20110215

Write a story about a café owner or a postman.

Café owner

- more polite than waiters in cha chaan tangs

- people he sees everyday: office workers who are in a hurry, relaxed people, expatriates, HKCEE students before the exams, tourists

- chat with customers

Chinese New Year Resolutions - amended

Chinese New Year had come, all the red pockets went into my pockets. Yesterday, my family and I fired fire crackers to celebrate Chinese New Year. We were overjoyed and played many games at home. We played mahjong and poker, and my sister went karaoking. She was having fun too. We like Chinese New Year, and we like red pockets.

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We had a lot of Chinese New Year delicacies, and carrot cakes were my favourite. Chinese New Year is not my favourite festival, my favourite is Christmas. Why? It is because you can have wishes for Christmas, but not Chinese New Year. I was very bored after a few days, because I had gotten all the red pockets, and I just eat and play every day. Chinese New Year was like an eating festival, and I dislike it.

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On the tenth day of the Chinese New Year, I went to Ocean Park with my friends. There were many visitors. The new aquarium was very famous and we wanted to go inside. The staff said, “There are many people inside, only VIPs can go inside!” We were furious and went to ride the roller coaster. Suddenly, aGod of Wealth” gave me a red pocket and said, “It can make your dream come true!”

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That day, I went back home and I wrote something on the red pocket. The next day, it was snowing in Hong Kong, and it was my wish. I went outside quickly and joined the snow war. My friends and I were very happy, but I wondered why it would snow in Hong Kong. Suddenly, the snow disappeared, and I got up. It was a dream, and it was not real! I was very depressed, but the red pocket was real.

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The red pocket made my “dream” come true. The red pocket disappeared, and suddenly, I saw that it was snowing. I was amazed and ran outside quickly. Chinese New Year was not boring, and it made me happy. I went downstairs, and I saw someone throwing snow down.

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I went to the rooftop quickly, and I saw a man throwing snow down from the rooftop. I did not understand why and I went in front of him to look at his face. He was the God of Wealth”. I asked him, “Why did you do this?” He answered, “I am a god and my job is to make people happy! See you boy!” Then, he flew to the sky. Chinese New Year made my dream come true. My dream was, “Meet a god!”

20110212

Chinese New Year Resolutions

Chinese Year had came, red pockets all were coming to my pickets. Yesterday, my family and I fire crackers to celebrate Chinese Year. We were very happy and played many games at home. Played mahjong and poker, my sister went to Karaoking. She was very happy too. We liked Chinese New Year, and we liked the red pockets.

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We could eat a lot of food in Chinese New Year; carrot cake was my favourite food. Chinese New Year was not my favourite festival, my favourite was Christmas. Why? It was because Christmas has resolutions, but Chinese New Year didn’t. I was very bored after a few days, because I had got all the red pockets, and every day only eat and play. Chinese New Year liked an eating festival, and it made me feel dislike.

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10th Chinese calendar, I went to Ocean Park with my friends. There were many visitors. The new ocean room was very famous and we wanted to go inside. The staff said, “There are many people inside, only VIP can go inside!” We were very angry and went to play the roller coaster! Suddenly, a mammon gave a red pocket for me and said, “It can make your dream come true!”

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That day, I went back home and I wrote something into the red pocket. Next day, Hong Kong snowing, it was my dream. I went outside quickly and joined the snow war. My friends and I were very happy, but I was much questioned, why Hong Kong could snow? Suddenly, the snow disappeared. It was a dream, and it was not real! I was very sad, but the red picket was really.

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The red pickets made my “dream” came true. The red pocket disappeared, suddenly, I saw the snow snowing. I was very amazed and ran outside quickly. Chinese New Year was not bored, it made me happy. After I went to the land, I saw someone threw the white thing down.

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I went to rooftop quickly, and I saw a man threw the things like snow down to the rooftop. I was very question and I went there and saw his face. He was the mammon. I asked to him, “Why do you do this thing?” The mammon answered, “I was a deity and my job is making people happy! See you boy!” Then, the mammon flew to the sky. Chinese New Year made my dream come true. My dream was, “See a deity!”

20110130

Jack and Chinese New Year Town - amended

“Jack, where are you going now?” the Mayor of Halloween Town asked. “I need to find something to make my village happy!” Jack said. Jack found his dog, Zero, before he went to the forest. Last year, Jack made his village fun. He went to Christmas Town. Now, he wanted to go to other doors.

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“Zero, what is it?” Jack asked. He pointed at the door. It wrote, “Chinese New Year Town.” “Zero, let’s go inside!” Jack said. “Where are we now?” An animal secretly followed Jack, but Jack did not notice. “Oh, help! What is it?” Jack screamed. Zero barked, but the animal kept following Jack. Jack and Zero ran away quickly. After a few minutes, they did not see the animal anymore.

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Jack and Zero heard a voice coming from the village. They ran there and suddenly a boy in red clothes appeared. “Hi man, where do you come from?” he asked Jack. “Oh, I come from Halloween Town! Why are you wearing red clothes?” Jack asked. “Oh, because there is an animal called New Year beast living in our village, and it always eats our food! I wear red clothes because the beast is scared of red.” The boy said. “Can you take me to your village?” Jack asked. “Ok, sir, my name is Ben and what’s your name?” Ben asked. “My name is Jack!” Jack answered.

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“There are many villagers firing red things, what are those?” Jack asked. “Those are called fire crackers! We always played them when something makes us happy!” Ben said. “Ben, can I bring some back to my town?” Jack asked. “Sure!” Ben answered. Jack saw some people giving red pockets and asked Ben, “What are they doing?” “They are giving red pockets to the children. We have a lot of things to do during Chinese New Year, like having fireworks, playing the dancing lion, writing Chinese calligraphy and eating Chinese New Year cakes! If you want to make your town happy, you can do all these things!” Ben said. “Thank you Ben, Zero let’s go back to our town!” Jack said. Then, Jack and Zero went back to their town.

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Jack thought, “Let’s write some “fai chun” in our town!” Jack told his villagers everything about Chinese New Year Town. Some were dancing lions, some were writing “fai chun”. Jack made his village fun and became happy now.

Jack and Chinese New Year Town

“Jack, where are you going now?” the Mayor of Halloween Town asked. “I need to found something to make me village happy!” Jack said. Jack found his dog, Zero before he went to the forest. Last year, Jack made his village, Halloween Town fun. Last year, Jack went to the Christmas Town. Now, he wanted to go to other door.

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“Zero, what is it?” Jack asked. Jack powered to the door. It wrote “Chinese New Year Town” “Zero, let’s go inside the door!” Jack said. Jack and Zero went inside the door. “Where are we now?” A beast went after Jack, but Jack did not know. “Oh, help! What is it?” Jack shouted. Zero banked, but the beast did not stop went follow to Jack. Jack and Zero went quickly. After a few minutes, they did not see the beast anymore.

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Jack and Zero listened a voice came from a village. Jack and Zero ran there quickly. “Hi man, where are you coming from?” a boy wore a red clothes asked to Jack. “Oh, I am coming from Halloween Town! Why do you wearing the red clothes?” Jack asked. “Oh, because there is beasts live in our village, and it always ate our food! I wear red clothes because it scared red.” The boy said. “Can you take me to visit your village?” Jack asked. “Ok sir, me name is Ben and who are you?” Ben asked. “My name is Jack!” Jack answered.

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“There are many villagers’ fire red things, what are them?” Jack asked. “They are called Fire crackers! We always played it when something makes us happy!” Ben said. “Ben, can I bring some back to my town?” Jack asked. “Sure!” Ben answered. Jack saw some people gave the red pockets and asked to Ben, “What the people doing?” “They are giving the red pockets to the children. We have a lot of things to do in Chinese New Year, like playing Fireworks, join the dancing lion, write Chinese calligraphy and eat Chinese New Year cake! If you want to make your town happy, you can do all the things about Chinese New Year I say!” Ben said. “Thank you Ben, Zero lets back to our town!” Jack said. Then, Jack and Zero back to their town.

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Jack thought, “Lets do some fai chun in our town!” Jack told all the things about Chinese New Year Town and he made funny to his village. Some were dancing lion, some were writing fai chun. Jack made his village fun and became happy now.

Watch “Nightmare Before Christmas”, and write a story about Jack going to Chinese New Year Land.

Words you might use:

- red pockets

- “fai chun”

- Chinese calligraphy

- Chinese New Year cake

- The “dancing lion”

- Fire crackers

- Fireworks

- “New Year beast”

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20110123

In a snowing village, there were lots of candle lights. A boy called Ben ran down to the dining room from the second floor. Ben walked over a pile of clothes on the floor. “Mum, what will we have for breakfast?” Ben asked her mum. “Eat the macaroni on the table and drink the milk!” Ben’s mother answered.

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A rock was thrown at Ben outside the widow when he was having his breakfast. A boy called Jack and a girl called Jenny stood outside the house and shouted at Ben, “Ben, we are waiting for you!” Ben answered, “I know, Jack, I am coming!” Ben took a cup of milk and went outside quickly. “Where are we going today?” Jack asked. Jenny suggested, “We can go back to the outdoor area we went to yesterday!” Ben agreed, “Let’s go!”

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Ben saw a squirrel running across the road and it escaped. “Ben, what is it?” Jack answered. “Our outdoor area is covered by a snowslide, how can we play?” “Why was there a snowslide?” Jenny asked. Ben said, “Be careful! There may be a snowslide coming at any time!” “Oh, I see, the mountain is so close to the outdoor area.” Ben said. “Let’s shovel the snow ourselves!” Jack found something in the snow and asked, “What is it?” Ben said, “Oh no, a tank!” Ben shivered when Jack found the tank.

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“Is the tank real?” Ben asked. Jack said, “Yes, it is! There is a book near it, take it up!” Jenny took it up and said, “It is a manual of the tank!” “Jack, we can use the tank to remove the snow!” “It is a good idea!” They went inside the tank and they started to remove the snow. “Fire!” Jack said. Bomb! It was loud. Many children came there and they saw the tank.

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A boy asked, “What is it?” Another boy said, “There are many weapons! I think they are real!” Jack said, “Let’s tell the president to spend some money to build a park for our village!” The squirrel cried when tank moved across the road because it thought the children would die when they went to the White House. There were many children joining the demonstration, and they were all under ten years old. Ben saw the watch and said, “We’ve walked for about an hour!” There was a sign which wrote, “Welcome to San Francisco

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Many policemen went to the White House. The police thought the tank was not real, but when a boy fired, the police was very scared. Jack, Ben and Jenny went outside the tank and shouted, “Let’s go inside the White House!” The president said, “You are very clever, there is a playing room on the second floor of the White House. You can go there to play with your frienda. We will build a park for your village!”

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The children were happy and they had a park in their village after a month.

Children War?

In a snowing place, candlelight ignited. A child ran down to the dining room from the second floor. The boy straddled over the clothes in the wood flooring. “Mum, what’s breakfast today to eat?” the boy asked her mum. “Eat the macaroni on the table and drink the milk!” her mum answered.

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A rock threw to the boy from the widow when the boy was having his breakfast. A boy outside the house shouted to the boy, “Ben we are waiting you!” Ben answered, “I know it Jack, I am coming!” Ben took a cup of milk and went outside quickly. “Where can we play today?” Jack asked. A girl said, “We can go to the land yesterday we play!” Ben said, “Jenny, let’s go!”

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A squirrel across the road after Ben saw it. “Ben, what is it?” Jack answered. “The snow covered our land, how can we play?” “Why there is a snow slide?” Jenny asked. Ben said, “Be careful, I think the snow slide is come from the mountain!” “Oh, I see, the mountain is so close to the land.” Ben said. “Pull the snow out!” They pull and pull, and Jack found something and he said, “What is it?” Ben said, “Oh-no, a tank!” Ben shivered when Jack found the tank.

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“Is the car real?” Ben answered. Jack said, “Yes, it is! There is a book, take it up!” Jenny took the book up and said, “It is a manual about the tank!” “Jack, we can use the car to pull the snow!” “It is a good idea!” They went inside the tank and the started to pull the snow. “Fire!” Jack said. Bomb, the voice was loudly. Many children came there and they saw the tank.

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A child said, “What is it?” Other child said, “There are many weapons! I think it is real!” Jack said, “Let’s told to the president to plan some money to build a park for our village!” The tank across the road, the squirrel cried after it saw the tank across. There are many children enjoyed the war, and they all younger than ten years old. Ben saw the watch and said, “We walked about one hour!” There was an indicator board it wrote the “Welcome to San Francisco

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Many police come to the White House. The police thought the tank was not real, but after a boy fire, the police were very scared. Jack, Ben and Jenny went outside the tank and said, “We go inside the White House!” The president said, “You are very clever, there is a playing room in the second floor, you can go there to play and tell your friends to play. We will build a park for your village!”

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The children were happy and they had a park in their village after a month.

20110118

Write a story that happened on a very cold day. Remember to use a film director's point-of-view.

Words you may use:
  • shiver 顫抖
  • tank 坦克
  • weapon 武器
  • San Francisco 三藩市

Reading Rewards Scheme

18th Jan 2011

BOOKS
Roald Dahl – The Witches

Mark Haddon – The Curious Incident of the Dog in the Night-time

FILM

Nightmare Before Christmas

http://www.tudou.com/programs/view/4GtcuqJPNqU/

20101219

Disguiser and Jack

Tom was a disguiser and he always helped the people in African. One day, an Africian went to his office, and he said, “Dr. Tom, could you helped me to be a star and made famous in the world ok?” Tom said, “Which star did you want to be?” The man said, “I want to MJ!” Tom shouted, “Why? He had died already!” The man said, “I was very poor and I want to be rich!” Tom asked, “What’s you name?” The man said, “Jack!”

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After a few days, Jack went to the USA and he went to there by airplane and he started to find a record label. The supper star in the USA was all came from the record label, “Letter Star”, just like the Jesse McCartney, he was a famous star and he was very young in the USA. Many fans that were younger they liked his too. “West life”, was a famous band in the USA. Jack found a place to live and he worked in a restaurant and a fast food shop.

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He had to work everyday, he wanted to join the “Little Star” tryout, but he did not have enough money to join it. One day, the disguiser, Tom went to the USA and he told to Jack, “There were twenty thousands for you, your friends and family were waiting your song and money to help them became rich!” Jack got the money and he sang songs everyday.

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The day before the “Little Star” tryout, Tom helped Jack to face lift. Jack’s sound was the best singer in his village. Jack always sang after work, and he was very nervous when he was singing in the tryout. After he sang, he felt relieved and he was waiting the result. Jack saw his idol, Jesse McCartney, he was singing in the stage.

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Jesse McCartney was the review in the tryout too. There were a lot of fans and people watched the tryout, however Jack knew it after the show. Jesse McCartney said the result after the singing, “The new stars to be our member have three singers, and they are called Sam, Ken and Jack!” Jack was very happy and the three boys went up the stage and sign a contract there.

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Jack was very hard in the Little Star and his two partners, Ken and Sam originate a band in the Little Star, and the band called East Man. Jack was the tonic in the band and Sam was a guitarist. Jack helped his family and friends became rich, but the disguiser disappeared after Jack became the member in the Little Star.

20101212

A Dream Had Happen - amended

It was my dream to go to Japan, and now, my dream would start. My best friend, Johnny, and I went to Japan for about two months and started our work. I wanted to go to Japan when I was small. Why did I like Japan? It was because there were a lot of comics in Japan and my favorite comic was called BLEACH. Japanese comics are very popular in Hong Kong and Japan.

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Hong Kong comics were very boring and I didn’t like it. Today, we would go to Osaka and we needed to find our leader in Japan. He was called Sam, and he was half-Japanese. Sam knew Chinese because his mother was Chinese. We went to a Japanese hot spring to check the water to see when was the last volcano eruption. I was a geologist and Johnny was my partner.

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When we saw the hot spring, we were amazed that we had both dreamt about before. We both saw a monkey in the hot spring in the dream. We kept finding the monkey and it was there. We were scared, because the volcano would erupt in our dreams. We rushed to our car and the volcano erupted.

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We panicked and rushed to Sam’s home. Sam was shocked after we told him what happened. He asked us, “What happened in your dream after you got here?” We kept thinking, but we could not recall anything. After a few days, I remembered that someone would be my girlfriend and then I woke up.

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I was overjoyed that my dream had ended, but what about Johnny’s? Had his dream ended? When I bought newspaper near our hotel, there was news about the volcano we had been to. I was shocked that the volcano was the Japanese experiment for checking the temperature of the volcano. The monkey belonged to the Japanese laboratory, but what about my girlfriend? Would it come true? It confused and disappointed me.

After a month, a reporter called Cindy went to our studio and had an interview. She looked just like my girlfriend in my dream. After a month, Johnny went back to Hong Kong, but I didn’t. I had a girlfriend in Japan.

Went to Japan was my dream, and now, my dream would start. My best friend, Johnny, and I went to Japan for about two month and started our work. I wanted to go to Japan when I was small. Why I like Japan? It was because Japan had a lot of comic and my favorite comic was called BLEACH. The comic my Japan was very famous and in Hong Kong, comic was very famous too. The comic was all came from Japan.

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Hong Kong’ comic was very bored and I did like it. Today, we would go to Osaka and we needed to find our leader in Japan. He called Sam, and he was Japanese. Sam learned Chinese already. His mother was Chinese. We went to the Japan’s hot spring and cheeked the water that how long occurred volcano eruption before. I was a geologist and Johnny was my partner.

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We were very amazed that Johnny and I went her in our dream. We knew there was monkey in the hot spring in the dream. We found and found and there were a monkey there too. We were scared, because the mountain would have a volcano eruption. When went to our car quickly. After a few minutes, the mountain volcano eruption.

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We were very scared and went to Sam’s home quickly. Sam was amazed that there were two people in his home. After we said the thing for him, he asked, “What will happen after you went here?” We thought and thought, but we could not thought anything again. After a few days, I thought it that someone would be my girl friend and then, I awaked.

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I was very happy that the dream was finish. It made me happy, but how about Johnny? Did his dream finish? When I bought a newspaper near our hotel, there was news about the mountain which we went there before. I was very amazed that the mountain was the Japanese experiment for cheek the mountain how hot about the mountain. The monkey was their too.

20101205

Show Off - amended

Hong Kong’s gap between the rich and the poor has widened. There were a lot of rich students in a school on the Hong Kong Island and they all lived in luxurious homes. Many students own designer labels and showed them off to each other. In Form 1A, all the students were rich. Form 1B was for clever children.

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The most beautiful student in Form 1 was called Jenny and she was from Form 1B. In Form 1A, a student called Ben loved Jenny long time ago, but Jenny did not know. One day, Jenny went to the Form 1A classroom and wanted to get a book from her friend, Cindy. Suddenly, a lot of boys surrounded her. All the boys gave her many things, like Iphone 4 and a few bags. Jenny was very scared and she ran away quickly.

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The next day, Ben and other two boys went to Form 1B and they gave money to everyone. Ben told them to take care of Jenny. Ben was the only child in his family and his family was very generous. Ben got $4000 as his pocket money each month. He gave an Iphone 4 to Jenny, but she did not want it. Ben was very sad. He thought she did not like Iphone 4, so he bought a lot of LV bags to her. Jenny did not want to hurt him, so she received them.

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After a few days, Jenny knew why Ben always gave her presents. Ben loved her, Jenny liked him too. Jenny was not rich, but she was not poor too. Ben’s family may dislike her family because she was not rich. One day, Jenny forgot to bring the math book, many classmates gave her their math books quickly. Jenny was very confused, but she did not know Ben gave money to her classmates to take care of her.

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Jenny asked Cindy, “Why do my classmates take care of me?” Cindy answered, “Ben gave money to your classmates and told them to take care of you!” Jenny was very angry and told Ben that money was worthless. Money was not something to be wasted. If Ben spent money to make his classmates his entourage, he would waste his money. Jenny said, “Don’t waste anymore money. We could know each other again.”

Show off

Hong Kong was a place which was the gap between the rich and the poor has widened. A school in Hong Kong Island had a lot of rich student and they were all come from luxurious home. Many the students had designer labels and showed of with each other. The Form one class A, all the children was rich. The class B was the clever children class.

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One day, a student who was so beautiful in the hold form one. She was called Jenny. In the class A, a child called Ben. Ben love Jenny long time ago, but Jenny did not know. One day, Jenny went inside class A and wanted to get a book from her friend’s Cindy, suddenly, a lot of boys containment her. The all boy gave her many things, like Iphone 4, bag. Jenny was very scared and she ran away quickly.

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Next day, Ben and other two boys went to class B and they gave the money for everyone. But everyone needed to make Jenny know Ben loved her. Ben was the only child in his family and his family was very generous. Ben had pocket money about $4000 one month. Ben bought an Iphone 4 to Jenny, but Jenny did not want. Ben was very sad; he thought he did not like Iphone, so he bought a lot of LV bag to her. Jenny did want to hurt him, so she got it.

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After a few days, Jenny knew why Ben always gave her many things. Ben loved her. Jenny was not rich, but she was not poor too. If Jenny loved with him, Ben’s family may be disliked her family was not rich. One day, Jenny forgot to bring the math book, her classmates gave her quickly. Jenny was very question, but she did not know Ben gave money to her classmate to take care her.

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Jenny asked her friend Cindy, “Why the classmates take care of me?” Cindy answered, “Ben gave the money to your classmates and tell them to take care of you!” Jenny was very angry and found Ben to talk with him. She told to Ben that money was worthless in the world. Money was a thing made you to use, not to rise. If you used the money to make people entourage you, that you were raising money. Did not raise money any more, we could learn each other again.

20101130

Write a story about showing off.

WORDS YOU MAY USE:
  • The gap between the rich and the poor 貧富差距 has widened擴大.
  • worthless 無價值
  • spoilt 寵壞的 brat 頑童
  • only child 獨生子(或女)
  • designer labels 名牌
  • generous 慷慨的;大方的
  • impress 給…留下深刻的好印象 a girl
  • luxurious home 豪華住宅
  • entourage 隨從
  • splurge 亂花錢

The Story of the Bear -amended

Unluckily, we had lost our owner. No, she threw us away. We dislike her now. Baby cried, “Mum, where are you?” It made me furious, “I hate her, but why does Baby miss her?” We went to a nursery and started to build our world. There were a lot of toys. Their leader was called Ben, and he was a famous toy there.

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One day, he was sick, and I took good care of the toys. There were two toy rooms in the nursery. The first room was for children who were good-hearted. The second room was for the naughty children. When I went to the second room, I saw many children destroying the toys. I was very angry, because I was a toy too. So I led the toys to the first room. It made them happy and relieved, but the second room did not have any toys. So I put stronger toys there and started their fitness programme. They became stronger and happier.

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After a few days, Ben had recovered. I built a house for him and bought a lot of clothes for him. We were very happy, and I had forgotten about my owner. Baby wanted to see her owner again, because she wanted to have an owner to love her. After a month, our owner, Annie, came here and played with us only. I thought she loved me and baby only. We were very happy and wanted to see her everyday.

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We thought she lost us, not abandoning us. When we went to the second room, a lot of toys were hurt. We were very sad. Our leader, Ben, built a hospital in the second room. We built a tunnel to send the toys to the hospital quickly. The summer holidays were coming, and we went to the big swimming pool.

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We found an octopus near the swimming pool. It surprised me, because we had a new friend. We swam and played a lot of games. This kind of life made me happy, but I wanted to go back home. Baby and I left the nursery and went to Annie’s house. We rode on a dog to get there. There were a lot of toys. The leader was a cowboy. Annie was very happy that she saw us. We lived there again happily.

20101127

It was a bad time for me, we lost our own. No, she threw us away. We disliked her now. Baby cried, “Mum, where are you?” It made me angry, “I dislike her, but why she doesn’t dislike her? She dislike us, why you so love her?” We went to a nursery and started to build our world. There were a lot of toys. Their leader was called Ben, and he was a famous toy in there.

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One day, he sick, and I started to take the toys well. When I went to the next room, I saw there are many children destroy the toys. I was very angry, I was a toy too. So, I started to push the toy to here. It made them happy and relaxed, but the next room did not have any toys. So I chose the stranger toys to there and started there fitness. They became strong and happy.

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After a few minutes, Ben became health again. When Ben was not sick, I build a house to him and bought a lot of clothes to him. We were very happy there, and I lost my own any more. Baby wanted to see her own again, because she wanted to have an own to love her. After month, our own, Annie went here and she played me and baby only. I thought she loved me and baby only. We were very happy and wanted to see her everyday.

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We thought she was lost us only, and she threw us carelessly. When we went to room two, there were a lot of toys hurt. Our leader, Ben, held a hospital near the room two. We were very sad that there were a lot of toys hurt. We built a underpass to made the toys went to the hospital quickly. Sunny day was coming; we went to the big swimming pool to play ourselves.

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We found an octopus near a swimming pool. It made me amazed and happy, because we got a new friend. I went to play a lot of games, and we swam there. The live made me happy, but I wanted to go back home. Baby and I left the nursery and went to Annie’s house. We found a dog to go to Annie’s house. There were a lot of toys. The leader was a cowboy. Annie was very happy that she saw me and baby. We lived there again and happily.

20101123

The Dark Trip!!! - amended

One day, I went to school by MTR. Suddenly, the train stopped. All the lights were off and everyone fell down. I thought we were in Sai Wan Ho, I felt the door was on my left. I tried to open it. It was very big, and I couldn’t open it. I found something that felt like a rock. I threw it at the window and the window broke. I heard my friend, Johnny, crying, “Who can help me? I’ve lost my way!” I went near the voice, and I caught his hand.

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I dragged Johnny to the door and he climbed out of the door. It was small, so only children could climb outside. Johnny and I tried to stay away from the railway. After a few minutes, we felt a train leaving. It was the train we were on. We touched the wall and started to go the Heng Fa Chuen way. Suddenly, we could not feel the wall.

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We needed to choose a route to go to Heng Fa Chuen. We crawled and found the railway again. I realized that blind people had very hard and scary lives. However, we needed to find a way to leave the underground. We climbed up the line one railway. The railway was slanted and we climbed slowly. When we went to the exit, we saw the light again. Suddenly, a train was approaching. We ran quickly and saw a station.

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It was the Taikoo station, but there were no people. We chose the wrong route to Heng Fa Chuen. We were very scared. Johnny thought, “It may not be the right’s station!” Johnny used his mobile phone to call the police. We went back to the railway again. We climbed back to the connected line and we chose the line two railway. After a few minutes, we arrived at the real Taikoo station. There were many people.

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This incident made me scared but happy. However, when I went back to school, the teacher didn’t believe us.

20101122

The Dark Trip!!!

One day, I went to school by MTR. Suddenly, all the light disappeared and everyone threw down. I thought I was under the Sai Wan Ho, I felt the door was on my left side. I went there and tried to open it. It was very big, but I can’t open it. I found a thing like a rock. I threw it to the window. After I threw the rock at the window, I heard my friend was saying something, “Who can help me, I lost my way!” I went near the sound, and I caught the hand.

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My friend, Johnny and I went to there and he climbed outside the door. It was not big, so we could climb outside. Johnny and I went near the track and started to walk to the track. After a few minutes, we felt a MTR left. It was the MTR I travelled before the moment. We touched the wall and started to go to Heng Fa Chuen. Suddenly, we could not touch anything.

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We saw there are many trains in the track; we thought it is a connected line. Liked two train was a lot of way to go, and we could go there to line one or line two stations. Line one is under the line two station. When we needed to go to Tsuen Wan in Sheung Wan, you needed to go to line one station. The connected line made the train to go their destination.

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We needed to choose a place to go to Heng Fa Chuen. We went prone and found the track again. I learned he blind people were very hard and scared in their live. But we needed to find a way to leave the underground. We chose the line one track, and we climbed up side. The track was slope and we climbed slowly. When we went to the exit, we saw the light again. Suddenly, a train came outside our back. We ran quickly and we saw the stations were near us, so we climbed out the track and we arrived a station.

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The station was called Tai Koo, but there were not people. We were very scared, why there were not people. Johnny thought, “It may be had a stations near the real Tai Koo station. Johnny used his cellular phone and called the police. We went back to the track again and we climbed again to. We climbed back to the connected line and we chose the line two track. After a few minutes, we arrived the real Tai Koo station. There were many people there. This thing made me scared and happy. But when i went back to school, the teacher didn't believe our saying.

20101118

Write a story about you being in a completely dark space.

Words you might need to use:

  • cannot see anything
  • bump into 撞
  • saw light again
  • could not sleep

A New Ending - amended

Mother and I went back home. Unluckily, the ducks had taken over our home. Father said angrily, “I will kill them, let’s revenge!” Then, we flew away from the nest and found something to kill the ducks. After a few minutes, we felt hungry so we went back to the nest and started to find something to eat. My father said, “I never want to eat insects, they are very disgusting!”

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We found a tree with many fruits. I thought we could eat them. When I started eating, a man threw something at me. The man was my best friend, Tommy. I remembered he disliked birds and wanted to kill all of them. I flew back to our nest and discovered some cakes in the nest. They looked very yummy, so I ate them quickly. When my father went back home, it was time to kill the ducks. My bother got a bomb. He shouted, “I discover many bombs near the big tree!” Then, we got a lot of bombs and threw at the ducks. The ducks ran back to our house quickly.

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The house was ours, not theirs. I was furious, and threw a lot of bombs at our house. Suddenly, a duck came out, and fired at us. My father threw all the bombs at them. The explosion attracted many ducks here. We were petrified because the duck fired at us. We flew back to the nest, but they ran after me.

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My mother told us, “There were many bombs underground!” All the ducks were hurt and one yelled angrily, “Be careful, we will kill you!” I threw the bombs at that duck. I said, “I think you can’t!” Then the duck died. We were very happy, because we won the war!

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We kept throwing a lot of bombs at the ducks. We saw a girl near a tree. She was our neighbour and she was crying. When she was angry, strange things would happen. We knew why we became birds. It was because she disliked us killing the ducks for fun when we were humans. After a few minutes, we became humans again. We never killed ducks for fun again.

20101114

Mother and I went to our home. It was a bad thing for us, because the ducks stroke our home. Father said angrily, “I will kill them, let’s retaliate them!” Then, we flew away the nest and found something to kill the ducks. After few minutes, we felt hungry and we went back to the nest and started to found something to eat. My father said, “I never want to eat the insects, they are very nausea!”

We found a tree and there were many fruits there. I thought we could eat it there. When I started to eat it, a man used something to throw me. The man was my best friend, Tommy. I remembered he dislike the bird and wanted to kill the bird there. I flew back to the nest and I discovered the nest had some cakes. It looked very yummy, so I ate it quickly. When my father back home, it was the time to kill the ducks. My bother got a bomb. He shouted, “I discover many bomb near the big tree!” Then, we got a lot of bombs and threw to the ducks. The ducks saw us threw the bombs to them, so they went back the home quickly.

The home was us, not them. I was very angry, and threw a bomb to the home. Suddenly, a duck went out, and used a gun and fire us. My father threw the entire bomb to them. A big sound made many ducks coming. We were very scared, because the duck fire us by their guns. We flew back the nest, but they ran after me. When they wanted to fire us, a bomb explosion in there.

My mother said, “There were many bombs under the land!” The all ducks got hurt and said angrily, “Be careful, we will kill you!” I threw a bomb to the ducks who said something. I said, “I think you can’t!” Then the duck died. We was very happy, because we won the gas!

Then we threw a lot of bomb to the ducks, they were very scared us. Many ducks hurts. We saw a girl there, she was crying. The girl always saw red, and the impossible things would happen. We learned why we became the birds, it was because she dislike we kill the ducks for funny when we were the people. After few minutes, we became the people again. We didn’t kill the birds for funny that time.

20101109

Living on My Own - amended

One day, my parents and I fought at home. I was very angry and ran away quickly. I brought all my things to the dormitory. My friend Johnny and I lived there. I like my dormitory. It was not small, but our things made the room look small. We agreed to take turns to do the housework. I would do it on Sundays, and he would do it on Wednesdays.

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I had a part-time job in a convenience store. Johnny was a waiter in a restaurant. The job was not hard for me, because there were not many people buying things. But Johnny disliked his job, because the restaurant was in a famous place. After worked, we would have dinner at the dormitory. I always cooked dinner, because Johnny was very tired when he went back to the dormitory. We worked a lot so we had saved a lot of money.

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I worked on Mondays, Thursdays, Fridays and Saturdays. I went to school from Monday to Wednesday. It was a good plan for us to save money. We wanted to buy a flat and lived together. One day when I went to school, a man pushed me suddenly, and I hurt myself. The man was my classmate. I disliked him when I was in secondary school.

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After school, I worked the convenience store. I always took something back to the dormitory, like ice-creams, drinks and snacks. The boss treated me very well. After three years, we left the dormitory. Johnny and I bought a flat. Our flat was in Shek Tong Tsui, and it was a good place for us. The Shek Tong Tsui Municipal Services Building and the Shek Tong Tsui Market was closed to our flat.

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When I was twenty-one years old, I visited my family. My sister lived at home, and didn’t leave. It was not a bad thing for me. I was lucky to live on my own, and I knew how to handle disputes, face the reality, go outside for more experience and be a mature person. I became an adult.

20101017

My Live Myself

One day, my parent and I fight in our house, I was very angry and than I went away quickly. I went back to my University Residence Hall. I brought all my things to the university residence hall. My friend Johnny and I lived there too. I was very interested of the University Residence Hall. It was not small, but our things made the room became small. We planed an idea, I did housework on Sunday, and he did housework on Wednesday.

I had a part time job in the convenience store. Johnny was a waiter in a restaurant. It was not hard for me, because there were not many people bought commodity. It was a good thing for me. But it was a bad thing for Johnny; the restaurant was in a famous place. After worked, we would have dinner at home. I always cooked the food, because Johnny was very tired went he back to the University Residence Hall. We were chose the Math, we always worked so we got a lot of money.

I worked on Monday, Thursday, Saturday and Friday. I went to school on Tuesday, Wednesday and Monday. It was very good plan for our save money. Johnny had a lot money, we wanted to buy a flat, and lived together. One day, I went to school, suddenly a man pushed me, and I hurt myself. The man was my classmate. I was very disliked him when I was on the secondary school.

After school, I went to the convenience store, and worked there. I always got some things back home. Like ice cream, drinks, food, and some snack. The boss was very took care me. I always went to the Market and bought the food there. After three years, we left the University Residence Hall, Johnny and I bought a flat and lived there. Our flat was on Shek Tong Tsui, and it was a good place for us. The Shek Tong Tsui Municipal Services Building and the Shek Tong Tsui Market was very closed to our flat.

When I was twenty-one years old, I visited my family. My sister was live there, and didn’t left out. It was not very bad things for me. I could went outside was my luck, and I knew how to handle disputes, Face the reality, go outside for more experience and be a mature. I thought I was a adult now.