“Alex was going to school this morning, and he saw a man in black standing in front of the bank. Then Alex recognized him – he’s the wanted man in the news last night! The man was talking on the phone, “Hey, I’m going to start our plan. 7 o’clock tonight, right? I will bring 2 guns. See you at HSBC.” Alex knew he’s going to do something bad, but didn’t know what it would be. He wanted to tell the police, but he was afraid that the policemen would not believe him. He thought to himself, “Maybe I can stop him! Let me go home and plan about this!” He didn’t go to school and went home quickly.”
Write a story starting with this paragraph.
Words to use:
- accomplice
- toy gun
- weapon
- headquarters
THINK ABOUT:
- Would Alex ask for help? From adults or friends?
- What kind of things could he find from his schoolbag and his home to fight the bad guys?
- How could he protect himself (the bad guy had 2 guns and some other friends)?
20090929
Sam's Turning Point
Sam was a young child living in “Happy Village”. Sam was poor, Sam’s mother worked hard in the village. His mother used all her money to help Sam to go to school. So, Sam was very hard-working at school. When he took a bath, he needed to go to the river. Sam learned to swim at school, so he always swam in the river when he had a bath.
Sam did not have any friends, because he was very poor. The other children only played with a rich child, Ken. When Sam went to school, he was very good at swimming, so he used all his money to buy swimming trunks. Sam was very happy to have them, so he went to the river everyday. Sam went to the river and swam very fast. A swimming coach saw him and took him to a swimming pool. Sam was very amazed, because it was his first time to go to a swimming pool.
The coach said, “I am a swimmer in the Hong Kong team. I am Tom. If you can swim 50 meters in less than 0.9 seconds, I will make you a swimmer of the Hong Kong team!” Tom thought, “Sam can’t do it this time!” When Sam finished swimming, he checked the time and said, “Sorry, I was very slow, I will be faster!” Tom was very amazed, because Sam finished in 0.874 seconds. Tom apologized to Sam, “Can you join our team?”
Tom used a lot of money to help Sam to be a good swimmer. When Sam was 16 years old, he could swim very fast. He won nine competitions in the swimming gala of his school. Tom was very famous in the school.
Sam went to Beijing to join the Olympics one month later. He joined eight competitions and he won them all. He was the first Hong Kong athlete to win swimming gold medals. When he went back to Hong Kong, many reporters asked him, “How do you feel after winning eight medals?” Sam answered, “I thank my coach, my family and all my fans!”
Sam and his family became rich and his family did not need to work anymore. Tom told Sam, “You can’t be proud, you need to join other competitions! You can have one week to rest!” After Tom left Sam’s big house, Sam went to the river to swim again. Although he moved to another place, he always swam in the river.
When he went to school, many students played with him and he had many friends. The principal said, “Sam is our example. Although he is poor, he is very hard-working!”
Sam did not have any friends, because he was very poor. The other children only played with a rich child, Ken. When Sam went to school, he was very good at swimming, so he used all his money to buy swimming trunks. Sam was very happy to have them, so he went to the river everyday. Sam went to the river and swam very fast. A swimming coach saw him and took him to a swimming pool. Sam was very amazed, because it was his first time to go to a swimming pool.
The coach said, “I am a swimmer in the Hong Kong team. I am Tom. If you can swim 50 meters in less than 0.9 seconds, I will make you a swimmer of the Hong Kong team!” Tom thought, “Sam can’t do it this time!” When Sam finished swimming, he checked the time and said, “Sorry, I was very slow, I will be faster!” Tom was very amazed, because Sam finished in 0.874 seconds. Tom apologized to Sam, “Can you join our team?”
Tom used a lot of money to help Sam to be a good swimmer. When Sam was 16 years old, he could swim very fast. He won nine competitions in the swimming gala of his school. Tom was very famous in the school.
Sam went to Beijing to join the Olympics one month later. He joined eight competitions and he won them all. He was the first Hong Kong athlete to win swimming gold medals. When he went back to Hong Kong, many reporters asked him, “How do you feel after winning eight medals?” Sam answered, “I thank my coach, my family and all my fans!”
Sam and his family became rich and his family did not need to work anymore. Tom told Sam, “You can’t be proud, you need to join other competitions! You can have one week to rest!” After Tom left Sam’s big house, Sam went to the river to swim again. Although he moved to another place, he always swam in the river.
When he went to school, many students played with him and he had many friends. The principal said, “Sam is our example. Although he is poor, he is very hard-working!”
20090927
A life-changing day
Broke --- (he was broke)
Won eight Olympic gold medals
Before: poor, no one knows me, laugh at me
After: rich, famous, strong, my country, respect me
Sport: swimming (breast stroke 400m, freestyle200m, back stroke 100m, 4x100 relay)
Alex: serious, poor, tough, 17
Coach(dad): strong, stern, National team:
The day: competition
Won eight Olympic gold medals
Before: poor, no one knows me, laugh at me
After: rich, famous, strong, my country, respect me
Sport: swimming (breast stroke 400m, freestyle200m, back stroke 100m, 4x100 relay)
Alex: serious, poor, tough, 17
Coach(dad): strong, stern, National team:
The day: competition
My first memory
It was my first time to go outside the kindergarten when I was 4 years old. We had a barbecue because I needed to join extra-curricular activities. Our teachers helped us to cook the food. There were fishballs, chicken wings and sausages.
Before we ate the food, I talked to my best friends what games we would play afterwards. We decided to play UNO. I ate the sausages and fishballs first. Finally, I ate the chicken wings happily and they were very yummy. Then, our teachers taught me how to cook the food. It was my first barbecue!
Before we ate the food, I talked to my best friends what games we would play afterwards. We decided to play UNO. I ate the sausages and fishballs first. Finally, I ate the chicken wings happily and they were very yummy. Then, our teachers taught me how to cook the food. It was my first barbecue!
20090920
Oral Presentation
My first memory-
Who? – My classmates and I
When?- K2
What? - BBQ
Where? – outside the kindergarten
Why? – extra-curricular activities
How? –
Feeling
Who? – My classmates and I
When?- K2
What? - BBQ
Where? – outside the kindergarten
Why? – extra-curricular activities
How? –
Feeling
Jacky’s Secret Guardian
Once upon a time, there was a secret in a village. A man who was called Jacky was a painter. He went to the village when he was twenty-two years old. When he went to the village, there were many shops and villagers. He went to the mountain and wanted to find a historic place.
When he went to the mountain, he saw a beautiful cat there. He didn’t know the cat was the mountain’s guardian. He saw that the cat looked very hungry, so he took it back home. The cat looked like a baby very much, so he called it Baby. When he was too tired to draw a picture, he saw the cat. He was not tired and drew many pictures. After he drew the pictures, there were many villagers going there and buying his pictures. Jacky felt very lucky.
One day, when Jacky was reading the newspaper, he read that the mountain’s guardian had disappeared. Jacky was very interested in this, and he used the computer to find the guardian. He found that the guardian was the cat living at his home. He was very scared and wanted to put the cat back. When Jacky held the cat up, he felt that it was very hot. Jacky knew if he didn’t put it back, the mountain might disappear. He was tired holding the cat and his hands were very hot and red.
Jacky arrived at the village and saw no villagers. It looked like a forest, and did not have anything. When Jacky put the cat back to the mountain, he saw that there were many shops and villagers in the village. Jacky was very sad, because he could not see the cat everyday.
Jacky married a girl after two years. He was very happy, because the girl was very beautiful. Her name was called Yoyo, and she was a painter too. They always drew together and they were very happy. When Jacky went to the village to buy some food, he forgot to bring the money. He found some money in the bag and thought, “Who put the money into my bag?”
Whenever Jacky forgot something, Yoyo would remind him. Jacky felt very lucky and they had a baby. Jacky called the baby Annie. One night, a man burned their house. Yoyo went out of the house and she caught the man. Then, they found a new house. Jacky knew Yoyo was the mountain’s guardian. He did not want to lose her and they lived happily in the new house.
Jacky's secrets!
Once upon a time, there was a secret in a village. A man who was called Jacky is a painter. He went to the village when he was twenty-two years old. When he went to the village, there were many shop and villagers. He went to the mountain and wanted to find a place of historic. When he went to the mountain, he saw a beautiful cat there. He didn’t know the cat is the mountain’s guardian. He saw the cat looked like very hungry, so he put it went to his home. He saw the cat very looked liked the baby, so he called it Baby. When he was very tired to draw a picture, he saw the cat, and he did not tired and drew many pictures. After he drew the pictures, there were many people went to there and bought his pictures. Jacky felt very lucky.
One day, when Jacky read the newspaper, he saw, the mountain’s guardian disappeared. Jacky was very interested in this, and he used the computer and found the mountain’s guardian. He saw the mountain’s guardian was the cat lived in his home. He was very scared and wanted to put the cat back. When Jacky took the cat up, he felt very hot of the cat. Jacky knew if he didn’t out it back, the mountain might disappeared. Jacky took the cat tired and his hand was very hot and red.
Jacky arrived the village and saw no any villager in the village. It looked like a forest, and did not have any things. When Jacky put the cat back to the mountain, he saw the village had a shop and people. Jacky was very sad, because he could not saw the cat everyday.
Jacky married a girl after two years. Jacky was very happy, because the girl was very beautiful. Her name was called Yoyo, she was a painter too. They always drew the picture together and they were very happy. When Jacky went to the village to buy some food, he forgot to bring the money to buy the food. He found some money in the bag and thought, “Who put the money into my bag?”
When Jacky forgot anything, Yoyo would help her to solve the question. Jacky felt very lucky and they had a baby. Jacky called the baby- Annie. One day night, a man burned there home. Yoyo went out the house and she caught the man and they found a house again. Jacky knew Yoyo was the mountain’s guardian. He did not want to lose “it” and they lived happy in the new house.
One day, when Jacky read the newspaper, he saw, the mountain’s guardian disappeared. Jacky was very interested in this, and he used the computer and found the mountain’s guardian. He saw the mountain’s guardian was the cat lived in his home. He was very scared and wanted to put the cat back. When Jacky took the cat up, he felt very hot of the cat. Jacky knew if he didn’t out it back, the mountain might disappeared. Jacky took the cat tired and his hand was very hot and red.
Jacky arrived the village and saw no any villager in the village. It looked like a forest, and did not have any things. When Jacky put the cat back to the mountain, he saw the village had a shop and people. Jacky was very sad, because he could not saw the cat everyday.
Jacky married a girl after two years. Jacky was very happy, because the girl was very beautiful. Her name was called Yoyo, she was a painter too. They always drew the picture together and they were very happy. When Jacky went to the village to buy some food, he forgot to bring the money to buy the food. He found some money in the bag and thought, “Who put the money into my bag?”
When Jacky forgot anything, Yoyo would help her to solve the question. Jacky felt very lucky and they had a baby. Jacky called the baby- Annie. One day night, a man burned there home. Yoyo went out the house and she caught the man and they found a house again. Jacky knew Yoyo was the mountain’s guardian. He did not want to lose “it” and they lived happy in the new house.
20090916
ORAL PRESENTATION
Today, I want to talk about my experience of being cheated. I was always cheated by my parents when I was young. The experience I remember the most is when I was seven years old, my parents and I went to the cinema and watched a movie called “101 Dogs”. When I watched the movie, I asked my parents, “What would happen if we sit close to the screen?” My parents answered, “Then the actors in the movie would catch you into the screen.” So I didn’t want to sit close to the screen when I was young.
When I was 10 years old, we went to the cinema and watched another movie. But we sat very close to the screen. When we watched the movie, I asked again, “Why aren’t we caught into the screen?” My parents answered, “It is not true. But if we sit close to the screen, we will be short-sighted.” Afterwards, I thought I was very stupid. I would not trust everything my parents said.
When I was 10 years old, we went to the cinema and watched another movie. But we sat very close to the screen. When we watched the movie, I asked again, “Why aren’t we caught into the screen?” My parents answered, “It is not true. But if we sit close to the screen, we will be short-sighted.” Afterwards, I thought I was very stupid. I would not trust everything my parents said.
20090913
story about pranks - amended
Ken and Tommy were students in the guidance class of a secondary school. Tommy did not have friends in the class. It was because Tommy was a smart student in the class, but other classmates didn’t think so. Ken was the class leader. When Tommy went to school, Ken hit Tommy at the staircase. Tommy fainted. Ken took him to the classroom and stole Tommy’s wallet.
Tommy knew he had become a target. He wanted to tell the teacher. But Tommy thought, “If I told my teacher, I might become a target in the class!” Tommy was very frightened and wanted to go back home.
Ken was very bored and he told his classmates he wanted to play pranks on the teacher. When Tommy went to the classroom, he heard this idea. Tommy wanted to be Ken’s friend because Tommy was very bored everyday and was bullied by other children. Tommy had an idea to play pranks on his teacher. He thought, “I can put a mouse in his bag!” When the teacher went into the classroom, he saw a mouse and shouted, “Who put it into my bag?” Ken answered, “It was Tommy!”
Tommy stood outside the classroom when the teacher knew he did it. Tommy was very sad. When it was recess, Ken said cunningly, “You are very bad! You can’t be part of us!” Tommy went to the classroom and saw there was a picture on his chair. Ken’s friend played a prank on Tommy. During math class, the teacher saw the picture on Tommy’s chair and shouted angrily, “Why did you draw a picture on your chair, Tommy?”
Then, Tommy went out of the classroom again. He went to play basketball after school. He was very happy. When he wanted to go back home, Ken came to catch Tommy’s ball and shouted, “From now on, your ball is mine!”
When Tommy went back home, he had an idea and went to school the next day happily. Tommy went to school very early, then he put many frogs on all children’s chairs and wrote a letter. It wrote, “I don’t want to be hurt anymore!” After he played this prank, Tommy’s classmates and Ken became his friends. Ken felt very guilty, and they played basketball together. Tommy thought, “Playing pranks might not be a bad thing!”
CONTENT: 4/5 GRAMMER: 3/5
Tommy knew he had become a target. He wanted to tell the teacher. But Tommy thought, “If I told my teacher, I might become a target in the class!” Tommy was very frightened and wanted to go back home.
Ken was very bored and he told his classmates he wanted to play pranks on the teacher. When Tommy went to the classroom, he heard this idea. Tommy wanted to be Ken’s friend because Tommy was very bored everyday and was bullied by other children. Tommy had an idea to play pranks on his teacher. He thought, “I can put a mouse in his bag!” When the teacher went into the classroom, he saw a mouse and shouted, “Who put it into my bag?” Ken answered, “It was Tommy!”
Tommy stood outside the classroom when the teacher knew he did it. Tommy was very sad. When it was recess, Ken said cunningly, “You are very bad! You can’t be part of us!” Tommy went to the classroom and saw there was a picture on his chair. Ken’s friend played a prank on Tommy. During math class, the teacher saw the picture on Tommy’s chair and shouted angrily, “Why did you draw a picture on your chair, Tommy?”
Then, Tommy went out of the classroom again. He went to play basketball after school. He was very happy. When he wanted to go back home, Ken came to catch Tommy’s ball and shouted, “From now on, your ball is mine!”
When Tommy went back home, he had an idea and went to school the next day happily. Tommy went to school very early, then he put many frogs on all children’s chairs and wrote a letter. It wrote, “I don’t want to be hurt anymore!” After he played this prank, Tommy’s classmates and Ken became his friends. Ken felt very guilty, and they played basketball together. Tommy thought, “Playing pranks might not be a bad thing!”
CONTENT: 4/5 GRAMMER: 3/5
20090902
The Revenge - amended
When Sam was young, he always hit other children. They were very angry and scared. Alex was Sam’s classmate, and Sam always hit Alex too. Alex was very angry and wanted to revenge. Alex had a best friend, Ken. Sam pushed Ken into the sea from the cliff. Ken was an Egyptian, and his corpse was sent back to
When Alex was twelve years old, he solved a criminal case. He was determined to be a detective when he grew up. Alex went to the
Before he went back to
They found Ken’s parents in
Alex, Sam and Ken’s parents woke up at
When Sam went back to
Finally, Ken’s father was sent to the jail!
Revenge of a Kings
When Sam was small, he always hit other children. Other children were very angry and worried. Alex was Sam’s classmate, and Sam always hit Alex. Alex was very angry and wanted to revenge. But, Alex’s best friend- Ken. Sam hit Ken to the sea from the ashore. Ken was a Egyptian, and his corpse was in the Egypt. When Alex was twelve years old, he solved a criminal case. Then, he determined to be a detective when he was grown up. But, Alex went to USA, when he was nineteen years old. Alex was very exerting oneself and he became a famous detective.
When he went it back, he had solved many criminal cases. They were in England’s kidnap case. Hong Kong’s adventure in a confined space case. When Alex went back Hong Kong, Sam went to Alex’s office and said, “I got two letter here. It writes: I am Ken, I will kill you! I was very worried!” Alex said, “I will help you! But, we need to go to Egypt!” Then, Alex and Sam went to the Egypt.
They found Ken’s parent in to the Egypt. When they went there, they saw Ken’s house was very big. They saw Ken was Egypt’s king son. Sam was very frightened. It was because he said to Ken was very poor when they were thirteen years old. Sam was very sorry to Ken’s father and Ken’s mother.
When it was night old o’clock, Alex woke up with Sam and Ken’s father and Ken’s mother. Alex said, “We need to go to the pyramidal to find Ken’s corpse. They were very frightened when they went to the pyramidal. There was a letter in top of Ken’s corpse. Sam read it, “I will kill you when you went back Hong Kong!” Sam thought, “If I could go back small, I will take care of him.
When Sam went to Hong Kong, Sam died in to Hong Kong international airport. Alex said, “Egypt’s king was a cutthroat!” Egypt’s king said amazed, “Why do you know I use the knife to kill Sam?” Alex said you did not worried and you were the last man to go with Ken. Alex said, “When you done your revenge!” The king said, “I lose my son was very sad and I need to help my son to revenge!” Alex answered, “Do you think your son know want you to kill Sam?”
Then, Ken’s father had went to the jails!
When he went it back, he had solved many criminal cases. They were in England’s kidnap case. Hong Kong’s adventure in a confined space case. When Alex went back Hong Kong, Sam went to Alex’s office and said, “I got two letter here. It writes: I am Ken, I will kill you! I was very worried!” Alex said, “I will help you! But, we need to go to Egypt!” Then, Alex and Sam went to the Egypt.
They found Ken’s parent in to the Egypt. When they went there, they saw Ken’s house was very big. They saw Ken was Egypt’s king son. Sam was very frightened. It was because he said to Ken was very poor when they were thirteen years old. Sam was very sorry to Ken’s father and Ken’s mother.
When it was night old o’clock, Alex woke up with Sam and Ken’s father and Ken’s mother. Alex said, “We need to go to the pyramidal to find Ken’s corpse. They were very frightened when they went to the pyramidal. There was a letter in top of Ken’s corpse. Sam read it, “I will kill you when you went back Hong Kong!” Sam thought, “If I could go back small, I will take care of him.
When Sam went to Hong Kong, Sam died in to Hong Kong international airport. Alex said, “Egypt’s king was a cutthroat!” Egypt’s king said amazed, “Why do you know I use the knife to kill Sam?” Alex said you did not worried and you were the last man to go with Ken. Alex said, “When you done your revenge!” The king said, “I lose my son was very sad and I need to help my son to revenge!” Alex answered, “Do you think your son know want you to kill Sam?”
Then, Ken’s father had went to the jails!
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