dickson invented the movies. Then, he won the first Nobel Prize in Entertainment. Then, Dickson and Lauste left and they invented the Latham loop. They set up the Kinetoscope Exhibition Company. He died in 1935.
Jerry Yang invented Yahoo and many people got entertained by it since 1995. Yahoo helps you find games, knowledge, pictures and movies. There are many things you can find there. Yahoo can help you make a blog. It is fun! So, Jerry Yang got the 1997 Nobel Prize in Entertainment. After three years, Larry Page and Sergey Brin invented Google. They invented Gmail. Gmail is the first e-mail service with a very big storage.They got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment.
In 2004, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg invented Facebook. He was born in Amerca on 14th May, 1984.
There were three people who got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. I think they deserve this prize. I think they all worked very hard. They invented things that make many people happy.
After Edison died, Dickson invented the movies. Then, he won the first Nobel Prize in Entertainment. Then, Dickson and Lauste left and they invented the Latham loop. They set up the Kinetoscope Exhibition Company. He died in 1935.
Jerry Yang invented Yahoo and many people got entertained by it since 1995. Yahoo helps you find games, knowledge, pictures and movies. There are many things you can find there. Yahoo can help you make a blog. It is fun! So, Jerry Yang got the 1997 Nobel Prize in Entertainment. After three years, Larry Page and Sergey Brin invented Google. They invented Gmail. Gmail is the first e-mail service with a very big storage.They got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment.
In 2004, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg invented Facebook. He was born in Amerca on 14th May, 1984.
There were three people who got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. I think they deserve this prize. I think they all worked very hard. They invented things that make many people happy.
. A man called William Kennedy Laurie Dickson was Thomas Alva Edison’s student. After Edison had invented the phonograph, Dickson and Eugene Lauste became the students of Edison.
After Edison died, Dickson invented the movies. Then, he won the first Nobel Prize in Entertainment. Then, Dickson and Lauste left and they invented the Latham loop. They set up the Kinetoscope Exhibition Company. He died in 1935.
Jerry Yang invented Yahoo and many people got entertained by it since 1995. Yahoo helps you find games, knowledge, pictures and movies. There are many things you can find there. Yahoo can help you make a blog. It is fun! So, Jerry Yang got the 1997 Nobel Prize in Entertainment. After three years, Larry Page and Sergey Brin invented Google. They invented Gmail. Gmail is the first e-mail service with a very big storage.They got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment.
In 2004, Mark Elliot Zuckerberg invented Facebook. He was born in Amerca on 14th May, 1984.
There were three people who got the Nobel Prize in Entertainment. I think they deserve this prize. I think they all worked very hard. They invented things that make many people happy.
20091013
Embarrassed Alex
Today, I want to talk about my embarrassing experience when I was small. When I was seven years old, I went to the mall with my family during Chinese New Year to buy some new clothes. There were many things to buy, but I only wanted to play with my toy cars at home. I was very naughty and liked playing with toys very much. When my family was looking for clothes for me, I saw a toy shop next to the boutique. I saw many toys there. I hoped my mother would buy some for me.
When I went back to the boutique, I asked my mother, “Can you buy some toy cars for me? If I need to buy new clothes, I think you need to buy a toy car for me!” My mother shouted, “I don’t know why I need to buy a toy car for you. If you don’t want to have new clothes, I will not buy for you!” I was very angry and shouted, “No, no, no, I need to have a toy car! I don’t want any clothes; I only want a toy car!” I shouted very loudly, so all the shoppers in the mall looked at me. I was very scared and went behind my mother’s back. I was very embarrassed. So, when I went to the mall again, I didn’t shout anymore.
When I went back to the boutique, I asked my mother, “Can you buy some toy cars for me? If I need to buy new clothes, I think you need to buy a toy car for me!” My mother shouted, “I don’t know why I need to buy a toy car for you. If you don’t want to have new clothes, I will not buy for you!” I was very angry and shouted, “No, no, no, I need to have a toy car! I don’t want any clothes; I only want a toy car!” I shouted very loudly, so all the shoppers in the mall looked at me. I was very scared and went behind my mother’s back. I was very embarrassed. So, when I went to the mall again, I didn’t shout anymore.
20091007
Important treasure - amended
One day, a man called Jason found a private detective, Alex. Jason’s father was a rich man and opened a big museum in his attic. But his father died of heart disease. All his relatives received a letter: “If I die, I will put all my money at my office. There is a lot of money so you don’t need to work anymore. But I have put it into a safe! You find it, please! Be careful, there are many engines in my office!”
After Alex read this letter, he and Jason went to his father office. They saw many relatives of Jason. When Alex and Jason went into the room, his mother said, “Be careful, there are many engines, Alex!” They went to the office and found a letter on the table. It wrote: “The code is the month of birthday. If you get it wrong, you will fall into the engines and hurt!”
Alex wanted to say the answer, but Jason’s relatives fell into the engines. Alex knew the number and opened it. The letter wrote: “You need to go to the museum.”
Then, they found the museum’s switch under the sofa. When they turned it on, there were a lot of arrows shooting out. Many people hurt themselves. But no one helped the injured. Only Alex took them outside and called the police.
When they went to the entrance of the museum, they saw a letter which wrote, “No entry!” But many people ran inside, and they were hurt by the engines. Alex used his first aid kit to help the people. There were only two people who were not hurt. Alex used the torch and went inside. When they went to the terminal point, they saw the money, and a girl ran to take the money. Alex shouted, “Stop! It is not the money, there are engines!”
Alex took the girl away and they went out of the museum. Alex said, “I know where the money is!” Alex went to the office again and pushed a book. “Here is the money!” Many people snatched the money. Then they saw a letter under the money. It wrote: “Sorry, I think you will hurt yourself, not one will die. The blood of the injured is only ketchup! You cannot hurt Jason anymore, he is my son!”
After they read it, they always took care of Jason. Jason was very happy, and Alex went back to his own office to work.
After Alex read this letter, he and Jason went to his father office. They saw many relatives of Jason. When Alex and Jason went into the room, his mother said, “Be careful, there are many engines, Alex!” They went to the office and found a letter on the table. It wrote: “The code is the month of birthday. If you get it wrong, you will fall into the engines and hurt!”
Alex wanted to say the answer, but Jason’s relatives fell into the engines. Alex knew the number and opened it. The letter wrote: “You need to go to the museum.”
Then, they found the museum’s switch under the sofa. When they turned it on, there were a lot of arrows shooting out. Many people hurt themselves. But no one helped the injured. Only Alex took them outside and called the police.
When they went to the entrance of the museum, they saw a letter which wrote, “No entry!” But many people ran inside, and they were hurt by the engines. Alex used his first aid kit to help the people. There were only two people who were not hurt. Alex used the torch and went inside. When they went to the terminal point, they saw the money, and a girl ran to take the money. Alex shouted, “Stop! It is not the money, there are engines!”
Alex took the girl away and they went out of the museum. Alex said, “I know where the money is!” Alex went to the office again and pushed a book. “Here is the money!” Many people snatched the money. Then they saw a letter under the money. It wrote: “Sorry, I think you will hurt yourself, not one will die. The blood of the injured is only ketchup! You cannot hurt Jason anymore, he is my son!”
After they read it, they always took care of Jason. Jason was very happy, and Alex went back to his own office to work.
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