Disguiser and Jack

Tom was a disguiser and he always helped the people in African. One day, an Africian went to his office, and he said, “Dr. Tom, could you helped me to be a star and made famous in the world ok?” Tom said, “Which star did you want to be?” The man said, “I want to MJ!” Tom shouted, “Why? He had died already!” The man said, “I was very poor and I want to be rich!” Tom asked, “What’s you name?” The man said, “Jack!”

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After a few days, Jack went to the USA and he went to there by airplane and he started to find a record label. The supper star in the USA was all came from the record label, “Letter Star”, just like the Jesse McCartney, he was a famous star and he was very young in the USA. Many fans that were younger they liked his too. “West life”, was a famous band in the USA. Jack found a place to live and he worked in a restaurant and a fast food shop.

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He had to work everyday, he wanted to join the “Little Star” tryout, but he did not have enough money to join it. One day, the disguiser, Tom went to the USA and he told to Jack, “There were twenty thousands for you, your friends and family were waiting your song and money to help them became rich!” Jack got the money and he sang songs everyday.

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The day before the “Little Star” tryout, Tom helped Jack to face lift. Jack’s sound was the best singer in his village. Jack always sang after work, and he was very nervous when he was singing in the tryout. After he sang, he felt relieved and he was waiting the result. Jack saw his idol, Jesse McCartney, he was singing in the stage.

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Jesse McCartney was the review in the tryout too. There were a lot of fans and people watched the tryout, however Jack knew it after the show. Jesse McCartney said the result after the singing, “The new stars to be our member have three singers, and they are called Sam, Ken and Jack!” Jack was very happy and the three boys went up the stage and sign a contract there.

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Jack was very hard in the Little Star and his two partners, Ken and Sam originate a band in the Little Star, and the band called East Man. Jack was the tonic in the band and Sam was a guitarist. Jack helped his family and friends became rich, but the disguiser disappeared after Jack became the member in the Little Star.

A Dream Had Happen - amended

It was my dream to go to Japan, and now, my dream would start. My best friend, Johnny, and I went to Japan for about two months and started our work. I wanted to go to Japan when I was small. Why did I like Japan? It was because there were a lot of comics in Japan and my favorite comic was called BLEACH. Japanese comics are very popular in Hong Kong and Japan.

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Hong Kong comics were very boring and I didn’t like it. Today, we would go to Osaka and we needed to find our leader in Japan. He was called Sam, and he was half-Japanese. Sam knew Chinese because his mother was Chinese. We went to a Japanese hot spring to check the water to see when was the last volcano eruption. I was a geologist and Johnny was my partner.

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When we saw the hot spring, we were amazed that we had both dreamt about before. We both saw a monkey in the hot spring in the dream. We kept finding the monkey and it was there. We were scared, because the volcano would erupt in our dreams. We rushed to our car and the volcano erupted.

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We panicked and rushed to Sam’s home. Sam was shocked after we told him what happened. He asked us, “What happened in your dream after you got here?” We kept thinking, but we could not recall anything. After a few days, I remembered that someone would be my girlfriend and then I woke up.

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I was overjoyed that my dream had ended, but what about Johnny’s? Had his dream ended? When I bought newspaper near our hotel, there was news about the volcano we had been to. I was shocked that the volcano was the Japanese experiment for checking the temperature of the volcano. The monkey belonged to the Japanese laboratory, but what about my girlfriend? Would it come true? It confused and disappointed me.

After a month, a reporter called Cindy went to our studio and had an interview. She looked just like my girlfriend in my dream. After a month, Johnny went back to Hong Kong, but I didn’t. I had a girlfriend in Japan.

Went to Japan was my dream, and now, my dream would start. My best friend, Johnny, and I went to Japan for about two month and started our work. I wanted to go to Japan when I was small. Why I like Japan? It was because Japan had a lot of comic and my favorite comic was called BLEACH. The comic my Japan was very famous and in Hong Kong, comic was very famous too. The comic was all came from Japan.

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Hong Kong’ comic was very bored and I did like it. Today, we would go to Osaka and we needed to find our leader in Japan. He called Sam, and he was Japanese. Sam learned Chinese already. His mother was Chinese. We went to the Japan’s hot spring and cheeked the water that how long occurred volcano eruption before. I was a geologist and Johnny was my partner.

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We were very amazed that Johnny and I went her in our dream. We knew there was monkey in the hot spring in the dream. We found and found and there were a monkey there too. We were scared, because the mountain would have a volcano eruption. When went to our car quickly. After a few minutes, the mountain volcano eruption.

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We were very scared and went to Sam’s home quickly. Sam was amazed that there were two people in his home. After we said the thing for him, he asked, “What will happen after you went here?” We thought and thought, but we could not thought anything again. After a few days, I thought it that someone would be my girl friend and then, I awaked.

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I was very happy that the dream was finish. It made me happy, but how about Johnny? Did his dream finish? When I bought a newspaper near our hotel, there was news about the mountain which we went there before. I was very amazed that the mountain was the Japanese experiment for cheek the mountain how hot about the mountain. The monkey was their too.

Show Off - amended

Hong Kong’s gap between the rich and the poor has widened. There were a lot of rich students in a school on the Hong Kong Island and they all lived in luxurious homes. Many students own designer labels and showed them off to each other. In Form 1A, all the students were rich. Form 1B was for clever children.

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The most beautiful student in Form 1 was called Jenny and she was from Form 1B. In Form 1A, a student called Ben loved Jenny long time ago, but Jenny did not know. One day, Jenny went to the Form 1A classroom and wanted to get a book from her friend, Cindy. Suddenly, a lot of boys surrounded her. All the boys gave her many things, like Iphone 4 and a few bags. Jenny was very scared and she ran away quickly.

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The next day, Ben and other two boys went to Form 1B and they gave money to everyone. Ben told them to take care of Jenny. Ben was the only child in his family and his family was very generous. Ben got $4000 as his pocket money each month. He gave an Iphone 4 to Jenny, but she did not want it. Ben was very sad. He thought she did not like Iphone 4, so he bought a lot of LV bags to her. Jenny did not want to hurt him, so she received them.

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After a few days, Jenny knew why Ben always gave her presents. Ben loved her, Jenny liked him too. Jenny was not rich, but she was not poor too. Ben’s family may dislike her family because she was not rich. One day, Jenny forgot to bring the math book, many classmates gave her their math books quickly. Jenny was very confused, but she did not know Ben gave money to her classmates to take care of her.

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Jenny asked Cindy, “Why do my classmates take care of me?” Cindy answered, “Ben gave money to your classmates and told them to take care of you!” Jenny was very angry and told Ben that money was worthless. Money was not something to be wasted. If Ben spent money to make his classmates his entourage, he would waste his money. Jenny said, “Don’t waste anymore money. We could know each other again.”

Show off

Hong Kong was a place which was the gap between the rich and the poor has widened. A school in Hong Kong Island had a lot of rich student and they were all come from luxurious home. Many the students had designer labels and showed of with each other. The Form one class A, all the children was rich. The class B was the clever children class.

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One day, a student who was so beautiful in the hold form one. She was called Jenny. In the class A, a child called Ben. Ben love Jenny long time ago, but Jenny did not know. One day, Jenny went inside class A and wanted to get a book from her friend’s Cindy, suddenly, a lot of boys containment her. The all boy gave her many things, like Iphone 4, bag. Jenny was very scared and she ran away quickly.

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Next day, Ben and other two boys went to class B and they gave the money for everyone. But everyone needed to make Jenny know Ben loved her. Ben was the only child in his family and his family was very generous. Ben had pocket money about $4000 one month. Ben bought an Iphone 4 to Jenny, but Jenny did not want. Ben was very sad; he thought he did not like Iphone, so he bought a lot of LV bag to her. Jenny did want to hurt him, so she got it.

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After a few days, Jenny knew why Ben always gave her many things. Ben loved her. Jenny was not rich, but she was not poor too. If Jenny loved with him, Ben’s family may be disliked her family was not rich. One day, Jenny forgot to bring the math book, her classmates gave her quickly. Jenny was very question, but she did not know Ben gave money to her classmate to take care her.

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Jenny asked her friend Cindy, “Why the classmates take care of me?” Cindy answered, “Ben gave the money to your classmates and tell them to take care of you!” Jenny was very angry and found Ben to talk with him. She told to Ben that money was worthless in the world. Money was a thing made you to use, not to rise. If you used the money to make people entourage you, that you were raising money. Did not raise money any more, we could learn each other again.

Write a story about showing off.

WORDS YOU MAY USE:

• The gap between the rich and the poor 貧富差距 has widened擴大.
• worthless 無價值
• spoilt 寵壞的 brat 頑童
• only child 獨生子（或女)
• designer labels 名牌
• generous 慷慨的；大方的
• impress 給…留下深刻的好印象 a girl
• luxurious home 豪華住宅
• entourage 隨從
• splurge 亂花錢

The Story of the Bear -amended

Unluckily, we had lost our owner. No, she threw us away. We dislike her now. Baby cried, “Mum, where are you?” It made me furious, “I hate her, but why does Baby miss her?” We went to a nursery and started to build our world. There were a lot of toys. Their leader was called Ben, and he was a famous toy there.

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One day, he was sick, and I took good care of the toys. There were two toy rooms in the nursery. The first room was for children who were good-hearted. The second room was for the naughty children. When I went to the second room, I saw many children destroying the toys. I was very angry, because I was a toy too. So I led the toys to the first room. It made them happy and relieved, but the second room did not have any toys. So I put stronger toys there and started their fitness programme. They became stronger and happier.

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After a few days, Ben had recovered. I built a house for him and bought a lot of clothes for him. We were very happy, and I had forgotten about my owner. Baby wanted to see her owner again, because she wanted to have an owner to love her. After a month, our owner, Annie, came here and played with us only. I thought she loved me and baby only. We were very happy and wanted to see her everyday.

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We thought she lost us, not abandoning us. When we went to the second room, a lot of toys were hurt. We were very sad. Our leader, Ben, built a hospital in the second room. We built a tunnel to send the toys to the hospital quickly. The summer holidays were coming, and we went to the big swimming pool.

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We found an octopus near the swimming pool. It surprised me, because we had a new friend. We swam and played a lot of games. This kind of life made me happy, but I wanted to go back home. Baby and I left the nursery and went to Annie’s house. We rode on a dog to get there. There were a lot of toys. The leader was a cowboy. Annie was very happy that she saw us. We lived there again happily.

It was a bad time for me, we lost our own. No, she threw us away. We disliked her now. Baby cried, “Mum, where are you?” It made me angry, “I dislike her, but why she doesn’t dislike her? She dislike us, why you so love her?” We went to a nursery and started to build our world. There were a lot of toys. Their leader was called Ben, and he was a famous toy in there.

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One day, he sick, and I started to take the toys well. When I went to the next room, I saw there are many children destroy the toys. I was very angry, I was a toy too. So, I started to push the toy to here. It made them happy and relaxed, but the next room did not have any toys. So I chose the stranger toys to there and started there fitness. They became strong and happy.

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After a few minutes, Ben became health again. When Ben was not sick, I build a house to him and bought a lot of clothes to him. We were very happy there, and I lost my own any more. Baby wanted to see her own again, because she wanted to have an own to love her. After month, our own, Annie went here and she played me and baby only. I thought she loved me and baby only. We were very happy and wanted to see her everyday.

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We thought she was lost us only, and she threw us carelessly. When we went to room two, there were a lot of toys hurt. Our leader, Ben, held a hospital near the room two. We were very sad that there were a lot of toys hurt. We built a underpass to made the toys went to the hospital quickly. Sunny day was coming; we went to the big swimming pool to play ourselves.

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We found an octopus near a swimming pool. It made me amazed and happy, because we got a new friend. I went to play a lot of games, and we swam there. The live made me happy, but I wanted to go back home. Baby and I left the nursery and went to Annie’s house. We found a dog to go to Annie’s house. There were a lot of toys. The leader was a cowboy. Annie was very happy that she saw me and baby. We lived there again and happily.

The Dark Trip!!! - amended

One day, I went to school by MTR. Suddenly, the train stopped. All the lights were off and everyone fell down. I thought we were in Sai Wan Ho, I felt the door was on my left. I tried to open it. It was very big, and I couldn’t open it. I found something that felt like a rock. I threw it at the window and the window broke. I heard my friend, Johnny, crying, “Who can help me? I’ve lost my way!” I went near the voice, and I caught his hand.

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I dragged Johnny to the door and he climbed out of the door. It was small, so only children could climb outside. Johnny and I tried to stay away from the railway. After a few minutes, we felt a train leaving. It was the train we were on. We touched the wall and started to go the Heng Fa Chuen way. Suddenly, we could not feel the wall.

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We needed to choose a route to go to Heng Fa Chuen. We crawled and found the railway again. I realized that blind people had very hard and scary lives. However, we needed to find a way to leave the underground. We climbed up the line one railway. The railway was slanted and we climbed slowly. When we went to the exit, we saw the light again. Suddenly, a train was approaching. We ran quickly and saw a station.

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It was the Taikoo station, but there were no people. We chose the wrong route to Heng Fa Chuen. We were very scared. Johnny thought, “It may not be the right’s station!” Johnny used his mobile phone to call the police. We went back to the railway again. We climbed back to the connected line and we chose the line two railway. After a few minutes, we arrived at the real Taikoo station. There were many people.

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This incident made me scared but happy. However, when I went back to school, the teacher didn’t believe us.

The Dark Trip!!!

One day, I went to school by MTR. Suddenly, all the light disappeared and everyone threw down. I thought I was under the Sai Wan Ho, I felt the door was on my left side. I went there and tried to open it. It was very big, but I can’t open it. I found a thing like a rock. I threw it to the window. After I threw the rock at the window, I heard my friend was saying something, “Who can help me, I lost my way!” I went near the sound, and I caught the hand.

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My friend, Johnny and I went to there and he climbed outside the door. It was not big, so we could climb outside. Johnny and I went near the track and started to walk to the track. After a few minutes, we felt a MTR left. It was the MTR I travelled before the moment. We touched the wall and started to go to Heng Fa Chuen. Suddenly, we could not touch anything.

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We saw there are many trains in the track; we thought it is a connected line. Liked two train was a lot of way to go, and we could go there to line one or line two stations. Line one is under the line two station. When we needed to go to Tsuen Wan in Sheung Wan, you needed to go to line one station. The connected line made the train to go their destination.

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We needed to choose a place to go to Heng Fa Chuen. We went prone and found the track again. I learned he blind people were very hard and scared in their live. But we needed to find a way to leave the underground. We chose the line one track, and we climbed up side. The track was slope and we climbed slowly. When we went to the exit, we saw the light again. Suddenly, a train came outside our back. We ran quickly and we saw the stations were near us, so we climbed out the track and we arrived a station.

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The station was called Tai Koo, but there were not people. We were very scared, why there were not people. Johnny thought, “It may be had a stations near the real Tai Koo station. Johnny used his cellular phone and called the police. We went back to the track again and we climbed again to. We climbed back to the connected line and we chose the line two track. After a few minutes, we arrived the real Tai Koo station. There were many people there. This thing made me scared and happy. But when i went back to school, the teacher didn't believe our saying.

Write a story about you being in a completely dark space.

Words you might need to use:

• cannot see anything
• bump into 撞
• saw light again
• could not sleep

A New Ending - amended

Mother and I went back home. Unluckily, the ducks had taken over our home. Father said angrily, “I will kill them, let’s revenge!” Then, we flew away from the nest and found something to kill the ducks. After a few minutes, we felt hungry so we went back to the nest and started to find something to eat. My father said, “I never want to eat insects, they are very disgusting!”

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We found a tree with many fruits. I thought we could eat them. When I started eating, a man threw something at me. The man was my best friend, Tommy. I remembered he disliked birds and wanted to kill all of them. I flew back to our nest and discovered some cakes in the nest. They looked very yummy, so I ate them quickly. When my father went back home, it was time to kill the ducks. My bother got a bomb. He shouted, “I discover many bombs near the big tree!” Then, we got a lot of bombs and threw at the ducks. The ducks ran back to our house quickly.

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The house was ours, not theirs. I was furious, and threw a lot of bombs at our house. Suddenly, a duck came out, and fired at us. My father threw all the bombs at them. The explosion attracted many ducks here. We were petrified because the duck fired at us. We flew back to the nest, but they ran after me.

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My mother told us, “There were many bombs underground!” All the ducks were hurt and one yelled angrily, “Be careful, we will kill you!” I threw the bombs at that duck. I said, “I think you can’t!” Then the duck died. We were very happy, because we won the war!

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We kept throwing a lot of bombs at the ducks. We saw a girl near a tree. She was our neighbour and she was crying. When she was angry, strange things would happen. We knew why we became birds. It was because she disliked us killing the ducks for fun when we were humans. After a few minutes, we became humans again. We never killed ducks for fun again.

Mother and I went to our home. It was a bad thing for us, because the ducks stroke our home. Father said angrily, “I will kill them, let’s retaliate them!” Then, we flew away the nest and found something to kill the ducks. After few minutes, we felt hungry and we went back to the nest and started to found something to eat. My father said, “I never want to eat the insects, they are very nausea!”

We found a tree and there were many fruits there. I thought we could eat it there. When I started to eat it, a man used something to throw me. The man was my best friend, Tommy. I remembered he dislike the bird and wanted to kill the bird there. I flew back to the nest and I discovered the nest had some cakes. It looked very yummy, so I ate it quickly. When my father back home, it was the time to kill the ducks. My bother got a bomb. He shouted, “I discover many bomb near the big tree!” Then, we got a lot of bombs and threw to the ducks. The ducks saw us threw the bombs to them, so they went back the home quickly.

The home was us, not them. I was very angry, and threw a bomb to the home. Suddenly, a duck went out, and used a gun and fire us. My father threw the entire bomb to them. A big sound made many ducks coming. We were very scared, because the duck fire us by their guns. We flew back the nest, but they ran after me. When they wanted to fire us, a bomb explosion in there.

My mother said, “There were many bombs under the land!” The all ducks got hurt and said angrily, “Be careful, we will kill you!” I threw a bomb to the ducks who said something. I said, “I think you can’t!” Then the duck died. We was very happy, because we won the gas!

Then we threw a lot of bomb to the ducks, they were very scared us. Many ducks hurts. We saw a girl there, she was crying. The girl always saw red, and the impossible things would happen. We learned why we became the birds, it was because she dislike we kill the ducks for funny when we were the people. After few minutes, we became the people again. We didn’t kill the birds for funny that time.

Living on My Own - amended

One day, my parents and I fought at home. I was very angry and ran away quickly. I brought all my things to the dormitory. My friend Johnny and I lived there. I like my dormitory. It was not small, but our things made the room look small. We agreed to take turns to do the housework. I would do it on Sundays, and he would do it on Wednesdays.

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I had a part-time job in a convenience store. Johnny was a waiter in a restaurant. The job was not hard for me, because there were not many people buying things. But Johnny disliked his job, because the restaurant was in a famous place. After worked, we would have dinner at the dormitory. I always cooked dinner, because Johnny was very tired when he went back to the dormitory. We worked a lot so we had saved a lot of money.

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I worked on Mondays, Thursdays, Fridays and Saturdays. I went to school from Monday to Wednesday. It was a good plan for us to save money. We wanted to buy a flat and lived together. One day when I went to school, a man pushed me suddenly, and I hurt myself. The man was my classmate. I disliked him when I was in secondary school.

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After school, I worked the convenience store. I always took something back to the dormitory, like ice-creams, drinks and snacks. The boss treated me very well. After three years, we left the dormitory. Johnny and I bought a flat. Our flat was in Shek Tong Tsui, and it was a good place for us. The Shek Tong Tsui Municipal Services Building and the Shek Tong Tsui Market was closed to our flat.

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When I was twenty-one years old, I visited my family. My sister lived at home, and didn’t leave. It was not a bad thing for me. I was lucky to live on my own, and I knew how to handle disputes, face the reality, go outside for more experience and be a mature person. I became an adult.

My Live Myself

One day, my parent and I fight in our house, I was very angry and than I went away quickly. I went back to my University Residence Hall. I brought all my things to the university residence hall. My friend Johnny and I lived there too. I was very interested of the University Residence Hall. It was not small, but our things made the room became small. We planed an idea, I did housework on Sunday, and he did housework on Wednesday.

I had a part time job in the convenience store. Johnny was a waiter in a restaurant. It was not hard for me, because there were not many people bought commodity. It was a good thing for me. But it was a bad thing for Johnny; the restaurant was in a famous place. After worked, we would have dinner at home. I always cooked the food, because Johnny was very tired went he back to the University Residence Hall. We were chose the Math, we always worked so we got a lot of money.

I worked on Monday, Thursday, Saturday and Friday. I went to school on Tuesday, Wednesday and Monday. It was very good plan for our save money. Johnny had a lot money, we wanted to buy a flat, and lived together. One day, I went to school, suddenly a man pushed me, and I hurt myself. The man was my classmate. I was very disliked him when I was on the secondary school.

After school, I went to the convenience store, and worked there. I always got some things back home. Like ice cream, drinks, food, and some snack. The boss was very took care me. I always went to the Market and bought the food there. After three years, we left the University Residence Hall, Johnny and I bought a flat and lived there. Our flat was on Shek Tong Tsui, and it was a good place for us. The Shek Tong Tsui Municipal Services Building and the Shek Tong Tsui Market was very closed to our flat.

When I was twenty-one years old, I visited my family. My sister was live there, and didn’t left out. It was not very bad things for me. I could went outside was my luck, and I knew how to handle disputes, Face the reality, go outside for more experience and be a mature. I thought I was a adult now.

Imagine you are an 18-year-old boy. You just had a fight with your parents and ran away from home. Write a story about what happened afterwards. [400 words]

Debate:Should we have school uniforms?

YES

- every morning we need to get up early, and we will lose a lot of time choosing clothes

- the teacher can find you in an outing when you get lost

- everyone will follow the trend, and will not focus on learning

- waste a lot of money to buy clothes (poor?) (student)

- the school uniforms represent our school

- give students a sense of belonging

- can identify students

- there will be more jobs -- if there were no school uniforms, many factories would close down

- if we wear wrong clothes for P.E, the teacher may punish us

Reading

http://student.thestandard.com.hk/student/ls_content_vpdf.asp?id=611

Debate

Should children move out of home and live on their own when they are 18?

YES

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So that they can be independent(獨立)

Ø WHY: want to be an adult(成人)

Ø Earn(賺) money(錢)

Ø Prepare themselves for their future family

Ø Do housework

Ø Save (儲蓄) money

Ø Handle disputes (處理爭執)

Ø Face the reality (面對)

Ø Deal with pressure (處理壓力) -- love, work, friendship (友誼),

Ø Go outside for more experience (經驗), and be a mature (成熟) person

Call the police, and parents for help

Female Doctor - amended

Jenny is a doctor who works in Hong Kong Hospital since 1998. She goes to the hospital every day. She is not famous now, but she was famous in 1998. She became a doctor when she was nineteen years old. There were not many female doctors at that time. Jenny thought her job was boring at first. She went to the Shatin Hospital to be a nurse at first. After a few months, she became a doctor. She was very happy.

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But many nurses disliked her. Many doctors said she was a coward, because she was scared of blood. Many people in the hospital did not like her. There were no female doctors, because many people thought women were timid. Many girls did not like a job with blood. But Jenny was very interested in it. She was a heart disease doctor and now she was the chief surgeon.

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There was a serious problem in 2003. SARS visited Hong Kong, and many people died. Jenny had to take care of SARS patients. At that time, there were many girls becoming doctors and helping many people. Many female doctors became famous in 2003. There was no more hatred in the hospital.

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Jenny was very happy at that time, her team worked very hard and they helped a lot of people too. One day, Jenny was working in the hospital at night. Suddenly, two SARS patients were sent to the hospital; Jenny’s partner helped them quickly. Her partner did not wear any protection clothes. When the two patients got better, her partner had SARS. Jenny was very sad and thought she would die.

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After a few months, a doctor invented some medicine and cured Jenny’s partner. Jenny was very happy and her partner became a World Health Organization member. After a few days, Jenny became the Hong Kong Hospital manager. Jenny cured a lot of patients. She got the Good Citizen of the Year Award and she went to the UK next year. She would still be a doctor and she will bring her family there. She would live there for a long time.

Jenny was a doctor who was work in Hong Kong Hospital. She did the job form 1998s. She always went to hospital everyday. Always she was not famous now, she was famous in 1998s. She was nineteen years old gone she started to be a doctor. There were not many girls be doctor in 1998s. Jenny was very bored to be a doctor at first. She went to the Sha Tin Hospital to be a nurse there at first. After few mouths, she was a doctor. She was very happy when she became a doctor.

When she became a doctor, there were many nurses disliked her too. Many doctor said she was scared blood and she was a coward in the hospital disliked her too. There were not girl be the doctor, because the girl looked like a coward. Many girls did not like to do the job which was bloody. But Jenny was very interested of it. Jenny was a heart disease doctor in there and now she was the hospital manager.

There was a difficult problem in 2003s. Atypical pneumonia visited Hong Kong, and many people died. Jenny became the doctor who needed to help the people who got the atypical pneumonia. At that time, there were many girls became doctor and helped many people. There was many girls’ doctor famous in 2003s. There was not which doctor disliked which doctor.

Jenny was very happy that time, her team was very hard and they helped many people too. One day, Jenny went to the Hospital at night. Suddenly, there were two people got the atypical pneumonia; Jenny’s partner helped the people quickly. Her partner did not wear any defense against chemical weapons clothes. After the two people safe, her partner got the atypical pneumonia. Jenny was very sad and thought she would die.

After few mouths, a doctor invented a medicine and helped her partner that day. Jenny was very happy and her partner became world health organization member too. After few days, Jenny became the Hong Kong Hospital manager. Jenny always helped other to turn good. She got the Good Citizen of the Year Award and she went to the UK next year, and she would be go there and be the doctor there. Jenny went to there and she will bring her family there too. She would live there fo

Write a story about a person getting into a profession 行業 which is done mostly 通常by his/her opposite sex異性.

(200 words)

My Shocking Concert -amended

“Good evening everyone.” I am a dancer and singer in Hong Kong, and everyone knows who I am. If you want to see me perform dance, you can come to my shows at the Hong Kong Coliseum. They will be full quickly so get your tickets now.

“I believe I can fly…” I sang. The next day, I sang a song called “Fly In The Sky”. Suddenly, I lose my voice and could not sing. I was very scared, and the stagehand turned off all the lights on stage. I went to the backstage, and suddenly something exploded, and I was hurt. I didn’t know what happened. I thought it was lucky for me, because I had only hurt my left hand, and I did not need to sing that day. I had lost my voice, but the explosion helped me to go back to the backstage.

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I went back home and thought about how I could sing better. I had lost my memories of the explosion. When I left home, many reporters found me and asked me many questions. I was very scared so I hailed a taxi and left quickly. I was very confused, “Why are there so many reporters?” I thought for a long time, but I did not know what happened. I went to my management company, and asked my assistant, “Why were there so many reporters outside my home?” He said, “There was an explosion in your show, did you know?”

Suddenly, I recalled the explosion. I watched the closed-circuit television. There was a suspicious man near the stage, and then the explosion occurred, and I went backstage. I thought the man put a bomb near the stage. I could not see the man clearly. I called the police and they investigated the Hong Kong Coliseum. They found the crime scene and found a bomb near the crime scene.

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I had a concert on the next day, and I sang a song for the police and fans. When I sang the last song, a bomb exploded and the police helped me leave the stage. Suddenly, I heard a man fired a gun, and I was scared. After a few minutes, the police and I left the Hong Kong Coliseum. A man ran towards my way, and he had got a gun. I was very worried that he would kill me, so I stood still. Two policemen went in front of me, and they arrested him. The man said, “It’s my pleasure to meet you!” I still remember those words.

Serious Injury in Europe - amended

Cindy and I visited John in France. We were doctors in the UK. John had a serious injury two years ago. It happened in 2008, when a bomb exploded in a shopping mall in France. When John was passing by the mall, a sweater which was on fire flew at John. John’s hand was hurt by it. Many parts of his body were burnt and he could not use his right hand for about five years. There were 369 deaths and 798 injuries.

When this explosion happened, there were 1,400 people inside the hotel and mall. The hotel was built on top of the mall. So the mall exploded and the hotel collapsed together. The police thought it happened because of negligence. The explosion happened at 1:12 p.m. on 14^th Match. John was very lucky in the explosion. Other people broke their bones.

John worked very hard in physiotherapy, he needed to learn how to use his left hand because his right hand was hurt. When he knew how to use his left hand, he needed to check his right hand too. Now, his right hand had changed its colour. His burn was very serious, but he recovered very quickly. We went to his house to help him treat his hand.

When I talked to him, he told me a scary case. His father died twenty-nine years ago. His father heard the song “Gloomy Sunday”. He said, “When I was small, I heard the first half of ‘Gloomy Sunday’ and it was the scariest song in the world. Now I had this phonograph record in my mother’s house! But I locked it in a box, and I threw the key into the river.”

I was very scared, this song has “killed” more than 100 people, and it was a mystery. Then, Cindy and I left France and visited a girl called Candy. She was hurt in the explosion, and her boyfriend died. It was devastating to her, and she said it was an unlucky day for her. After we healed her, we went back to the UK. But I was very curious about John’s father. How did he died?

“Good evening everyone.” I am a dancer and singer in Hong Kong, and everyone knows who I am. If you want to see me perform dance, you can come to my shows at the Hong Kong Coliseum. They will be full quickly so get your tickets now.

“I believe I can fly…” I sang. The next day, I sang a song called “Fly In The Sky”. Suddenly, I lose my voice and could not sing. I was very scared, and the stagehand turned off all the lights on stage. I went to the backstage, and suddenly something exploded, and I was hurt. I didn’t know what happened. I thought it was lucky for me, because I had only hurt my left hand, and I did not need to sing that day. I had lost my voice, but the explosion helped me to go back to the backstage. //

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I went back home and thought some idea, how could I sing music better. When I went out my home, many reporters found me and asked me many questions. I was very scared and I found a Taxi and left quickly. I was very question, “Why my home had many reporter.” I thought and thought, but I could not know what happened. I went to my company; I went back company and found my assistant and asked a question to him, “Why there were many reporters outside my home?” He said, “Your show had a bang, did you knew?”

Suddenly, I remember it, and I watched the closed-circuit television. There was a dubious man near the stage, and than the explode occur, and I went back the backstage. I though the man put a bomb near the stage. I could not watch the man clearly. I called the police and they investigated the Hong Kong coliseum. They found a char place and found a bomb next to the char place.

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I had a concert next day, and I would sound the song for the police and fans. When I sang the last song, a bang bombed and the police helped me to leave the stage. Suddenly, I heard a man opened fire, and I scared. After a few minutes, the police and I left the Hong Kong coliseum. I man ran to my way, and he got a gun. I was very worried he will kill me, so I stood there only. Two policemen went in front of me, and they caught him. The man saw, “I could see you were my luck!” Now, I remember this word.

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Big Hurt of Europe

Cindy and I visited France and friend, John. We were the doctor in the UK. John had a big hurt before two years. It was happened in 2008, France’s certain centre took place a big bang. John was outside the centre, but he got hurt. Although John was only get past the centre, a clothes afire and flew to John. John encountered the clothes and John’s hand hurt by it. His hand afire and had many place got hurt and could not used his right hand about five years. The catastrophe was called Hotel’s centre big bang. There were 369 people die and 798 people hurt.

Before this catastrophe, there were 1400 people inside the hotel and centre. The hotel and centre were together and the hotel was built on top of the centre. So the centre bang and the hotel would collapse together too. The police thought it was a human negligence so it would have this bang. The bang was happened at 1:12 p.m. at Friday in 14^th Match. John was very luck in the bang. Another people some fracture of bones.

John was very hard in the Physical Therapy, he needed to know how to use his left hand to work. When he knew how to use his left hand, he needed to set a date to check his right hand. At now, his hand was turn flesh. His burn was very critical, but his since the viability was very fast. When I went to his house we helped him to treat.

When I talked to him, he said a scared case, his father die before twenty-nine years. His father heard the music “Gloomy Sunday”. He said, “When I was small I heard the ‘Gloomy Sunday’s first half and it was I scared music in the world. Now I had this phonograph record at my mother house! But I lock it in a box, and I threw the key into the river.

I was very scared of it, this music “kill” more than 100 people, and it was a mystery. Then, Cindy and I went to next place and visited a girl called Candy. She was the hurter in the bang, and his boy friend died. It was a big hurt on her, she said it was a very unlucky days of her. It was Saturday that day. After we therapy her, we went back the UK. But I was very question of John’s father. What hurt did his father had?