Serious Injury in Europe - amended

Cindy and I visited John in France. We were doctors in the UK. John had a serious injury two years ago. It happened in 2008, when a bomb exploded in a shopping mall in France. When John was passing by the mall, a sweater which was on fire flew at John. John’s hand was hurt by it. Many parts of his body were burnt and he could not use his right hand for about five years. There were 369 deaths and 798 injuries.

When this explosion happened, there were 1,400 people inside the hotel and mall. The hotel was built on top of the mall. So the mall exploded and the hotel collapsed together. The police thought it happened because of negligence. The explosion happened at 1:12 p.m. on 14^th Match. John was very lucky in the explosion. Other people broke their bones.

John worked very hard in physiotherapy, he needed to learn how to use his left hand because his right hand was hurt. When he knew how to use his left hand, he needed to check his right hand too. Now, his right hand had changed its colour. His burn was very serious, but he recovered very quickly. We went to his house to help him treat his hand.

When I talked to him, he told me a scary case. His father died twenty-nine years ago. His father heard the song “Gloomy Sunday”. He said, “When I was small, I heard the first half of ‘Gloomy Sunday’ and it was the scariest song in the world. Now I had this phonograph record in my mother’s house! But I locked it in a box, and I threw the key into the river.”

I was very scared, this song has “killed” more than 100 people, and it was a mystery. Then, Cindy and I left France and visited a girl called Candy. She was hurt in the explosion, and her boyfriend died. It was devastating to her, and she said it was an unlucky day for her. After we healed her, we went back to the UK. But I was very curious about John’s father. How did he died?

“Good evening everyone.” I am a dancer and singer in Hong Kong, and everyone knows who I am. If you want to see me perform dance, you can come to my shows at the Hong Kong Coliseum. They will be full quickly so get your tickets now.

“I believe I can fly…” I sang. The next day, I sang a song called “Fly In The Sky”. Suddenly, I lose my voice and could not sing. I was very scared, and the stagehand turned off all the lights on stage. I went to the backstage, and suddenly something exploded, and I was hurt. I didn’t know what happened. I thought it was lucky for me, because I had only hurt my left hand, and I did not need to sing that day. I had lost my voice, but the explosion helped me to go back to the backstage. //

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I went back home and thought some idea, how could I sing music better. When I went out my home, many reporters found me and asked me many questions. I was very scared and I found a Taxi and left quickly. I was very question, “Why my home had many reporter.” I thought and thought, but I could not know what happened. I went to my company; I went back company and found my assistant and asked a question to him, “Why there were many reporters outside my home?” He said, “Your show had a bang, did you knew?”

Suddenly, I remember it, and I watched the closed-circuit television. There was a dubious man near the stage, and than the explode occur, and I went back the backstage. I though the man put a bomb near the stage. I could not watch the man clearly. I called the police and they investigated the Hong Kong coliseum. They found a char place and found a bomb next to the char place.

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I had a concert next day, and I would sound the song for the police and fans. When I sang the last song, a bang bombed and the police helped me to leave the stage. Suddenly, I heard a man opened fire, and I scared. After a few minutes, the police and I left the Hong Kong coliseum. I man ran to my way, and he got a gun. I was very worried he will kill me, so I stood there only. Two policemen went in front of me, and they caught him. The man saw, “I could see you were my luck!” Now, I remember this word.

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Big Hurt of Europe

Cindy and I visited France and friend, John. We were the doctor in the UK. John had a big hurt before two years. It was happened in 2008, France’s certain centre took place a big bang. John was outside the centre, but he got hurt. Although John was only get past the centre, a clothes afire and flew to John. John encountered the clothes and John’s hand hurt by it. His hand afire and had many place got hurt and could not used his right hand about five years. The catastrophe was called Hotel’s centre big bang. There were 369 people die and 798 people hurt.

Before this catastrophe, there were 1400 people inside the hotel and centre. The hotel and centre were together and the hotel was built on top of the centre. So the centre bang and the hotel would collapse together too. The police thought it was a human negligence so it would have this bang. The bang was happened at 1:12 p.m. at Friday in 14^th Match. John was very luck in the bang. Another people some fracture of bones.

John was very hard in the Physical Therapy, he needed to know how to use his left hand to work. When he knew how to use his left hand, he needed to set a date to check his right hand. At now, his hand was turn flesh. His burn was very critical, but his since the viability was very fast. When I went to his house we helped him to treat.

When I talked to him, he said a scared case, his father die before twenty-nine years. His father heard the music “Gloomy Sunday”. He said, “When I was small I heard the ‘Gloomy Sunday’s first half and it was I scared music in the world. Now I had this phonograph record at my mother house! But I lock it in a box, and I threw the key into the river.

I was very scared of it, this music “kill” more than 100 people, and it was a mystery. Then, Cindy and I went to next place and visited a girl called Candy. She was the hurter in the bang, and his boy friend died. It was a big hurt on her, she said it was a very unlucky days of her. It was Saturday that day. After we therapy her, we went back the UK. But I was very question of John’s father. What hurt did his father had?

Clever Cheaters - amended

It was my birthday today, and my wife and I went to museum. The museum looked like a UFO. When we went inside, we saw many antiques. There were some vases and archives. I thought it was a museum about ancient China. I was a FBI coming from the USA. It was my first time going to China. My wife was a FBI too. We needed to find a cheater called Tommy. He was an internationally wanted person. After we visited the museum, we found a tuck shop in the museum. When we went inside the shop, we heard the sound of glass breaking outside the shop. I went outside and saw a security guard.

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The security guard looked like Tommy. I thought he was Tommy, so I went after him. Suddenly, he pointed a knife at a girl’s chest and took her as a hostage. I wanted to help the girl, but I could not do anything. When Tommy and the girl went outside, he drove a car and escaped. I was very worried about the girl. The police arrived, and a policeman counted how many pieces of antiques had disappeared. Four pieces of antiques had disappeared, and they were worth $600,000. They were not extremely expensive, but they were very precious in China.

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My wife and I went back to our suite first; we did not have any plans. It was very difficult; we searched for the museum on the net. There were many security guards. We found something about the girl in Tommy’s blog. The girl was called Jenny. She was a cheater too. After a few minutes, we heard that Jenny was safe, and she went back to the USA by airplane. She was Tommy’s partner. We called the FBI and arrested her in the USA airport.

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Tommy went to Hong Kong by boat and he drove an airplane back to USA. Although he did not know how to drive an airplane, he had played a computer game about airplanes. When he went back to the USA, he knew that his partner was arrested by the police. He was very worried about her, so he pretended to be a policeman and released his partner. Then, we went back to the USA quickly.

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Although Tommy and Jenny had pretended to be a lot of people, my wife finally arrested them in the UK! I thought Tommy and Jenny were very clever. If they became FBIs, they would be successful! The four antiques were found and sent back to the museum.