Female Doctor - amended

Jenny is a doctor who works in Hong Kong Hospital since 1998. She goes to the hospital every day. She is not famous now, but she was famous in 1998. She became a doctor when she was nineteen years old. There were not many female doctors at that time. Jenny thought her job was boring at first. She went to the Shatin Hospital to be a nurse at first. After a few months, she became a doctor. She was very happy.

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But many nurses disliked her. Many doctors said she was a coward, because she was scared of blood. Many people in the hospital did not like her. There were no female doctors, because many people thought women were timid. Many girls did not like a job with blood. But Jenny was very interested in it. She was a heart disease doctor and now she was the chief surgeon.

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There was a serious problem in 2003. SARS visited Hong Kong, and many people died. Jenny had to take care of SARS patients. At that time, there were many girls becoming doctors and helping many people. Many female doctors became famous in 2003. There was no more hatred in the hospital.

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Jenny was very happy at that time, her team worked very hard and they helped a lot of people too. One day, Jenny was working in the hospital at night. Suddenly, two SARS patients were sent to the hospital; Jenny’s partner helped them quickly. Her partner did not wear any protection clothes. When the two patients got better, her partner had SARS. Jenny was very sad and thought she would die.

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After a few months, a doctor invented some medicine and cured Jenny’s partner. Jenny was very happy and her partner became a World Health Organization member. After a few days, Jenny became the Hong Kong Hospital manager. Jenny cured a lot of patients. She got the Good Citizen of the Year Award and she went to the UK next year. She would still be a doctor and she will bring her family there. She would live there for a long time.

Jenny was a doctor who was work in Hong Kong Hospital. She did the job form 1998s. She always went to hospital everyday. Always she was not famous now, she was famous in 1998s. She was nineteen years old gone she started to be a doctor. There were not many girls be doctor in 1998s. Jenny was very bored to be a doctor at first. She went to the Sha Tin Hospital to be a nurse there at first. After few mouths, she was a doctor. She was very happy when she became a doctor.

When she became a doctor, there were many nurses disliked her too. Many doctor said she was scared blood and she was a coward in the hospital disliked her too. There were not girl be the doctor, because the girl looked like a coward. Many girls did not like to do the job which was bloody. But Jenny was very interested of it. Jenny was a heart disease doctor in there and now she was the hospital manager.

There was a difficult problem in 2003s. Atypical pneumonia visited Hong Kong, and many people died. Jenny became the doctor who needed to help the people who got the atypical pneumonia. At that time, there were many girls became doctor and helped many people. There was many girls’ doctor famous in 2003s. There was not which doctor disliked which doctor.

Jenny was very happy that time, her team was very hard and they helped many people too. One day, Jenny went to the Hospital at night. Suddenly, there were two people got the atypical pneumonia; Jenny’s partner helped the people quickly. Her partner did not wear any defense against chemical weapons clothes. After the two people safe, her partner got the atypical pneumonia. Jenny was very sad and thought she would die.

After few mouths, a doctor invented a medicine and helped her partner that day. Jenny was very happy and her partner became world health organization member too. After few days, Jenny became the Hong Kong Hospital manager. Jenny always helped other to turn good. She got the Good Citizen of the Year Award and she went to the UK next year, and she would be go there and be the doctor there. Jenny went to there and she will bring her family there too. She would live there fo

Write a story about a person getting into a profession 行業 which is done mostly 通常by his/her opposite sex異性.

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My Shocking Concert -amended

“Good evening everyone.” I am a dancer and singer in Hong Kong, and everyone knows who I am. If you want to see me perform dance, you can come to my shows at the Hong Kong Coliseum. They will be full quickly so get your tickets now.

“I believe I can fly…” I sang. The next day, I sang a song called “Fly In The Sky”. Suddenly, I lose my voice and could not sing. I was very scared, and the stagehand turned off all the lights on stage. I went to the backstage, and suddenly something exploded, and I was hurt. I didn’t know what happened. I thought it was lucky for me, because I had only hurt my left hand, and I did not need to sing that day. I had lost my voice, but the explosion helped me to go back to the backstage.

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I went back home and thought about how I could sing better. I had lost my memories of the explosion. When I left home, many reporters found me and asked me many questions. I was very scared so I hailed a taxi and left quickly. I was very confused, “Why are there so many reporters?” I thought for a long time, but I did not know what happened. I went to my management company, and asked my assistant, “Why were there so many reporters outside my home?” He said, “There was an explosion in your show, did you know?”

Suddenly, I recalled the explosion. I watched the closed-circuit television. There was a suspicious man near the stage, and then the explosion occurred, and I went backstage. I thought the man put a bomb near the stage. I could not see the man clearly. I called the police and they investigated the Hong Kong Coliseum. They found the crime scene and found a bomb near the crime scene.

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I had a concert on the next day, and I sang a song for the police and fans. When I sang the last song, a bomb exploded and the police helped me leave the stage. Suddenly, I heard a man fired a gun, and I was scared. After a few minutes, the police and I left the Hong Kong Coliseum. A man ran towards my way, and he had got a gun. I was very worried that he would kill me, so I stood still. Two policemen went in front of me, and they arrested him. The man said, “It’s my pleasure to meet you!” I still remember those words.