20091222

An unexpected story about Christmas

  1. Santa Claus
  2. deer
  3. Silent Night
  4. Boxing Day
  5. turkey
  6. chimney
  7. Christmas stocking
  8. sleigh
  9. wolf
  10. Christmas carols
  11. bell
  12. snow
  13. Jesus

What Happened? - amended

Today is Jacky’s birthday, and we went on a boat trip with Sam and Ben. We were very happy, because we could go on a big ship. Jacky was the captain, he knew how to drive it. Other passengers and I did not know how to. We were excited and wanted to go to the Pacific Ocean quickly. We wanted to go there ourselves, but we could not because we were very young and we needed to go with four sailors. They were very kind when we met them. The ship was very dirty and could not sail that day.

The ship was very old and could not sail for more than once. So we spent five hours to clean the ship quickly. We sailed after we had done our cleaning. The four sailors were waiting for us to put the luggage inside the ship. When we were in the middle of the sea, we saw a basketball court there. There were many famous athletes.


We saw Thunder and many NBA stars, and we were very amazed. When the ship turned back, we saw an old ship. We saw the word “Titanic” painted on it. It crashed into an ice mountain. We wondered why the ship was here and not in the bottom of the sea. Some passengers fell into the sea, others rushed to the lifeboats.


We saw the ship sinking. Jacky wanted to help a child and he jumped into the sea. Suddenly, there was another big boat crashing into Jacky and we lost him.

We lost the captain and the four sailors did not know how to drive the ship. We swam near the boat and saw Jacky trying very hard to swim back to the water surface. We were very scared because there was a shark swimming after him. We were swimming faster than before and went back to the ship. When we went to the bathroom, we were shocked to find a small swimming pool. We thought the space was not real.

When we went back to the bank, there was an old car. It belonged to Jacky’s father. We went to Jacky’s home and attended his birthday party. We saw a pop singer singing at his home. We were very amazed and sang with her happily.

We went to school the next day, and everyone forgot everything happening yesterday except myself. I was very scared and did not go sailing anymore. When Jacky and I played football, he brought a basketball. I thought something was unreal. Was it a dream?

20091220

What is the time?

Today is Jacky birthday, We went to a forest with Sam and Ben. We were very happy, because we could went to embarkation a cruise liner and could arrive the sea. Jacky was a ship master, he learned how to drive it. Other one and I did not know it. We were excited and wanted arrive to Pacific Ocean quickly. We wanted went there ourselves, but we could not do it. It was because we were very young and we needed to go with four sailors. They were very kind, when we met them. The ship was very dirty and could not go to the sea that day.

The ship was very old and could not take the sea enough two times. So we used five hour to clean the ship carelessly. We would take to the sea when we done our clean. The four sailors were waiting us to put the luggage inside the ship. When we arrived to the sea, we saw a basketball spell there. There were many famous sportier there and we arrived near the spell. There were many star of sportier.
There were Thunder and much NBA star, we were very amazed. When we turned back, the old ship—Titanic collide with an ice mountain. We thought why the ship was here, why it was here and not in the sea bed. There were many men and women fallen to the sea and many people rob the boat.
We saw the ship fell down and we could not see the ship. Jacky wanted to helped a child and he jumped to the sea and swam there, but he could not swim there looked like there were a space did not have any one went in. We were very amazed and told Jacky went back. Suddenly, there were a big boat collided to Jacky and we lost him.

We lost the ship master and the four sailors did not know who to drive the ship too. We swam near the boat and saw Jacky was very hard to swim outside the water. We were very scared because there was a shank and wanted to eat us. We were swimming faster than before and went back to the ship. When we went to the bathroom, there was a small swimming pool. We thought the time was not real.

When we went back the bank, there was an old car. It was Jacky’s father; we went to Jacky’s home and enjoyed the happy birthday party. When we went to his home, we saw there were a star of music was singing into his home. We were very amazed and sang with her happily. We went to the school next day.

We lost anything which was happened yesterday, and only I knew it. I was very scared and did not go to the sea any more. When Jacky and I played the football, he brought a basketball come. I thought it was some thing happened unreal. It is a dream?

20091213

Write a story with the title "Wrong Time, Wrong Place".

The Children Who Fell Into The Trap -amended

Jacky went to school by bus himself everyday when he was nine years old. It was because his parents were very busy and did not have time to take Jacky to school or back home. The students of his primary school could go out for lunch when they turned nine years old. Jacky was the best student in his school, and he was a prefect.

When Jacky left school during lunch, he saw two men who looked like kidnappers in the newspaper. When Jacky went to school again after lunch, he saw the two men used two dolls to lure two girls who were eight years old. Jacky used twenty dollars to buy those two dolls for the two girls. The men did not say anything and went away. Jacky said to the two girls, “These dolls are yours now, but the men are not nice guys. They used toys or sweets to lure little children and kill them!”
The two little girls knew they were wrong and did not talk to any person they did not know.

Jacky walked to school the next day, because he had enough time. He saw a boy in his class leaving with the two men. They gave a Gameboy to the boy and took him to a car. When the car left, Jacky ran to school quickly and told the teacher. But the teacher thought Jacky was telling a lie and did not think it was real.

Jacky had no choice but to go back to his classroom and wait for the boy to come back. After an hour, the boy was not back and the teacher found Jacky. “Where is the boy? His parents said their child had already left home!” Jacky answered, “He was taking into a car and disappeared!” So Jacky waited for the teacher to call the police. The policemen arrived at the school. Jacky saw the man again at during lunch time and told his friend to call the policemen to come.

The man went somewhere else, so Jacky ran after him and found their headquarters. There were many trees and he could not go inside easily. Jacky called the police and went inside to check who was inside. There were many children who looked very hungry. Jacky saw his classmate. However, they were locked behind a door.After a few minutes, the policemen arrived and caught all the kidnappers.

It was the turning point of his life. Jacky became a policeman when he grew up.

20091207

Jacky went to school by bus everyday. He was nine years old and went to school himself everyday too. It was because his parent was very busy and not time to take Jacky to school and went back home. Jacky could go out for lunch when he was nine years old at his primary school. Jacky was the best student in his school, and he was a moral leader.

At lunch, Jacky left to school and saw two men looked like the kidnappers in newspaper. When Jacky went to school again after lunch, he saw the men used two dollies lure two girl who were eight years old. Jacky used twenty cash to buy those two dollies for the two girls. The men did not say anything and went away. Jacky took the two girls and said to them, “Those dollies are yours now, but the man is not a nice gun. They used something to lure little children and kill them!”

The two little girls knew they were wrong and did not meet any people they did not know. Jacky went to school on foot one day, because he had enough time. He saw a boy who was study with his class went with the two men. They were gave a Game boy and take him to a car. When the car opened and went away, Jacky ran to school quickly and told the things of it. But the teacher thought Jacky was trickster and did not think it was real.

Jacky only went back his classroom and waited the boy went back. After one hour, the boy did not go to school and the teacher found Jacky. “Where is the boy? His parents said their child had left his house!” the teacher asked. Jacky answered, “He went to a car and disappeared!” So Jacky waited the teacher to call the police. Policemen arrived to Jacky’s school in the afternoon. Jacky saw the man again and told his friend to call the policemen came.

But the man went to other place, so Jacky ran after him and arrived to their concealment. There were many trees and could not go inside easily. Jacky called the police and went inside to check who were inside. There were many child and they looked like very hungry. Jacky saw his classmate but there were a door locked them.

After few minutes, the policemen arrived and caught all the men. Jacky became a policeman when he grew up. It was his change his job.

20091201

Write a story about child trafficking非法交易 . Write 400 words.

words you may use:

  • trafficker 販子
  • kidnapper 拐子
  • abduct 誘拐;綁架
  • speedboat 快艇
  • mine 礦
  • lure 引誘
  • fall into the trap 上當

Rom Was Not Useless - amended

There was a nurse called Jenny who discovered Rom Houben was not vegetative. He could still think and was not unconscious. But the truth was he was a famous policeman 23 years ago, and he had got “The Best Policeman” award. When he investigated the mayor corruption case, the mayor pushed him to the highway from the 23rd floor. It was because Rom found a witness and evidence against the mayor.

There had been worldwide reports on Rom not being vegetative, and he was very frightened and worried. He thought the mayor and his partners would kill him. So he wanted to get a computer so that he could use his brain to tell other people the truth.

When Rom was in bed one night, he heard some step. He thought it was his nurse coming. Suddenly he could not breathe, because a man was pulling the tube and wanted to kill him. Luckily, Rom’s nurse heard it and stopped the man. The man was arrested by the police. The man said he wanted to perform mercy killing on Rom but the nurse stopped him. The police only told him to pay a fine.

When the man left the police station, he was shot and died after two minutes. He was from the gang which was the partner of the mayor. They thought the man would tell the truth.

Rom got the computer after two days, and told the police the truth. He could get an award from the police. The police of the USA found the mayor and all gang members went to prison. When Rom was taken to the garden of the hospital, a man who looked like the mayor used a lighter to burn Rom. He was very scared and other nurses used blankets to extinguish the fire. But the mayor ran away quickly.

When Rom went back to the hospital, the mayor appeared again. He poured a glass of wine into Rom’s room and turned on the lighter. The floor became a sea of fire. Rom was inside, and he could not say anything so no one could help him. Finally, he died and the mayor got the death penalty. There were many people at Rom’s memorial on that day.
There was a nurse called Jenny she discovered Rom Houben was not a vegetative. His heard could thick over and unconscious. But there was a real situation of he became a vegetative. Before 23 years, he was a famous policeman and he got a reward of “The Best Policeman”. When he went to follow a case of mayor corruption, the mayor pulled him to the highway from the 23F. It was because he knew the case witness and exhibit.

After he knew he is not a vegetative report in the entire world, he was very frightened and worried. He thought the mayor and his partners would kill him. So he wanted to get the computer that he could use him heard to tell other people that things.

When Rom Houben slept in the bed, he heard some step, he thought it was his nurse coming. Suddenly he felt very hard, because a man pulled the tube and wanted him to die. Lucky, Rom Houben heard it and prevent from the man. The man went to the police and said he wanted Rom Houben mercy killing but the nurse prevent form him. The police only tell could him to hand over impose a fine.

When the man went out the police, he shot and he die after two minutes. The man was from the gangland which was the partners of the mayor. They thought the man would tell the things that the mayor pulled Ran Hoube to the highway.

Ran Houben got the computer after two day, he told the truth to the police. He could get a award of the police. The police of USA found the mayor and the gangland of the mayor partners all members went to the prison. When Ran Houben went to the park, a man looked like the mayor used a lighter to burn Ran Houben. He was very scared and other people used a clothe to destroy the fire. But the mayor ran away quickly.
When Ran Houben went back the hospital, the mayor appeared again and used a glass of wine to invert the room who was Ran Houben he turned of the lighter and all the floor became a fire of sea. Ran Houben was in inside, he could not said anything so not one could help him. Finally he die and the mayor got the death. There were many people memorial him of that